Writing Feedback / Crime news should not be reported in newspapers or tv [7]

These days, the amount of crime news broadcasted has taken enormous scales so that every single individual got full insight into the factual act of events within their precise chronological record. Some people, in response to this trend, hold that it has an intimidating effect on people's well being as a part of integral community while in many case it goads people into crime committing and therefore the news which show the scenes of crimes should be excluded from traditional program of mass media sources.

To begin with, the broad range of media programs that show crime has a deterrent effect on community as they depict a chain of events whether small scale crimes or series of felonies which impose certain atmosphere of agitation as well as target people's attitude toward the situation that is happening in the community in the negative way. People start feeling themselves insecure when it comes to social stability which they speculate to be the government agenda to ensure but which may be undermined by the numerous crimes sometimes happening regardless of government's authority or political economical situation. As a result, vote of confidence to the government could be lost leading to desperation and chaos in the governmental bodies that are responsible for that security and the people who feel disadvantaged because of their government incapability to perform actions against these maladies.

Also, these daily recurring phenomena beget serious behavior deviations, especially in highly flexible young people with unmolded personalities who endeavor to imitate villainies considering them to be the personages whom the society much talks about, unintentionally making them to be the fake superstars whom these young people desire to look like. It became a common practice, unfortunately, that young people try to pursue the actions that delinquent perform only because the last has achieved notorious fame and his or her doings, frequently enormously exaggerated, are being many times shown by prejudiced TV channels that are concerned only with their rating. All these factors give young people the example of how the crime can be committed but their inability to evaluate the consequences and the lack of functionality of the decision-making process lead to their unconscious crime committing which however has real aftermaths that in practice turn out to be the life-long regrets.

Finally, to avoid this trend I would agree to certain extent that the amount of crime news shown is to be significantly diminished or some state-led programs to be organized which would have a full control on what and how much is broadcasted and which audience is targeted by the crime news.

Writing Feedback / To what extent should university courses be geared to the economic needs of society? [2]

In some countries, governments mandate to tailor education to society's needs which is sparked much controversy among different social groups. Some holds that academic courses should be available in universities in order to provide students with multisectoral educational foundation. Others contend that a university should offer courses that enable students easily to find jobs upon graduation.

To begin with, much of society is expanding their expectations of the university and the personal human capital value of the university's product wanting the higher education process to concentrate more on transferable workplace skills. For students to survive in this competitive world, universities should consider to offer courses that are in high demand in the society, such as business administration, computer science and foreign language training. Degree programs, such as engineering, communications, commerce, and the arts are useful tools for nation building when courses are geared for such goal. Those enable graduates easily enter the job market where the demand for well-educated person in particular field is higher than in any other sector which helps young professional being ensured work attendance in their major fields after the graduation.

However, in many cases, the vocational program and the academic program reside side-by-side in the same institution. This creates in some people an idea that the pure academics need migrate to the professional model or that one is better than the other. The main concern with that line of thinking is that the entirety of the working class and underprivileged class have misidentified what a university is and what it does - instead, they have attributed to the university the concept of vocational school. But these practical courses should by no means be a substitute for what is the basic research of various fields like physics, mathematics and earth sciences, because the latter is undeniably the base for an economy and academic research to go further. The main privilege of universities is to transfer deep knowledge and furtherance of knowledge-whether of economic advantage or no. Universities should be not so near-sighted as to abandon all the basic courses only for provide instant-needed professionals rather than preparing for a manpower reserve for the sustainable economic development of country.

Finally, I think, that in some sectors of education main emphasis should lie on some practical subjects to ensure universities professionalism of their attendees, however academic subjects should get sufficient attention and be taught in the majority of academic establishments.

Writing Feedback / Is playing computer games by youngsters a good or a bad thing? [2]

The twenty first century brings a gradual shift away from traditional socio-cultural principles to those of modernized biases with contemporary ideologies and modes of life. It is taken for granted, now, that computers revolutionize people's lives changing the habits of living and transferring them into more convenient types, especially in computer gaming sector. The availability of wide range of computers games paved the way to generations of both more literate and more advanced young people but at the same may be accounted for numerous problems associated with these people's social organization and health maintenance.

