Writing Feedback / TV & Movies have many good influences on peoples' behavior [4]

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I am new in learning English. Please let me know my mistake

Nowadays, every house has at least one TV. People like spends their spare time to watch TV. Television and movies became their part of life. So It is definitely has great influence on people's behavior.

First of all, when people comes from office, they spends time watching TV for relax and reduce stress. Men likes to watch news. The news on TV on different-different

topics like politics, war, murder, thief, which has positive or negative influence on people's behavior.
Women like to watch series which on family drama, comedy etc. They compare their actual life with series they has seen. For example nowadays, in India so many series going on topic,

daughter-in-law and mother-in-law, women also behave with their daughter-in-law and mother-in-law as they has seen on TV series.
Not only men and women has influence on their behavior, children also catch the things from television. Children like to watch cartoon network. They learns fighting

and making jokes as well as learns good things like sharing, behavior.

Secondly, advertisement. On television, there are so many advertisement on products and services. It is also good or bad impact on our life style.
As showing advertisement, we also expecting same things in our own life. For example of toothpaste advertisement, we also want shining teeth so we brush our teeth twice a day which has good influence on our behavior.

Furthermore, people get habituated to spent time in front of TV. It has impact on their health like they become over fat. As they spends more time to watch TV, it has stop

to interact with other family members and friends, so day by day they becoming lonely.

In conclusion, If we want or don't want television and movies has great influence on people's behavior. Regardless of bad influence, people should accept good influence on their behavior.

They should watch appropriate news, series and movies.

Thanks

Vaishali

Writing Feedback / I will live in small village. There are many reasons. [10]

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Nowadays people like to live in a metro city but If I have a choice, I would prefer to live in small village. The following reasons support my opinion.

First reason is pollution. Many people live in a big city, which increases pollution. There are many reason's for increasing pollution like transportation, industries wastage, dirtiness and so on. All people use cars, buses or train, it increases toxic gas in environment. Transportation releases toxic gas, as well as it creates sound pollution. In a big city industries destroy balance of environment.They leaves wastage in sea or river water. Some people use that polluted water as drinking water. This polluted atmosphere affects people's health. In contrast, we get fresh air and always see greenery in the village.

Second reason is population. Population is also major problem in big city. People get unsufficient water, electricity and so on because of population. Furthermore if we want to pay light bill, phone bill or submit any application, we have to wait for hour's and hour's. In small village will not have these problems.

Third reason is time. time? Is time problem in big city? Yes, it is.
In city everyone is busy and running for achieving something. People work whole day and night for appraisal and salary increment. If people stay far from office or their business location, they leave from home very early in the morning to office, and they come back late at night. They don't have sufficient time to spend for their family. Children always meet father at weekend. If both parents are working then kids stay whole day in daycare.

As a result there is lack of affection among family members and less interaction with relatives and friends.

In conclusion, Although village has less resources, facilities and job opportunities, the small village also has benefits. To spend life in a healthy, peaceful place close to family I would like to live in small village.

Writing Feedback / 'You didn't build that?' - Luck has nothing to do w/ success [10]

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I quite agree with the given statement that, "When people gain success, it is because of hard work. Luck has nothing to do with success".

There are many experiences that I've had in my life to support my belief in this statement. I will illustrate this in the following context.

The main reason behind this is that, in all ages we are trying to achieve our goals. From birth till death, we work very hard to achieve these goals. During our childhood, we learn to walk and communicate with those around us. As students, we study hard to achieve higher scores in order to fetch better jobs. However, if we depend on luck, we will never get what we want in life. Becoming a scientist, doctor or engineer is no child's play. Only hard work and perseverance truly pays off! In the first attempt, we might fail to reach our expectations, but in the second or the third or probably in the fourth attempt, we'd definitely achieve success, provided we have put all our mind and efforts into it!

However, there are some some people whose experiences have made them believe in luck; which have made them believe that luck goes hand in hand with hard work. There is one personal experience that I have had, which does support this. When I was studying for my graduation exam, I had read all the content in my physics book, except for a few points. My friends had studied only these points. Unfortunately, the majority of the questions in the exam paper were based on these few points. As a result, my friends got an A and I, in spite of studying harder than them, got a B. Maybe, this example supports the belief that, with hard work we need luck, but I will say that it was a result of not studying as hard as I should have. It was because I had left those points which were very important.

Success comes to those who work hard. It might come late, but it is sure that with hard work, success is guaranteed. Luck simply depends on luck. For instance, all of us know that Las Vegas is vary famous for gambling. In gambling, success completely depends on luck. The first time that I had gambled in a casino, I had placed several bets of $5 and had won a couple of times. I collected a total of $25. I was so excited on my earnings that I decided to give another try. At the next try, I placed a bet of $100, but, I lost it all. I kept playing over and over again, as a result of which, I had lost all my money by the end of the day. Hence, its very clear that success is not sure, if we depend on luck.

