Writing Feedback / 'money is much important' - The Main reason people go to work is to earn money [6]

The main reason people go to work is to earn money. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Job would be the main change of any adult person to live independently; however, the money that
has different effects on the life styles ways may be the hidden reason for any work. I vigorously
agree with people who think that money is the obscured ambitious of any work and I will support my
opinion in the following paragraphs.

First of all, a person search for a good job to earn much money to improve his life because
money is the way for this improvement. For example buying bigger house in a better
place needs more money, as well as studying abroad to get higher education needs money,
consequently, will broad job chances in the future. As a result, pursuing better life is the
purpose of any person which can be aimed by good salary career.

Secondly, saving money helps to create a private job later, therefore any person will look for high salary job to save more money in a less time. I believe that both dependent or independent jobs are measured by their income first and any other reason would be the second, otherwise any job of patent interesting would be better for everyone even with less income.

Finally, If we opposite the equation and ask someone to work for pleasure and enjoyment
only? How many people will accept? I think earning money would be a pleasure itself after
working hard. Everyone likes to see his or her reaping at the end and comparing it with others to
compete and improve it if necessary.

As a conclusion, in the 21st century money is much important and most of people are looking
for best salary to follow the pace of life demands. I think it is better for everyone to start his life in a high salary job, while working in a place that fit his or her interests can be

achieved later.

Writing Feedback / IELTS ESSAY2: helping of wealthy countries to poor ones [4]

Hi all,
I would appreciated every one helping and Thanks in advanced for this one also

Best regards
Hadi

The wealth gap between 1st world countries and 3rd world countries seems to be increasing. How can we reduce this gap? Do you think that developed countries have a duty to assist developing countries in every way?

Cooperation is an essential force that shaped life in our earth. Many people think that wealth communities have to assist poor ones to improve their lives, in addition to let them raise their levels and follow the modern societies. I vigorously agree that fortune countries have an honored option to help undeveloped ones and improving their people circumstances.

First of all, helping poor countries will improve their economic status and the educational levels of the people should be raised, consequently, these countries could be able to combine with the invention and globe development soon. This help will decrease the knowledge gap between wealthy and poor countries, therefore, new talents people could be born who are needed to developing creature.

Secondly, improving poor countries circumstances will help to get rid of bad things. For example poor places are suitable for dirty environment that is proper for bacteria and diseases to be triggered. Crimes are much more in this communities because people there can do anything to survive. As a result, bad habits are not instincts to be accepted but they are acquired from unhealthy environment, in contrast the opposite is correct and where the healthy environment available then good habits and people would be there.

In conclusion, our world needs cooperation of all its populations to be in good healthy shape. Competition and selfishness should not be the only force that shaped life on earth. People are needed to given same opportunity of knowledge and living circumstances to grow up well.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: Indoor or outdoor teaching.. to get valuable results [3]

Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's development while others think that it is important for children to go school.

Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of both methods and give your own opinion

Education is important for everyone to improve the society in general and the person's life in private. The way of teaching considered to be changeable from one person to another, some people prefer indoor teaching while others think having teaching in the schools would not compensate by any other option. In the following paragraphs I will analyze advantages and disadvantages of both opinions and present my point in view about people who have moderate stance between them.

First of all, outdoor teaching gives the child the opportunity to be in a team to cooperate with others, learn how to share his opinion with them as well as how to deal with any other's idea and develop it. The group activities are difficult to be available indoor, in addition to that the student needs to show his results to his friends and see their friends' works to compare, improve, and create something useful.

Secondly, teaching in the schools would improve social abilities, because the child would copy persons' behaviors which seen in front of him/her. In the school there are multiple choices of behaviors to be copied, therefore, it would be a wonderful portrait of behaviors. A good deal of researches tells that the child is like a mirror could mimic anything in front, so better to improve kid's skills by rise his mirrored capabilities.

