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dolly   
Jul 30, 2013
Writing Feedback / [TOEFL] Should we pay professional athletes (entertainers) a high salary? [5]

From my prospect- I am not sure, but " from my perspective" is better.Even I need clarification on this.

As we are now live in a competent world- As we now live in a competent world.

we must show ourselves to be great enough- " we must prove ourselves worthy enough" sounds better.

Fairness is not about equal payments for everyone, but equal chances to acquire the same goal or accomplishment.- Great point!!

In other words, if they are not paid high enough in order to conform to their performances, there might not be such brilliant performances for us to be amazed. - I don't agree with this because I believe their performances do not depend on the salaries they get. So, to prove your point if you can give some example then that would be great.
dolly   
Jul 29, 2013
Writing Feedback / Should new editors decide what to broadcast on TV &what to print in the newspapers? [6]

The topic is" news editors decide what to broadcast on tv and what to print in newspaper. What factors do you think influence these decisions? Do we become used to bad news? Would it be better if more good news were reported?. Discuss.

Dumi- thank you so much for correcting my mistakes. Also I was wondering, is it highly recommended to give examples for IELTS even if the essay is going beyond the given word limit. My essay is longer than the given word limit of 250, so should I cut it short and give examples?
dolly   
Jul 29, 2013
Writing Feedback / Should new editors decide what to broadcast on TV &what to print in the newspapers? [6]

Newspapers and televisions have not only been a great source of information but also of entertainment. For the past four centuries, tremendous growth has been accounted in the media industry. But whether, this news published by the newspaper or broadcasted by the television holds some ground or is simply made by the media industry has become a bone of contention for the last few decades. In my opinion, there are certainly various factors that are kept in mind by the editors before releasing the information publicly.

First of all, editors are not the only people who are responsible for promulgating the news in the society. Many political parties, judiciary systems, corporate businesses and other affluent people of the society govern what should be released as "news" from media. Media industries have to abide by the rules formulated by the all these governing bodies of the society.

Secondly, media industries run by popularity and people's demand. There is abysmal competition in today's world market in all these sectors and at every level. So to cope up with such competition and to be on the top ,the broadcasters have no choice but to publish news that is biased. People want to know what is all sensational and latest. Therefore, broadcasters too , telecast only what people want to see, without wasting money and time. In order to do this, they naturally focus more on bad news such as crime, natural disasters, illness, bomb blasts, plane crash, frauds etc. because it's human tendency to get lured by sufferings more than anything else.

So now the question arises, whether have we become used to the bad news?? In my opinion, we do become desensitized if we hear the same type of news everyday. So to add some variety and to spice things up editors should provide their readers with a good blend of good and bad news. By providing a different positive perspective of the usual everyday news they will be able to ward off the growing competition too.

Hence to conclude I would say that the news that reach to us is not always a real news. The freedom of providing genuine information and news to the public is grossly constrained by the interests of many influential groups of the society. Therefore, people of the nation should not form an opinion about anything based merely on the facts provided by the newspaper or television.
dolly   
Apr 15, 2012
Writing Feedback / "The best way to give advice to other people .....attain it. [2]

""The best way to give advice to other people is to find out what they want and then advise them how to attain it."

As someone has very well said that " most of the people who ask for advice from others have already resolved to act as it pleases them " .I, therefore, firmly believe the notion that yes, we should give the advice to the others, in a way they want to have it. When people ask for someone's advice then that person is inundated with various options and his mind is not helping him out in making a choice, so it is beneficial for him to ask for someone else's advice, who from outside can judge his situation under the given circumstances and can help him in giving some valuable advice. I strongly feel that we should always try to put ourselves in other's shoes and then only should advise others.

I would like to elucidate my perspective by a few examples. For example, I will take a very basic example from our day-to-day life. These days there are many coaching centers or consultancies which provide information to the students regarding admissions in various universities and also help them in selecting the course, but they always do this only after asking students what their preference is and also other issues they are pondering over. In my opinion, the students cannot just take the advice of the consultation company which is according to the company's choice. There are many considerations that are in students's mind that should be asked by the respective companies if they want the students to accept their given advice, because it is ultimately the students who have to face the circumstances and not the companies.

