Writing Feedback / Both parents and school should obligate to keep the children fit. [3]

Many children these days have an unhealthy lifestyle. Both schools and parents are responsible for solving this problem. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Nowadays, an unhealthy way of life has become a highlighted topic for kids. Both parents and school should obligate this matter to keep the children fit. However, not only parents and school but also government has to overcome this situation.

First of all, every parent absolutely wants to get their children growing healthful. Therefore, the role of parents is needed for their children to get healthy body. They have an authority to teach their youngster for keeping the stamina every day. Here, family could share at home how to get healthy food every time. For example, a mother makes healthy menu at home with many variations could attract kids to like it. This ways can avoid children to buy some food from outside. As long as a Mom always reserves them and support sufficient nutrition-there is not to worry about in poor condition lifestyle.

Second of all, not also from parents could teach their children to get suitable life but also the school has authority for contribute about this case. The school could explain what is the essential for human to save their body. For instance, A teacher tells if a human needs good or health absorption because could influence our physically so far. May be teacher clarifies or describe by video, newspaper, or research about the impact which would happen later.

Third of all, in addition, the state also has part of this topic because government should save their citizen for long term particularly for next generation (children). Government could make policy with healthy minister to ignore bad lifestyle by the role state.

In conclusion, between parents, school and stakeholders have responsibility position for kids today and next day. Children are an asset to next years, so among of them should cooperate for maintenance teens.

Writing Feedback / The diagrams below show the life cycle of the silkworm and the production stages of silk cloth [2]

TASK 1.
The diagrams below show the life cycle of the silkworm and the stages in the production of silk cloth. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

There are two diagrams which explain about what a silkworm's life is like and how the silk cloth is produced. Overall, it can be seen that the natural life cycle consists of four phases-beginning with the eggs and ending with the birth of a new moth from the cocoon. Then the production of silk needs for five steps.

First of all, begin with eggs are produced by the moths, about 10 days to become silkworm larvae which life with mulberry leaf food. In this step, it would take time approximately 4-6 weeks later to change a silk thread.

Second picture about how to process after it becomes a cocoon. The diagram tells there are 5 steps to do production until finish. Start from select the cocoons which is will be produced, then the boil inside water during processing. After that, following by weaving step as final stage, then dyed.

Altogether, there are two kind of making process between life cycle silkworm until bring into silk cloth.

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Writing Feedback / Teaching how to do good manners are one of parents' role, they should lead kids in the right way. [4]

TASK 2
Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

To be a good social order in community is needed for all humans. There are encourages between parents and school to collaborate in this situation. I believe, both them would influence children to have nice civilization, and it will be discussed extend here.

Parents are place for kids to get much direction about anything, in particularly how to teach them to be sociality with each other. However, the role of parents is teaching children in good manners when children get position outside or beyond at home. Family could put the patterns of sociality through respectable habit in order to become nice person in member society. It is very easy to be applied in daily activity at home for example. Then, childhood immediately would adopt this manner.

It is also encouraged by school that makes them more friendlier with other friends. Because education in school is not only for learning science but also that place to construct a lot of practical in life. For instance, students could make study club together with their colleagues which make them associate in a moment. The behaviors many cultures in school caused others, can make them feeling togetherness every work day in class or surrounding school.

Therefore, I assume that parents are part of guide for their children and school is residence for kids to build well-behaved in participant culture.

Writing Feedback / The percentage of NEW candidates for teachers of English and French language in Ontario [2]

IELTS WRITING TASK 1: the percentage of NEW teachers of English and French in Ontario

The graph compares the announcement which is needed to be candidates for teaching English and French languages between 2001 and 2007. It can be seen that the demands for teaching French language-fluctuation during the three-year period, while the chance to be English languages teachers dramatically fell.

According to the report, English language teachers-a dipped of 40 percent since 2001 to 2003. In 2003 until 2005 increased slightly amount of 45 percent. Then, the percentage of this appliers English teacher did not interest in 2007 because declined of 28 percent.

In the second report, the requirement to become French language teachers was not stable during a seven-year period. In 2003 up to in 2005 remain steady amount almost of 70 per cent. The appreciated to develop inclined of 75 per cent. However, the enthusiasm in Ontario for teaching French language is the most popular than demand of English language educator.

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Writing Feedback / Writing IELTS task 1 : the components of a wind turbine and where it can be placed [2]

TASK 1.

There are two diagrams below which show the mechanism from a wind turbine to produce electrical energy for humans. Overall, those are noticeable that first graph is the process of a wind turbine, then in the second stage is the optimal location to generate electricity.

