Writing Feedback / if you could make one important change in a school (Toefl) [3]

If you could make one important change in a school that you attended, what change would you make? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.

There are a lot of things, which could be changed in my university, such as classrooms, libraries, labs, and so on. However, changing the professors is the most important thing that I would really like to be occurred. In this regard, I argue that professors have a significant role in universities, so I would like to change them because our university needs to knowledgeable professors, some people who encourage students to interact with one another, and some people could prepare students for social activities.

Mainly, our university does not knowledgeable professors who could increase the students' information in a certain subject. Indeed, our university needs to professors who are updated and who know a lot about their major. Also, good professors are some people who are able to answer most of the question about a topic, such as one of my professors who was able to explain perfectly, and almost all students were content.

Moreover, professors should allow students to participate in discussions. Professors who let their students to take part in debates cause a lot of information and data transfer among students, and it causes student feel tranquility because they get a lot of information, and they are able to pass their exams easily. In addition, students have to study some by-books to be prepared for the class. For example, I had to study many books to obtain plenty of materials for the international politics class.

Last but not least, professors should prepare students for many social activities; in other words, they should learn all skills and aptitudes which are necessary for the students' future. Also, students should be ready for their jobs in which they would have interaction with other people in society. Students, for example, could be able to assist poor people who are not able to pay money to services' students.

To sum up, professors have an undeniable role in universities, and in my university, unfortunately, they are not perfect ones. Indeed, we need some people who are knowledgeable, let students to interact with one another, and reinforce students' skills in social activities. That is why, in my view, changing professors is the most important task of mine if I could make one important change in my university.

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Writing Feedback / People have different ways of escaping the stress and difficulties of modern life [2]

People have different ways of escaping the stress and difficulties of modern life. Some read; some exercise; others work in their gardens. What do you think are the best ways of reducing stress?

Some people would rather exercise or study to reduce their stress and difficulties of modern life; however, I prefer to talk with somebody, such as my family or friends. In this regard, I argue that talking with other people has several positive advantages for the person who is under stress because that person are able to interact with others, obtain some pieces of advice, and finally feel tranquility.

Mainly, people are capable of interacting with others. Indeed, people could talk to their family or friends and give some pieces of information for their lives. In other words, people who tell their difficulties are able to relieve their stress. Also, when they decide to tell their story's lives, they would quit a few negative energies around their workplace, university, and so on. For example, when I am anxious about anything that I cannot solve it, I talk to my friends, then I feel better.

Moreover, when people decide to communicate with other people, they could get some pieces of appropriate advice. Also, they could improve their lives and their lives' manner, such as a student who gets a bad score, and he decides to talk with his advisor, so he is able to improve his way in studying books and other materials. Therefore, more information and data about anything that we are worry about them help us to relieve our stress because we know better how to be faced them.

Last but not least, people who say something about their lives to others would feel quietness and silence. Indeed, families and friends are the best people who understand us, and their speech would pacify our worries. For instance, when I talk with my father, I feel tranquility because he knows me very well he is aware how to behave and treat. In addition, these people might help us to solve difficulties or problems through lending money, saying pray, and so forth. Inasmuch as they are not under stress and pressure could direct us to the better situation. One of my relatives, for example, need some money and my father as a member of our big family keeps trying to find a solution, such as finding a loaner or preparing money by borrowing from his friends.

To sum up, I prefer to talk with someone who could relieve my stress and increase my life expectancy. I support this idea because I can communicate with others, get some bits of advice, and finally feel silence. That is why I would rather talk to my family and friends.

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Writing Feedback / Toefl: active class or inactive one [3]

Some students like classes where teachers lecture (do all of the talking) in class. Other students prefer classes where the students do some of the talking.

Some students would rather just listen to the professor, and they do not interest in participating in class, but I prefer an active class, which students take part in the discussion and keep trying to talk about topics. In this regard, I argue that in an active class, students could interact with professor, obtain more information, and learn better.

Mainly, students are able interact with the professor and other students. Indeed, students have communication with their professor and other students, so they display an active class perfectly. Also, students are capable of direct the discussion and do not permit that the professor's speech tends to some irrelative issues. For example, students may ask a question which professor has to answer and forget that irrelative issue.

