Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2 - the reason why do fewer and fewer people appreciate art and how to solve it [2]

Art is considered an essential part of all culture throughout the world. However, these days fewer and fewer people appreciate art and turn their focus to science, technology, and business. Why do you think that is? What could be done to encourage more people to take interest in the art?

Art's lesser appreciation

Playing paramount role in culture and society, the existence of art is neglected by the development of science, technology, and business. This phenomenon is viral in society, adjusting the way people think then decreasing their respect to art. However, some efforts should be done to bring back art position in society. This will be explained as follows.

Art is closely akin to abstract things such as music, painting, and sculpture as well as poem aimed to entertain people. This area beautifies and fascinates the tangible things used by people in their daily life. Hence due to its indirect impact, more and more people look down at art. Otherwise, science, technology, and business always discover new inventions affected human's convenience. Offering applicative solutions, those products enhance society's welfare for instance, the cutting-edge smartphone ease people around the world to communicate. However, art is not mere beautification, urgently, how to alter human's perspective and trigger the creativity. Without art, scientist conducted research, business earned profit or engineer innovate machine will face difficulties to connect the previoys theory with the reality because art train critical thinking to solve problem

However, to encourage people interest in art, stakeholders should be campaign the beneficial of study art, such as the teacher introduces art as compulsory subject in school. In addition, government allocate budget to renovate art galleries or museums and increase the facilities inside. Art combined with technology will excite more visitors.

In conclusion, art plays important role in human's life and science indeed. Therefore, a good cooperation and effort between stakeholders and citizens are highly demanded to preserve the existence of art in society.

Writing Feedback / IELTS1 - the number of diarrhea cases in Mashhad over ten years, some time ago [2]

The graph below gives information about the number of cases of diarrhea in Mashhad between 1983 and 1992. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

specific condition among Mashhad's dwellers

Given is the line graph describing the changes of diarrhea cases in Mashhad for nine years. Overall, for the beggining of periods, the number of diarrhea cases remained relatively static, however predominant cases was experienced throughout the last periods prior to no case was detected in the year of 1992.

In 1983, Mashhad's dwellers infected diarrhea stood at 100 cases, remaining stable for three years later. Following this, moderate growth was shown in 1986, reaching around 175 cases, then increased slightly to near 200 cases in 1987.

In the next period, some violent fluctuations of diarrhea cases was shown. This plunged to the similar number with initial period (around 90 cases). In 1988, surprisingly, an tremendous increase was noticed to around 400 cases, almost four time as high as previous period. However, it dropped noticeably to just over 350 cases in 1991. Interestingly, in 1992, no diarrhea case was recorded after an enormous fall was occured.

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Writing Feedback / Several changes of silkworm in its life cycle and method to produce silk cloth [3]

The diagrams elow show the life cycle of silworm and the stages in the production of silk cloth. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevants.

the diagram of silkworm

Given are the diagrams explaining several changes of silkworm in its life cycle and how to produce silk cloth. Generally, there are four main stages of silkworm life cycle and five steps to create cloth made from silk.

In the term of silkworm life cycle, firstly, egg is hatched by moth. After 10 days, it develops to be larva form, consuming mulberry leaf as its daily food. Having silk thread, larva requires 4-6 weeks to approach this stage. In the last step, at 3-6 days later, larva transform to be cocoon then 16 days later it grows as a moth.

On the other hand, the initial step to produce silk cloth is by selecting and sorting the best quality of cocoons. Next, to make cocoons softy, these is boiled in the pan full of water. Thirdly, these cocoons are unwinded to collect 300-900 m thread, twisting it later. Finally, that product weave in flat wood. However, dying process is required in either twisting or weaving, aims to make silk cloth more attractive.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS - several sources as energy consumption in US in 1980 and its forecasting in 2050 [2]

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

renewable and fossil energy usage comparison

Given is graph comparing several sources as energy consumption in US in 1980 and its forecasting in 2050. Eventhough renewable energy consumption was much lower than fossil energy, both of needs will be predicted to go up in the future except hydropower.

