Scholarship / 'Not just a financially disadvantaged girl from a middle class family' - scholarship [16]

The word limit for the essay is 250 words.
According to the scholarship committee, getting a scholarship depends on academic merit, financial need and potential.
All types of comments (grammar, content) are welcomed obviously. This is my third draft. So i am pretty sure there is a lot to do here. Thanks in advance. :)

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Given the competition for scholarships, what qualities do I have that make me an outstanding applicant."
If you are an international applicant, please also address the development potential criteria and your intentions upon returning to your home country.

I am not just a financially disadvantaged girl from a middle class family, bearing an emotional story, eagerly aspiring to study abroad; I am strongly able. I am more prepared for my course of study, English Language and Linguistics, than many other students might possibly be regarding theirs. I might have been out of touch with school but I have continuously educated myself through online lectures and books. I have also been working hard as an English Language Instructor for almost two years. I am perfectly aware of my strengths as a teacher as well as my weaknesses. My ability to speak Nepali, Hindi, Gurung and English also makes me a worthy candidate to pursue Linguistics. I have been blessed enough to be familiar with Sanskrit and I regard myself amazingly lucky to be introduced to Basic Latin. All in all, I have the extra strength to thrive as a student. I know what lies ahead of me and I am capable to tackle it.

For a country succumbed to the perpetual political turmoil, not having linguistics as an area of study is of the least priority for Nepal. Therefore, I want to establish a multicultural language school where students from various rural areas will not only have the opportunity to learn English but also play a vital role through an inter-exchange language program. Nepal is culturally rich with mysterious tongues flowing through the hills and the valleys. I dream of giving it the continuity it needs and deserves.

Undergraduate / 'Language piqued my interest ' - Personal Satement. Linguistics. [26]

Hi, i am an interntional student. I have written a new essay, taking a whole paragraph from the old one i had written before.

I am applying to a university in the U.K for the English Language and Linguistics Programme. The essay is not finished yet. I have yet to explain why i want to go to the U.K for my study. But would you mind checking my progress. I have tried to be as simple as possible. Let me know what you think. Do i make my point across about wanting to study English and Linguistics?

Help me and i will help you back. Thank you so much in advance.
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I was talking to this tiny, yet ridiculously warm looking lady on an almost empty bus going to the city. She appeared to be in her late 50s. I was in a less-than-good mood and to my greatest fear, she started talking to me. After the usual introductions, with a sweet nonchalance, she asked me what I wanted to do with my life. I replied, "I..ah...don't know." She raised her head and her eyebrows slightly, in unison. I tried to follow up with a smile, but failed miserably. With a dramatic flair in her voice, the lady said, "You will know when the time is right." And after what I had thought was an awkward silence, she added, "Take it one day at a time."

That was almost two years ago. I had been out of school, frustrated at my limited study options, hungrily searching for my vocation. As dramatic as it may seem, something clicked during that awfully tentative conversation with the lady. I realized I had to do what I had loved but had ignored before; I had to go back to teaching.

Language piqued my interest and teaching liberated me. So I combined both and freed myself. There are still people, including my father, who love flaunting the financial aspects of a technical degree. But they don't know what I become in a class. My father hasn't seen me evolve from a shy girl into an excited maniac when I help my students decipher English language. It's not just the English that gets me going. It is the idea of a language becoming tangible from picayune human needs and consequently, the sad falling of a tongue due to inevitable human greed.

Ever imagined a world where people spoke only one language, united by a single outlook towards life? Well, I have. And I can tell you there is nothing so serenely tragic about having no diversity to humble us. The ballyhoo that languages create is something that is unnerving but an essential part that holds us together. Maybe the day will never come when there is only one language. But maybe there will. Especially in today's world of ubiquitous technology that has made it easy for us to learn and possible to forget. I do not want to watch the progressive social phenomenon of language from the sideline; I want to be a part of it, right in the middle.

Undergraduate / '38 year old daughter-in-law' - my extra curricular activity essay [3]

A 38 year old daughter-in-law who quit school when she was in grade 7 to get married, a 46 year old devoted wife who came closest to getting an education when she would stare at her brother amble to school, a 50 year old jaunty grandmother who mustered up the courage to learn, only after becoming a widow. These are some of the many brave students in my cousin's Praudh Shiksha class, a place where these women challenge their cruel fate. I do not help them learn mere alphabets and numbers: I hand them the power to own their life. Albeit gradual, the learning process is anything but insipid. Listening and ruminating different stories is both heart wrenching and powerful. Many women have been the victim of the sanctimonious society that loftily hands the prerogative to study, if not only, more to sons. But now they fight to finally retrieve their right to learn, and more importantly, to live. And I have the privilege to become a part of it.

Note. This is my third essay on the same topic. I think the essay is missing something and it is not clear. I have chosen to write about my experience in teaching women how to read and write. Also, extra question. Is extra curricular activity suppose to be only the ones you were involved in during your school? I am on my break and this essay is based on my teaching experience during this time. Please let me know. Thank you. :) Will be happy to read yours.