Moreover, students could get more information and data about their lesson. A student could get more information about a certain subject from other students rather than in an inactive class, which no students join the discussion. In addition, many students might have to study some other books or essays to be prepared in the class. For instance, in my class, I read other books about International Politics course because I cannot get a good score without extra study.

Last but not least, students could learn better. Indeed, they are able to remember the materials in their mind very well because their debates cause, they do not be forgotten by students. Students who take part in the debate could feel tranquility because they remember the materials, and they would be hopeful that they could get a good score in their exams. For example, in my

class, I participated in debates, and I got a good mark, so I was happy and glad, and it brought quietness and silence.

To sum up, I strongly support this kind of class, which students join the discussion and talk to professor because they are able to have interaction with the professor, increase their knowledge by getting more information, and learn the materials better. That is why I think classes should be active.

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Writing Feedback / Some movies are serious, designed to make the audience think. Other movies are not. [4]

Some movies are serious, designed to make the audience think. Other movies are designed primarily to amuse and entertain. Which type of movie do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Some people like movies which are serious, but others prefer some ones, which are amusing and entertaining. In this regard, I argue that serious movies have several positive advantages that I would rather watch them. These movies are preferable because they improve our knowledge, increase our skills, and they are entertaining.

Mainly, almost all serious movies develop our knowledge. Indeed, people by watching instructive movies could change their lives. For example, they learn how train their children. Also, people could improve their behavior in their society or community with others. Thus, people would feel tranquility and quietness due to developing their knowledge, and getting more information and data about a better life-style.

Moreover, people are able to progress in their skills. Indeed, people are capable of increasing their experience through watching movies, which transfer experience of others, such as authors, director, and so on. People may find a better job, or doing their works better because the new view which comes from those movies brings them new aptitudes. For example, people learn how to keep doing serious tasks in their workplace. In addition, people by learning new life's skills are able to change their lives. Students, for example, learn that the actor or actress in the movie does his assignments in the morning, and he or she studies hard all the day.

Last but not least, these kinds of movies are entertaining and amusing as well. People could watch movies on the TV or in the cinema as a way of having fun with their family or friends. Also, many people enjoy watching serious movies because they must think for understanding movies' purposes. For instance, people see a movie which is a comic one; nevertheless, this movie lies among serious movies, and people get pleasure when their watch it beside their family or friends.

To sum up, I prefer serious movies because these movies enhance our knowledge about our lives, improve our lives' skills, and they could be amusing. That is why I prefer serious movies.

Writing Feedback / Knowledge is more significant. Experience refers to a direct contact, often comes after a long time. [3]

It has been said, "Not everything that is learned is contained in books." Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books. In your opinion, which source is more important? Why?

I agree with this statement that "Not everything that is learned is contained in books." However, many people, especially a few educated people do not admit this declaration. In this regard, I argue that knowledge which obtains from experience could be more important because an experience refers to a direct contact, often comes after a long time, and it could be more confident.

Mainly, people through a direct contact are able to gain an effective experience in their lives. Indeed, people get experienced by the presence and observe their environment, whereas studying does not display everything. Also, people acquire experience by full of their energy and feeling, so they would be able to find out everything, while is not be possible to get everything by studying. In addition, people do not forget any details as to any events or occurrences, but they may forget something by studying.

Moreover, experience comes after a long period. Indeed, people attempt to get an experience that may take a long time. Whereas people who just study to gain knowledge might lose some pieces of their knowledge because they do not endeavor for getting information and data. Also, people meet difficulties and problems for obtaining experience, and these difficulties bring many positive advantages for people to learn and increase their knowledge, while there is no drudgery in the way of studying some books or magazines. For example, students must write tens of papers and essays to become a knowledgeable and experienced person in their major.

Last but not least, people believe their experience as a real fact, so they are more confident about it rather than their studies. Indeed, people touch many different situations, and gain some experiences. Students, for instance, know how to study for getting a good score after plenty of exams. Many events have been repeated during people's lives that bring assurance for them. For example, students take a deep breath and try to relax, when they give a speech because they perceive some benefits of this action.