The process starts, a wind turbine consists of five stages to produce electrical power, such as blades-fiberglass or wood; wind sensor-speed and direction; generator; steel tower; computer. The steel tower which is made from steel will become high tower to become buffer zone. Here, when the wind goes to wind sensor which is as speed and direction. At the same time, the sensor accepted through generator with voltage 1.5 megawatts. Immediately, the blades-fiberglass or wood will move to produce electrical energy. In addition, there is someone to control sensor adjust blades by computer.

The next stage is the condition how the wind turbine will be working. To get maximum result of power electricity from wind turbine, should be placed on the top-because it will give strong point to get wind power. So, in the report was expression that it should be been position in the domestic average 100 kilowatts.

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Writing Feedback / We pay too much attention to actors and other celebrities, and the media sometimes sensationalize it [2]

TASK 2
The media pay too much attention to the lives and relationships of celebrities such as actors, singers or footballers. They should spend more time reporting the lives of ordinary people instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

The modernization era has brought addiction to people through mass media with inclusion of public figures. Meanwhile, others believe that it has consumed a lot of time for giving attention. In fact, this is true while there is another factor that is related to this problem.

First of all, there is main factor which could mass media happen. That is the private companies that have big role to take in this situation. The private businesses are as a media that has an aim for commercial only. In normally, corporations could make people to be interesting with their television programs with celebrity performances. According to literature that the role of private companies has the big authority to play in entertainment media which has independent policy, even though also has been controlled by government. So, we can see that they only want how to build their projects related with television programs for growing up to be consumed societies in the world.

Furthermore, the existence of commercial business will be surviving as long as people still love with their television programs. Even, the rating of lifestyle celebrities would increase in future. However, people did not know about the procedure of entertainment industry because they only enjoy with actress performance on media. Publics want to be convenience through presentation which has been showed. Even, some of them had addiction to waste time just for knowing the next episode which has been following for a moment.

In conclusion, the media could handle a lot of publics to care with performances production as part of entertainment in every time.

Writing Feedback / Most people tend to be self-employed rather than becoming an employee [2]

TASK 2. Some people decide to start their own business instead of working for a company or organization. Do the advantages for people working for their own business outweigh the disadvantages?

Becoming an entrepreneur is exciting recently. Most people tend to be self-employed rather than becoming an employee. They trust if we will get huge positive things even though the negative thing is also inclusion with in. Furthermore, I encourage that to be entrepreneurship is better realistically.

A great idea when people have decided to be self-employed, automatically they will be more having responsibilities to care of what their taken. It means the entrepreneur will be having control over their works as long as people still have commitment with their job. There is no reason for businessperson to avoid laziness even opposite it is hard work to get successful in future, because of big risk in other days. Another reason is an entrepreneur should be able to making decisions in each condition. And the last to be important also is people will catch a huge networking in the business. These all reasons have been clearly that individuals will be independent people in present-day.

But, we have to know if there is drawback also in this situation. The essential is about the preparation of financial which will be needed by people who wants to become professional worker. Afterward, they also really sensitive if their own business would be downfall. At the point is when others tend to choose an employee in a company because it takes the lowest risk.

In conclusion, according to the reasons above, becoming a professional business is more get great progress than becoming a staff in the organization. However this is also depend on individuals what they want to choose with any considering.

Writing Feedback / Style is an attribute which has become a distinctive for sustainability. [2]

TASK 2
Some people argue that fashion items cost too much money. Other say that this is acceptable because of fashion is an important part of life. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Style is an attribute which has become a distinctive for sustainability. People are with pleasure to be an impulsive purchaser just for taking in design because they think it is essential to shape their style, but others said that it does not make sense. In my opinion, all of them still make sense to me, furthermore there are two main reasons elaborated below to justify.

The main point about fashion is fundamental tool that proclaims who we are, and this is about related to our identities. Firstly, begin at visual communication of our identities through dress. Celebrities for example, it is undeniable that following the up to date fashion has advantage for them. People who work as celebrities willing to spend their much money just for fulfill a style. They will get more attention to build their images on television as much as perfectionist actors. By wearing latest style, celebrities feel more confident in their performance, start from foot wear, clothes, and hat. However, becoming a public figure is all about the packaging what he or she will be showed to play in entertainment stage, so this is important for this community. Once again, this is clothes as identities of person but expensive because of necessary.

