Writing Feedback / The figure of an old Japanese man and women in the past, today and in the next 40 years [2]

Writing Task 1: Japan's Population in the Past, Present and Future Trends

The given bar charts and table show the proportion of Japan's citizens entirely over a century, from 1950 to 2055 measured in million, and a part of them aged more than 65-years old identified in only four years: 1950, 2005, 2035, and 2055. Overall, it can be seen clearly that there is a gradual increase of Japan's residents during over a half century between 1950 and 2005 and predicted will experience a sharp decline in the future, while Japanese aged over-65s have the highest number in 2035.

According to the data, the total of people in Japan grew gradually from 84.1 to 127.8 million between 1950 and 2005. In 2005, it was the highest number of Japan's population, while the people aged over 65 years in 2035 reaching 37.2 million. However, it predicted will drop dramatically almost reaching population number in the first period.

By contrast, the proportion of over-65s residents in 1950 had a small percentage of total population about 4.9%. Over 50 years, it experienced an increase about fourfold from the previous identified year. Afterwards, the total Japanese aged over-65s will increase in the last period of given data, being nearly a half of total population.

Writing Feedback / Writing Task 1: Global Population Figures & Figures for Urban Populations in Different World Regions [3]

The graphs below provide information on global population figures and figures for urban populations in different world regions.

The line graph and bars-chart give information about global population rates and the average number of urban population in different world areas. Overall, the global population would continue to rise gradually until over around four decades and the majority of the people would be living in developing countries, while the people lived in the developed countries indicated will be stable as the previous periods-situation.

According to the given data, the number of people in the world stood at 1 billion in the first period, 1800. Then, there is a gradual increase of population from the first period to almost one and a half century and then rise sharply reaching the top point approximately 8 billion after a century. After over a half century, the trend experiences a sharp decline until reaching 6 billion points.

Furthermore, developing countries has a huge number of rate population globally, while develop countries are stable during 35 years. A population number of developing countries increased gradually over three decades, from 2015 to 2040. (169 words)

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Writing Feedback / The chart presents a research resulted by a Canadian providing the data about the sleep patterns [4]

The chart below shows the sleep patterns of people in five different occupations according to a Canadian study.

The chart presents a research resulted by a Canadian providing the data about the sleep patterns of people in five different professions. Overall, both students and business executives have normal on their sleep schedule, while truck drivers, full-time mothers and doctors sleep in interrupted hours.

As the provided data, it can be seen that students and businesses executives have sleep time continuously from 11 p.m. to 7 a.m., but business executives have to get up two hours earlier than students. It means that they only spend their time only 6 hours for bedtime which is one hour more than the doctor's sleep schedule.

On the other hand, truck drivers have discontinuous sleep schedule and spend 6 hours for sleeping about 3 hours in each morning and afternoon. In the following, there are full-time mothers having 8-hours sleeping time, with 2 hours in the afternoon for taking a nap due to getting up in the early morning, 3 a.m. Another case, doctors are the busiest jobs in this data because they only have 5 hours for sleeping in the early morning 1 a.m., but they have to wake up and do their duties again at 3 a.m.

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Writing Feedback / The proportion of babies in Australia born from mother aged 40 - 44, during two decades [4]

The table below presents the number of children ever born to women aged 40-44 years in Australia for each year the information was collected since 1981.

The table provides information about the percentage of babies in Australia born from mother aged 40 - 44 years during over two decades, from 1981 to 2006. Overall, the proportion of women without child, having one child and two children experiences an increase while the women giving birth to three and four children decrease continuously until the last period.

According to the given data, mothers without child and having one child increased gradually with the percentage almost same in each period, from 8.5% and 7.6% to 15.9% and 13.2% respectively. By contrast, however, mothers giving birth to three or four children have high number in the first period in 1981 about over 27%, but both of them experienced a decline in the last period, 2006.

Furthermore, women with two children were the highest percentage during 25 years at all periods. While it had nearly same percentage in 1981 between 27% and 29%, in the last period only mothers having two children experienced an increase significantly reaching 38.3%.

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Writing Feedback / Early age is the best time to learn many things, including a new language. [2]

Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Early age is the best time to learn many things moreover a new language. Some people are convinced that children have to learn a different language at the earliest grade, while the others think that children should study it when they are in the secondary school. Personally, I believe that the advantages are far more than the disadvantages for young people who study a foreign language when they are still in the first level in the school.

Leaning a new language in the early age at primary school has some possible drawbacks. Firstly, studying additional subject, it could overburden the children because they have to focus as well as on other subjects such as math, science, and their own original language. They have to divide their time to spend a portion for studying a new language that require extra focus also like learning English which the pronunciation is different than the written. Secondly, the children would get stress because they already have been some subjects in the school and after that they have additional time for learning new subject again.