In conclusion, with hard work people definitely get success but, luck sheerly depends on luck. Hard work is the first stage in achieving success whereas, luck is the second stage!

Writing Feedback / Giving money to sports activities is as important as giving money to libraries [6]

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There are many arguments on study verses sports. As my opinion Universities should give the same amount of money to their students sports activities as they give to their university libraries.

There are many reasons I supports my opinion.

The main reason is student should be healthy. Student takes admission in university for study. They spend all the time for reading and researching. It has a impact on their health. In seating one place, students gets back pain. Watching and reading ebook on computer create eye's irritation and other eye's related problems. It is vital part in students life to stay healthy. If university provide all sports activities, then student can spend their spare time there.

Second reason is students economic condition. Some people believes that if student are interested in sport they should go in private club. All students economic condition are not same. Some students come from worst economic condition. They are already paying so much money for universities fees. Poor student can't spend money for sport. They can't go to private sport club for sport activities. To support all students and their interest university should spend money on both sport activities and library. I am from India and in India major collages and universities stress on study and provide facilities for study only. In my collage life, I was vary interested in sport but collage didn't have any sport activities . There were vary few private sport club and it was vary far. It was not possible for me to go to private sport club and spend money there. If I would have got a chance in sport activities may be I would have become a sports person now.

Third reason is university reputation. If university has huge library with sport activities, its definitely attraction for all student. Student don't want boring study life. They also want some entertainment with their on going carrier. If university has huge library and sports activities; it would be huge encouragement for collage admission. To make ideal university, university should give the same amount of money to their student sports activities as they give to their university libraries.

In conclusion, to make student healthy and reduce stress, university should encourage student or sport activities with studies, as providing money to sport activities as they give to their libraries.

Writing Feedback / people visit museums when they travel to new places; 'curiosity about ancestors' [4]

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Museum is a place where presents us the history, culture and creativity. There are many reasons that people like to visit museums.

The first reason is some people like to study history. For people who learning and studying history, museum is a wonderful place.
Museum is giving you much deeper visual stimulation so as to make you better to understand the history. As well as people like to know more about local people and their history. When people visit new places, they don't know much about people over there; their appearance, activities, foods, cloths and jewelery. There is no doubt, local museum is the best choice for us to get a clue about them, their culture and history.

The second reason is curiosity about human ancestors. Some museums are exhibition of ancestors' belongings, how they lived, what they wore and so on. The museum presents more information to find out the answers to many question related to our ancestors.

The third and most important reason is people like to experience creativity. Some museums represent arts and creativity. Some people like to watch and admire artist's knowledge. For example in London, Madame Tussaud is a very famous museum for wax statue. Museum has famous people's statue. People always visit there to see artistic works.

As a result, museum is a best place to spend holiday with children. To spend a great vacation and get knowledge, people like to visit museums when they travel to new places.

Writing Feedback / We need neighbors who are helpful, kind, understanding and encouragingr [9]

Human likes to leave in society and, share and help to each other. But nowadays everyone is busy in their schedule; some are busy in study, some are in office. No one has a time to get to know much about their neighbor.

It is very important to know about the neighbor and help them when it is necessary. There are many reason for having good neighbors and they should have qualities like helping, understanding, encouraging us.

The first quality that a neighbor should have is helping nature. We don't know our fate. We don't know when we will face difficult situation. Neighbor is a one of who may know about our crises.

I have had many experiences when my neighbors helped me in my critical situation. As an example, when I was in my last year post graduation, I had interview in Mumbai. I wanted some money to go to Mumbai. I asked everyone whom I had helped but no one gave me money. Only few hours left to go to Mumbai, suddenly my neighbor came and gave me 1000 rs without any expectation. I didn't ask him about money.

He helped me himself and I am always thankful for that one. Another example that my father suffered paralysis attach. My mother and younger sister whoever at home. That difficult situation my neighbor helped us to take my father to the hospital.

Neighbors should have quality to understand us. We share our house or property with some neighbors. If we renew our property or taking some facilities like light connection, water connection. It may be disturbing or making noise, as that situation, it is very important that neighbor should be understandable. My daughter is 2 year old and she always runs around the home and makes lots of noise. My neighbor complained about it to the rental office. After some days they left to some other places and new neighbor has come. I was afraid if I would get a complain again about my daughter. Once I had spoken with new neighbor and told about my situation. She is very kind person and said that it is fine, we can't stop kids.

The third important quality is to ability encourage us. Neighbor should have quality to encourage us when we need. For example, We decided to shift from our rental house, to the our own house after my father had a paralysis attach. Before shifting, I did reconstruct of our own house.