This issue we often encounter in our daily lives , when someone asks us about whether he should buy certain mobile or gadget etc and in these cases our usual prompt question to them is " mate what are your needs?" So it directly boils down to the fact that advices are beneficial to someone only if they agree to the terms and conditions of the person who is asking for the advice.If we are giving advices according to our beliefs and ideologies and want them to follow the same approaches that we would have followed then it is quite unlikely that person will agree to those advices or approaches because of the simple logic that the person is seeking the advice that could be followed and implemented in the future run.
dolly   
Apr 10, 2012
Writing Feedback / to what extent should government be able to censor television or radio programs [3]

Censorship of the television or radio programs has always been a bone of contention.Some people believe that such shows should be carefully examined by the censor board members before airing them to the general public; while others are from totally different school of thought ;believing ,that to censor or ban programs from being aired is against the human rights to express. In my opinion , censorship is imperative not only for the felicity of the human beings in general but also for the amicability among various sectors of the society. I would like to elucidate this point further through various exemplifications.

First of all , in my opinion , if this topic is so controversial there is definitely something about it ,that is bothering many people ; it has something in itself that needs to be considered. The majority of public viewers are children and young adults.They are in the critical stages of mental development. If this age groups get subjected to the kind of television or radios shows that are scatological or are blasphemous then it will surely be detrimental for their mental health. For example there was a television program that was aired live on many channels known as super bowl by Justin Timberlake. That show had a few scenes of obscenity and was not censored. These kind of shows should definitely be censored. Though I also agree that it is the parent's duty to stop their children from watching such television shows but what if they go and watch it somewhere else. When it comes to children , they always try to emulate the acts they see on television done by their favorite super hero and this could be life threatening at some stages.

Also I would like to make my point more clear by giving the example of one more uncensored dutch tv show that broadcasted the program showing atrocious cannibalism stunts.There are many shows on televisions that are made specially for adults so I believe they should not be aired during the prime time when it is more likely that children can watch them .

There is one more example that I would like to present , there were a few songs by Marshall Mathers displaying misogyny that is not very healthy for the society. Other such programs , songs or speeches that could result in disharmony among the society should always be banned. Because the ultimate goal of everyone is to live happily and let others also live happily then I don't think such kind of entertainment mediums are of any help.Even if these are required for knowledge or entertainment then should be restricted only to adult public viewing, else could even result into something disastrous or may be civil war.
dolly   
Feb 24, 2011
Writing Feedback / Every generation of people is different in important ways. How about your generation? [7]

The growing advancements , the upgrading technologies have changed human living pattern in a way unprecedented, but do all these things are bringing changes in the cultures , from my perspective ,yes , a tremendous change has followed after all these advancements and discoveries. But still the realities of life will remain the same for the ages to come.The feeling of love , altruism , care all will not vanish till mankind inhabits this earth.

In my opinion, the previous generation had some advantages that we do not have while they lacked in the things that make our life extremely convenient. One of the most basic thing is , earlier when no computers were there , the people used to go the government offices every now and then to deposit multi-utility bills, to make reservations etc . They were made to stand in the queue for hours. But since now every sector of the society is equipped with this extremely beneficial service, there is no more a need to go the offices in person to make reservations or to deposit bills In the same context , I also want to highlight about the facility of ATM that was not provided earlier by the banks and people used to take leave from work or from studies to go to the bank .

But on the other hand, the advancements made in the food technology has though made our life comfortable but had also compromised the quality of food that we eat today. In the past , most of the people were involved in the agriculture and all enjoyed the pure and natural food. There was no use of fertilizers or pesticides to grow crops, but now all these things have taken over the field of agriculture and thus hampered the food quality too.

Since the growth of industrialization is now unstoppable and people are forced to work more . They do not have time for their families and themselves. People do not have time to get involve in the recreational activities. But this was not the case with our previous generation. The working times were not so demanding and people were able to fulfill their personal commitments too after accomplishing their professional goals.