To sum up, gaining knowledge through experience has several positive advantages, which could be more important than through study, such as a direct contact of people, passing a long time that exhibit the facts are serious, and the people's confidence about their achievements. That is why knowledge gained from experience is more significant rather than through study.

Writing Feedback / TOEFL:The expression "Never, never give up" [4]

The expression "Never, never give up" means keep trying and never
stop working for your goals. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

I agree with the statement that "Never, never give up." In other words, human should attempt to gain their goals and desires. In this regard, I argue that effort has several positive advantages because it causes encountering development, avoiding disappointment, and obtaining practical energy.

Mainly, many people try to meet progression in their lives, and endeavor to get it intently. Indeed, development is the most important purpose of human, such as develop in medicine, technology, and so on. Also, someone who concentrates on his or her abilities may gain other goals. Students, for example, keep trying to study their lessons seriously, so they might meet their bigger aims like a good career or job. In addition, people know that the purpose of evolvement is permanent quietness and tranquility, so attempting to achieve it seems logical. For instance, a drudgery to get more money and meet welfare would bring silence.

Moreover, some people hesitate or cease to follow their goals, which it causes disappointment and sadness. Many people cease their efforts, but I want to mention that many people keep an interval or hesitate, so they would lose time. Students, for instance, sometimes look disappointment to keep doing their study hard, so they lose opportunities and may fail the exams. Indeed, plenty of people don not try to reach their goals, and stop working for gaining them, so they cannot meet to flourish. For example, students don not study; thus, they cannot pass the exams, and they will fail. In addition, people who don not try might lose their life expectancy, like many African people who don not attempt to get money, and they think that they live poorly, so their dead would be inevitable.

Last but not least, keep trying renders positive energy. If people think "Never, never give up," they would observe that their endeavors might increase and seem energetic. Also, the repetition of this statement helps us to think optimistic. For instance, those students are able to get a good score, and be encouraged to continue their study hard. This emotion, I mean optimistic feel would promote people's abilities and capabilities to reach their goals sooner, such as successful students who improve their skills about their lessons.

To sum up, people's goals are accessible if they decide to keep trying to reach them contiguously. Attempt to reach these goals causes development, keeping away an disappointment, and getting practical energy. That is why I agree with this declaration that keep trying and never stop working for our goals.

Writing Feedback / Toefl: Attending a live performance is exciting, amusing and energetic. [NEW]

Some people prefer to stay at home and watching a live event on television; however, others would rather attend in a live performance, such as a play, concert, or sporting event. In this regard, I argue that there are several positive advantages for someone who decides to be present in a live show or performance because attending a live one is exciting, amusing, and energetic.

Mainly, many people and families, especially young people go to the show hall or stadium to watch a performance or a match, and they experience exciting emotions there. Indeed, people who visit face to face their popular artists and sport stars might get thrill and excitement more than someone who watches on television. In these places, people encounter cheers and shouts of the crowd or listen to the interesting music that increase exciting feelings and emotions. For example, I watched a football match in a stadium, and my favorite team won its opponent. As a matter of fact, I felt extremely excitement when I was beside other football spectators. This presence is a new experience for many people that would be ensued exciting emotion.

Moreover, this performance could be amusing for somebody who wants to be present in the show hall or stadium. Since feelings would be transferring from artists and sport stars to spectators directly, people seem to be more amusing than watching on TV. Also, a performance per se is entertaining and interesting. For instance, many people might be overwhelmed a match or a show why this is amusing when people view from near. In addition, a performance brings various, strong feelings for spectators, like tranquility or exciting emotion, which could be amusing.

Last but not least, attending in a show hall or stadium is energetic for onlookers. The attendance of people indicates unity among onlookers, and it causes obtaining energy of them. Wild shouts and cheers of the crowd, for example, are full of energy for me in a stadium. In addition, same reactions and emotions of onlookers as an indicator of unity contain positive or negative energy, such as sad or cheerful emotions. Generally, the attendance of people brings happiness and joy or sadness and unhappiness energy.

