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vaishali1980   
Mar 12, 2011
Writing Feedback / "increase interest" - Teachers should encourage their students to question everything [3]

Teachers should encourage their students to question everything. Use examples and reasons to support your position.

Nowadays education is a crucial part in people life. People are taking more education than previous. It is an important to check teacher's methods to ensure modern education's quality and understandability of students. Every teacher has different teaching techniques. Some teacher allows students to ask questions until they are satisfied with the information. In my opinion, teachers should encourage their students to question everything. My reasons to believe this statement are to ensure students understandability, increase student interest in subject which teacher are teaching, choose correct teaching techniques and correct teacher's mistakes.

In Indian culture, a teacher is compared with mother, as like a mother who build the base of children carrier and show correct many ways of prosperous life. A teacher plays a significant role in a student life. If a student is satisfied or cleared his doubt from his teacher, he can make better career in that field. It is a teacher's responsibility to assure the understanding level of student. If teacher encourage students to ask questions, he can understand the students understanding level and choose the way of teaching method which helps better understand subject to the student.

The second reason is to improve teacher's mistakes. Sometime teacher can possible to teach some wrong and unrelated information. He might realize his mistakes after asking questions from students. For example, once chemistry teacher was teaching chemical reactions and mistakenly he exchanges to reaction equation's results. At the end of session when student asked about not involving substance in one reaction and how it is appeared in result then teacher realized his mistake and apology for that mistake.

In addition, better understanding subject lead to increase students interest in subject. Student get failure in subject mostly lack of interest. If teacher allow to ask questions and clear doubt from students mind, it helps to increase students interest in subject. Interest helps to better subject result and also improve to increase university reputation.

In conclusion, teachers should allow student to ask questions to understand student understandability and increase students interest in subject. It also helps teacher himself to improve teaching technology and understand his avoidable mistakes.
vaishali1980   
Mar 6, 2011
Writing Feedback / Old aged people go to live in homes, who should bear the fee - government or family [2]

You should write small sentences instead of many commas.
You should mention clearly introduction and conclusion paragraph about your opinion, means who should bear the fee and why.
Try to connect all paragraph logically or keep flow related to subject.
Your writing is good, I think it has less grammatical mistake.
I never seen 'are been' word used in sentences. Please google it and get more information.
Hope this will helps you. :)

vaishali1980   
Feb 23, 2011
Writing Feedback / Which kind of roommate would you prefer? (American roommate) [2]

Some international students choose American roommates. Others choose roommates from their own countries. Compare the advantages of having an American roommate with the advantages of having a roommate from your country. which kind of roommate would you prefer? why? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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Nowadays students like to study wold wide. Some students prefer to study in American University for better facility and future. They have to take apartment for a rent and because of high cost, they have to share with other students. Some international student choose American roommate and some like to share room with their own countries. Both has their own cos and pros. In my opinion, I would like to choose American roommates. The reasons are I like to share and get experiences, cultures, new test of food and learn new methods of studies.

The main reason for choosing American roommates is to learn different culture. Though students come abroad for gaining knowledge of their field, other activities also help to them for active their brain and stay healthy. Learn others culture and experience help to get relax, experience some excitement and useful in future to work their country. For example, if Chines student share room with Indian student, he can learn many Indian cultures, Indian people's interest and if he get a chance to work in India, he might be get advance knowledge about country and their people which is helpful in work environment. In contrast, some students will not agree with this opinion. Sharing culture sometimes create problem. For example some countries won't believe in God's statue and pray for him. Cast also play an important role for differences.

The second reason is different methods of studies. Each country has different study method and content. If a student share a room with American roommate he can learn new thinks related to his field. Some countries schools syllabus is on theoretical base, so student won't get actual or applicable knowledge. Other countries give a chance to student learn practically and choose desirable subject. It has also disadvantage that some student don't like to share knowledge.

