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Azeri   
Apr 11, 2010
Writing Feedback / Mohammad and Nour - help me my comparison/contrast essay [7]

You use "he or she" very often. May be you should try to rephrase your sentences, add transitional word to connect short sentences together. Sometimes you go to much into details describing eyelashs and similar things.

His eyes are large - what do his eyes tell to you about his character, mood and so on?

Does comparison/contrast essay require your opinion or attitude? Since I never practiced writing such type of essays, I have little to advise you about them. Reread your essay and think of the changes you can make. I am sure that other guys will also contribute to your writing with important comments.
Azeri   
Apr 17, 2010
Writing Feedback / TOEFL:living in the dormitories or in an apartment [5]

Nowadays, students who want to attend a university that is far from their hometown, have the possibility - I think "opportunity" will sound better - to live in the dormitories of the university or choose to live in an apartment in the community. Botheof the dormitories and the apartments have some advantages.

Some students live in the dormitory of the university, because the fees are lesser than those of apartments. - you may use singular form as well, but together with a relevant article - Especially, the students who do not have a financial support, they prefer to spend less money on the rent. As we know, students have a lot of expenditures, such as paying the tuitions of their courses, buying books, clothes and food. So they prefer to spend less in the housing.

Also the dormitory allows students to live - probably you mean this - near to the university. The student who lives in the dormitory has a direct access to the classes, to the library and to the administration. So they can avoid being late for their classes. They can stay for a long time in the library to study or make some researches without worry about transportation. -

In addition, some students prefer to live in university dormitories, because they think it is the best place for focusing in their study. They do not want to be interrupted by any thing that can prevent them from giving all their efforts in studying to study process. (NO EXAMPLES FOUND).- in my opinion, in dormitories students undergo distraction more often, since they usually occupy a room together with another student or students.

On the other hand, students who choose to live in an apartment in the community, think it is more advantageous than living in university dormitories. Even though it is more expensive to live in apartment, some students prefer to spends less in others fees .- on other stuff.- They prefer to pay more for the housing and live in a comfortable place, where they can do whatever they want. They can receive some guests, they can make a party with their friends, and they can cook by themselves.

Another advantage of living in an apartment is that the students are near close to other places in the community. They are near from close to the shopping centres, from to the museums, theaters and all famous places in the community. So they can reach the university and reach other places at the same time.faster - I think you ought to recast this sentence.

However, living in the apartment allows students to living a normal life. They want to mix pleasure with business. They want to study and live their lives without any pressure.

Personally, when I compare the different advantages of each choice, I prefer to live in an apartment in the community. I can live by my self or live with the person of my choice. I feel more comfortable in apartment because I can do whatever I want without any disturbance. If the price is the essence problem for this choice , I try to find a part time job with a well-paid wages, so I can live in an environment that allows me to be good inside of me, to do the best I can in my study and enjoy my life at the same time.

Even though the place where we live has a huge impact on the life of the students, students have to focus more in their studies and making the choice according to their financial capacity and their personalities. In the end, students have to focus more in their studies and give a less importance to those things.

- this paragraph is unnecessary, as you adhere to things that you did not mention in you essay.
Azeri   
Apr 17, 2010
Writing Feedback / TOEFL:living in the dormitories or in an apartment [5]

Djanat, I suppose you should change a bit the structure of your essay. May be I am mistaken, because I have not taken a real toefl exam yet, but based on what I was told and what I read, toefl essay should not contain more than one opposite reason. The primary objective of each essay is to choose one side and use reasons, supporting ideas and examples to support your point of view. Readers are not concerned with your viewpoint, but they are interested in how you support it. You ought to persuade them, but sometimes contrary ideas may lessen the strengh of your supporting reasons and confound readers.
Azeri   
Apr 18, 2010
Writing Feedback / Essay:academic subjects and non-academic subjects. [2]

...may not be healthy...

...to waste an increasinga lot of money...

...if you have a good health...

Some people argue as if it is a general truth that young people nowadays are expected to succeed academically by just focusing on acadmic subjects butand ignoring non-academic subjects at school

Second of all,after lessons of academic subjects requiring so much concentration...

...you may have chance of to find out your gifted innate talent or your interest apptitude ...