Finally, students need competition to do more efforts to succeed and achieve better results. Indoor teaching could help to gain best scores in the school but it would not be instead of the competition between children. I remember when I was a child I spent too much time to finish my homework with my parents' help because I wanted to be proud in front of my friends.

In conclusion, teaching is inevitable for everyone and should be done in the best way to get valuable results. Education should be acknowledged by indoor and outdoor teaching accompany and that would help to bring up talent people who can interfere better in his society.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: Primary, secondary and further education - Free high education? [NEW]

Hi all,
I am trying my best to improve my writing everyday.
Thanks in advanced for everyone's help

All education, primary, secondary and further education, should be free to all people and paid for by the government.
Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Many people think that high education is tending to be inevitable demand in the 21st century. Governments have to specify more money to offer unpaid high education for their people, while others think having some people with primary educations is still important for factories working. I vigorously agree that studying should be free of charge up to high level and will explain my reasons in the following paragraphs.

The illiteracy definition has been changed nowadays, therefore the advent of technology and computer science let knowledge limit extended. The reading and writing ability which was a gate to continue high school 20 years ago is not enough in the computer and internet age.

Talent employees have been needed, who be able to deal with the different kind of sciences including computers, the new physics and chemistry inventions and speak more than one foreign language.

Life tends to be more expensive, in addition education nowadays costs much more than before. A lot of people could not continue high school study, even higher university education if it is paid and expensive. Government should spend more money to give most of its people the opportunity to continue high teaching and bring up new scientists for the future.

Human resources should be on the top of priority of any government's plan to improve the society; therefore, more money should be spent to achieve this goal. Free high education for everyone would lead to wealth community learning, however, we should not wait until the new Illiteracy come over to look for the treatment.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: A complaining letter to the bank ('ordered a new cheque book') [3]

You ordered a new cheque book from your bank two weeks ago but you have
received nothing.
Write a letter to the manager complaining about the bad service. Say when and how you ordered the cheque book. Ask how much longer you will have to wait and ask the manager what action he will take over this matter.

Dear Sir/Madam.

I ordered a new cheque book for my account number 0023458975, from your main bank branch in Milano.

I am writing to complain against the bad services I have been faced when I applied for new book last Saturday 16 of July. I met a new representative, I have never seen him before in the bank, he approved my application for new cheque book after withdrawn the old one. Unfortunately he was impolite and refused to give it hand-by-hand as I did, then he sent it by post-mail that should not be late more than three days according to what he said.

I need my cheque book to release checks for my clients, however it is one week since I ordered it and nothing received yet. Could you please tell me when I can get it exactly? Otherwise to order a new one and give it hand-by-hand as I did.

I often met better services from your bank which has honesty and reputation, Therefore, I would like you to look after my problem and call me in person when you resolve my problem.

I am looking forward to hearing from you soon

Yours Faithfully

Hadi Ibrahim

Writing Feedback / IELTS ESSAY2: English is the primary foreign language. [5]

It is very clear now that English should be the primary foreign language taught in all schools around the world. Learning a different foreign language before English is, in today's world, a waste of time.

Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

A known golden rule called money talks is quite changed in the 21st century into inventions and developments talk. Nobody deny the impaction of day-by-day inventions and technology development on our lives. There is no doubt that the majority of evolution is in the Western party mainly United States of America, therefore many people think that we should follow everything they have especially their native languages. These people annoying to let English language as the first choice of any foreign language in schools.

I vigorously agree with this opinion for many reasons I will explain in the following paragraph.

Firstly, the advent of computer and international network cause world wide distribution of the English language as it is their invention language, instead of the computer programming languages like Basic or Machine programming languages based on English essentially. On the other hand, the translation into local languages has been done but is not enough, because the pace of this invention is still high and translation could not follow it properly. So studying this field in its origin language will help to acknowledge all new data day-by-day.

Secondly, English is the main language of the Medicine, for example medical conferences and symposiums almost based on English language. Medical books and textbooks are publishing essentially in English, therefore any other language would be second language or a translation. Consequently any new treatment, diagnostic facility or new surgical plan will start in the original version in English and all others will be substitutions.

