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Name: ika cahyo
Joined: Dec 6, 2016
Last Post: Dec 8, 2016
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yika   
Dec 8, 2016
Writing Feedback / Some people argue that judging from the clothes that they wear is not appropriate. Others disagree. [3]

Some people say that the clothes people wear are the most important indication of what they are like. Others, however, say that people should not be judged by the clothes they wear. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people said that the fabrics people wear are not always the matters to interpret what they are like. In contrary, others argue that someone can be easily evaluated from their appearance. Personally, I think people's clothes can be a method to judge their common character through it is not the only way. The most important thing can be used to assess people is from their behavior.

First of all, people who work in the formal or service institution will always keep their looks in order to give others positive impression while their appropriate clothes can symbolize their good attitude, work ethic, and discipline in regard to the institution they work in. For the example, the teacher wears the formal uniform because it shows the identity of place where they work. Besides, common society can value that the teacher is good worker, discipline and bookish person.

However, apart of people cover, there is another measurement of their personality which is their behavior, such as the communicate and management skill in their job. I will give simple example to illustrate this case, like the capability of someone which can finish the all of work is the most important things in the work field of only the fabric they wear. Another example, someone who wear casual clothes, such musician, is not always person who has not the best experiences in their work, but this performance has the main purpose to express their value. Finally, the really accurate things to judge someone is come from their behavior not from their clothes.

All in all, the clothes which someone wears are easily indicator to interpret someone's personality, but the accurate way to assess it by their behavior.
yika   
Dec 8, 2016
Writing Feedback / Learning foreign languages at childhood will maximize language skills in the future [4]

Hello, this is my suggestion and correction for you

1. you must recheck your sentence formation. you able to write some simple sentence, but you must write in the right formation because I am confuse with your long sentence with some conjunction.

for the example :

Nowadays, The ability to speak.......is the best period to start.(you can write into 2 until 3 variation sentence. don't wrtite in long sentence which will make confuse the readers)

2. Some parents believesbelieve the earlier (remember subject-verb agreement)

3. other people thinkregard(you can write "regard" which have same meaning with "think")

thank you
yika   
Dec 8, 2016
Writing Feedback / The behavior of people gives more accurate data about what people like, than their clothes [3]

Hello, I have some suggestions for you

I think you must write the title clearly about the "another measurement" in the introduction, because you mention in third paragraph the "behavior", so I suggest that you must write "there is another measurement, such behavior which is more effective to assess their interest" to introduce the detail which will you explain in your essay

2. you can use idioms and expression about fashion if you need for image your answer

3. you can write your opinion about the your main idea in third paragraph like in second paragraph you write your view

thank you
yika   
Dec 8, 2016
Writing Feedback / The relationship between supervisors and co-employs in the working life [3]

The relationship between the supervisors and the co-employs in someone's working live is illustrated in two pie charts which are resulted on the survey in 2005 and 2009. Overall, these charts have the same pattern in the each of factors which be surveyed in 2005 and 2009 between these relationships.

Firstly, the highest percentage in the relationship with supervisor survey at 61 percent in 2005 which it is indicate a very good. In the opposite, the poor relationship shows the percentage by 59 percent in the same year. In the four years later, the very good relationship with supervisor slightly increase by 4 percent, but the poor relationship has some value at 2 percent in 2009 as much as in 2005.

Secondly, the relationship with co-workers in the survey in 2005 has the highest percentage at 63 percent as nine more as the fair relationship with co-employs. The lowest percentage is showed in the poor co-workers relationship and them who do not have co-workers in each at 1 percent. The percentage in 2009 almost increase in each factor, unless in the good relationship with co-employs at 25 percent which decreases than 4 years before. However, the highest percentage in very good co-workers relationship at 70 percent which it increased by 7 percent than in 2005.
yika   
Dec 8, 2016
Writing Feedback / Supervisor vs co-employees - the graph show about result of survey to employee [5]

Hello Alfin, this is my correction for you

The graph showshows about the result

result according to(remember, you miss the prepositionafter "according")

otherwise who answer fair was dramatic fell.fallor you can write fall dramatically