So though we enjoy more of the materialistic life ,they enjoyed a real life that comprised of joy , happiness , frolic,peace and freedom. Therefore , I feel such is life, you can not enjoy everything in this world. Somethings they got , some we got , that is how God tries to create balance in the nature.
dolly   
Feb 22, 2011
Writing Feedback / Museums are the buildings that preserve objects of importance [7]

Thank you so much Susan for all the help that you are rendering here to all the students. I have learned a lot from your advices.I have my exam in four days. But now I am more worried about my speaking section. Lets see what happens.
dolly   
Feb 21, 2011
Writing Feedback / 'Important from medical point of view' - Pets should be treated like family members [3]

Humans are the soicial beings they love to interact and communicate and so are animals. They are similar to human beings in many ways. They have their own way to express their love and emotions, its just that they can not speak like we do. In my opinion pets should be treated like family members because its more of our desire to keep them with us then theirs to be with us. They are happy in their community and they also enjoy freedom . But its we humans who make this separation and susequent captivation for fulfilling our own desires. Therefore , its not our wish to whether treat them as our family member or not rather I feel its our moral duty to provide them with everything that we have taken from them. For example, we bring a small 2 days or week old puppy to make our children happy without even thinking about that the mother of that pup or how that pup must be feeling without the warmth of his mother. I feel its so inhuman if we do not provide him with the same love or care that its mother would have given to him.

Another fact is that pets are extremely helpul for us . They are great companions for those who are lonely and want someone to share their feelings , believe me , they have their own way of expressing their feelings that just cannot be explained in words. They give us a great lesson of forgiveness, Whenever we are agitated we scold them for our mistakes but they return to us the next moment , completely forgetting what we did to them. Forgiveness is a great virtue that we all should learn from them.

Apart from this , they also important from medical point of view. Many researches have concluded that pets are greatly helpful in relieving stress and overcoming distress , the key factors responsible for many cardiovascular and psychological diseases like depression. Sometimes they can also help us in carrying out many household works , like a dog can look after for kid when you are busy in your kitchen or call look after your house when you are not at home.Therefore , I feel that the only way in which we can reciprocate this love, care and affection ,that they show us ,is by treating them as our own family member.
dolly   
Feb 21, 2011
Writing Feedback / large amount of money or earn comfortable living [3]

It has been said about money that " money is not everything , but it is something.", and I believe that too . In my opinion , though money is not the most important thing in our life but has some importance.It is a very subjective matter and has been debated from the time when the trade started and money came into existence. People come to this world, study hard to gain knowledge and then utilize this knowledge in the work sector to make money .But the question that arises here is whether to make money is the only objective of life, then I feel "no". Life is too small and too valuable to be wasted like this to earn more and more money.One should consider his family requirments and commitments before getting into such jobs that though pay you a large sum of money yet completely spoils your personal life.

There a few people who start their work early morning and go to office without knowing when are they going to come back, and in return of this the company pays him a huge sum of money. Here I would like to emphasize that these people dont even know where to spend this money , they do not have time to enjoy with this money earned.Inspite of having all the money required sometimes they are not able to be with there dear ones or family when their personal presence matters more than just their money. For example, in a few houses I have seen that the husband is working in a big multinational company and is having an pecunious life but his family is always waiting to meet him. He has no time to sit and play with his children. This person may feel that what he is doing is to give his family a comfortable life but I feel that our closed ones expect us to give a happy and enjoyable life rather than a life where parents do not have time for their own children.

I totally agree that money is essential for the survival but it should not become our obsession. A reasonable amount of money that can easily and comfortably suffice one's family needs is much better than a sum of money that puts at stake your personal life.Therefore , I think it is better to earn and get satisfied with money which is giving you a comfortable life rather than a large sum of money .
dolly   
Feb 18, 2011
Undergraduate / "my Uncle Raymond" - a person you admire & how they have influenced your life [7]

you are not " formed" better to use " for you growth and development".
The most influential people in my life are probably not even aware of the things they've taught me. When reflecting on personal influences in my life, no one has had a greater impact than my Uncle Raymond. He is and always continues to be a positive role model to me. He is always there when I am at the bottom of my game, always backing me up on decisions I make even though I don't usually choose the wisest path . He encourages me to stand up tall and get back on my own feet.My uncle influenced my personality and made me a person that I am today. He has taught me various lessons of life, shown me the difference between the right and wrong behaviour and motivated me to pursue these lessons.Whenever I need advice , I can always count on my uncle .He has exerted real influence on me to change me . I know that much of what I am today is due to him. He has played a big role throughout my life .