Finally, Most of world wide scientists had spent a small or large time granting outside in an English historical University, for example Oxford university and Harvard university are two of the most famous and passionate universities for every educational person to spend sometime studying there.

To sum up, English language is the language of invention and science in the 21st century, therefore it should be the first choice foreign language for every non-speakers English country. It would help students to adapt with this language in early ages and to be involved in any new discovery.

Writing Feedback / ESSAY IELTS2: separate classes in gender bases category. [2]

It is better for boys and girls to study separately rather than study in mixed sex classes. They are less distracted and this leads to better results.

Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

The ministry of education in some countries is claimed to separate boys and girls in gender based classes, however they have been separated already in many others. The reason in most of the cases is to get more concentration and good results could be achieved, While others prefer to let both sexes together in all classes. Each opinion has advantages and disadvantages, I would like to explain both ideas as well as to take a middle status between them in the following paragraphs.

A good deal of research has been focused recently on single-gender classes instead of coed-gender classes. The effectiveness of the first class type achieved significant high results compared to the other especially in certain classes. Boys achieved double records in mathematics, while Girls were brilliant in arts as they recorded three to 4 times more.

The social development was affected partially in both sexes. For example, I read an article about cases of homosexuality were noticed more in single-sex classes, Rare cases of psychiatric diseases like other-gender phobia, which means afraid from the other sex relation, or Autism variation disease as the patient tend to be alone most of the time and afraid to be in group activity.

On the other hand, single-gender teachers are better also. I think it will be better to be a behavioral profession parallel to your teaching education experience. Those kind of teachers achieved better results also in all mentioned researches.

I think we can choose a middle status, as we can separate the students in the classes needed high concentration, like math, physics, and all other scientific branches, while let them together in social and other soft ones, like sport, Painting, music and similar.

In conclusion, the reason of our teaching is to get good professional persons who help in the community's development later. This achievement could be concluded by separate most of classes in gender based category as most of scientists suggested, while no offense if we keep some other classes as it is.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: Children to play Outdoor or Indoor? [NEW]

Children today are too dependent on computers and electronic entertainment. It would be better for them to be outside playing sports and taking part in more traditional pastimes than spending all day indoors.

Do you agree or disagree with this statements?

Computer and technology inventions have been changing our life demands, and the way of the life behaviour.
It turned to be infatuated thought that children should spend their time indoor, as a way to improve computer and technology knowledge.
I believe as I were a kid that I had to be outside more than anything else, playing and competing with someone like me, either by his age or size, it was like a freedom to me.

Children should spend enough time outside every day, as their bodies need to be built well, especially in their early ages. Every high schooled person knows the benefits of the sun on bones growing. On the other hand, staying indoor to spend most of the time on TV's programs or play electronic games could limit the physical ability of the kid.

Improvement of the social skills of the kid will significantly appeared when creation of relations took place with fellows. These relations could not be succeeded properly indoor.

New psychiatric disease called Autism created and has been seen a lot recently, mostly because of children indoor dependency.

No one can ignore or deny the effects of technology and video games on IQ rate, but should not be an essential demand on early childhood. Any kid has to spare more time out side with physical and social activities and some indoors, while the controversy can be happen within time.

To sum up, Children should be given their needs in playing outdoor as their age wants, furthermore fitted mentally and physically person is the one who was taken good care while he grown up. We all known the golden basement said a sound mind in a sound body.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: Stop smoking in public places, life is a circle between before and after [3]

It has been proved that smoking kills. In some countries it has been made illegal for people to smoke in all public places except in certain areas. All countries should make these rules.

Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

A good deal of researches have been focused on bad effects of the smoking recently, in addition to a lot of trials to prohibit bad feedback of smoking on the earth. Smoking became tradition in the last two decades, although human has been known its slow killing effects as a trigger to a lot of malignancies.

Governments in most countries claimed to limit smoking as their nations can, therefore a lot of decisions against this bad costumes have been made. Prevent smoking in the public places is the unanimous decision in most of modern countries.