My neighbor encouraged me to do all necessary things over there.

As a result, We need neighbors who are helpful, kind, understanding and encouraging us.

Writing Feedback / How media affects the lives of famous people? [4]

I agree with given statement that television, newspaper, magazines and other media pay too much attention to the personal lives of famous people such as public figure and celebrities.

Nowadays people like to read and watch news for knowledge and entertainment. There are many reason that I believes media pay too much attention to the personal lives of famous people.

The main reason, whenever I switch on...

Writing Feedback / Earth is a beautiful planet which will soon be demolished by human activities [2]

Earth is a beautiful planet which will soon be demolished by human activities.
Human live on the planet with other animals. Human brain is much developed to other animals. They are emprers of the Earth and rule all over.

There are many reasons that I believes the Earth is being harmed by human activity.

The main reason is killing of animals. People like to hunt animals to show their braveness, as well as people hunt animals for food, pelts and entertainment.

Animal killing causes to vanish some species in the nature which will imbalance nature.
The second reason is construction. People construct houses, roads and bridges, which cause to increase non agriculture area. Materials used in constructions also affect atmosphere.

It lead to imbalance rain fall and increases heat which we call global warming. Global warming affects the Earth, like melting of ice on Antartica, skin diseases and so on.

The third reason is industrialization. People make many artificial things for their comfortness. Industrialization destroys and pollutes environment. Industrialization pollutes water, air and soil which affect all creature on earth. It will one day demolish the world

Furthermore, human activities like oil spill in gulf of Mexico caused to die many marine plants and animals.Global warming ,burning of forest kills forest animals and trees.

In conclusion, though human like to build beautiful houses for them to live in, but nature is definitely being harmed. To save earth human should think about their activities.

Writing Feedback / Telephones and email have made communication between people less personal [NEW]

Nowadays technology has developed enormously that people can communicate easily. Last century, we were dependent on post services; at that time, people communicate with each other by letter's.

We get information inadequate and infrequently in the letter . Now, people have started communicating with each other by telephone or email; which transfer message instantly.

I don't agree with the statement telephone and email have made communication between people less personal. There are many reason for that.

The main reason is using telephone and email we can stay in touch with each other daily. Though physically we are far from each other, with technology we share personals thought and exchange messages. Its create bonding among each other.

Second reason is assurance . If we send letter or person to convey message, there is no assurance that message will get him correctly. There is no guarantee that whom we have sent letter that letter has delivered correct place or person.

Now we are guarantee that we are talking with correct person and sending an email in correct address. As example, if we want to give some message to our wife or husband, there are more chances it goes in other family member's hand.

The third most important reason is time. It is very important that we should communicate or give information in a time.
If we want to invite for wedding or naming ceremony, message should get before time. Telephones and emails are doing this great job without a failure.

In additionally, telephones and email has made interact with each other very cheap and easier.

In conclusion, telephones and email have made communication between people personal contact, convenient life and give message in time and accurate.

Writing Feedback / Do you think we should pay attention to the famous people opinions? [4]

Nowadays, everybody wants to show their intelligence in their master area. People become famous in their dominant area by outstanding performance. Consequently, other people wanted to listen their opinion or follow them. I agree with the statement, 'when famous people such as actors, athletes and rock stars give their opinions, we should pay attention to those opinions'. There are many reasons I believe that the people should pay attention to famous people's opinion.

The first reason is famous people's intellectuality. Celebrity are definitely different from ordinary people. They have talent and they are ingenious and wise. Most of the them give their opinion in their expert area. If they don't have sufficient knowledge about a problem, they like to keep quite. I believe that when famous people give some opinions about problem, its a reality, instead of fake. There are also some exceptions like politicians. Political leaders are always famous and most of time they lie. We can't believe them because they reveal truth for their personal benefits. Other than politician, famous people like Sachin Tendulker, Amitabh Batchen, Amir Khan, we can trust them blindly and consider their opinion in major aspects.

The second reason is the importance these people give for their honor. They get respects a lot and they wouldn't want to loose their honor. Let us consider the example of Kapil Dev - a famous cricketer. Some players tried to involve him in charges of corruption. As he had said earlier, his innocence was proves after investigation and his name was cleared of all corruption charges Famous people do not want to be associated with dishonest. They try to cooperate in giving out correct information. Some times politician takes disadvantage of their honor. Political leader brings famous people as a face of the party to interact with the voters in an election.

Additionally, famous people give more trps for success to newcomers, as they learn from their experience, hard work and mistake. We should take their advice in the area of their expertise.

In conclusion, famous people are intelligence and having master in their field, we should listen to their opinion in their skill. As well as we should considered their opinion depends on person, ability and ideas how they are elaborate.