Writing Feedback / Water use worldwide and water consumption [2]

the graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

water usage statistics in chart and table

The provided chart and table illustrate about using and consumption water in the couple of countries (Brazil and Congo) in 1 decade. In general trend, using water for agriculture was the highest. Meanwhile, Brazil was the highest of water consumption each person.

To begin, Agriculture sector had many parts for using water. It stood at around 50km3, until the end of period it always was in the top. Industrial and Domestic at the beginning were a little user, then until the end of period they surged at above 1,000km3 in industrial sector and at below 500km3 for people. Domestic figure was the lowest percentage in 1 decade.

Furthermore, Brazil feature was higher than Congo feature. It also occurred in land irrigation and in consumption of water. User of water in 2000, Brazil took much water than Congo by 351 m3. Congo had lower land irrigation than Brazil to 26,500 km3 and it was in proportion to its population is 176 million.

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Writing Feedback / The provided table illustrates about people have expenditure on different goods in 2002 [2]

PERCENTAGE OF NATIONAL CONSUMER EXPENDITURE BY CATEGORY --2002

Sweden, Turkey, Ireland, Italy and Spain - spendings on various goods

The provided table illustrates about people have expenditure on different goods in 2002 in five different countries. This measurement is in percentage. In general trend, leisure or education figure are the lowest percentage and the highest percentage is food/drinks/tobacco.

To begin, Turkey, Ireland and Spain figure were majority proportion. Turkey figure was the highest percentage in foods item at 32.14%, and in Leisure/education items at 4.35%, but it was second highest in cloth items. Meanwhile, Ireland figure was higher than others except Turkey figure in food items, and four times lower than cloth item and fourteen times lower than education. This also was happened in Spain figure.

Furthermore, Italy and Sweden figure were minority proportion in food items, but Italy was the highest percentage cloth items at 9.00%. Meanwhile, Sweden figure had more percentage in food items than clothing leisure items. The former was the lowest than other countries in footwear items.

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Writing Feedback / First Punishment for many offenders [2]

Many offenders commit more crimes after serving the first punishment. Why is this happening, and what measures can be taken to tackle this problem.

Notorious criminals sanctions

Commit more crimes from some offenders always repeated albeit they have been get first punishment. Regarding to this prompt, my consideration has two causes and also three solutions to reduce this issue, and I will explain why in this essay.

Perhaps, the major problem supporting this issue is the punishment is not effective for law breakers. This can be caused, they only have been given petty crimes, but they do huge criminality. It can be seen, Indonesia has too many corruptor, and they always do this criminality due to ineffective of the punishment. In addition, law enforcers are not assertive to punish well the prisoners. They are more likely to influence by some money, making the punishment more light. Corruptor will be easy to out from jail due to influencing of money for the law enforcers.

Turning to the causes, it considers the solution is they should be given effective punishment then the lawbreakers will be deterrent to do some notorious crimes. As an example, rape crime. Sometimes, rape crime will be prone to repeat it negative habit, making them more deterrent they should be get death penalties, and the others will be afraid and avoid this crime. Furthermore, they have to educate first with approach religion. In addition, the law enforcers should be given some measures affecting their life if they do not uphold the laws wisely.

In conclusion, there are several causes why the crime agents will be duplication the negative activities, and the several solutions will tackle this issue. It depends on the effective laws and the law enforcers.

Writing Feedback / Population in U.S state of Oregon - three counties over sixty years timeline [2]

The graph below shows the population change between 1940 and 2000 in three different counties in the U.S. state of Oregon.

inhabitants numbers of the oregon state

The provided line chart describes the number of people who live in three counties from 1940 to 2000. The measurement is in thousands. In general trend, the population in three regions witnessed an upward trend. Meanwhile, the favorite territorial to live in was in Washington.

At the beginning of the year, the highest population was in Washington while Colombia and Yamhill had less mark figure around 30 thousands. Moreover, there were wide gap between people who stayed in Washington and both of the countries.

By 1970 until the end of period, the increasing populations had continued and changed significantly in all features. The ratio of initial Washington figure had had three times higher than the end of figure. Furthermore, Yamhill and Colombia figures had increased considerably by the same amount by just over 5 thousand. Interestingly, population of the latter had had same amount with the initial population in Washington. Finally, Washington had still become the favorite place than the others.

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Writing Feedback / The comparison of local government expenditure in each category in Someland [2]

The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by local authorities in Someland in 1980, 1990 and 2000

spendings fluctuation

The provided charts illustrate about the comparison of local government expenditure in each category in Someland. The measurement is percentage. In general trend, there were categories which experienced fluctuation of annual spending. Meanwhile, feature which dominated was higher education. According to the data, there were majority proportion and minority proportion which will be explained in this following essay.