... most of employees has tendtended to (remember the past participle)

answer which werewas resulted (the subject "answer" is singular noun)

thank you
yika   
Dec 8, 2016
Writing Feedback / Writing 2: Despite health warnings, a large number of people continue to smoke [5]

Hello, this is my correction for you

more and more researchesresearchers reveal that smoking

seeking to alternatives alternative solutions isare inevitable(remember that to-infinitive is after to must be v1 and the subject in this sentence is solution as plural noun)

the tax ofon cigarettes

and therethese facilities can protect ...

thank you
yika   
Dec 8, 2016
Writing Feedback / The occurrence of heat loss and energy waste in the house comes from many household appliances [5]

The process of air leaks out and into the house which affects in the heat losing and energy wasting is illustrated in the diagram. Overall, the process of air escapes out by upper of the house, while the air outflow process into the house enters from down space in the each room of the home.

Firstly, the heat is lost and energy is wasted in the house through the ceiling on the first floor and other spaces on the roof, then air escapes through the attic hatch when it enters in the middle room and also through two recessed lights which are located above kitchen and bathroom. Finally, heat will out of the house by the spaces in the area of the house.

Secondly, another phenomenon is entire of air into the house is from several parts which located in down position in the house, like through the vents which have been installed in several parts such as kitchen vent and dryer vent. Moreover, It comes through windows and doors into rooms in the house through dryer vent, crawl space, and outdoor faucet.
yika   
Dec 7, 2016
Writing Feedback / Businesses have many essential purposes, such as profits and decreasing the unemployment [3]

the purpose of business is to make money and they should concentrate only on this. do yo agree or disagree?

Some people argue that the main factor is focusing on profitable from the business way. Personally, I disagree with the statement because many other important purposes which can be done from the business particularly to reduce unemployment rate in the one of areas towards high economically rate and better life way

First of all, the business is the way to create the new job which comes from own ability and it needs many skills likely research to invent newest product and also management way to regulate the important things which are needed. The one of essential factors in the business which can be explained is get much profit. I think that it is one important thing which will be gotten from creating business. The profitable way always can be connected with business because we can get profit from the product which has been bought in market and it is the direct connection which can not be despired. However, its factor be the main unessential purpose but there is another way which more important than ones before, particularly the reducing of the unemployment rate.

The high rate of the unemployment rate is the most problems which must decrease in the life because it has many drawbacks for the economical sector. The business can be the most of best solutions to solve this problem because it can recruit other people to join in these businesses. For the example, the people who live in the crowded city where needs much life necessary which must be completed, so they will have many incomes from their work. However, the job in the city is very hard and sometimes the people not have the work and become unemployment. The high unemployment rate can be the serious problem in their life and also for the Government, so the solution to solve this case is making business which ca launch the new job field for other people who unemployment.

All in all, I can conclude that the businesses have many essential purposes, such as profitable ways and to decrease the unemployment rate. Also I suggest that the Government must pay attention to the business way in the society to improve inhabitant skills towards self-economic life.
yika   
Dec 7, 2016
Writing Feedback / Using media gives many cons on individual relationship between citizens. [3]

Hello, this is my correction for you

... many cons on the individual

I tend to disagree inon this view.

tendtendency on using social media

social media can be clearly sendsending the message.

However, digital media can be leadslead people

touch betweenwith people illustrates,

... connect people which isare different area

and it can be shareshared document

thank you
yika   
Dec 7, 2016
Writing Feedback / New Zealand: the cricket as a sport which attracted the smallest number of girls to involve in [6]

Hello, this is my correction for you

about sports which waswere(remember that the subject is sports which are plural noun)

sports which waswere preferred by girls rather than boyboys(remember that the subject is sports which are plural noun)

while the figures with on boys wasat 13 percent. There also have althticsathletics that girls

Socer and cricket waswere seemingly (remember that the subject is plural, so you must use plural verb too)

thank you
yika   
Dec 7, 2016
Writing Feedback / The occurrence of heat loss and energy waste in the house comes from many household appliances [5]

The process of air leaking out of and into the house

The process of air leaking out of and into the house which effect in the losing heat and the wasting energy process in the house that illustrated in the diagram. Overall, the process of air leaking out of the house comes from the electrical outlet and in the opposite, the process of air leaking into the house entering by circulation window in the each of home.

