justivy03
Jun 6, 2015
Writing Feedback / Reducing the walking distance. [4]
- According to health professional,strollingdaiydaily is effective for maintaining the health.
- In this essay i will analyze theleadindleading causes of the as well as its solution.,
- People have lack of time in thisbusiestbusy world and therefore,they want to cover distance by using modes of transport modes in order to save their valuable time.
- Apart from this,due tosacrcescarce of land and space in most of the indevelopedunder developed and incipient countries do not have enough footpath for pedestrian.
- On the other hand,Government should take initiative to encourage the people for walking,Firstlyfirst ,they need to put the CCTV cameras or streets to reduce the crime.
-SecondlyThen ,they should provide pavements across the roads for walking,
- Lastly,theyshoulshouldspentspend some part of the tax in order to build the gardens and parks,
-whereppeoplewhere people walk easily.
- However,here health and all medical checkup institution come forward andmaskemake aware people about the benefits of walking.
- But for encouraging people to walk more authorities and health centre need to take some steps to make people aware about the benefits of this.
Jaggi, the corrections I made on your essay is mostly spelling mistake and this can be avoided if you turn on your spell check, so please do.
Also, proof read your essay as it will you check your mistakes and enhance your essay further.
Keep writing
Cheers!!!
- According to health professional,strolling
- In this essay i will analyze the
- People have lack of time in this
- Apart from this,due to
- On the other hand,Government should take initiative to encourage the people for walking,
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- Lastly,they
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- However,here health and all medical checkup institution come forward and
- But for encouraging people to walk more authorities and health centre need to take some steps to make people aware about the benefits of this.
Jaggi, the corrections I made on your essay is mostly spelling mistake and this can be avoided if you turn on your spell check, so please do.
Also, proof read your essay as it will you check your mistakes and enhance your essay further.
Keep writing
Cheers!!!