From the one perspective, it is of a great benefit for young people to get involved with computer gaming considering it under the enhancing one's cognitive ability considerations. Playing particular game requires a strong combination of different abilities such as high concentration, elaboration of certain tactics to individual game, abstract and high level critical thinking and others children applies through the gaming process which lead to promotion of their skill, serving an entertaining purpose, simultaneously. The programming skills one acquires is the aspect which helps children to move forward into other initiatives in their life and it is the skill which potential employer is seeking to observe in them as in the perspective candidates. Multitasking, simultaneous tracking of many shifting variables and managing multiple objectives are other examples of other abilities children may push on which peculiarly make these children be competitive in their traditional classroom, future career and day-to-day life. Therefore, it is vital for children to be engaged with computer games, especially to those stepping into the adult world.

From the other perspective, however, computer gaming does not seem to be attractive when it comes to eventual addiction. The condition of being habitually or compulsively occupied with or involved in computer games begets serious deviations in the behavior of children when isolation and exasperation are only minor symptoms. Also, there is a direct correlation with the amount of time for computer games children possess and social interaction where the second proportionately decreases when children allocate exceeding time on pursuing these games. Children may get engrossed in these games in the enormous scales so that parent-children bonds could be broken up and the role of traditional family in community would be diminished leading to a slump of the whole community. Consequently, when not surveiled appropriately, children extreme implication in computer gaming could have deep-rooted consequences of no positive value as for children so for their milieu.

All things considered, I think that playing computer games has a lot to offer children in terms of skill promotion but only when watched over pertinently, while neglection of this measure may lead to eventual degradation of children and their full segregation from society.

Writing Feedback / IELTS ESSAY "Ban sail of bottled water" [NEW]

What is a natural resource that always should be free. Government should bend the sail of bottle water! To what extent?

These days, water industry is becoming exceedingly perspective and attractive spheres in business sector to invest money in, especially in bottled water branch. However, due to environmental damage it carries, the many put forward a proposal as to prohibit the manufacture of bottled water considering negative impacts it has.

To begin with, in the era when the world is dealing with the impacts of climate change, the bottled water industry requires massive amounts of fossil fuels to manufacture. It posed numerous environmental impacts and health concerns, noting that many countries are plagued by water scarcity and oil is burned in the production and transporting of bottled water. That, in turn, puts its burden on community ecosystem through its production and transport while the rapid growth in this industry means that water extraction is concentrated in communities where bottling plants are located. These communities experience a great ordeal of being negatively influenced by increased amount exhaust fumes, traffic congestions and irrational exploitation of natural water resources which beget spoiled community infrastructure and put additional pressure on ecology. Therefore, not only the community members exploiting bottled water suffer but the community itself approaches into the serious plight.

However, despite the evident environmental problems bottled water industry poses, its advantages are not taken into account seriously by certain individuals or simply neglected as a result of their unwillingness to accept realities. In other words, bottles of water can be vital in the wake of natural disasters, when water from municipal systems may be undrinkable or unavailable. Starving, thunderstorms are exactly the case of natural maladies where the use of bottled water not only prerogative but urgent measure to provide population with basic means of survival. Also, while there is an increasing demand in basic exigency of those need, bottled water remains to be the only one choice, maybe, to ensure living sustainability of these impoverished and disadvanted individuals. That is why, bottled water could be served as a first aid in the emerged grave situations when the immediate intervention is required and the plight could be worsened would not be in the case.

Finally, I think that resolution is to be passed urging cities to phase out government use of bottled water when feasible and promote the importance of municipal one while the importance of bottled water in extreme situation should not be ignored. And these actions are not just about fiscal responsibility-they are about civic pride and protecting common resources.