In additionally, a student can learn other things from American roommates like language, food, polite behavior and so on. One more thing I would like in American students is to take challenges in every aspect. But from same country roommate we get moral support, same activities like cultural, or same food.

In conclusion, both has advantage and disadvantage but as my concern I would choose to stay with American roommate to learn many things like food, culture, study as well as their behavior to give a respect to others and take challenges.
vaishali1980   
Feb 3, 2011
Writing Feedback / A good son or daughter has a responsibility to obey parents and keep communication with them [2]

What are the important qualities of a good son or daughter? Have these qualities changed or remained the same over time in your culture? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Parents sacrifice their lives for their children from birth until parents' lives. Nowadays a question arose about quality of a son or daughter because in past, a son followed route what his parents chose and a daughter was told to be a housewife only. However, the situation is changed, new generation youngstars want freedom and don't want responsibility of thier parents. Everyone is someone's a son or a daughter, so it is very important to think about the good qualities of a son or a daughter. In my opionon, a good son or daughter who obey, communicate and respect his or her parents in any circumstances.

The main reason I believe that a child should obey the parents' order that they are experienced and they know better what is good or bad for their child. The child responsiblity is obey their suggetion. Parents always scrifice everything for thier child. Although parents earn money, they compramise spend that money on themself, they spend money for their child to providing shulter, food, cloths and desires. Parents always suppress their own desirs but try to complete their children's demand. When their children turn come, children should try to complete parents desires in form of helping their daily activities or complete their dreams. For example, some times parents need help like they ask childent to go and bring some things from shop or pay bill in some office, child should obey their order without giving any excuse.

The second quality, a good son or daughter's willingness to keep communication with parents. The proper communication is very importan in any relationship. Misscommunication lead to hurt someone's feelings. Once children are grown some of them don't like to talk much with parents. They talk with them to accomplish their goals. A son or daughter should always keep communication with mom and dad. Explain to parents their goals, situations and what now they are doing. If parents are not agree with a children's decision, children's should try to convey their idea and explain why it is an important to them. Example, generally parents want to follow thier children in same route what they did. If father is a doctor, or having a bussiness, they expect from child to take care of it. But sometimes their son's or daughter's interest is different. It is responsibility of child to convey thier idea and keep communication with parents.

The third quality, a son or daughter should have is willingness always give respect to them. I heard many cases that a son beats his parents, lives seperatly, not helps in parents old days and so on. Once they grown up they don't like any advoice or suggestion from parents. Parents advoice is foolish or backword for them. In my opinion a son or daughter must understand them and give respect in any circumstances.

In conclusion, a good son or daughter has a responsibility to obey parents and keep communication with them. He or she must respect them and take care when they need. This all qualites are universal and never been going to change over time or culture.
vaishali1980   
Jan 12, 2011
Writing Feedback / Smoking should not be permitted in restaurants [3]

Thanks Maria for useful suggestion.

I need help in both grammar check and ideas I expressed.

I think to explain opposite view on this topic is very difficult and I have more points instead of opposite view.
vaishali1980   
Jan 10, 2011
Writing Feedback / TOEFL: Smoking in restaurants should not be permitted, agree or disagree? [4]

WithT hose who hate or get allergic tofrom smoke, having meals in the fog of smoke from the next table is such a disaster.

In order not to not come across that unpleasant situation, many customers prefer to go to non-smoking restaurants, which means restaurant which allows smoking looselose

The adjective loose means "not tight." The verb lose means "not to win" or "not to keep."
vaishali1980   
Jan 10, 2011
Writing Feedback / Smoking should not be permitted in restaurants [3]

Help me to correct my errors.

Do you agree or disagree with following statement?
Smoking should not be permitted in restaurants and state laws that prohibit it should be upheld. Used specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Modern life is too hectic and stressful which cause people easily addict drugs and smoking. I agree with statement that smoking should not be permitted in restaurants and state laws that prohibit it should be upheld. The reason I believe this statements are to avoid effects on other people health, restrict wrong doing fashion and aware the people of smoking hazards.