In a word,non-academic subjects play a not less important role than are as important as academic subjects at schools.
Azeri   
Apr 18, 2010
Writing Feedback / describing my friends (Putri) [4]

the essay is very short. I am sure, you have much to write about this girl since she is your friend.
enlarge the content by including additional descriptive sentences about her character and attitude to you and people surrounding her.
Azeri   
Apr 19, 2010
Essays / How to write an essay about american history? [10]

i got only 3 days - don't panic, you got three days left! I am sure you would complete your essay in time. :-)

Andy, did you try to search in the internet? I typed "american diversity" and found:

specialcollection/special-collection-di versity.asp or worldandISchool.
search.asp?text=Diversity+Society

Regarding the plan of the essay, I would advise to place each question as a separate paragraph.

Hope, it will help. I am looking forward to your draft essay.
Azeri   
Apr 19, 2010
Essays / How to write an essay about american history? [10]

sorry, I've made mistakes:-) I meant: "you have 3 day and you will complete your essay in time."

I continued searching and found new links. If you need them, I will provide links
Azeri   
Apr 19, 2010
Writing Feedback / "my best friend Lenka" - DESCRIPTION OF A PERSON [3]

she always says what she thinks. It can be useful sometimes . - why "sometimes"?:-) it is a positive trait. I wish all people around me had this feature of character.

Sometimes she tends to be stubborn; she never admits her fault. But she is stubborn only with her parents, but we have never argued. - this phrase seems unsuitable to its place. it looks segregated.

I liked your essay, very sincere writing.
Azeri   
Apr 20, 2010
Writing Feedback / TOEFL essay: It is more important to work at a job that you enjoy... [5]

It is more important to work at a job that you enjoy than it is to earn a lot of money. Do you agree or disagree?

Although today most people look for jobs offering good earnings, I believe that working at jobs that we enjoy is more important. People enjoying their jobs will approach to the performance of their duties with interest, desire and higher responsibility. Enjoyable jobs are preconditions of good earnings as well, since people which are pleased with their jobs are inclined to show high level of performance, which, consequently will reverberate on their remuneration.

People enjoying their jobs regard fulfillment of their duties as something exciting, interesting, and promising new opportunities. They are encouraged to display high level of proficiency when performing the jobs they like and treat their jobs with respect working heartily on each project independent of its importance. Such jobs inspire worker to work continuously on themselves and enhance the level of their performance to get perfect result. They tend to treat their jobs with due diligence and responsibility and are able to find positive and novelty in activities that might seem boring and dull to others. Such reverent attitude to jobs would undoubtedly affect the output of performed work, bringing emotional satisfaction to worker and contribute to the development of whole business. The latter aspect may foster increase in remuneration and provide the worker with fringe benefits.

Furthermore, pleasant jobs also affect people's mood and character, as well as relation with others. People working at jobs they enjoy remain active and energetic during the whole day and do not easily get tired or annoyed with their duties in comparison with those that consider commuting and working as something preventing them from their favorite activities. They do not consider their duties as obligatory and onerous ones and highly appreciate emotional satisfaction that they gain performing them. This has a positive effect on their relations with people around, rendering them sociable and bringing them respect of their colleagues and employers.

In summary, working at jobs that people enjoy makes them more proficient and satisfies their emotional and material needs, by bringing them inner peace and financial security respectively. Therefore, I think that it is more important to work at a job that the one enjoy.
Azeri   
Apr 20, 2010
Graduate / 'petrol on the burning fire' - Statement of interest for graduation M-Engg program [14]

My name is Vikas Singh Minhas. I am from India. - proper names are wtitten with capital letters.

I came in Canada on July ,2009. Now, i decided I intended to take admission for M-Engg program in Ryerson university. I don't know how to start here but i have a kind of stuff in my basement - I think you can't say like this - to accept the challenges here.

