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TOEFL:living in the dormitories or in an apartment [5]
Nowadays, student
s who want to attend a university that is far from their hometown, have the
possibility -
I think "opportunity" will sound better - to live in the dormitories of the university or choose to live in
an apartment in the community. Both
eof the dormitories and the apartment
s ha
ve some advantages.
Some students live in the dormitory of the university, because the fees are lesser than those of apartment
s. -
you may use singular form as well, but together with a relevant article - Especially,
the students who do not have
a financial support,
they prefer to spend less money on the rent. As we know, students have a lot of expenditure
s, such as paying the tuitions of their courses, buying books, clothes and food. So they prefer to spend less in the housing.
Also the dormitory allows students
to live -
probably you mean this - near
to the university. The student who lives in the dormitory has
a direct access to the classes, to the library and to the administration. So they can avoid be
ing late for their classes. They can stay for
a long time in the library to study or make some research
es without worry about transportation. -
In addition, some students prefer to live in university dormitories, because they think it is the best place for focusing in their study. They do not want to be interrupted by any thing that can prevent them from giv
ing all their efforts
in studying to study process. (NO EXAMPLES FOUND).-
in my opinion, in dormitories students undergo distraction more often, since they usually occupy a room together with another student or students.On the other hand, students who choose to live in an apartment in the community, think it is more advantageous than living in university dormitories. Even t
hough
it is more expensive to live in apartment, some students prefer to spend
s less
in others fees .- on other stuff.- They prefer to pay more for the housing and live in a comfortable place, where they can do whatever they want. They can receive some guests, they can make a party with their friends, and they can cook by themselves.
Another advantage of living in an apartment is that
the students are
near close to other places in the community. They are
near from close to
the shopping centres,
from to
the museums, theater
s and all famous places in the community. So they can reach the university and reach other places
at the same time.faster - I think you ought to recast this sentence.
However, living in the apartment allows students to living a normal life. They want to mix pleasure with business. They want to study and live their lives without any pressure.
Personally, when I compare
the different advantage
s of each choice, I prefer to live in an apartment in the community. I can live by my self or live with the person of my choice. I feel more comfortable in apartment because I can do whatever I want without any disturb
ance. If the price is the essence problem for this choice , I try to find a part time job with
a well-paid wages, so I can live in an environment that allows me to be good inside of me, to do the best I can in my study and enjoy my life at the same time.
Even though the place where we live
has a huge impact on the life of the students, students have to focus more in their studies and making the choice according to their financial capacity and their personalities. In the end, students have to focus more in their studies and give a less importance to those things.
- this paragraph is unnecessary, as you adhere to things that you did not mention in you essay.