( write something new) He understands me very well , knows my strengths and weaknesses and always tries to convert my weaknesses into my strengths. He has enlightened me with the real world situations and how to deal with them.The appropriate behaviour in the society , that I needed, was also instilled by him.
dolly   
Feb 16, 2011
Writing Feedback / IELTS:companies rather than government pay for and conduct most scientific research [3]

In today's world, private companies rather than government pay for and conduct most scientific research. Do you think the advantages outweigh disadvantages?


In the present dynamic and advancing era there is much more involvemnet of the private companies compared to the government. But whether is privatisation is beneficial or not is one of the most debated topics in the business sectors. The results of privatisation are always overwhelming , therefore in my opinion, the companies should pay for and conduct scietific researches.

In the past , the researches were conducted only by the government sectors but these days the emergence of private companies have made drastic changes in the research field too.The first reason is that, the private companies when pay money to their employees they demnad results in return of that.The employees are bound to work efficiently and are subjected to the explanations demanded by the companies , in case of the non satisfactory results. Therefore work in these companies are carried out in a more dexterous and adept manner, compared to the work done by the government companies.

Secondly, the private companies carry out the researches expeditiously, because there are huge number of companies working on the same project. Because of this competition among the companies , the final results of the researches come very early , which is ultimately benefial for the public only.

There is another reason why I feel that it is better to get the researches done by private sectors because the governmnet 's main stay of focus remains the general welfare of the society ,as a whole . The government funds also get distributed to a large diversified sectors of the society and the money for research becomes a secondary requirment.

Therefore,, from my perspective , its better that privatisation takes place in research field also, which is essential to ameliorate the process of advancement and upgradation of science and technology.
dolly   
Feb 15, 2011
Writing Feedback / TOEFL-Internet, good or bad?Each coin has both sides [2]

Internet is one of the most significant achievements of mankind. This facility has transformed the life style in a way, unprecedented. The amount of information availability and its exchange has made the bygone means of such transactions completely redundant. The mainstay of internet is the free and unlimited access to virtually any type of information that an individual wishes to seek. Such openness has its perceived pitfalls and some of which are grossly inappropriate. It is this facet of internet that may give rise to the need of censorship or control.

Both these regulatory measures would require a mechanism and organization to enforce certain e-laws. The very nature of internet puts a serious limitation on its practical implementation because the flow and extent of information requires such elaborate instruments that will detect, analyse and censor the contents before such are put on the net. Given the limitlessness of such flow, I think it is not only technically impossible but also much against the basic nature of internet. It is also a known truth that a certain type of material may be completely objectionable in certain societies and countries but commonplace in the other. It is therefore my belief that educating the users at various levels, which incidentally is happening must precede censorship and control that can be built through firewalls and filters at the user's end and not at the source. Because any effort to regulate the source will be against the very spirit of internet and in any case, humanity will find ways and means to build its own regulatory mechanism driven simply by the instinct to survive in a healthy world.
dolly   
Feb 15, 2011
Scholarship / Lunch with Audrey Hepburn + Economics - UCLA scholarship [4]

In the other essay , grammar is almost correct. If you better better words and sentences then I can help you.
In this ever progressing or advancing world...why complex..??

With an education in Economics, I would be equipped with the knowledge to contribute to the next set of creative solutions for healing our economy. ( Education in economics can help me in the containment of knowledge that can aid in ameliorating the present economical state.

The economic recessions have world -wide detrimental effects (here this south korea example) . These pernicious effects affects our educational systems too, thus jeopardizing much needed educational opportunities .( then here you can give the example of your school).