Finally, watching a live event on television is not similar to attend in a live performance due to the attendance causes exciting, amusing, and energy for people. That is why I think it is better for enthusiasts to be present in show hall or stadium.

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Writing Feedback / Toefl - 'the Earth is being damaged through human activities?' [NEW]

Some people believe that the Earth is being harmed (damaged) by
human activity. Others feel that human activity makes the Earth a
better place to live.What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and
examples to support your answer.

In my view, the Earth is being damaged through human activities rather than make the Earth better place to live. So, human activities would change our planet because we don't pay attention to our environment, there are a few disadvantages in many devices refers to technology, and we just think about development.

Mainly, people don't consider to the nature and their environment. Most of all, people don't have knowledge about their activities and their job. Also, people just regard their benefits and their interests, and they don't worry about other things even some things that affect their lives indirectly. For example, many people pursue their aims for building their home in nature, but they ignore that their desires may destroy their environment.

Moreover, using the technology has several disadvantages for the Earth. Indeed, people use technology to exploit the Earth extremely. Therefore, the Earth might encounter some drawbacks. Many people don't know how to use technology, or they use it improperly. For example, they don't know that many trashes have disadvantages for the Earth, especially atomic trashes or something like that. Last but not least, people follow their purposes to meet development. A number of people are selfish and don't pay attention to nature. In addition, people want to develop their lives. However, they grow, and population would be an important danger for the Earth. For instance, many people would dwell in the Earth, and our nature will destroy.

Finally, the Earth may be destroyed because people don't pay attention to it, misusing the technology, and think just about development. Surely, we can't continue our lives if we don't aware about our planet and the future of the Earth. That's way I agree with this opinion that human activities cause the Earth meet changes improperly.

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Writing Feedback / Teofl - I support that businesses hire somebody as their employees or workers. [3]

Businesses should hire employees for their entire lives. Do you agree or
disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Some people agree with this statement that businesses should hire employees, but some people disagree with that businesses should hire employees. In this regard, I agree that hiring employees or workers has several advantages. I support this idea because businessmen have more important jobs, they are capable of develop their business, and they can get the convenience.

Mainly, businessmen should concentrate on their more important jobs. Businessmen should give attention to the significant affairs, such as management. Also, they have to control their business, and their employees or laborers' activities can help them. For example, businessmen may want to have a business with a firm or company, and they have to manage something around their conventions. In this time, their employees or workers are able do something about materials or preparing goods or commodities, and businessmen are able to adjust conventions.

Moreover, businessmen can develop their business. The most significant purpose of a businessman is making money, and more money will be found in a developed business, such as a businessman who has a lot of money and more capital, so he can invest more and more to make more money. In addition, businessmen plan to expand their business to overseas or foreign countries. For example, some businessmen pursue to export their goods or commodities, and earn more money.

Last but not least, businessmen feel relaxed, and they can get the convenience. They have no stress, and they don't get disturbed because their business towards to a wrong way. In addition, they are able to make a decision easily and strongly. For instance, businessmen are capable of make a decision faraway through telephone or Email.

To sum up, businesses might hire some employees or laborers whom they can pay attention around more important job. They can develop their business, and they can take comfort. That's why I support this statement that businesses hire somebody as their employees or workers.

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Writing Feedback / "advantages in groupthink" - Toefl [2]

The article states that there are several advantages in groupthink, and gives some pieces of information about it. However, the lecturer explains that although there are many advantages in groupthink, there are a few disadvantages in it, and refutes the author's points about it. First, the reading claims that a group is capable of pool its intellectual resources for arrive at a better decision. The lecturer rebuts this point by saying that many things may be ignored when people make a decision through a group. Second, the article asserts that people don't be worry about a big responsibility for making a decision also their motivations would be encouraged. On the other hand, the lecturer says that individuals might think that they are not smart enough to decision making alone. Third, the reading says that people would be benefited by learning new negotiation, management skill and many new things. The lecturer opposes this point by illustrating that the group ignores anything that doesn't fit their vision.