My major interest for...
...and teaching methods related to engineering field.
Azeri   
Apr 22, 2010
Writing Feedback / TOEFL:living in the dormitories or in an apartment [5]

Sorry, I didn't read carefully directions to your essay. This is probably another type of toefl essays, that I am not familiar yet.

good luck with your studies!
Azeri   
Apr 22, 2010
Undergraduate / "I liked constructions of every kind"; Civil Engineering Academic objectives [5]

Hi, Tamara

I didn't find grammar mistakes, but I think that is short for Academic objective essay. Were there any requirements about how to write it? Probably, you should talk in separate paragraphs about your plans, the purpose of choosing this university, who and how influeced your decision and etc.
Azeri   
Apr 24, 2010
Writing Feedback / A Brief Essay on the Struggle of Coping with an Undiagnosed Eye Condition [3]

Truly absorbing and intriguing essay! It is written scillfully. You kept me interested throughout the essay. Thanks for sharing such a captivating writing. And I am glad that you overcame your problems successfully.

good luck with your further efforts!
Azeri   
Apr 25, 2010
Writing Feedback / Society should ban all forms of the advertising - Essay for IELTS [3]

that advertising becomes inseparable part

Society does need an the advertising...

Society does need an advertising, but it is our responsibility

prohibited, because this kind of ads..

banned on in those countries

On the other hand, by advertising companies...
Thanks to ads, we learn about new products, we can compare them and choose what is it the best for us.

In order to promote the country's attractions
Azeri   
Apr 26, 2010
Writing Feedback / 'practice and hard work' - Successful sports professionals can earn huge money [3]

..famous and successful sports professionals are always on the top of the rich who earn a huge amount of money every year - more than people in other important occupations. It is always argued that whether or not athletes deserve with their huge incomes.

First of all, sport professionals practice and work very hard to achieve successes . It is not surprising that they earn a lot of money because they deserve it with their contribution and devotion to sport.

shirt deals, and even from their scandals

they fully deserve with their incomes
Azeri   
Apr 26, 2010
Writing Feedback / TOEFL: All high school students should be required to study foreign languages [4]

Dear all. Please, comment my next essay. All kinds of improvements and suggestions are wellcomed. Thanks in advance.

All high school students should be required to have three years of studying a foreign language. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

The practice of introducing foreign language classes in schools has acquired close attention in society. Some people believe that at high schools foreign language study should be compulsory and last for several years, since it provides ample opportunities for students. The other mainstream opinion is that language study should be optional and up to students. I agree with the statement that students should have mandatory foreign language classes for about three years and I would like to illustrate some reasons to support my viewpoint.

One of the most apparent advantages of studying a foreign language at high schools is the contribution made to the intellectual and spiritual development of a student. Such classes broaden students' outlook, foster intelligence growth, and develop their minds. Students gradually get acquainted with the culture, history, literature and other distinctive peculiarities of a foreign country through its language. Long-term study of foreign language raises the level of proficiency to the level, which enables students to read and understand sophisticated historical records and literary heritage of that nation. For example, I studied English before entering the university, but I was not very good at it. Only two years course of this language at high school increased my level to the point when I can read understand J. London and J. Steinbeck in original.

Moreover, foreign language proficiency primarily benefits students in the academic path. Students are not restricted only to data available in their native language. Instead, they have perfect opportunities to access works of literature and science offered in other languages. For example, most of azerbaijanian students while doing their research projects or assignments can easily exploit Russian and English sources since they have classes in these languages both at school and at university.

Finally, compulsory teaching of foreign languages simplifies students' tasks in the future, relieving them from necessity of making time on learning languages. In the age of globalization and active international integration, knowledge of foreign languages becomes more and more urgent. This is especially true for students, planning to proceed their education abroad or to work in fields, closely related to international communication and collaboration. However, after graduation, language study can turn into a hard and lingering process due to time shortage, as most of the students launch a work career. In addition, students may still need good language command as means of intercourse, even if they do not leave their country for any purposes. The best example is electronic communication in international chats and forums, which requires knowledge of at least one foreign language.

Based on aforesaid, I repute that at high schools students should be required to have three years of foreign language studying.
Azeri   
Apr 30, 2010
Writing Feedback / TOEFL: All high school students should be required to study foreign languages [4]

Kevin and Djanat, thank you for your feedbacks. They really helped me. I drew relevant conclusions from your comments and will try to avoid such mistakes in the future. Regarding the final part of the essay, it worried me a lot. I felt that it was short, but couldn't find the way to improve it.
Azeri   
Apr 30, 2010
Undergraduate / Cbest Essay on US becoming spectators. [7]

You have many mistakes. I corrected some of them, but I am sure there are still some points that should be reviewed. Although I liked your reasons, the essay wholly looks unattractive, because a lot of word are repeated. Avoid reiteration, by using synonyms. Pay addition to sentence formation as well.
Azeri   
May 1, 2010
Graduate / SOP for MA in Art Ed. Explain your purpose for graduate study [7]

Hi, Monica.

