dolly
Jul 30, 2013
Writing Feedback / [TOEFL] Should we pay professional athletes (entertainers) a high salary? [5]
From my prospect- I am not sure, but " from my perspective" is better.Even I need clarification on this.
As we are now live in a competent world- As we now live in a competent world.
we must show ourselves to be great enough- " we must prove ourselves worthy enough" sounds better.
Fairness is not about equal payments for everyone, but equal chances to acquire the same goal or accomplishment.- Great point!!
In other words, if they are not paid high enough in order to conform to their performances, there might not be such brilliant performances for us to be amazed. - I don't agree with this because I believe their performances do not depend on the salaries they get. So, to prove your point if you can give some example then that would be great.
From my prospect- I am not sure, but " from my perspective" is better.Even I need clarification on this.
As we are now live in a competent world- As we now live in a competent world.
we must show ourselves to be great enough- " we must prove ourselves worthy enough" sounds better.
Fairness is not about equal payments for everyone, but equal chances to acquire the same goal or accomplishment.- Great point!!
In other words, if they are not paid high enough in order to conform to their performances, there might not be such brilliant performances for us to be amazed. - I don't agree with this because I believe their performances do not depend on the salaries they get. So, to prove your point if you can give some example then that would be great.