University of California would be an ideal environment to further my academic studies and foster my abilities.
UCLA,s altruistic devotion towards...
I would love to contribute to this diversity( I too am eager to contribute to this devotion made by the University.
dolly   
Feb 15, 2011
Scholarship / Lunch with Audrey Hepburn + Economics - UCLA scholarship [4]

to converse about how did she live her life ,which was so extraordinary..Even today, she is still recognized as adept and dexterous young actress and also as one of the greatest inspiration for many young women, like me. As I read a book of her, I came to realize her pure and elegant lifestyle as an actress, mother, and a UNICEF president.

you can also use her prim and poised lifestyle...( if you like to..no compulsion) as an actress, mother and a UNICEF president.
not only in career, but also in the choices she made in her personal life all which are , I consider, to be important for every youngster.

Audrey would start talking about ...this is I feel a bit awkward.You can write I would I like her to tell me about how she confronted the difficulties that came in her life and inspite of all of these difficulties she acheived her goals witha great zeal.

Despite of , having troublesome times, she succeeded as a charismatic musical and Hollywood star with tenacity.
I think there is this problem that you are not writing what you would ask her instead of that you are just mentioning yourself the known facts about her. In my opinion you should try to use these facts to frame the questions you would like her while having lunch with her.

This is just a personal opinion, a very few grammatical errors are there..good luck!!!
dolly   
Feb 15, 2011
Writing Feedback / Getting advice from friends who are older than you is more valuable [4]

I dont know but I think we dont face options..options indeed help us...we face problems everyday..
we have a friend , whom we can ask for an advice
older " than" you
friends of same age.
I am prone...
friends " who " not that
I think all the main paragraphs should not start with the same line.
Otherwise your writing skill is really very good. Please help me too with the same.
dolly   
Feb 15, 2011
Writing Feedback / modern technology; everyone follows the culture of his own [7]

yes Jack it should definitely be " invention". yes " it has been following " is much better. I think I should review my essays after writing them. Thank you so much for pointing out my mistakes.

And thnx Waheed.
dolly   
Feb 14, 2011
Writing Feedback / toefl topic: take one additional thing for a trip [3]

I am a very avid traveller and have an alacrity to see different places in the world and meet different people. In this fast growing world we rarely get time to travel but as and when this opportunity is bestowed upon me , I try to make full use of it.Apart from carrying all my usual stuff and personal care things I always carry with me my laptop.

In todays technologically advanced world , computers have become an imperative need. We need computers in every sphere of life. I feel if I carry my laptop with me it can be of great help in many ways. These days we can very easily get cheap wireless internet connections anywhere in the world. So I just need to buy an internet connection and I am virtually connected to the entire world. It can aid me making my travel plans and can also help me in making amendments if I land up in some troublesome situtation during travel.

During travel we are away from our family and friends but if we have a computer with internet connection then we can very easily communicate with them.It also hepl us in overcoming the nostalgia that we sometimes feel when we are away from our dear ones.

We always take pictures while travelling.A computer is required to transfer them because of many reasons, the first reason is tranferring photographs will create more space in the digital camera, the second reason is we can readily send these pictures to our families and friends and also watching pictures on the computer screen is better than seeing them on the cam itself.

Another very useful aid of laptop will be, we can be in touch with our business or work area also.If we have computer with us during travelling, we can always discuss with our co-workers the situation in the office and can also give them our advice to solve the issues going on in our absence from office or business.

Therefore, from my viewpoint , laptop is one of the most important thing that we should always carry when we are travelling not only because it help us in making our tour plans but it is also a mode of communivcation with friends and family. though I too believe that we should not concentarte much on work when we are on holidays but I still need be , then we can once in awhile check what is going on the work area while we are away from that place.
dolly   
Feb 14, 2011
Writing Feedback / toelf-A transportation vehicle that has changed people's lives. [6]

1.The invention, production and distribution of the automobileshave radically altered people lives more than any other trasportation inventions.The different ways in which automoblies have changed human life are as follows.

2.Before automobile industries emerged or came...
3.even though at times they used horses and other livestocks as a means of transport.
we cannot deny the fact..its better to like this" the transportation at that time was restricted to the horses or livestocks and this had limited the trade and communication between the countries."