This seems to be your first thread here, so I want to welcome you. I have provided some comments on your essay:

Their teaching styles...

In the Art department

These teachers had a fire inside of them kindled by their passion for art. - I like your writing style

the philosophy of art...

Ideas such as: "Less is more" and "Art is a visual language" have guided me through many projects.

my future students...making them a more successful students

Possibly, leading them to find their own voice, and discover a career that can bring them fulfillment(fulfillment of what?). - the sentence cannot be written like this as it is lacking for a subject. Probably, you should adjoin it to the previous sentence using comma.

I believe that I am at a point in my life where I have the maturity and creative skills to teach. - I believe as well, because you could persuade me as a reader, but I think your conclusion is unfinished. It seems you need to add a sentence to create an impression of completeness.
Azeri   
May 1, 2010
Essays / (Philmore Pty Ltd) Business Law Essay [4]

1. I think, you should first review the material that your teacher gave you before the assignment. Probably, he gave the question according to the stuff that you got over during the cource. If the teacher requires you to write grounded responce about Mr. Smiths position, that is to refer to legislation, then he should have provided you with relevant laws or references.

2. The rules of states are different, so it is a little hard to talk about the position of the client in current situation.

f.e violation of consumer rights is observed according to the legislation of my state. In this case Mr. Phoilmore makes public offer by displaying furniture in a show room, so he cannot refute buyer's offer to buy something, just because he is a disagreeable client. So, the consumer may complaint to court. The seller should explain terms and conditions of an agreement even if there is no written contract. If the client agrees, the agreement can take place. As Daniel says, much depends on the method of payment. F.e, if the payment to be made instantly, in cash, but a client does not have enough money, then the seller may refuse to sell.

In addition, if Mr. Phoilmore asserts the client to be slow to pay up, then he has to prove it. Unpaid bills or bills not paid in time for previous purchases can serve as proof. In any case the burden of proof lays on the seller.
Azeri   
May 5, 2010
Writing Feedback / TOEFL: THE INTERNET - problems or information? 'most powerful media' [8]

Internet has becomes ..

Almost all people nowadays can access to - or can get access to - it without any help or assistance.

First of all, people are not more patient; they want an easy way to get information. - I think, it would sound better: ' Internet provides the quikest access to available information'.

There are a lot of sources of information, but theInternet can be considered as the easiest source to provide the necessary information needed

People have only to write their keys of research, and then the internet will research and give them the information they need.

On the other hand, - I think, the use of this phrase is inappropriate, as you supplement additional information to the pargraph rather than contradict it. - people do not have not to try other methods or alternatives to get the information as they did before. They do not have to go to the libraries and search for the information by reading books. They have not also to ask other persons about the information that they need. - you reiterate this phrase too often.

Another factor that makes the internet a good provider of information - there is no need for comma - is the diversity of the information

As we know , theweb sites are created by all kind of people, professional people, different background people, with different cultures and thoughts. - the structure of the sentence is incorrect. I changed it to: As we know , the web sites are created by different people - professional people and people with distinct cultural and academic background.

Therefore, the person seeking the information not only are provided by a huge amount of information but these information arewhich is different in most cases. - you used the word 'information' thrice in this sentence, and approximately 15 or 16 times in the whole essay. Such things are not welcomed in academic essays. may be, you ought to reconsider some sentences or use synonyms. - People here have a lot of choices of information that they need.

Some people believe that access to so much information can causes some problems. I think that too much information can cultivate people more and let them become more aware about what they need to know. - this paragraph is too short. You simply introduced the counter argument, but did not supported it; instead, you immediatly refuted it. This is not the right strucuture.

In conclusion, internet remains the first source of information. - it can be argued. In my opinion, the environment is the first source of information. Additionally, you did not mention it in your paragraphes - People who need to get a lot of information by easy way have to access to the internet. The diversity is also plays a major factor that makes the internet a good source of information. People have just to use their logic , reason and their experience to take the right information. - it is not relevant. Instead of the last sentence repeate the thesis statement once again, emphasizing your point of view.

good luck!
Azeri   
May 6, 2010
Undergraduate / Transfer Essay to Fordham University [3]

I had had a difficult time academically in high school and figured out that I would never be able to succeed in college; so I figured the best thing to do was to give up.

