Writing Feedback / IELTS 2: Some people believe that to effort the healthy lifestyle in advanced era is extremely hard [3]

SOME PEOPLE SAY THAT IN THE MODERN WORLD IT IS VERY DIFFICULT FOR PEOPLE TO HAVE A HEALTHY LIFESTYLE. OTHERS, HOWEVER, SAY THAT IT IS EASY FOR PEOPLE TO BE HEALTHY AND FIT IF THEY WANT TO BE.

DISCUSS BOTH THESE VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OPINION.
GIVE REASONS FOR YOUR ANSWER AND INCLUDE ANY RELEVANT EXAMPLES FROM YOUR KNOWLEDGE OR EXPERIENCE

The health issue is one of debatable topic in the community these days. Some people believe that to effort the healthy lifestyle in advanced era is extremely hard, but I think to gain good health's status is easy for modern people, as long as they want to achieve it.

Several people believe that mankind in globalization era is difficult to practice healthy way of life. This is because most people is very busy almost every day to fulfill their daily needs that are very expensive. Consequently, they don't have time for doing exercise such as playing basketball, football or just cycling. This busy condition also forces them to consume unhealthy meals like fast foods. This way is fairly effective and efficient since it does not spend too much time for preparing foods. Although, plenty of people know both of these habits are very bad for their health, they do not have any choice in this condition.

However, I do not believe that these arguments are completely true. The first reason is that there are many kinds of sport can be done every time and everywhere. Taking the jogging as an example, this sport is very simple and cheap but it can burn lots of calories, so workers are not necessary to do complicated sports that need longer time. In addition, there are numerous of food stalls providing nutritious meals, particularly vegetarian food store. It is one of recommended place to find healthy food.

To conclude, even though a number of people argue that it is not easy for people in this century to have the healthy lifestyles because of their busy activities, there are a large number of ways that is possible for them to be fit and healthy as far as they want to get it.

Writing Feedback / Important skills required to maintain effective communication with external and internal companies [2]

A breakdown of the proportion of the important factors that require communication skills to maintain effective communication with external and internal companies between 1997 and 2006, a 10-year period is showed in the table. Overall, it is evident that the most crucial external communication skills which are considered the highest is dealing with people, while listening carefully to colleagues is the most essential aspect in line of internal communication skills.

In the first survey of external communication, it can be seen that dealing with people experienced increased from 60 percent to 65 percent. Having the similarity with factor before, knowing of particular products or services and advising or caring for customers increased considerably in 2006. The survey showed approximately 3-6% increment compared to years 1997. However, the subset selling a product or service fell around 21 percent in 2006.

Moving to a more detailed analysis from the table, it reveals that listening carefully to the colleagues was considered by people as the crucial aspect of internal communication skills. Furthermore, the second important skill was training people which rose around 30 percent in 2006. In contrast, the least essential factor of this category was making speech or presentation which increased approximately 11 percent in 2006.

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Writing Feedback / The number of new graduates who were accepted as English and French teachers in Ontario 2001-2007 [2]

TASK 1 : THE RECRUITMENT OF TEACHERS IN ONTARIO

A breakdown of the proportion of how many new graduates who were accepted as English and French teachers in Ontario from 2001 to 2007 is illustrated in the line chart. Overall, it can be seen that fewer graduates have been recruited to be English-language teacher, while French teacher is still most popular job to be found.

According to the data, English teachers were successful at finding employment, while French teacher is slightly less than the number of English teacher in the beginning of the period. Then, both of them decreased slightly approximately more than a half of English teacher and 59% of French teacher in 2002.

In contrast, the figure fell considerably for English teacher, but rose slightly for French teacher over the next year. From 2003 to 2005, the trends of both of categories were not changed as much. However, the number of new graduate employments who were recruited as English teacher decreased dramatically, while the reverse was showed by French teacher and reached a peak at more than 70 percent during following two years.

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Writing Feedback / TASK 2 : Nowadays, it is true that the modern lifestyle can influence health of students [2]

MANY CHILDREN THESE DAYS HAVE AN UNHEALTHY LIFESTYLE. BOTH SCHOOLS AND PARENTS ARE RESPONSIBLE FOR SOLVING THIS PROBLEM. TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE WITH THIS STATEMENT?

Nowadays, it is true that the modern lifestyle can influence health of students. Many children spend their time to check social media in their gadget. As a result, this activity encourages them lazy to do some exercises. Furthermore, consuming the cigarettes is more likely trend surroundings the modern teenagers. I completely agree that schools and parents should endeavor to clear up this issue.