Firstly, the process of heat is lost and energy wasted in the house comes from many room devices, like the electrical outlet, crawl space, and outdoor faucet. These things use many energies which then produce heat and finally this heat will encourage out of the house by the spaces in the area of the house and automatically air in the outdoor enter into the house which it is called the process of air leaking into the house.

Secondly, another phenomenon is the process of air leaking out of the house which it can happen if there is nothing hot which is produced by other devices in the home and also it occurs by circulation spaces in the home such as the door and window at the home.
yika   
Dec 7, 2016
Writing Feedback / (TED Summary) We are worried about local warming in your laptop [3]

Hello, this is my correction for you

Yossi Vardi as aan investor (remember that using of a or an, "a" must be followed by vowel letter after "a" article, in the opposite, "an" must be followed by consonant letter after "an" article)

who has presentationpresent(remember that present perfect, after "have or has" must be followed by V3 not V ing)

problem becomebecomes essential because (the subject is problem as singular noun)

leg is harmfullharmful to sexual healthy

thank you
yika   
Dec 7, 2016
Writing Feedback / A research in which people were interviewed about communication abilities critical in their jobs [4]

Hello, this is my correction for you

but in previous it deceaseddecreased slightly at 60%

it was slightslightly rose by 6% in 2006 from 35% (you must write adjective)

In other wordother words or another word(remember that "another" to show singular and "other" to show plural)

and it was slightslightly inclined (you must write adjective)

was slightslightly rose by 4 percent (you must write adjective)

thank you
yika   
Dec 6, 2016
Writing Feedback / People tend to enjoy interaction with their friends in social networking more than in the real life [4]

The information technology devices have many drawbacks on personal relationship between people. In my view, I tend to agree with the statement as several negative impacts exist, although I do also deliver positive effect of electronic media on personal relation.

First of all, the elctronic media have advantage in the communication which we can use interesting features like facebook, twitter, and whatsapp application which available in information devices and very easily we use because it only touch the screen and we can keep in touch with our friends in social networking without the limitation of distance and times. However, this positive impact can become negative impact to our direct communication in real life.

The electronic media give some disadvantages in the relation, for the example, if we usually use the media because the interesting features on social medias, someone will ignore to their environment which it is caused by the utilizing of these media that give some comfortable using such as flexible place and efficient time when we use. Finally, many people tend to enjoyable interact with their friends in social networking than in real life and the responsibility of someone will decrease also will create the individual life in the society.

In my conclusion, the information technology devices have more disadvantage in the direct communication in their real social life than advantage which they get. I suggest that the using of electronic media must be controlled and must remember the purpose to increase communication with other people in large range without ignore in the social life where they live.
yika   
Dec 6, 2016
Writing Feedback / Writing task 1 (The graph shows information about kinds of important communication ability) [5]

Hello, this is my correction for you

The most esentialessentialskillskills according (remember that the word "most" must be followed by plural noun)

... people who answer the survey waswere increased,
(remember that the subject is "people" that are plural noun and you must use plural verb too)

dealing with people waswere most popular (remember that people are plural noun)
yika   
Dec 6, 2016
Writing Feedback / The importance of communication skills in job relation [4]

The importance of communication skills in job relation is illustrated in the table in which from the survey conducted in 1997 and 2006. Overall, the kinds of skills which consist of external and internal communication which people who are asked in the survey tend to increase from 1997 to 2006.

Firstly, many features of external communication which is needed by someone in their jobs. The highest percentage in 1997 is dealing with people skill at 60 percent which it is mean that this is almost twice higher than the percentage of selling a product or service. In the eight years later, the percentage of external communication have the same trend from before and also the each example of skills tend to increase although the percentage of selling product or service decrease at 21 percent in 2006.

Secondly, the internal communication (within company) also have many kinds of examples and these types tend to increase by 1 until 9 percent from 1997 to 2006. The lowest percentage at 7 percent in making speeches or presentation, but the listening carefully to colleges has the highest percentage also notice in same factor in 1997 and it increase to 4 percent and 9 percent