jobymonpj
Jul 2, 2012
Writing Feedback / IELTS (academic) city living in the 21 century is stressful [7]
I am really new to this site.However I have appeared ielts four times before so I have some idea about what examiners expect from us.As far as I understand the question asks your opinion whether city living is stressful or not.so in your introduction you should mention that whteher u agree with this view or not. If you not agreeing give reasons for it and conclude your essay by stating your thesis statement.I am not the right person to give score for your answer.
your grammer and lexical resource is commendeble. what you lack is coherence.please rearrange your essay by explaining why city life is not stressful in one paragraph and in the third paragraph explain the benefits of living the cities.
I am really new to this site.However I have appeared ielts four times before so I have some idea about what examiners expect from us.As far as I understand the question asks your opinion whether city living is stressful or not.so in your introduction you should mention that whteher u agree with this view or not. If you not agreeing give reasons for it and conclude your essay by stating your thesis statement.I am not the right person to give score for your answer.
your grammer and lexical resource is commendeble. what you lack is coherence.please rearrange your essay by explaining why city life is not stressful in one paragraph and in the third paragraph explain the benefits of living the cities.