4.Due to impecuniouness , the people were unaware and ignorant that ultimately,resulted in an underdeveloped economy.
The points are really good , but there are some grammatical errors, and the sentence formation is a bit complex.
dolly   
Feb 14, 2011
Writing Feedback / favor food, why it's so special [10]

I think if you write about some regional cusine ..I mean if you start by writing about the main group and then progressing to the main dish...it will provide you with more structure . for example , if can start by writing about Italian or indian or Seafood and then describing about the particular dish you like in that group.

Hope I am able to convey what I was trying to explain here!!!
dolly   
Feb 14, 2011
Writing Feedback / Museums are the buildings that preserve objects of importance [7]

Museums are the buildings where the artifacts and other objects of scientific, artistic or historic importance are collected kept, preserved and exhibited for public viewing. Museums are the representatives of the nation's culture and heritage. They display the rare collections and mater pieces from the history for the benefit of the future generation. From my perspective it is really very important to visit the museum of that nation while visiting that country for the first time.

The first reason is that, just a visit to the famous museum of that place , would help you in understanding the history , culture , the basic art form and tradition of that place. The museums are always the major attraction for the tourists because people who want to explore the world want to gain knowledge about different people and different cultures. They want to know how different civilizations emerged and came into existence. And hence for these people the museums are the most important place to see .Museums alone can give them the overview of that society.

The second reason is people also like to visit museums because they not only feel that museums are source of entertainment but also are the great source of knowledge and information. The students who are doing researches and writing papers and thesis also prefer to visit museums and to get in depth knowledge of that subject. Many museums have preserved the very ancient literatures which can be of great help for the students.

The museums are mainly the collections of the rarest arts and sculptures. The architecture of the museum is in itself worth watching. The famous Louvre museum in Paris is the most famous and most visited museum in the world because it is the oldest museum and has some rarest collections like the world famous painting of Mona Lisa.

Then there are other types of museums like scientific museums which help us to know how earlier inventions and discoveries were made and were the methods that people were using before the discoveries were made. Therefore I believe that museums are the links between our history and our future and one must visit museums to learn from our past to improve our future knowledge and needs
dolly   
Feb 14, 2011
Writing Feedback / The advanced technology help students easily learn knowledge. TOEFL essay [6]

1. students get knowledge( better than wisdoms) in different ways.
2. problem I face in studies.
3.If I were born in the ancient times...

although I feel that you could have added the point the human brain grasps more when it actually visualizes the things rather than just by reading about that...like there are many experiments available on Internet that can neither be done on routine basis in the college laboratories nor can be understood just by reading in the books.

You can give example of projectors used in the modern classrooms.
televisions has also helped a lot in providing knowledge in various subjects.
Modern libraries are also much better than what were there in the older days.
ebooks are the latest advancements that has emerged as a boon to the students.
dolly   
Feb 14, 2011
Writing Feedback / The invention of microwave has brought dramatic changes in the cooking process [2]

During the past many years there are variety of advancements made which have tremendously changed our living standard. These advancements have brought revolutionary changes in the food industry too. Change is the most constant happening around us in the real world. And it is also a known fact that every change has its pros and cons. In my opinion, it is totally a subjective matter how you take this change as. Since I belong to the working class of the society and I feel that the recent advancements in the food technology have come up with enormous amount of benefit to the mankind.

The invention of microwave has brought dramatic changes in the cooking process. You just have to press a button, wait for a few seconds and food will be ready. In addition to this, the food prepared by this method is also very low in calories, thus minimizing the risk for many health related issues.

The life has become so convenient because of the widespread use of all these kitchen gadgets. The easy availability of precooked, canned and frozen food have made life so comfortable. Today people do not have much time to cook because of their pursuit to gain more in less time, so that they can cope up with this competitive world. All these frozen food items are highly liked by the ones who are settled in the foreign countries but can easily get canned items from their own countries. These food items also give us variety. Earlier it was very difficult to cook food according to everyone's choice , especially during the early hours of the day but now it has become a piece of cake, courtesy growth of food technologies

In the present era, people have become more health conscious. Considering this fact many food companies are coming up with the products specific to the group of people who are suffering from some or the other health problems. Like sugar substitutes for diabetics and obese, salt substitutes for hypertensives , low fat milk products for heart patients, even chocolates and ice- creams are available which are extremely low in calories.