The main reason to support this statement is that affects on others health and pollute environment. Study reveal that smoking is affected to other people's health who surrounding the smoker. Restaurant is a place where all ages people come for having food. Generally people come in restaurant for having food and spending happy time with family. If we allow smoking in restaurant, it will ruin the others health especially children as well as it pollute environment. We should not allow people to smoke in restaurant to avoid effect on others and keep environment clean.

The second reason is restrict the unacceptable fashion. Some people generally youth addict for smoking as a fashion. Some TV channels and in movies, actors do smoking to show a style. Youth follow their style and become addict for smoking. In addition some people smoke for stress release. Cigarettes contain drugs which relax brain. People smoke without thinking for their side effects.

Furthermore, Government should take a part to encourage people to stop the smoking. Government should do some advertisement against smoking and aware of their hazards.

In conclusion, smoking should not be permitted not only in restaurants but also all public areas. Government should make a law against smoking and people should be upheld those laws.
vaishali1980   
Dec 2, 2010
Writing Feedback / The advantages of pursuing dreams rather than giving up on them - TEOFL [2]

human is a single person so you should use human being or use a human

'but my opinion' but in my opinion

human should pursue dream for the reasons a human is pursuing dream for the reasons

dream is wishes our heart makes dreams means our heart wishes

we know how way to chase it .

I dreamed to go to university and get a good job after post undregrade I dreamed that I went university to study and got a good job after post graduation

and took a offer from a bank got a offer from a bank

Tried to correct some sentence. Please cross check again
vaishali1980   
Dec 2, 2010
Writing Feedback / Classify TV programs - classification essay type [2]

'Entertainment is the most favorite for many people'
you can use this sentence as ' Many people watch TV for their entertainment and program based on entertainment like music, movies some times refer films is favorite program for them '

Not as exciting as entertainment, but news always makes up largely viewers on earth

News which is not excited as entertainment, but also have large viewers.

they bright producers a huge number of profits
'producer make a huge profit from them'

Above some suggestion might be correct and helpful for you
vaishali1980   
Dec 2, 2010
Writing Feedback / 'younger need thrill in their life' - young people enjoy life more than older [2]

Nowadays people running behind the money so they forgot to enjoy their life. How the people increase their age they become more serious and change their definition looking towards the life. I agree that young people enjoy life more than older people do. There are many reasons I support this opinion. The reasons are older people have more responsibilities and running behind the money, also they lost interest in learning new things and experienced about thrill.

The main reason younger people enjoy life because they have less responsibilities. Older people has more responsibilities like they support their family and parents. Older people thinks more about their family and always try accomplish their demands, so they pressed their desire. In Indian culture older people has all responsibilities to provides necessity things to wife and children as well as take care of parents. If they are in joint family then responsibilities is worst. I have example of my father. He always thinks about us and try to provide whatever we want. We had lots of agriculture land so he had more responsibilities like managing , government procedure and cases in court. Though he was educated he suffered mental depression and never enjoyed his life. Later he suffered paralysis attach and pass away by heart attach. In contrast younger people has less responsibilities and earn money only for themselves or depends on parents. When they get more responsibilities and started earning money their attitude change and enjoy less in their life.

The second reason is younger people tendency to curiosity and want thrill in their life. Younger people enjoy more because they want to learn new things and experienced new thrill and explore their knowledge. As example they want to visit new places which they never seen and unknown. Also like rides which has thrill like roller costar and joint wheel. Older people scare to lost their life because they want to take care of their family. Older people gone all younger phase so they lost their interest for finding new things and experience new thrill.

In conclusion, younger people has less responsibility, positive attitude towards life and explore their knowledge that's why young people enjoy life more than older people do.
vaishali1980   
Nov 29, 2010
Writing Feedback / What government can do to conserve energy resources? [5]

If you want to support your opinion first you should clear about your statment

Increase the price of gasoline and electricity is the only thing government can do to conserve energy resources.