I totally agree with any decision in trial to stop smoking, therefore I will discuss this kind of government's acting and will explain my opinion to support it.

Health association societies tried a lot to revealed the consequences of the smoking on health and environment, however the fortune that earned from that bad trading echoed their voices out. After those years of smoking addiction we have been seeing its effect on the human body, how it kill, and cost our economy a lot because of treatment costs, maybe more than what trading company earned.

Malignancy is the main harmful effect of that foreign visitor to our body, however I read a recent research about the only cause of Bladder carcinoma which is the smoking, while that kind of carcinoma is very malignant and no way to eradicate it even it is in situ when diagnosed.

Eradication of smoking leads to less diseases, which means saving money, lives, and environment. No smoking will let its companies to think of other useful product to produce and earn good money from it, in addition to let medical scientists spend their efforts on something else not resolved yet.

Saving money, good economy, healthy environment and healthy bodies all are enough to think about strict decision or even decisions to stop smoking. I totally believe that stop smoking in public places will lead to think a lot before smoking again, in addition nonsmokers have no guilty to be negative smokers who are in a place which has someone smoke. Negative smokers have the same effects of positive smokers and sometimes more, as have been proved.

In conclusion, life is a circle between before and after. Let us excavate every good tradition from our ancestors, improve, and grace it. On the other hand, we can strip bad ancestor's costume of and discover any other one stead. No need for smoking in our present, so let smokers respect nonsmokers and try to stop harmful of teh society and give good picture to our kids. Saving environment needs good connections between our past and future, so let our present as good connection could can be.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Benefits of unpaid work of teenagers [4]

Some people think that all teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time to do help the local community. They believe this would benefit both individual teenager and society as a whole.

Do you agree or disagree?

More researches focused recently on how to get benefit from people's spare time, and how to give them the opportunity to be profit in their next future. Is it a good to let them work in their spare time? What is the suitable age of anyone to be involved in a job? What is acceptable job? And is it valued if unpaid?

Critics have a lot against this kind of work, especially when it is related to young teenagers and they considered it as an abuse sometimes.

I totally disagree with them, as a lot of useful returns could be achieved for either of them, the worker and the society.
In the following paragraphs I will focus on how the job could be benefit for teenagers in specified, and what returns for their society.

In spite working must be rewarded by a prize, money should not be essential for teenagers who still seek something special from their job, what would be instead of the money and profit their ambitious is a question? A thankful party could influence them, in addition to the concealed experiences and early responsibility possessed from their working.

On the other hand, child abuse should not preclude our kids from this opportunity to improve their skills , while the government and child associations have to follow any like circumstances.

Any local community needs its neighbourhood's care and help, consequently it will give them a lot as a result to their donation. For example we have a wonderful Park in my neighbourhood and I am proud because I shared the planting of its trees 20 years ago with my friends. It gives us the cool wether and the fascinating place we lived in, as a result it is a reversible donation between the people and their community

Talent people and motivated workers are underlying advantages seen in the next generation, because they were responsible people who care about their society. Those people themselves will build a new strong basement as their parents did.

In conclusion, ancestors care of us and their society and we grew up on this rule to take care of our community to invent our future. We live for others as they should do, It is the life's circle of the ancestor to the successor.

Writing Feedback / 'going to live once' - IELTS: worst diet [6]

Some people claim that what people eat in many Western countries is unhealthy and that their diet is getting worse. Critics say that these countries should changes their diet.

What are your opinion on that?

People through the ages has undergoes many changes from the time when they hunted for food to nowadays when almost of them tend to get unhealthy fast food, especially when they live in a large modern country where the time is precious to be spoiled out even for our health. For many reasons I am totally disagree with this kind of life which should be changed in away or another.

In the following paragraphs I will explain some reasons of our new diet habits, while I will support my opinion and give some solution instead.

