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GOOD AND BAD OF MULTICULTURL SOCIETY. DISCUSS [4]
In the past moving from one city to another city take days
^Moving does take days a lot of the time. You can't just move your body to another city and call it done.
The U.k. people contributes in the development of education where mostly highly qualified British people are working in topmost universities like Harvard and Oxford. Today they are recognised as best universities.African immigrants help in labour work in factories and industries in America.
^This is very stereotypical and naive. You can't just say that Brtish people work as respected professors whereas African Americans work as grunt workers.
In America, the Chinese people had made their own society and group where they don't allow their children to interact with Americans.The business people keep employees of their own country and sometimes they are fighting with other people on very small issues.
^Sounds like your saying...oh well english, african american, and indian people all contribute whereas Chinese people are unproductive introverts. Since when did Chinese people in general not allow their kids to interact with Americans?
You come off as really narrowminded and deluded in this essay. Revise please.