And later you should give those points.

Means you have to rearrange your essay properly
vaishali1980   
Nov 26, 2010
Writing Feedback / Some want independence and some prefer to live with thier families ,which you prefer? [2]

Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a long time. Which of these situations do you think is better?

Nowadays from younger to older everyone wanted to be independent. People thinks only one benefits as a freedom without thinking of its disadvantage. If I would have a choice, I would prefer to stay with my families. There are many reasons to stay with family like I get support, older family member's knowledge of experience, responsibilities which is challenging for me and learn from responsibilities.

Mostly younger people choose to become independent as soon as possible and prefer to stay alone. On other hand I would like to stay with family members. The first reason is get supports from them. I will get many kinds of support from my families like moral support, economic support. If I stay with my families I get all kinds of helps and supports from them without any expectations from me. As example when I suffered physically ill, my family took care of me. Even my hard time they supported economically.

The second reason is gets proper direction. The advantage with staying with families that they knows whats going on in my life and they gives me proper tips using their prior experienced knowledge which is helpful for gets proper direction. If I am doing something wrong they will noticed me and for good achievement they will appreciate me. As example young generation has more chances to take a drugs. We can avoid many mistake like drugs disaster staying with family.

The third which is very important consideration for me is a responsibility. Staying alone means a selfishness as my point of view. Our family member like parents took care of us and when its time come for us we leaves them alone. I think staying with them is also taking care of them and giving the older some reason for living healthy life. Family members also gets good company and supports from me.

Though there are some disadvantage as lost of freedom, bossing from family members and interfere or burden, but we can solve these problem with discussion and giving space to each other.

In conclusion, staying with families is a taking challenge, responsibilities and getting supports and knowledge from families. For these all reason I would prefer to stay with families for a longer time.
vaishali1980   
Nov 25, 2010
Writing Feedback / What is the most important animal in your country (cow in India)? [5]

The animal is most important which plays crucial role in the country's economy. In India, a large vareity of animals are there which helps the people in various ways like providing food, helping in work or security, as example, a Dog which is helpful to people for guarding houses and belongings and is considered as the most loyal animal, Hen gives eggs and is useful for food also. In my opinion in those animals most important animal for my country is cow. There are many reasons I beleive on my belief as cow is helpful for work, gives milk and we use their wastage as fertilizer.

The most important reason is we get milk from cow, which is most important food in daily life. From small children's to older one's depends on milk. Children are depended on milk, if we don't give them milk , they don't get required protein/vitamin in their daily life. Older one's want tea or coffee, for that they need milk. Milk is basic necessity to the India's diet.

The second reason is that cow is useful for work. Our country's economy depends on agriculture. Though country is developing in industries but majority of population still depends on agriculture. People use cow for agricultural works. From hundreds of year ago, people started using cow for harvesting plants and many agricultural works. So cow is playing very significant role in farmer's life. We celebrate a festival on their name. On that day we pray the cow, and give sweets and rest to them.

The third reason is cow's waste is useful for agriculture. Cow's wastage is a necessary nutrition for plants. Now days we use lots of chemical fertilizers for plants. Excessive use of these fertilizers damages soil and is ineffective to next generation. Cow's waste is natural fertilizer which is solution for this problems. Cow's waste is cheap and is easily available any were.

In conclusion, in all animals cow is significant in every aspect, which is helpful not only for work but gives milk and also nutrition to plants. Undoubtedly the most important animal in my country is cow.
vaishali1980   
Oct 8, 2010
Writing Feedback / Individual study helps keep me focused. If I study with my friends I easily get distracted. [5]

parpari

"Students have individuals study habits."

Instead of you should write like 'Each student has different habit'

s ome of them prefer to study alone and some of them prefer to study with a group of students.

