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Oct 21, 2010
Undergraduate / The mysteries of human memory: My Common App essay [6]
Your essay talks about memory of facts and events versus memory of feelings, sensations (good, bad, sad, happy.) It's an intriguing topic. You first paragraph raised the question of whether memories are real or not:
Then the 2nd to 4th paragraph goes into your memory of the wedding (although I was completely lost waiting for the significance of the "toy stamp" - what is this anyway?) The "climax of the tale" was your last sentence in 4th para:
I was lost here as well. Was this simple knowledge you learnt as a younger self that people cry when they are happy? If so, it gets lost in the many times you say "small memories and lessons." What I guess I am trying to get at is that it is not evident what "lessons" you learnt from all the memories you listed earlier.
The final paragraph then concludes your essay with a statement: could this be simplified as "learning from the past" to know what you want (to do) in the future?:
Your essay talks about memory of facts and events versus memory of feelings, sensations (good, bad, sad, happy.) It's an intriguing topic. You first paragraph raised the question of whether memories are real or not:
But the third one still seems vivid in my head - now whether it's real or not, I'm not sure.
Then the 2nd to 4th paragraph goes into your memory of the wedding (although I was completely lost waiting for the significance of the "toy stamp" - what is this anyway?) The "climax of the tale" was your last sentence in 4th para:
I treasure this memory, not only because it is one of my earliest, but also because it tells me how my younger self had to learn what seems so simple but so human - a type of knowledge we take for granted.
I was lost here as well. Was this simple knowledge you learnt as a younger self that people cry when they are happy? If so, it gets lost in the many times you say "small memories and lessons." What I guess I am trying to get at is that it is not evident what "lessons" you learnt from all the memories you listed earlier.
The final paragraph then concludes your essay with a statement: could this be simplified as "learning from the past" to know what you want (to do) in the future?:
All I know is that I take whatever past I have, its memories, lessons, and the many regrets, to learn what I want, whether it be a reachable goal or an impossible dream, in my future.