Secondly, another reason to show our identities is about as long as we declare our personally. When the first reason the identities for celebrities is expensive, in other hand there is identity which is not much cost eventually. For instance, Indonesia has many unique styles of custom because of archipelago country. As addition, I assumed this is not only Indonesia country but also another country has a different custom also to show what they are identities. We can see with Batik custom, Batik is one of dress nationality from Indonesia. The custom is not luxurious like cost of celebrities' style, but that is elegant and cheap. Even, Jokowi who is number one in Indonesia often to wear Batik when he is going another country for proclaiming the identity also. In fact, people while wearing of Batik is feeling comfortable even though the price is not exclusive.

I assumed that depends on their personalities to make them convenience so far. However, it is cannot see on one perspective only to adjust among of them, because there are reasons to encourage opinion people when they secure with it.

Writing Feedback / United States as the big contributor of carbon emission on earth. [2]

Summary, National Geographic
This Chart Shows How U.S. Carbon Emissions Are Rising-Again

The United State is the big industrial state in the world. This made from The United State as contributor of carbon emission on earth. This is part of big challenge problem for all human life.


There are two reasons of it, because of energy consume and economic growth. Firstly, The United State needs much energy to their companies. The companies could produce of many kind of production. That is good for its state and other state. But unfortunately, that is bad for environment because of air pollutant, both of people or animal in the world. Secondly, U.S has been growing for its future economic. So that, U.S always needs consumption of energy without stop. We can see if U.S still for surviving with its production to help its development economic.

In conclusion, this is big problem that has not been conclusion until now. Because that is very close about emissions are rising largely because of recent economic growth

Writing Feedback / In the midst of globalization, electronic devices are irreplaceable, although they still may harm us [2]

The use of electronic media has a negative effect on personal relationship between people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In the midst of globalization, high electronic device is undeniable even though it has an adverse impact for users. In my opinion, modern technology gets more helping to link people with each other but this also has bad thing on the societies, and I would explain both views.

Rising of modern technology has been becoming alternative solution people around the world nowadays. Furthermore, technological advances have brought the world closer, making communication across long distance easier anytime. People are easy to make connection with relatives in everywhere even in another country. For example, online communication of all types is the most efficient, such as email, webcams, Skype which is possible persons rather than only voice. Therefore, high hardware has huge access to provide all of necessary that people want.

Vice versa, modern technologies have negative effects such as limiting personal contact which is they should meet each other. But because of high hardware recently, people only send instant messages. Sometimes, this can lead to increased expectations and conflict with relationship. For example, when people delayed reply on texts, or even none at all, these are would lead to suspicion and anger. Then rose untrustworthy. However, this is just little bit would happen because this case is seldom or not affection to all people deeply.

In conclusion, to view from different perspective, I completely support if modern technology has given public around the world more feeling closely not opposite.

Writing Feedback / Process of making cement and a visual explanation to concrete production as for building purpose [NEW]

TASK 1

The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

These diagrams illustrate about the process of making cement first and a visual explanation to concrete production as building purpose.

The first step, it introduces limestone clay. Then, all materials pass through a crusher which brings into being a powder. Next, the powder goes to a mixer, to be continue that the product passes to a rotating heater which works with heat. After that, the mixture moves to a ginder where the cement comes out. The last is cement is packed in bag, and those are ready to sell.

The second diagram, there are fourth process to be grouping the concrete manufacture. The process begins with a combination of 15 per cent cement, 10 per cent water, 25 per cent and sand 50 per cent gravel, finally all of elements should to mix to get substantial of result, and ready to use.

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Writing Feedback / A government has to decide about increasing the cost of gasoline as a problem solving [3]

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
What other measures do you think might be effective?

Traffic and pollution have been becoming problem in every country, this makes government to decide with increasing the cost of gasoline as a problem solving. I disagree with this idea, in my opinion it could not cover to this dilemma because if the charge of gas increases, so the price of public transportation is also follow to this situation or either, and this is still problem not solution.

First of all, the target of the trouble makers is vehicles, it is more effective if the owners of cars can feel the punishment related to this problem, even as we know that nowadays rapidly of used cars continuous to grow in the world. Even in the developing country like Indonesia is very fast to buy and to use private cars. The terrible of them, they do not care if it can be harmful in environmental affairs.

Then, when the price of gas will increase, it is more giving impact to others who do not use cars private but still needs activity by public transport. For example, the middle class people are almost every day to travel in workplace, and they have to pay with high price if the policy of increasing petrol would be held later. The more severe is when the price of oil increase in intensify, it can create shock of goods high price tag also.

To be effective in this predicament is better if the tax of private cars would be increased than the price of petrol. It would be the excellent solution since going to directly for people who have contributed in fumes than all people in generally which did not or at least only minim to donate of contamination.

In conclusion, as far as it feels less worth it for generally people in kind of situation, so this is not the best key to conclude of problems.