On the other hand, it is approved generally that young people are faster studying about new subject than older people. They can easily imitate the pronunciation of that new language because their brain has not been much thought yet. In addition, international languages today such as English or Mandarin are really required whether in the workplace or business. Thus, if they already have mastered foreign language in the early age, they would not be able to get much burden in the next education level in which study more subjects.

In conclusion, I personally believe that studying a new language in early age give more benefit for children even they have to divide the time to learn others subjects.

Writing Feedback / Teaching and learning process at home has existed for centuries. Child's Development & homeschooling [2]

Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's development while others think that it is important for children to go to school.

Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion.

Teaching and learning process at home has existed for centuries. Some wealthy families with highly educated decide to teach their children at home or hire teachers while the other parents prefer to send their children studying at school. Even though there is different opinion about this view, I believe that both the choices have their own benefits.

Giving education to children at home would be more effective if parents prepare well about the method utilized or hire the teachers from reputable homeschooling institution. Children taught at home with acceptable method would be more focus on the subjects so that they are able to understand them well. In addition, they also can develop their passion in particular subject that they choose to support their future career.

The improvement of social skill is one of the most advantages of children studying at school. Children will develop social skills when they are at school by interacting with their teachers and peers. In the school, they will meet their friends from various backgrounds whether from rich or poor family and characters so that they are able to learn how to solve if they meet the problems and knowing each other. Furthermore, school environment is full of competition in order to gain popularity which will impact on students being more competent and strong to face future life in the society.

In conclusion, teaching the children whether at home or in the school has benefits for their future life, but in fact the advantages studying in the school outweigh studying at home.

Writing Feedback / Youngsters are lack of free time for their leisure activities in various countries in the world [3]

In some countries young people have little leisure time and are under a lot of pressure to work hard in their studies. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

Over decades, youngsters are lack of free time for their leisure activities in some countries in the world. Moreover, in the school, they have a lot of tasks or assignment from their teacher. Therefore, it is really important to know what the causes are and how to cope the notion.

Most of parents send their children to the reputable school and expect their children to acquire acceptable education quality. They sometimes ask to the children to have additional studying in the course especially at difficult subject such as math and science. As a consequent, they spend their time for studying mostly and when weekend come they just want to take rest at home preparing for school in the following day without thinking again to take a holiday for refreshing. In addition, the government in some countries has increased the extent of study program in order to improve the educational level of young generation. Although, it would make them more productive, students have to work extremely hard so that they suffer from studying too much.

In my opinion, there are some solutions that can solve those problems certainly. Firstly, parents should understand that learning too much is not good for children's health mentally or physically. They also need some break times to enjoy their hobbies or at least going to holiday with their peers. Secondly, education authorities should alter the study program to make it suitable for students. They should make sure whether the program that they have implemented to the schools is beneficial for the students in order to create acceptable quality of students or not.

In conclusion, the clear communication between parents and children about studying schedule are required to make balance between their obligation about school and utilizing their leisure time for doing holiday or hobbies. Then, a support from the government makes perfect to solve the problems.

Writing Feedback / Tai Lopez shared his experience how to be successful person [4]

TED Summary: Why I Read A Book A Day by Tai Lopez

Tai Lopez shared his experience how to be successful person. He suggests to the people to have plan for their future life about what they want to reach. People have to find the role model or mentor to guide them being success, which have ability to transfer their experience or knowledge. In addition, designing the life is one of the most important to pursuit the better future, for example, making plan what we will have done in 17 years-old, 22 years-old, and so forth. He said that every success person like Albert Einstein or Oprah Winfrey has mentor in their life so that having a mentor is better choice. Furthermore, he advised to divide 30% around people lower than ours and help the others to find their happiness, another 33% around people that have same level as us to become our friends, then 33% last around people that are higher than our level being our mentor.

Writing Feedback / Article Summary: Hundreds More Species than We Thought Might Be Endangered [3]

Hundreds More Species than We Thought Might Be Endangered

The velvet-purple coronet, iridescent hummingbird, is found in parts of Colombia and Ecuador, and is almost extinct. According to satellite data of elevation and forest cover to approach suitable habitats, the teams advise to rethink in classifying the populations. With elevation models and data from Landsat satellites, they can identify at 586 bird species from Asia, the Americas and Madagascar. They refined the potential habitat for each species, and then examined the changes in forest cover in those areas. According to email from the teams about velvet-purple coronet classification, there are contrast notions between the teams, in which Ocampo-Peńuela's team says its approach is accurate, but the IUCN said the teams were difficult to understand the result of IUCN criteria, which the classification was incorrect about many species in their research.

Source: newscientist.com/article/2112244-hundreds-more-species-than-we-thought-might-be-endangered/