Anonymoussenior
Jan 15, 2011
Undergraduate / Centre & Union College Optional Liberal Arts, Leaders [6]
Ias a student have always loved learning, and know that it is the key to success in today's world- remove the comma.
The learning environment at Centre is one of the best in the nation. - change the best in the nation part to how the learning environment is perfect for you.
The programs offered at Centre would present me with worlds of opportunity. Centre would allow me to actualize my potential in whichever field I choose and participate in ... (name something about the college that only Centre has) maybe a class, a club.
The ending is perfect just add more detailed information about the school. It is possible to give detail and stick withing the 500 characters so work towards that. Also if you want to save space then cut the first sentence and leave only the english version then you can go into detail about other aspects of Centre.
It is often said that there are leaders and there are followers, but I would argue that there are some who never get the chance to lead despite their earnest efforts.
In the past, I have ended up in places with an previously established pecking order, and because I was new, I always ended up at the bottom with many people to clamber over.
I am sure that the leaders in Union's Minerva Houses will be extremely welcoming to incoming students. - cut this sentence it adds nothing to the essay.
Because the Minerva Houses are run by the residence's members, I will finally have the opportunity to attain a leadership position.
While trying to gain a leadership position within my assigned Minerva house, I will form trust-filled friendships with bith upperclassmen and my fellow freshmen.
Add a little more about the Minerva houses. Are there house traditions? Talk about what your would do if you are the leader of your Minerva house etc.
Please read my Wellesley essay.
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The learning environment at Centre is one of the best in the nation. - change the best in the nation part to how the learning environment is perfect for you.
The programs offered at Centre would present me with worlds of opportunity. Centre would allow me to actualize my potential in whichever field I choose and participate in ... (name something about the college that only Centre has) maybe a class, a club.
The ending is perfect just add more detailed information about the school. It is possible to give detail and stick withing the 500 characters so work towards that. Also if you want to save space then cut the first sentence and leave only the english version then you can go into detail about other aspects of Centre.
It is often said that there are leaders and there are followers, but I would argue that there are some who never get the chance to lead despite their earnest efforts.
In the past, I have ended up in places with an previously established pecking order, and because I was new, I always ended up at the bottom with many people to clamber over.
Because the Minerva Houses are run by the residence's members, I will finally have the opportunity to attain a leadership position.
While trying to gain a leadership position within my assigned Minerva house, I will form trust-filled friendships with bith upperclassmen and my fellow freshmen.
Add a little more about the Minerva houses. Are there house traditions? Talk about what your would do if you are the leader of your Minerva house etc.
Please read my Wellesley essay.