ershad193
Sep 17, 2010
Graduate / "Part of the Fenway Family"--Peace Corps Application Essay #2 [18]
Okay, if that's jargon then you don't have to change anything. I was thinking of it in the literal sense, and yes, I wasn't aware of "safe space" in relation to resource and outreach environments. I'll look it up pronto :)
You know it's a lot more difficult to write, than to read or edit something...hehe... :D
Anyway, I would've removed the "As a Peace..." sentence and ended the essay with the following sentences:
Now I am ready for a fresh challenge -- a challenge more challenging than moving to Boston; a challenge only Peace Corps can provide. However, this will be different. Even though, I will be stepping into unfamiliar territory again, I know that this will be a familiar unfamiliarity.
^^Does that sound cheesy? Sorry, I'm not very good with words...haha :P
So do your necessary brainstorming and come up with a good one. I'm sure you can do that. :)
I didn't mean a "safe space" in the literal sense
Okay, if that's jargon then you don't have to change anything. I was thinking of it in the literal sense, and yes, I wasn't aware of "safe space" in relation to resource and outreach environments. I'll look it up pronto :)
I was wondering if you had any specific suggestions for a final sentence
You know it's a lot more difficult to write, than to read or edit something...hehe... :D
Anyway, I would've removed the "As a Peace..." sentence and ended the essay with the following sentences:
Now I am ready for a fresh challenge -- a challenge more challenging than moving to Boston; a challenge only Peace Corps can provide. However, this will be different. Even though, I will be stepping into unfamiliar territory again, I know that this will be a familiar unfamiliarity.
^^Does that sound cheesy? Sorry, I'm not very good with words...haha :P
So do your necessary brainstorming and come up with a good one. I'm sure you can do that. :)