Writing Feedback / Physical education for students - sports lessons as part of the curriculum? [3]

Topic: Ensuring that children have regular physical exercise should be the responsibility of parents and therefore schools should not waste valuable school time having sports lessons as part of the curriculum. To what extent do you agree?

Physical exercise is the very important subject in the development of children. There some opinions and methods are given to improve and increase the physical health of kids. One of them is ensuring that children have regular physical exercise, and this should be the responsibility of parents and therefore schools should not waste valuable school time having sports lessons as part of the curriculum. I do not agree with this idea because parents are not physical education teachers, and children have to learn knowledge and physical skills together.

Mother and father are people who spend their unconditional love for their children. They always support their children, give them good advice, and offer them valuable criticism about how to have a better life. Parents are the very important teachers for their children, but they cannot always be the best teacher. In order to let children develop their bodies in the best way, children need to follow directions from a real physical education teacher. Parents also can learn about physical exercises on YouTube, books, newspapers or televisions and then they can teach their kids what they learned, but sometimes they might teach wrong actions and this can lead to bad consequences in the development of their children.

Courses of study in schools are taught with the purpose of helping students improve particular skills and increase essential knowledge. Scientists have shown that doing exercise and playing sports strengthens the body, reduces some kinds of sicknesses and learn a patience. Children who play sports every day will be more active and happier than children who play with computers and televisions. Moreover, it helps to improve children's abilities to focus on their studies, remember lessons longer and practice better in life. Therefore, it is a not wasted of time to let children study the physical exercise in schools. Kids need to develop both their minds and their bodies at the same time.

In conclusion, the physical education in schools should need to be taught in schools. Children always need to learn the best directions and to have the best conditions and environments to grow up healthy.

Writing Feedback / Playing games can teach us lessons which sometimes are very valuable and useful. [2]

Topic : some people believe that playing games can teach us some lessons. What are lessons? What are your opinions?

Some people say that playing games can teach us lessons. I think it is true. From the past until now, the human has not stopped playing games because many lessons and benefits that it brings to us are very valuable and useful. There two lessons are to learn about patience and to learn about how to deal with problems.

Firstly, playing games teaches people how to set a goal, how to complete it and how to learn a lesson about patience. For example, when one boy who plays video games, he has to finish the games, he cannot stop in the middle of the game if he wants to know the ending. A gamer competitor has to learn how to be patient when his character died and he has to start it again. Moreover, a competition is also developed by competitors. This makes advancements that lead to an achievement.

Secondly, through of playing games, people also can learn experiences and skills to solve many problems. Playing sports such as baseball, tennis, ping-pong... helps people to train their strong minds and to have quick reflexions to deal with matters or bad situations when they happen. Therefore, people can apply them to a real life and deal with problems easier and quicker. There is a story about one man avoided an accident thank to his reflexion, he jumped quickly on another street when a car crashed into him. He said that he was so lucky because he used to be an athlete and it saved him from death.

In conclusion, playing games can teach us many experiences and lessons that make our lives enjoyable. Everyone should play one sport and make it become a good and necessary habit to increase the quality of life.

Writing Feedback / "Marriage is the grave of love". Women don't need to get married. [5]

Topic : in many countries, women no longer feel the need to get married. Some people believe that this is because women are able to earn their own income and therefore do not require the financial security that marriage can bring. To what your extent do you agree?

Have you ever heard about this sentence " Marriage is the grave of love"? There are many real stories about this. Nowadays, in many countries, women no longer feel the need to get married. Some people believe that this is because women are able to earn their own income and therefore do not require the financial security that marriage can bring. For me, I am a woman, I agree with this matter.

In the past, when economy depended on agriculture, many families depended on the strength of men, husbands. Women rarely went to school or went outside to work, they usually stayed home, and did households. Their missions were to take care of children and to have more babies. Their lives depended hugely on their husbands, their sons. However, nowadays, when inventions about modern machines are applied to production that changes greatly in all of the aspects of lives. Conceptions also are renewed to fit better in life. Women have more opportunities, they can go to school, go to work, communicate with more people in society. Therefore, they improve themselves, they are not inferior to men, they can earn their own money for their needs and do not depend on men. The marriage is no longer a critical issue for them anymore.

In the modern life, a conception is "to live what a true you are " or " be yourself" is popular, so the marriage is a string to make people feel no freedom. For some women, if they are lucky to have good husbands with nice kids, it is a perfect family that every woman wants to keep it forever. However, for some women, if they have bad husbands who usually leave houses, do not care for children or do not have to any job. This marriage is the hardest punishment to live with, so modern women do not want to live a life like this, they change themselves, maybe they just want to have babies but they do not want to get married.

On the whole, women nowadays show more how good they are, how independent they are, they can do all things that men can do, they do not need the benefits could be brought from the marriage.

Writing Feedback / The majority of news being reported is bad news such as wars, famines, accidents, and crime [3]

Topic: Some people believe that the majority of news being reported is bad news such as wars, famines, accidents, and crime. Why do you think that is? Do you think the news should be a balance of both good and bad news?