To begin, there were majority data such as higher education, transportation and K-12 education in three decades. Higher education witnessed a fluctuation over a three-decade. Meanwhile, K-12 education decreased slowly by 7 percent in 3 periods. However, government spending in transportation also fluctuated.

On the other hand, there were also minority figure from each feature because the percentage was below 20 percent such as environmental services, health and human resources and other. A more detail, look at the graph reveals that the proportion of health and human resources in annual spending fluctuated. Then, the proportion of environmental services in annual outgoings continuous and steady rose. Last feature, other, fell steeply in three decades.

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Writing Feedback / Employee Benefits - Information Technology help people for working outside their workplace [2]

Information technology enables many people to do their work outside their workplace (e.g. at home, when travelling, etc.)
Do the benefits of this mobility outweigh the disadvantages?

Employee Benefits

As integral part of human life, people are so depend on developing technology and it alters them in working place. Smartphone, laptop or personal computer can be used by workers without going to their office. While questions have been regarding the positive impact that information technology in office, these definitely outweigh the drawbacks.

The immense benefit is felt by employer in city center. They always meet traffic congestion in the morning and in the afternoon and it will consume much time so people depression boost. Due to working at home, they can save their time, money and they never feel stress. As an illustrate, entrepreneurs will spend their time in the way because they must be negotiated with their partners and always have high mobility. Owing to boosting technology, they still work in vehicles and can be conveyed with clients. They also can make job planning in cars.

On the other hand, the using mobile phone making people become individualism. The employers will work in their home and this causes them to be less socialization with their neighbor. They only concentrate on finishing the job and by using telecommunicate they have rarely made communication with other people. In addition, using telecommunicate tools in public transportation can increase incidences of crimes such as thieve. Makassar, on of big city in Indonesia, also common in criminality. People who see their valuable goods such as smartphone or laptop always become thieve target.

Henceforth, it can be confidently conveyed that, workers can be aided by information technology and ensure completing the jobs. However, people must aware in surrounding. Even though the using technology has negative impacts, these outweigh benefits.

Writing Feedback / How to produce variation tealeaves [4]

The diagram shows how tealeaves are processed into five tea types. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Process of tea production

The provided diagram describes about how to produce five variations among tealeaves. In general trend, there are several stages in the process, starting with plucking the leaf and culminating in an oven. Moreover, there are also different stages which is depended on different products.

To begin, there are similarity stages from each type. The leaves which have been growth will be plucked. After plucking process, the leaves are withered by sun. The finally stage is also had similarity because all of leaves must be undergone in an oven. However, there are some steps which are differentiated to produce variation of tea.

The subsequent stages, white tea can be made from this similarity. Meanwhile, green tea and oolong tea have addition stages. The former process is passed through by steaming process to result exothermic reaction then it will be rolled. The latter is not only occurred rolling process but also the addition process producing oolong tea is fermented slightly. Producing large and small leaf black tea are fermented fully, but the obvious different both of them are crushing and rolling process. Large tea is experienced rolling process, but the small must be crushed.

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Writing Feedback / Residential housing - Alteration in America Village between 1994 and 2010 [2]

Houses and Residential Buildings

The Map below shows the changes in an American town between 1994 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The maps illustrate about the alteration of some buildings is in an American village between 1948 and 2010. It can be seen that north west and south east of town had experienced alteration some construction significantly in the couple of years.

To begin, north west side of canal in 1948 had few features such as factories, petrol station, residential houses and local supermarket from the north side to the south side. Petrol station was the only feature which existed in both of the years. Factories in 1948 had been altered into airport in 2010. Opposite of the gas station in 1948 was garden albeit it changed into commercial building and supermarket. In 2010, commercial building also existed in cross road, but before that in 1948 houses and local supermarket still existed.

On the other hand, the features in south east side were only two buildings such as residential houses and church in 1948. However, church was altered into sport stadium over six-decade. In addition, residential houses did not experience alteration in the couple of the year.

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Writing Feedback / People house change - the village of Stokeford in 1930 [3]

look of a town in different times

The maps illustrate Stokeford area between 1930 and 2010. It can be seen that two sites in the eastern and western of town have different features significantly in both of two years.

First of all, west side from road had many farm houses in 1930 albeit 2010 had been changed to be people houses. Local people in Stakeford can bought something at shops in front of the road in 1930, but 2010 did not because it had been altered by houses. There are also similarity between both of them that was only post office.

On the other hand, the eastern part in 1930 were also farmsteads although it had changed to be houses in 2010. There were also primary school in both of the years, but this experienced expanse in the last year. Garden and larger house also were in the eastern road in 1930 though it changed to be retirement home and residential people.

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