1. you used 'figure' twise in one sentence. It would be better if you replace the second one with synonym, f.e decide or understand

2. If the second clause is preceded by an adverb, such as accordingly, besides, so, therefore or thus, and not by a conjuction, the semicolon is required. - Willyam Strunk Jr. The Elements of Style

3. Willyam Strunk Jr. The Elements of Style: In general, however, it is best, in writing, to avoid using so in this manner; there is a danger that the writer who uses it at all may use it too often. A simple correction... is to omit the word so, and begin the first clause with as:

As I had had a difficult time academically in high school, and thought that I would never be able to succeed in college, I figured out that the best thing to do was to give up.

While I resented the idea, I figured - again the same word - that taking classes would be better easier than working full-time; so I decided to enroll at Westchester Community College.

Looking back at it, I am so thankful that my parents pressuring me to attend college, - insert comma between independent clauses - and it just may just have been the best thing they have ever done for me.

I have not only learned in the classroom, but have also gained knowledge through extracurricular activities.

I liked your essay very much. Although there are minor mistakes with punctuation, the overall content is very interesting. I believe your inspiration and persistence will bring you new accomplishments. good luck :)
Azeri   
May 6, 2010
Undergraduate / Disappointments in Life; 'never lose infinite hope' [7]

I think, the essay is well-written and has a good structure. You addressed the topic, making the essay pleasant to read.
I wish you to never lost your hope and remain as optimistic as you are now.
Azeri   
May 6, 2010
Undergraduate / Disappointments in Life; 'never lose infinite hope' [7]

Hi, Shalini
You are improving, since I did not find many mistakes in the last essay. I could have missed something while cheking, but in comparison with your previous threads, the latest one is better. I think the main things in writing an essay are to find ideas and present them in the right structure - things that you cope with well. You can write, I should say, and you write very well. I like how you organize your thoughts and present them in your essays. Grammar is not the hardest part of writing, though it is important as well. By constant reading grammar books and doing tips, it is possible to reduce such problems. I tell it from my own experience. As not being a native speaker, I have to constantly work on my grammar and sentence struture. Try more; you will see the results very soon.
Azeri   
May 8, 2010
Research Papers / Psychology Research; "abstract/method section." What do these terms mean??! [5]

Azeri, I'm so sorry to remove that material. I know sometimes the rules at EF can be misunderstood. Because we must guard so carefully against plagiarism, it is important to avoid ever pasting material from another site --- unless, you know, it is just a brief sentence or two.

Thanks for pointing that out to me. I will take into consideration your recomendation in other feedbacks :)
Azeri   
May 8, 2010
Essays / If i have million dollars I would help these organizations... [5]

Hi, Tashi

hello everyone, could you please write an essay about the above topic.

I don't think this is possible, because the overall objective of this forum, as I understood during my activity here, is to encourage students to write themselves, thereby developing their writing skills.

You should write an essay yourself, if you want to improve your writing.

If u don't mind to jot some essay about this topic. So, i can learn from my mistake

How can you become aware of your mistakes, if you don't write anything? Prepare a draft and place it here. Moderators and members of the forum will provide feedbacks to your essays, indicating your omissions and correcting your mistakes. Be sure that no essay will remain unchecked. Only by this way you will be able to learn from your mistakes. And it realy works!

my most weakness is, i don't read book at all. My laziness!

this may be the dominant reason that affects your writing. you ought to overcome your laziness and read as much as you can. You can do this by reading essays of other forum members as well, since some of them are very good source of information. Do not copy them, though; try to develop your own ideas and style.

Do not afraid of writing! The most difficult part is to begin; the rest will come with persistence!
good luck :)
Azeri   
May 8, 2010
Writing Feedback / Growing up in a rural area provides an easy-going life pattern to children [3]

Since there are various specialized education systems in the city, it will help the children for education. - Existence of various specialized education systems in the city can provide children

with qualified education.


...those who dwelling in the countryside often confronts with limited education because they countrysides lack well-established education system.

The children who had spend their youth life in countryside are likely to get a small range of knowledge compared with children in city.