Because all these known facts , I personally feel that the development made in the field of food technology is highly remarkable and should be acclaimed all over the world. Although there are a few disadvantages also of using all these modern technologies, but are comparatively negligible and can be resolved also sooner or later by the researchers.
dolly   
Feb 14, 2011
Writing Feedback / Schools should fund the classes and extracurricular activities with the same money [8]

vaishali ,I belive in both the above written essays..the opinion has been clearly mentioned.Emily has written" the later prevails" and too have clearly stated there that " both should be given equal funds by the universities". I agree that the introduction paragraph could have been made more effective.ill work on that!! thnx for the help!!
dolly   
Feb 14, 2011
Writing Feedback / modern technology; everyone follows the culture of his own [7]

Modern technologies have gained too much advancement through the past few decades. Researches and developments in the diversified fields are changing the life style of the people in the entire world. But whether these advancements and changes in the life styles are changing the cultures of the countries is one of the most debated topics these days. In my opinion, it is impossible to make the single world culture by the unification of different cultures. The technologies are growing, developing and advancing since the humans have inhabited the land, but did the culture changed and turned into a single culture , in my opinion the answer is "no".

I fully agree that the discovery of computers and internet has come like a boon to mankind. Through this the worldwide communication has increased. People are gaining knowledge about other cultures, but this does not mean that they are fully adopting the other culture and this is because some are interested in Indian culture, while others are interested in Chinese culture or the American or European culture etc. Therefore, different people have different choices and all follow the culture of their choice.

In my opinion, once we grow up, it becomes difficult for us to adapt to the changes going on around the world. Generally human body tries to follow the same pattern that it is following since birth. Therefore, though people learn about other cultures its really very difficult for them to follow it or adapt to these cultures, considering the others in their surroundings are not following that culture. People generally prefer to follow the long lived culture of their own country even when they are away from that place. For example, my husband and I live in a foreign country but we still follow our Indian culture because it is really difficult to adapt to a new culture.

Another reason is that, culture is primarily based on the religions and traditions that a country follows and resorting to modern technology does not mean that people will change their believes and religions .

Therefore, from my perspective, it is difficult for all to follow one particular world culture because everyone follows the culture of his own interest and also we are adapted to since our birth to one culture, which is really difficult to abandon. The culture is inherited to us and using advanced technologies does not mean that we are changing our culture.
dolly   
Feb 13, 2011
Writing Feedback / IELTS - pros and cons; working or traveling before starting university studies [5]

1.Therefore takes education more seriously...
2.Besides gaining new experiences it can also help them to choose their subject of interest.
3.opportunity "where " they can work voluntarily.
4.since they do not have much responsibilities at that point of time compared to future when they have to meet the needs of the family too.
dolly   
Feb 13, 2011
Writing Feedback / "What is Success": LUCK OR HARD WORK? [6]

Thank you Mr. Hoang. and can you please explain me in detail what do you exactly want me to write about passion and determination in this essay. Looking forward to your help.
dolly   
Feb 13, 2011
Writing Feedback / "What is Success": LUCK OR HARD WORK? [6]

The basic question that comes into our consideration here is "what is success". Is becoming reputed and dignified in the society you live in ,is success? For me neither success nor failure is constant, to become successful is to accomplish your dreams and to achieve your goals. Even a common man living with his small but very happy family, in my belief is successful, compared to a bureaucrat who has not yet accomplished his goals.Everyone has different ambitions in his life,ranging from becoming distinguished in the society to be pecunious.

I feel the better word for "luck" is "opportunity". In my opinion, success comes to those who work hard and well utilize the opportunity bestowed upon them. As it has been said about luck "The lady luck is very greedy" it comes only to those who really work hard to achieve something great in life and who believe in the realization of their dreams. These people are bound to become successful but on the other hand, the people who are indolent and wait for the luck to fall upon them are destined to lose at the end.