'I prefer study alone to study with a group of students.'
This sentence makes us confused.

Support only one opinion.

See carefully about full stop, comma and upper case letter after full stop.
Make proper paragraph with subject.
vaishali1980   
Sep 23, 2010
Writing Feedback / TOEFL;close friends vs casual friends [4]

Your essay is very good and well arranged. Only need to add brief point discussed from your essay in conclusion.
vaishali1980   
Sep 8, 2010
Writing Feedback / Building a large shopping center in your neighborhood - 'hanging out place' [4]

In Toefl you should clearly support only one opinion.

Some more points you can add

advantage - rising value of your property, spend your spare of time for getting info of new items and price compare

disadvantage - pollution-nature distroy, air because of vehicles and noise, unsefty for living
vaishali1980   
Aug 23, 2010
Faq, Help / Thanking moderators and everyone who gave me helpful suggestion [28]

Thanks Kevin and Adrienne

My exam gone well. Now I am waiting for my result.

This time I gave exam better than last time. In writing section I wrote both essay very confidently thought I might made some mistake.

Thanks this forum and who helped me to learn more.
vaishali1980   
Aug 20, 2010
Writing Feedback / The Internet - technological innovation that you think is important [3]

Topic : Advances in transportation and communication like the airplane and the telephone have changed the way that nations interact with each other in a global society. Choose another technological innovation that you think is important. Give specific reasons for your choice

Nowadays the world has become a global village because of innovations of advanced technology.
Many innovation like the computer, internet, digital camera and so on help creature on the earth for comfortable. As my opinion, the innovation most beneficial for human beings is internet. There are many reasons that I consider internet is most important innovation. These reasons include the fact that it allows one to complete various tasks and save time.

The main reason for the important of the internet is that it can use for multipurpose. Internet is very useful for all areas. Now, day by day, internet is becoming a part of life. It is used for communicating, shopping, surfing for interesting areas, and even searching for a life partner and getting married in a few seconds. This innovation use for multipurpose like shopping, chatting, taking tips which helps people carry out every days activities.

The second reason is it useful for time saving. People are very busy in their life working hard for their achievements. Some are students, some are professional so they are busy in their schedule. They won't get time for shopping, chatting, many works or spending spare time with family and friends. Internet gives them easy of ordering items which are a just click and order away. If they want to buy clothes or any official accessories, they don't need to go walking in a search of item. They can check online and give an order. If they want to send a gift and have no time to go to the store, they can buy it online and send to the address. They can also order food online and have it ready for lunch or dinner in few minutes.

In addition, we can communicate with our loved one in few seconds. Not only we can talk with them but we can see them. It is possible because of the internet.

In conclusion, internet is very important because it has various uses and it saves time. Although it has some side effects, it gives more benefits to human beings in their lives.
vaishali1980   
Aug 13, 2010
Writing Feedback / Schools should ask students to evaluate their teachers. Do you agree or disagree? [8]

students teachers relationship



Nowadays education is a very important in everyone's life. Someone gets chance to learn but someone unlucky. Whom gets chance to learn they should get proper guidance and a good teacher. Teacher plays an crucial role in students life, so teacher should be well educated, good knowledgeable and having capability to explain and teach subject which can understand them. It is my personnel opinion that students can judge their teachers in useful way. There are many reasons for my personnel opinion on above statement. Students to evaluate their teachers reasons involve teacher's teaching techniques, teacher's partiality and students understanding level.

The main reason is that each teacher's teaching style involves different techniques. Some teachers read just book without knowing students understanding level. Some teachers teach with smaller important point to most important point, some teachers teach with examples and jokes, some teachers teach with diagrams. The teacher assumes that their teaching techniques are good and understood very well by students but its not true. It depends on how students like the teacher's teaching method. If we allow students to evaluate their teacher they will point out the benefits or drawbacks their teaching techniques.

