Writing Feedback / Learning by a failure? Mistakes can teach you a lesson. [6]

Learning starts with failure; the first failure is the beginning of education

People who always get good grades can after some time become overconfident. I would say it's rather a human nature that makes you think that if you score at top of your class once or twice you'll score the same next time without trying hard. In this view of point one might think what John Hersey wrote is correct.

The thing one might realize from a failure is that they have to try harder. Of course some might never realize this and continue on the same wrong path. No one will ever learn if they are always at the top, never failing because no one is perfect in this world. But for people to learn something they first have to admit that they have failed and try harder next time not to fail.

I once scored high in my academics and I was really glad. In my next academic exam I hardly studied and ended up with poor grades. I learned that in order to receive good grades I have to study harder. The fun fact that I came across was that even though my mother would always tell me and my brother to work hard I would never pay much attention but after receiving bad grades I realized how important it is to work hard. So in contrary, learning definitely starts with failure and the first failure is the beginning of education.

In the end life is an extremely hard hurdle that we have to overcome. Giving how no one is perfect everyone will face failure more than once in their lives so at that time it's better to learn something from it and only then will you start climbing the stairs of growth.

Writing Feedback / A 'fresh crisis' is probably a hardship or an obstacle that we have to overcome [3]

Each fresh crisis we encounter is an opportunity in disguise

A 'fresh crisis' is probably a hardship or an obstacle that we have to overcome but this is what we think if we look at the negative point of view. From a positive perspective it could be said that instead of thinking of it as a hardship think of it as an opportunity. Of course when one is in the middle of a problem they might not be able to think this but there always is something good about it.

To prove this my example will be the new crisis that came upon the world 'COVID-19'. Everyone is stressed upon the fact that they might die or lose their family and friends. Nobody goes outside anymore. Everyone stays home from fear and anxiety. People say things like ' what good can this virus bring' or ' how can we look at the positive side at such a time' and I might agree with them but I won't because I realized that there are opportunities even in this crisis.

For example, the fact that the children didn't talk to their parents, uninterested in family affairs and were total freeloaders got the opportunity of becoming closer to their parents. Another example would be the decreasing of environmental pollution; animals came out of their homes, the sky and sea are much more clear and the ozone layer is healing. People would say that the ozone layer would never heal but now it is healing.

It's hard to believe in this statement but the harder we think the faster we will realize that it is true.

Writing Feedback / We most resent in others the very flaws that we ourselves possess. [5]

No one is flawless

Every human has a flaw in this world. There is no existing being who is flawless. We might have met people who are good at many things or others who we might have shared similarities with but there must have been at least one person we encountered in our lives who we might have resent or hate being around with.

There might be lots of reasons but the one I will point out is the hate we feel towards other people's flaws. It may not be sensible to point this out but usually you hate a person or feel annoyed around him when you notice the person's flaw and fail to realize that you might have the same flaw. For example, many times when my cousins wold make noise my father would shout at them telling them to lower their voices. So once, my grandfather told me that my father's tells other people not to shout but shouts himself. Soon afterwards I noticed that my father would always get angry at others who made a mistake in front of him but he himself would make the same mistake.

To be honest, I may have many flaws that I fail to realize but my mother used to tell me that I talk to much. Finally when I accepted this fact I realized that I always used to avoid people who talk too much. I tried my best not to talk too much and it took me almost three years. It was hard but the good thing that came out of it was that I could stand people who talk too much.

The important thing that we should learn is that we should accept other people's flaws and try to let go of our own flaws. When we realize our own flaws and try to correct them we won't resent, hate, or be annoyed around people who have flaws.

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Letters / Write a letter to the head of your neighborhood. [2]

the plans of building a large factory

You have recently learned that there are plans to build a very large factory near your neighborhood.

Assignment:-

Write a letter to the head of your neighborhood council giving your views about the plans. Begin your letter 'Dear Councillor'. Do not write an address. Your letter should be about 150-200 words long.

Essay:-

Dear Councillor,

As head of our neighborhood I thought it would be best to write you a letter regarding the plans of building a large factory near our neighborhood.