In 1980, at 35 quadrillion units of energy was petrol and oil, growing exponetially and will be predicted to reach a peak in 2030 at approximately 45 quadrillion units, becoming the predominant energy source throughout the period. While natural gas need stood at 20 quadrillion units, US used 15 quadrillion units of coal to fulfill its need in the initial period. Surprisingly, coal consumption is likely to soar dramatically at near 30 quadrillion units rather than gas just less than 5 quadrillion unit increments in 2030.

However, there will be no significant changes for renewable energy consumption in the future. Nuclear, solar/wind and hydropower contributed less than 5 quadrillion units for US's energy in 1980. Interestingly, in the future, while nuclear and solar/wind will be predicted to go up steadily at 5-6 quadrillion units, hydropower consumption will drop to a mere 4 quadrillion units, standing as the lowest energy consumption among other resources.

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Writing Feedback / Given pie charts compare the number of inhabitants in Yemen and Italy in 2000 [5]

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

comparison of the italian and yemeni population

Given are pie charts comparing the number of inhabitants in Yemen and Italy in 2000 and their forecasting in a half century later. It is noticeable that, the adolescence and middle-aged population will increase in both of countries.

In 2000, at 46,3% of Yemen dwellers was dominated by 15-59 years group, predicted to grow exponentially in 2015, reaching at 57,3%. Conversely, having a half of percentage, the number of pupils is likely to fall at 37% later. However a slight changes of elderly population will be occurred, with just a mere 2,1% increment.

On the other hand, the majority of Italian society in 2000 was 15-59 years group, accounting at 61,6%, yet, it will be forecasted to drop at 46,2%. Surprisingly, compared with Yemen, children population in Italian just recorded three times smaller in 2000, with a steady decrease will be experienced in 2050 at 11,5%. However, just one of four citizens was the older group and will be predicted approximately twice greater, standing at 42,3%, as the second biggest population in the future.

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Writing Feedback / The proportion of telephone calls in the UK [4]

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billion minutes) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Phone calls time in minutes in UK

Given is bar chart describing the proportion of 3 kind of telephone calls (in billions minutes) by british dwellers for 7 years. It is noticeable that while the local communication rates went down, a growth of call was witnessed by national and international and mobile communication.

Having the biggest proportion of calls throughout periods, local calls stood at around 70 billion minutes in 1995, experiencing a slight increase for 5 years later. Uniquely, in 1999, british inhabitants spent 90 billion minutes for this call, reaching the peak among periods. However, this fell to near 70 billion minutes in the end of period.

On the other hand, national and international and mobiles connection increased every year. They began at approximately 40 billion minutes and less than 5 billion minutes respectively. A steady growth is recorded by national and international calls, accounting around 60 billion minutes in 2002. Conversely, a similar trend is followed by mobile calls until 1999, then surprisingly, this rocketed at around 45 billion minutes, twice greater compared with the initial period, this category, however, remained as the lowest number of call among other categories.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 1 - MAP (comparison the development of some tourist facilities) [6]

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

noticeable changes in visitor facilities

Given are maps comparing the development of tourist amnesties which have not yet occupied. It is noticeable that in around 200 metres, numerous recreational areas, transportation access and accommodation facilities have been built.

Generally, the construction has been done in vacant area with some palms standing in the same place. A swimming facility has been constructed near the beach on the outskirt of the island. Alongside the sea, a pier has been added, providing ship to connect this island with others. However vehicle track has been renovate to ease visitor to go to reception and restaurant

On the other hand, some hotels have been built in the left side of receptionist and right side as well. Having footpath, pedestrians can walk from one room to the other rooms alongside that area. While six of the accommodations in the right side have been connected with beach, the remainings just have been located in the right side with inhabited area having enormous green trees.

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