The second reason is teacher's partiality. Might be you are thinking what is partiality? Partiality means a teacher's behavior is different depending on students. Some students are favorites and some are dislike by teacher, so the teacher's behavior depends on his liking of some students more than others. Some students are really deserve for it because they are talented and obey teachers instruction but some student try to flatter their teacher. It affects the student morality. If school asked student to evaluate their teacher then teacher can treat each student same way.

In addition, each student level of understanding is different, so school can make divisions depending on student's understanding level and teachers' teaching methods. Some students are very sharp and some students have low understanding levels. If teachers teach subjects with methods that accommodate very low levels of understanding, intelligent students get bored and might be destructed. Evaluation of teachers from students may help schools to make proper decisions.

Furthermore, new ideas and new teaching methods will be introduced by students if school gives a chance student to evaluate their teachers. In evaluation process school can ask students their opinion about teacher and suggestions. Some teachers teaching techniques are very interesting but some students want more thing from their teachers. As an example my computer teacher taught very well from book but I was expecting more examples for home work which help me explore my logic.

In conclusion, to make successful educated students and to establish students and teachers friendly relationship with proper teaching styles and getting new teaching idea's from students and students level of understanding, schools should ask students to evaluate their teachers.READ BELOW
vaishali1980   
Aug 12, 2010
Poetry / Poetry Analysis on " To an Athlete Dying Young" [5]

It is difficult to understand what are you writing.

You should give some lines of poem then other can help you.

You should make paragraph depending on stanza and write some introduction about poem like some short meaning of poem.
vaishali1980   
Aug 10, 2010
Writing Feedback / It is impossible for a man to stay alone - groups are part of human's life [9]

Groups or organizations are an important part of some people's lives. Why are groups or organizations important to people? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer.

Nowadays every areas have organizations and groups. A group might be formed by small or large number of people but has a common interest or goal as an example group of manufacturing people, group of labor or group of religion. Groups are an important part of some people's lives. There are many reasons people like to join or stay with groups.

The main reason is human being like to form a society. As an simple example, everyone likes to stay with family and family is a one group, it might be small or large number of people. Second example is every person belongs to some religion, which we can say community and follow some rule and regulation. In society, different people stay together, some of them have good manners and some of them follows wrong ways like theft, murder. To constrain the bad manners and crime we need to form a community and establish some rules and regulations.

The second reason is humanity like to share experience and translate knowledge. Every person has an interest in some aspect. Some people like to art, some people like to physical activities. These interesting field's knowledge they like to share to other people. It can mostly possible when there is a group of common interest people as an example a group of camping people, a group of an engineer. That is why people form groups and translate their knowledge and experience with each other.

The third reason is getting success with working together. Groups are very important to people because many works can complete with groups only. In big organization, there are many small groups working together. As an example of manufacturing car, many groups involved in manufacturing car like a group of labors, a group of painters, a group of marketing peoples.

In conclusion, it is impossible to man to stay alone, group are part of human life. Human belongs many groups with knowingly and unknowingly. It helps people to spend their life with someone companion and share thoughts, knowledge and experience. Though some people like to stay alone because of their scare of dominant people and their discouragement but they are still belonging to some groups knowingly and unknowingly; they don't have other choice.
vaishali1980   
Aug 7, 2010
Undergraduate / Volunteering @ Baptist Medical experience that will affect your college experience [5]

You made many spelling mistake when you were writing. Always check spelling.

Second thing is your experience should me more interesting like some experience you have got from patient or some activities.

Essay is very small, you should elaborate more with example which will be interesting to others.

I don't know much about grammatically.
vaishali1980   
Aug 6, 2010
Undergraduate / Volunteering @ Baptist Medical experience that will affect your college experience [5]

You made many spelling mistake when you were write. Always check spelling.

Second thing your experience should me more interesting like some experience you got from patient or some activities.

Essay is so small you should elaborate more with example which will be interesting to others.

I don't know much about grammatically.

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