One of the bad habits which are evident in children is smoking. They assume that if they do not consume these items, it will be judged as outdated person. Parents and academic institutions should give guidance about the dangerous of these unhealthy foods to them. Children have to change their habit and try to consume more healthy food. Because of that, parents must provide all of healthy food such as some vegetables and fruit in home. As a result, their body gets much nutrition and vitamins.

The other unhealthy lifestyle is that children much enjoy playing smartphone all the times. As a consequence, they more focus on their gadget than spend a little time physical activities. Parent should control their children's time to play smartphone and force them to do some exercise regularly. Schools can play a predominant role here with emphasize them in order to children always participate in sports subject and do all of physical educations.

To sum up, I believe that both of academic institutions and parents have obligation to increase children's health. They can resolve these problems with their own ways to make them healthier than before.

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 1: THE PROBLEMS PEOPLE HAVE WHEN THEY GO TO LIVE IN OTHER COUNTRIES [2]

A breakdown of the difficulties people have when they move to a new country and how the problems vary according to people's ages is presented in the bar chart. Overall, all age groups experience the same problems to some extent, but the proportion of people aged 35-54 who find sorting medical care difficult is much higher than other.

Organizing healthcare is the greatest problem for people aged 35-54 years old, a problem experienced by 57 percent of the people in this age group. However, only 36 percent of people over 55 years olds find it hard to sort medical care, while even fewer people aged 18 to 34 (32 percent) have this problem.

Thirty-four percent of the youngest age group finds that sorting money is the most problematic. In comparison, the older age group finds this easier, and the proportion who have problems organizing finance is much lower, at 29 percent.

On the other hand, education is considered by fewer people of all age categories as difficult problem. Although only 19 percent of people aged 34-54 are influenced by this, 6 percent of the youngest age and 2 percent of the middle age group experience difficulties to find school for their children.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2 : Comparison of society's benefits based on two groups: doctors and inventors. [NEW]

Inventors are not as important to society as doctors. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Every kind of job has responsibilities and roles for the community in the world. Some people believe that the doctors are the essential job for helping the citizens in their lives than the discoverer. To a certain extent I disagree with that statement. However, I also think that both of them have several reasons.

The function of a doctor is very useful to improve public health. When people get illness, they usually visit the doctor getting treatment and some medicines. The citizens also trust to the doctor that they can help them getting better condition. The doctors always give them suggestion such as health education and how to keep body healthier. Due to the fact, the doctors can decrease the mortality life in the world.

On the other hand, I believe that the scientists are more important for the community. The scientists are developing knowledge in every subject such as technology, education and science. The countries will be developed if they have a lot of smart scientists. For example, the inventors can help maintaining the security of the state by making a variety of weapons and sophisticated war equipment. Therefore, the state cannot be colonized by other countries. Besides that, the inventors create many sophisticated technology such as gadgets and other devices which have used by all the people in these days. All the inventions also will be benefit for the community in the future.

In conclusion, both of the Intellectuals and the doctors have an important role in the nation progress. They are extremely useful for many citizens in the world. Although they have different roles, but they have the same purpose which making people happiness and goodness.

Writing Feedback / The number of hybrid vehicle sales of Japan and other countries rose considerably every year - IELTS [2]

IELTS TASK 1 : GLOBAL HYBRID VEHICLE SALES

The bar chart illustrates the figure of the universal sale of hybrid transportation using fuel and electricity in three different categories: Japan, US and other countries from 2006 and 2009.

Overall, the number of hybrid vehicle sales of Japan and other countries rose considerably every year, while the reverse was showed by US.

In 2006, the total number of vehicle sales in Japan and other countries stood at 250,000. Interestingly, there was a significant rise in the number of Japan's vehicles, the highest sales between US and other countries by more than 300,000 in 2009. Furthermore, other countries sales also increased sharply around 100,000 sales in 2009.

On the other hand, the number of US's vehicle stood at 250,000 sales in 2006 and peaked at 350,000 sales in 2007, the highest number of vehicle sales between 2006 and 2009. Then, it decreased sharply until the last year around less than 300,000 sales. In addition, the total number of three different group increased from 360,000 to 740.000 sales.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 1: Japan pupulation : past, present and future trends [3]

The bar chart shows Japanese residents measured in million, while a breakdown of the proportion of people age 65 and more between 1950 and 2025, a 105-year period is presented in the table.

Overall, there has been an upward trend in Japan's demography and population aged more than 65 years old. However, inhabitant in Japan is predicted slum up over the future 40 years.