Life is going to be more complicated recently, therefore hard working is required to earn more money to get what we think we need, therefore we in large cities especially in Western modalities do not have a lot of time to move out of work or even to think about it. Hngrey wont wait us to finish our job, but we can get something fast to let it down, it is not bad if we do it sometimes, however if turned into a habit then it goes to be. The most recent researchs said that our malignancy could be a reason of bad nutrition, and scientists proved this theory in some gut malignancy, so whom want to suffer in his old age, instead of you can avoid that miserable end by avoiding any bad suspicious food, and depends on good nutrition even snacks.

As the life developed, its requerements developed also, and a lot of employees going to travel from one place to another to finish their work. No time to cook in these circumstances and the fast food is the substituation.

On the other hand, both parents work in the same time nowadays which means hard time to enjoy cooking or even to eat together.

Food claimed to be a support for our body, to help it to defeat against the disease and to be in a very good healthy built. We should not get involved in the pollution of our health, In the same time we have to criticize and insist our government to build natural resturants instead of any kind of bad unhealthy food ones. Health education is another sollution that our governemnt should care about it, in addition to family education and how to manage our life properly to be in a good healthy way.

In conclusion, we are going to live once so we must live it with healthy fit accompanied body.

Writing Feedback / IELTS ESSAY1 A letter to the college accommodation service [NEW]

You are going to study in a college in the UK next year. You would like to stay in a
college Hall of Residence.
Write a letter to the college giving your accommodation requirements. You should
outline what your room and food needs are and also ask what alternatives are
available if they cannot provide what you want

Dear Sir,

I am going to start my English literature study at your collage next semester.

I am writing to inquire about your help to get a flat in the college residency building, because renting a private flat in London will be too expensive.

I am not worried about the flat, all what I need is a bedroom with a sort of small living room which is not necessary to be separated from it, while public bathroom and kitchen are acceptable if they are not possible to be included in. In addition, I need to get my daily food from the house Kitchen, and that food must be considered for diabetic patient as I am,

In all circumstances, I am looking for a place to be lived in while I am study in the collage, otherwise I can share a roommate and I prefer someone from the same college.

Your help will be greatly appreciated.

I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours Faithfully.

Hadi Ibrahim

Writing Feedback / 'The house' - IELTS, A letter to ask your friend for help. [5]

You will move to a new city for work. You know some people who live there.
- Ask them for help finding accommodation
- Tell them where you would like to live
- Tell them the type of place you are looking for

Dear John,
I'll move to Latakia next month for work, would you please give me a hand to find a good house to be lived in?

It's good to be together in the same city again. Could you please find an appropriate house in the neighbourhood of my job? Or in the downtown district where I can found what I need, like DVD's shop, gym club and a park where I can relax sometimes.

I'm not worried about the house itself, all what I need is a flat rather than a house. So, a place with a bedroom is very good to me, a private bathroom must be included of course, in addition to a small kitchen if available and a sort of living room which is not necessary to be separated from the bedroom.

It will great to see you soon, so that we can get up to date with all our news.

Your help will be really appreciated.

Best wishes .
Hadi.

Writing Feedback / 'The Kitchen' - IELTS, Neighbours complain [2]

Your neighbours have recently written to you to complain about the noise from your house/flat.

Write a letter to your neighbours In your letter
explain the reasons for the noise
apologize
describe what action you will take
Dear Janet,

I got your letter regarding the noise come out from my house at night and how it has been spoiling your evening and causing you some distress.

I shocked when I got it and I am really really sorry for that, since I had no idea that it would be able to hear outside my kitchen.

As you may have guessed, I am trying to refit and redecorate my kitchen by my self as I need more space and renew it. but i couldn't work in the morning because you know my duty time which is start at 9 Am and end late evening. I thank it can be finish within a couple of days, but it took longer than expected, so that has meant a lot of hammering and banging.

Since the kitchen is still not finish, and It's hard for me to work in the day time then I'll call the professional builder to do it, so he would not disturb your night and will finish it as fast as he can.

Best wishes

Hadi