Scholarship /
'Before I came to America..' - the need and how to contribute to living environment [5]
Gotchya. Even though those might be the specific questions, i think you still need to show that you excel in education and your financial situation has impeded your progress, your dream. Anyway, here are some grammar mistakes.
Before I came to America, I had realized that my parents
don'tdidn't have enough money to pay
for my 4 year degree in United States. They
cancould afford my 2 year degree.
Due to my cousin provide
sd me free food and place to live, my parents
don'tdidn't have to pay
for my living expenses. However, it seems that now
I and my cousinmy cousin and I cannot get along with each other. As a result, I have to rent an apartment in order to continue my education in America. This matter certainly will increase my parent's expenditure since they have to pay
for my food and apartment rent. If I
cannotdon't get a job on-campus
and anyor a scholarship, I will not be able to finish my four year degree.
By studying in American college as an international student, I have contributed diversity to my living environment. I
have shared my
experience when I was living in IndonesiaIndonesian culture with my American and international friends. Some of my American friends
had never heard
of Indonesia before, so I
described to them where exactly Indonesia isexplained them in details about Indonesian life . In addition, I also introduced some simple Indonesian
's food to my multicultural friends.
To conclude, my financial crisis was caused by unexpected problem which can affect my education progress.
As a result, if I
can overcome this problem, I can get better education in United States and contribute diversity to my living environment.
May i ask which university are you applying to? I kid you not i had the same exact issue. When i couldn't live with my cousin, i rented an apartment ( san francisco) which was uber expensive. After couple of months, i became broke and came back home. Now it's been almost a year since i have not gone to school. Currently i am applying to schools as an international transfer student. International transfering is ridiculously hard and the financial aid is so limited. Are you transfering or just applying for aid in the same college? Sorry, about all these questions. I couldn't help but ask since i went through the same thing.
Work on your essay a bit more and I hope you get the scholarship.
Good luck. :)