It will bring new jobs to our area which is a good thing but what about pollution? Building a factory near an active neighbourhood will bring about major issues like noise and pollution. Losing our lovely open spaces would be a waste. Our neighborhood is clean, open, pretty and we love it that way. Building a factory will ruin the peaceful environment of our neighborhood.

As head of our neighborhood it is your responsibility to maintain the natural beauty of our neighborhood. I understand that it will be wrong to stop progress but it is never too late to make the right decision. By taking action you will serve as an example to the next generation in keeping their neighborhood clean and pretty.

I hope that you will rethink your decision and consider the feelings of everyone in the neighbourhood.

Yours Sincerely,
Hafsa Javed,
29th April, 2020

Letters / "Hectic visit" - Write a letter to your friend. [6]

letter to a friend about holiday plans

Recently you visited an elderly relative for a week's holiday. After the visit, you decide to write a letter to a friend about your holiday. Your letter should be between 150-200 words long. Do not write an address.

Essay:-

Dear Zoya,

How are you? Hope everything is fine at your end. Recently, I visited my grandmother and stayed with her for a week. My grandmother is kind and treats me well. During my visit a minor problem occurred.

I was baking some of my grandmother's favorite cookies. While they were baking I went to my room to listen to a few songs. I had completely forgotten about the cookies and by the time I realized the kitchen was filled with smoke. Luckily, the fire did not travel anywhere. My grandmother was out so, I cleaned up the mess. Everything was in its place by the time my grandmother came back.

I did not want to tell her about what happened but I did not want to hide it either. In the end, I told her about what happened. She did not get mad at me instead she was happy that I did not hide it from her though I got quite a bit of scolding afterwards on my lack of responsibility.

The visit was hectic but somehow I still enjoyed it to its maximum.

Your best friend,
Hafsa Javed,
30th April, 2020

Letters / Write a letter to the students in your school. [2]

join the After School Sports Club

Write a letter a letter to the students in your school, encouraging them to join the After School Sports Club. Start your letter with 'Dear Students'. Your letter should be about 150-200 words long.

Essay:-

Dear Students,

The After School Sports Club is holding a new registration ceremony. The club will be held in the new school building from 2:30 pm to 5:30 pm respectively.

The club consists of different sports all fun and interesting both for girls and boys. For boys, there is swimming, football, baseball, hockey, etc. For girls, there is dodgeball, volleyball, basketball, badminton, etc. There will be one to one battle games and boys vs girls combat battles.

You will enjoy being part of this club because it is all free and this is the best way to spend your free time. There is no stress because the After School Sports Club will take it all away so that you can enjoy every single minute. There will be no limitations, except for the time limit, which you already know.

If you are interested visit the student council's room to fill a form.
For more information; visit our club's office in the old school building, 2nd floor, Hallway-3, Room No-4.

Best Regards,
Hafsa Javed,
1st April, 2020.

Writing Feedback / It is neither time nor opportunity that is to determine intimacy. [3]

What causes two people to become friends?

Assignment:

In her novel Sense and Sensibility, Jane Austen wrote, 'It is not time or opportunity that is to determine intimacy. Seven years would be insufficient to make some people acquainted with each other, and seven days are more than enough for others.''

What are your thoughts on the idea that neither time nor opportunity can determine intimacy? What causes two people to become friends? Compose an essay in which you express your views on this topic. Your essay may support, refute, or qualify the views expressed in the excerpt.

Essay:

It is neither time nor opportunity that can determine intimacy. This is a crucial topic and here the bond between two people(as friends or enemies) will be discussed.

What causes two people to become allies? Is it time or opportunity? Is it the high status, wealth and authority that one can give to someone close to them? Of course not, when we talk about the bond of friendship we say that there is an understanding and good chemistry. One can feel the joy or suffering that the other person is going through.

In the series of Harry Potter, it clearly tells us that Harry trusts his two friends, Ron and Hermione and depends on them. They have a bond so beautiful, it is hard to describe it in words. This was not possible because they spent seven years or more with each other but because they were able to express themselves and be honest. They were comfortable around each other and were always there for each other.

In the contrary, the quote,"It is neither time nor opportunity that is to determine intimacy. Seven years would be insufficient to make some people acquainted with each other, and seven days are more than enough for others," holds true meaning to the reality that is expressed between the acquaintance of two people.

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