Undergraduate / 'regional Math Olympics' - evaluate experience [NEW]

Experiences are of a great value in one's life as they provide individuals with practical knowledge that could match with the demands of a real life but could not be acquired through any book or academic curriculum. These are the life- long guides which accompany person in any his/her initiative and sometimes remain to be the only choice for people to follow through to achieve their goals and life satisfaction. I have had a wide range of venues in my life: some of those thoroughly stuck in my memory, some were as transient as their onset was, but eventually all of them leaved significant imprint on molding of my personality and had a great influence on a person I am.

When I was in eighth grade I have been sent to regional Math Olympics as a general representative from my school council. I was young, unmatured and diffident teenager with unmolded ideology but with excellent educational basis and academic foundation. When I have attended the competition the rivals were much poorer in academic achievement in comparison with that of mine which I have understood after the initial acquaintance. We were given a task which I have accomplished with a great enthusiasm and pleasure in the shortest possible time but my contesters were still exerting themselves. I have been absolutely sure that will triumph in the competition but the results claimed were disappointing as for me so for the people of my milieu when we have realized that I have lost to much more incompetent opponent who bribed the first place.

I was completely grieved as a sense of fairness and impossibility to do something subjugated me while giving an account that I could have performed better even if exceeded rivals. Coming home I felt enormous sense of anger accompanied by desire to approve myself in the eyes of my family. The draw motivated me in the scales that I was ready to contest everyone and even the teachers were biased. Upcoming day I have lodged a complaint letter to the local educational authorities clamoring for appeal and appointing face to face competition where I could manifest my superiority toward the counterfeit winner. That day I fulfilled all of my genuine potential and surpassed all of the expectations and aced at all sections of the task. I feel extremely satisfied upon the taken revenge and resisting the pressure.

The competition had a great deal as to boosting self-confidence and fostering feeling of perfection in comparison with my peers. I have realized that is not everything could be sold and bought and it is a talent and persistence that leads to success. The majority of people meet with failure because of their lack of persistence in creating new plans to take the place of those which fail and if you make the unconditional commitment to reach your most important goals, if the strength of your decision is sufficient, you will find the way and the power to achieve your goals. People's capacity for occasional blunders is inseparable from their capacity to reach their goals. Not everyone wins them all, and their failures, when they happen, are just part of their growth. Once I have almost washed my hands from the predicament but failed to do so, because I explored the inner power of my personage, internal hand which guides me and which still motivates me and makes to surmount the maladies I come up against.

Writing Feedback / IELTS 'children in present times are given too much individual freedom' [7]

The twenty first century brings a gradual shift away from traditional socio-cultural principles to those of modernized biases with contemporary ideologies and modes of life. The rapidly changing milieu forces people especially these preparing for stepping into the adult world to conform to changing circumstances usually being endowed with exceeded individual freedom.

To begin with, immense youngsters' freedom takes its roots from lack of parent's supervision in terms of reduced time allocated for children-parent social contacts as well as parent's negligence. The majority of people, these days, are pursuing their career path often ignoring children behavior or misconducting the appropriate time allotted for children being on their own. Children on their part feeling the sense of independence are making the choices of their own, enjoying leisure pursuits they like and acting they speculate is appropriate whether it is accepted by the norm of behavior in society or not. These factors are reflected on the time out of parental control children possess and individual freedom which is taken for granted.

In addition, technological boom put its contribution in the way of giving children independence in education, recreation and many more spheres of life. Advent of online studying, for instance, delivered students from attending traditional classes providing children with academic freedom and excluding the role of traditional teachers. They are unassisted in accomplishing their academic researches and foundations which made them even if not integrally but partially independent from academic curriculum and granted a choice of being chosen a particular system of studying they are interested in. Cutting-edge technologies, also, have given children an opportunity to perform daily routines such as cooking, washing and cleaning without being beseeched family members and eliminate straight parents' interference. Therefore, technology advances have a great deal as to make children more independent and capable to handle their obligation by themselves.

Finally, I think, that children in present times are given too much individual freedom which is their blessing and malady simultaneously.