The people who became famous just because of sheer luck are rare and they can not be our role models. The exceptions are not the rules. We are never advised to follow these rare or exceptional people in the world. For example , the people who became rich just by winning the lotteries are very few and we should not follow these people because it may happen that we risk all of our life's savings in buying lottery tickets and end up in nothing.

Hence we have to continue working hard and one day when the opportunity will come we can surely achieve our goals. But the person who is just sitting and waiting for the right time to come will not be able to do anything when this opportunity will be there because he is lacking in the basic skills and knowledge as he has never worked hard. And even if he gets this opportunity somehow ,he is more likely to fail because of his inability to put efforts continuously , in that field.

Therefore I very firmly believe that hard work is the most essential and basic key to success and the success is very different from becoming famous. Success is , in my opinion, the accomplishment of your dreams and goals, and that can be achieved only by hard work accompanied by patience to never give up till you achieve your goal.
dolly   
Feb 13, 2011
Writing Feedback / Parents can give everything to their children. They understand them more than anyone else does. [5]

Although many people think that parents are just our primary teachers and not the best teachers, yet I very strongly believe that the parents are our best teachers or mentors. When the child comes to this world his parents are the only humans he knows. Some psychologists too believe that basic growth of the child occurs when he is very young. He tends to learn faster when he is young and that time he has only his parents to learn from. He somehow tries to copy everything his parents are doing and by the time he reaches the outside world he has already learnt the basics of life. Parents have an unconditional love for their children. They understand their child more than anyone else does. Parents are the first to teach their children the moral values that are to be instilled at a very early age. The sense of belonging and love that the parents have for their children is far beyond comparison. All this personal care and affection a child cannot get from his teachers in the school or from his friends.

The parents understand the weaknesses and strengths of their children and they give their best to convert their child's weakness into his strength. The teachers in the school are not there with children all the time. She spends only a part of day with them. The parents are always around their child carefully watching their actions and deeds and if there is something that is objectionable they immediately try to correct that, unlike the teachers in the school who are there only during the class.

There is one more quality of parents that that cannot be weighed against anything else is their patience. The parents generally show immense amount of patience towards their child. They generally pardon the mistakes of their child and make him understand that the mistake is not supposed to be repeated again. They are very extremely flexible considering the demands of their child but also keep in mind that they do not have to overdo it else that can convert to a habit.

Therefore, I believe that the parents not only give their child support in the academics but also benevolently teach him the imperative lessons of life that would be of more importance in the real world than the academic knowledge alone.
dolly   
Feb 13, 2011
Writing Feedback / Television promotes propaganda and it destroyed the communication among friends and family? [7]

Television has emerged as a one of the most successful inventions of the 20th century. Television has become a necessity of nearly every house but the topic of discussion here is whether it has lessened the communication among friends and families ,then I undoubtedly believe, yes it has. Although I too like watching television yet I prefer to sit with my friends and family members and discuss things other than daily soaps.

I recollect the time from my childhood when there was no television at our home. We used to sit together and talk about things happening around us. But when television came to our home in the later years of my life, as my grandparents asked for the one, I observed a great change in everyone's life-style. Earlier we all used to sit together for lunch and dinner, but when the television came my father started having his food sitting in front of the television.

I believe television has also reduced the use of other healthy means of recreation like playing outside sports, dance, listening music etc. When we were young, my brother and I had the habit of playing together in the evenings but then he preferred to spend his time watching sports on the television. Earlier children were told to go outside and play but now even some parents flatter their children by saying if they will complete their homework they are allowed to watch television for an extra hour.

Television is widening the gap between all the sectors of the society. People when get time from their enervating jobs they prefer to sit in front of television, instead of going out with their friends and family to get some fresh air.

Now since television has taken its place in nearly every house I think people should distribute their time and should not waste their time watching sitcoms and soap operas , in fact there are many channels that provide us wide range of knowledge and information like National geographic , History, BBC World etc. Here I would like to mention that , all these channels make us up- to- date with what is going on in the field science and technology, economy , politics etc.. therefore spending an hour or so watching these channels is also beneficial, but other shows on television make people a passive viewer that impairs the mental growth also all these shows are really addictive. So one should wisely distribute their and should not make compromise with their mental and physical health.

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