According to the chart, the total of inhabitants in Japan increased considerably from 84.1 to 127.8 million between 1950 and 2005. It was the highest number of Japanese people and then declined sharply to 125.4 million in 2005. However, it will drop significantly to 89.9 million in 2055.

In contrast, there was a gradual rise in the number of Japan's demography. The proportion of total population of resident aged over-65s stood at a very small number (4.9%) in 1950. It will rise to around two fifths (41.0%), the largest number of residents aged more than 65 years old.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2 : CAUSES AND SOLUTIONS OF ENDANGERED ANIMALS - government must intervene [2]

Animal habitats have been destroyed, and some animal species (e.g. the tiger and the rhino) have become endangered. Why does this happen? What can be done to protect endangered animals?

Every living organism needs a place to live. Not only humans but also animals need a place where they can find food and raise its families. Unfortunately, these days, the habitat of wild animals has annihilated by humans. I believe that many nations have their own ways to solve this problem.

The number of rare animals in the world increases every year. Firstly, there are a lot of illegal wildlife trades which endanger preservation of endangered animals. The magnitude of the potential profits from trade in endangered species has prompted an increase in trading activity of wildlife. Secondly, forest burning in every dry season either occurring naturally or as a result of land clearing activities by humans extremely damages the animal places. Finally, they are regarded as pest by humans, so it should be eradicated like usual pest. This happens as they are often damaging crops or attack people.

I argue that government should create a place for the breeding of rare animals and then they can be released into their natural habitat. In addition, humans are not allowed to trade rare species. If there is transaction, it should be aimed for saving them from naughty people and they must hand over to the competent authorities. The essential point is educating the public about the importance of the preservation of rare animals to survive in their habitat. Thus, they do not disturb existence of animals and maintain them to survive in their natural habitat.

To sum up, I believe that many problems of animal extinction are caused by human activities. The government must act quickly to prevent the extinction of animals and build a wildlife sanctuary as a real step to protect them.

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2: Living in apartment? Lonely? Not necessarily. [2]

Some people say that living in a high-rise apartment block is a lonely experience because there is no community spirit. Others say that people who live in high-rise apartments have a much better sense of community than those who live in houses. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

These days, many property developers build many apartment towers in metropolitan city. People can choose where they want to stay, houses or residential tower. It is true that living in blocks of flats tends to have less of solidarity. However, others assume that high sense of belonging is showed by high-rise buildings than houses occupant. I totally believe that it influences their characters.

The level of socialization apartment dweller is extremely worse. This is caused by the occupants rarely meet each other even with their next doors. They are very busy person and introvert. For example, when their neighbor get sick or something dangerous happen, usually people do not care each other. They are more likely managing their own affairs. This affects the closeness and kinship reduced among them. As the result, tower block residents have individual character and can do anything by themselves without helping-hand someone.

On the other hand, some people dissent that argument. Actually, people who live in apartment have great sense of relationship. Developers build many best facilities to support the amenities of tall building such as garden, swimming pool and other facilities. Take an example, the households can make regular social gathering in garden or children want to swim and they can meet with other neighbors. Due to these activities, they are more closeness and make a better relationship. The facilities that have been built will not be useless and give more benefit for the occupants.

To conclude, while a lot of citizens claim that great solidarity experience is showed by apartment inhabitant, I would argue that they will have lack of attitudes for the community in the real life.

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2 : a small or bigger community - solidarity, mutual attention vs more privacy? [3]

In the past, most people lived in small villagers where everyone knew everyone else. Nowadays, most people live in large cities where they only know a few people in their area. What do you think were the disadvantages and disadvantages of living in a small community?

It is true that more dwellers of rural area in the past tend to know each other, while at the present time the reverse is showed by the majority of people in large cities. While I believe this idea brings merit such as a great solidarity, I would argue that this also has drawback such as declining of privacy level.

One of the benefits to living in a small village is a great solidarity. This solidarity causes them to care and know each other. It is more likely become a habit and moral obligation. Take one example, if they look their neighbor extremely busy, most people usually visit to give their help though that neighbor does not ask for helping hand. In contrast, they can feel ashamed if they do not come to give their contribution. This reflects the high solidarity fellow community.

On the other hand, urban neighborhood always meets every day and talks about something interesting especially the households when they want to buy some foods. The issue will widespread to all parts of the region despite negative issues as soon as possible. For example, one of its citizens decided to polygamy with other women. All of dwellers will know about this news because of they tell each other. Sometimes, most of them act negative thinking to that person. This indicates that privacy levels decrease in urban community.

All in all, good manners and friendly attitudes which are showed by urban population make people pleasurable for living in a small village. However, people cannot keep their secrecy to other people. All of privacy equal with public secret.