sidbush
Dec 29, 2010
Undergraduate / "Extraordinary" Fav Word UVA Supp Essay [3]
This essay is great! To be honest, I can't find any major errors.
There are points when your sentences become somewhat unclear:
I am powerful and yet I have not reached my full potential to allow me to prevent the world from discrimination, trafficking, loss of biodiversity, destitution or abuse.
Something about the "to allow me to" is confusing.
Other than that, wonderful all around! Great introduction to and definition of the word and concluded nicely. Care to proof read mine?
This essay is great! To be honest, I can't find any major errors.
There are points when your sentences become somewhat unclear:
I am powerful and yet I have not reached my full potential to allow me to prevent the world from discrimination, trafficking, loss of biodiversity, destitution or abuse.
Something about the "to allow me to" is confusing.
Other than that, wonderful all around! Great introduction to and definition of the word and concluded nicely. Care to proof read mine?