Media Industry is always concerned by billion people over the world. Human lives have more developed, so the matters about knowing information have been more interested. Some people believe that the majority of news being reported is bad news such as wars, famines, accidents, and crime influencing badly on many people.

Life is more convenient and modern, the most human depends on machines, the less human is active and sensitive. They are easy to fall in pressure and negative thinking. Moreover, they are willing to do the worst thing and leave the worst consequences. Newspapers and television usually give some negative news on media to announce people. So much hot news, so many people care and read.

Most of the people like watching television, for both children and adults. They spend a lot of time watching television every day. Thus, if television has only programs about bad things, bad news such as wars, famines, accidents, and crime... that will create negative influences to both mentally and physically of viewers. News about accidents, criminals which are shown on TV in order to warn citizens that they have to be careful, to be safe. Besides, media producers should show more passive programmings like educational programs, health programs... These will bring a balance of both good and bad news which create better influences to viewers. For example, some programmings about building houses for homeless people, donating money for poor children, or some programmings about teaching languages should be shown on TV more usually.

In brief, bad news totally does not bring the bad consequences. Of course, people should not use TV is a way to hide, so sometimes it can help us cope. The bad news and good news should be balanced, that will make life better.

Writing Feedback / Getting promotion is the biggest chance for people. [5]

Topic : getting promotion is one of the biggest drives for people to apply themselves and work hard in the modern workplace. Why do you think people are so driven to get promotion? What other factors influence people to work hard?

There are a lot of reasons that people have to try their best to work hard, to get a success; and one of them is getting the promotion. Getting promotion is one of the biggest drives for people to apply themselves and work hard in the modern workplace and it also is a higher and better position in career.

Employees and workers always try their best abilities to succeed in the competitive market as a company. The purpose of getting the promotion is to let employees reach and catch better opportunities to challenge themselves. For example, for some of the people, they go to work to earn money, to pay for the needs of themselves, so getting the promotion means they have a chance to earn more money, to have much more than enough. Or, for some of the others, they go to work to satisfy their dreams, to improve their skills, and to learn newer experiences, thus getting the promotion is a good step to let them do the things that they want to see. These reasons are efforts that make human always does not stop trying to gain the promotion. This also means people always have more responsibilities for the job they do. However, the getting promotion is always the best and happiest news to all of the employees.

There are many other factors that influence people to work hard such as transportation, house, relationship, love...and in particular luck is gained thirty percent in a road to get an achievement. There is a story about the French emperor Napoleon said to one of his generators " I know he is good, but is he lucky?" Luck means here people catch opportunities at the right time, use these skills in the right places. Opportunities very often depend on luck, but it does not explain the success comes totally from luck, work hard can invite luck. Life is not rosy. If each person does not work hard to get success, they only lose a battle. Nothing can replace the work hard and when people are working hard at the same time they are preparing themselves more opportunities knock on their doors.

Overall, the getting promotion is a good step to improve the quality of peoples' lives. We should set a goal and try our best abilities to gain it. The getting promotion is a good purpose and also a bright challenge and in life these challenges create some enjoyable things.

Writing Feedback / Many opportunities to communicate in plural, multinational communities, using foreign languages [3]

Have you ever thought the world would be better if people should speak the same language instead of speaking many different languages? For me, I do not think the world would be better, I think it would be more boring like when you see some black and white movies and no sounds. I am sure most of us like to watch colorful movies with dynamic sounds. In the modern world, some people are multilingual, possibly because they come from multicultural families or because they are gifted in languages, while others speak only one language. Some people who can speak more than one language have more opportunities in communities.

There are a lot of people wish to live in plural communities. In these communities, opportunities to communicate with some kinds of people are very many. For example, in the United States, the country has fifty states and many of the races live in together. This is the biggest community for every ethnic, every nation, every culture comes from over the world. They assimilate into one general culture and live in peace. Many descendants are bilingualism and biculturalism. This is a good thing because when they grow up, they learn about how to understand cultural diversities, how to respect other races, how to be tolerant of the differences of other lives. Therefore, they can easily increase their knowledge, their skills to deal with other people in plural communities.

In additionally, people who can speak two or more languages will have many lucky chances when they live in a society. For example, two students who just graduated from school, they had the same degree. They went together to interview one company, but a company just wanted to hire one person, and they decided to choose the student who could speak two languages: English and Spanish. As we can see, speaking two or more languages brings a lot of benefits to help people in life. More and more parents want their children can speak at least two languages. They want them to have more opportunities when they go out and live independence themselves. Thus, learning other languages becomes a very important and essential thing for teenagers and young people, nowadays.

In conclusion, living in the plural communities, people can have a lot of chances to experience new information, new lives, new situations, new cultures, and to meet a lot of kinds of people. It will be enjoyable and real experiences more than just reading books, newspapers, or watching television.