In order to gain knowledge growing children up in the city will definitely help it because it has more stabilized systems. - this sentence is a little bit confused. In order to gain knowledge, children should be grown up in cities, since they have more stabilized system of education.
Azeri   
May 27, 2010
Writing Feedback / TOEFL: Improve Roads or Public Transports [3]

Hi, Hatung

First, I would like to point out the number of words and the size of your paragraphs. Your essay is a bit short, less than the required minimum of 300 words; consequently, the paragraphs are short - you should add 2-3 sentences to each para to make them more complete, and correspond with the word count requirement.

In my opinion, you did not thoroughly address your thesis statement.
Good luck!
Azeri   
Jun 6, 2010
Writing Feedback / I think there is too much violence in movies. [6]

Hi, evrybody. This is one of my recent TOEFL essays, but it was written for more than thirty minutes. I would be grateful if you provide feedbacks to the essay, and advise me on how I can improve my style. What tools should I exploit to make essays distinct and original?

Do you agree or disagree?
I think there is too much violence in movies.

From its origin at the very late of the 19-th century, the moviemaking process has gone through quite a remarkable path. It developed from short, black and white, silent scenes into full-length, colored, 3D format movies with complex and intricate plots. As films grow in number, filmmakers try various tools to make movies more lifelike and attract spectators, going too far by adding noxious episodes with cruel behavior and violent actions. Based on it, I strongly support the statement that there is too much violence in movies.
Azeri   
Jun 6, 2010
Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing-Topic about TV, book, radio [4]

You should expand on the last paragraphs, by repeating your reasons; it is too short. Add few supportive sentences to the para devoted to television, as you in favour of it. The reasons that you brought there for its effectiveness are not completely persuasive.
Azeri   
Jun 6, 2010
Undergraduate / My academic performance when I was a sophomore.(Not more than 500 words) [8]

I am impressed with your accomplishments, but I think the writing is too short. The limitation of 500 words infers that you should write aproximately 200-300 words.

Regarding the content of your writing, it is dry. There is no introduction, body and conclusion. If you are required to list bare facts, then it is ok. However, if they demand you to write an essay, then you should add more color, embellish the writing.

Good luck!
Azeri   
Jun 6, 2010
Grammar, Usage / Get in The Right Frame of Mind for Essay Writing [3]

Hi, Stainluss.

Actually, there aren't clear tips, as a lot depends on an individual's character, psychology and mood.
Just try to summon your strenght, exploit all abilities, collect your thoughts and remember that this would be the final exam, the final step that you should take to finish the year. Come earlier to an exam, talk to your friends, do everything to allay worries just before the exam, but concentrate on the task when the exam starts. If you are good in writing, if you have certain techniques, they will come to your help regardless the pressure you will experience.

Best of luck!
Azeri   
Jun 7, 2010
Writing Feedback / I think there is too much violence in movies. [6]

Syddy and Kevin, I appreciate your suggestions and corrections.

Thank you Kevin for your kind words. It is a real pleasure to be engaged in the activity if this forum. I really enjoy it. While trying to help people, I benefit from it as well. I gain something novel and useful every time when I provide feedbacks irrespective of the quality of checked essays.

Regarding my reasons, I still think that violence in movies is unjustifiable. In order to help people to deal with harsh realities, it is enough to demonstrate difficulties and hardships that people experience without including violent scenes. Skilled filmmakers are able to evade using these technique telling the whole truth and making viewers to ponder over a film, understand and go through all that a protogonist does. May be an attempt to veil their ideas. Everybody may display violence in films - it is not so difficult, but few masters can present things in the way that fully convey suffering and sorrow without scenes with bare violence.

I an not for censorship, which I consider the violence of rights for expression, but I think that censorship should exist in the mind of fillmakers; they should comprehend that there are certain limits, that they should know where to stop in their efforts to pervert in making violent scenes. After all, observance of violence may tell about the harsh realities, but few people will understand them. Everything seems too remote, and unreal from behind the screen. People are able to see and cope with problems after they face with such situation.
Azeri   
Jun 8, 2010
Writing Feedback / I think there is too much violence in movies. [6]

Thanks for comments, Yonman.

Regarding your question, I do not need to support the reason with a realible source in TOEFL essays. It is not required, but, of course, if I do that it would be counted as a plus. Students usually use expressions like "according to recent surveys" or "referring to latest interviews"; however, I try to avoid including these types of cliche phrases in my essays.

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