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xyx0905   
Apr 22, 2012
Writing Feedback / IELTS: Advantages and disadvantages of staying away from families. [15]

Hi Ali,

Yes, GT's reading is easy to handle, but those questions can be very tricky.

GT's writing task is easy to understand, but sometimes too open to write.

My strategy to control the time is 5-7mins outline 25-18mins writing (less than 300 words), plus a review (only after I done the Task1). I always doing T2 first, then T1, the time left for my review normally about 2-4mins. If I do my practice writing at home, I don't write too much words, but control the time. If you cannot finish your writing within 40mins, even though you have perfect ideas and languages, that won't make you to reach a decent score.

Yes, AC, I passed all of those, except Reading in my last attempt. Bit sad about it.

cheers
xyx0905   
Apr 21, 2012
Writing Feedback / IELTS Topic: Win a sport competition is everything ? [2]

Sports are very popular in the modern society. Some people believe that winning is the only thing. Others believe that playing sports is not about win or lose but how people play the game. What's your opinion?

In recent years, the discussion about the purpose of playing the sport activities has become a controversy. While some appear to think that winning the championship is the top issue in the sport competition, others argue the way how players to participate is more valuable than becoming the winner.

Admittedly, in a competition, aiming for the gold medal is a necessity. One is that it enhances their survival abilities when they are encountering a series of life challenges in the future. There is no denying that sports challengers have to bear harsh conditions and pressure in those sports presentation in order to become a distinctive talent. Secondly, the competition experience develops ones' independence. Under the contest setting, contestants are often individually sitting in the battlefield where they are unable to retrieve any assistance and supports. In this case, participants have to attempt their own strategies to reach first place as better as they can.

However, in a sports contest, winning a top place is not everything which the players are aiming for. For the contestants, obtaining a sense of cooperation attitude is one of key elements in a team sport. Football games, for example, require a solid team spirits to achieve the success instead of solely rely on one member's contribution. Besides, in a soccer practice, it is essential that all the group members share their techniques and learn from others in order to establish the unique tacit understanding in the real competition. Moreover, demonstrating a sound psychological quality is another valuable factor in many sport events. In other words, even though the player realise they have little chance to reach the first position in this match, these individuals still maintain their best performance until the end of the competition.

In conclusion, it is understandable that all players tend to pursue the championship in any sports. However, more importantly, they need to learn and demonstrate the collaboration skills and outstanding competition spirits in the match they are playing for.
xyx0905   
Apr 21, 2012
Essays / What is the meaning of rituals / authority in Business? [4]

Hi,

Only a question but no requirements, even though ideas cannot develop into 5000 words. Please provide detail information, otherwise no one can really reach a helpful comments.

Thanks
xyx0905   
Apr 21, 2012
Writing Feedback / IELTS Topic: urban higher standards of living good or bad? solutions? [3]

In recent years, some countries have experienced very rapid economic development. This has resulted in much higher standards of living in urban areas but not in the countryside. This situation may bring some problems for the country as a whole. What are these problems? How might they be reduced?

In recent years, with an incredible economic achievement in some regions, there has been a growing trend that the cost of household expenses in the city areas is ever-increasing. Therefore, it is necessary to identify the problems of this trend and provide some feasible solutions to alleviate its severity.

There is no denying that a high urban life criterion exerts a series of negative influences to the society. From the social aspect, the first demerit is that it leads to the disappearance of green areas. This is because the public facilities such as the transportation system should continuously develop and expand in order to satisfy the city dwellers' ongoing expectations. Under this circumstance, parks and grassland are likely to be sacrificed for these constructions. From the individual perspective, a higher standard of living in the urban area increases households' financial burden. Unlike the suburbs, the prices of goods and services in the town are much more expensive which make families are unable to afford their life overhead and money-oriented stress gradually.

However, there are several practical proposals to settle this regretful situation. For one thing, the government should introduce the incentive policy to its citizens who intend to relocate to the countryside. In combine with this implementation, government should also construct public transportation facilities between urban districts and suburbs to ease people maintaining their jobs in the town. For another, government ought to introduce the regulation to prohibit land developers to destroy massive grassland and gardens for future buildings and subways expansions.

In conclusion, it is convincing that governmental actions play a vital role to settle the problem from a higher living standard in the city areas effectively and efficiently.
xyx0905   
Apr 21, 2012
Research Papers / Help with government project on the topic of Abortion [5]

Hi Muaaz,

- Does a pregnant woman have the right to control her own body, or does the government have a right to protect the unborn life inside of her? should an unborn baby be considered life (when)?

This is a very big and open question, if this is the questionnaire for the general public, i don't think the answers you got at the end of day was a objective and accurate one. However, I am happy to give your my reason why I think there is a high possibility for you to receive a subjective and inaccurate answer plus my opinion.

The population sample you are selecting at where this questionnaire starts will effect your outcome. In some countries, for example, China, women desire the power to decide how many children they want to have. But they have no such power for more than few decades. In fact, they have the power before 1980s but ban by the government. I am not saying enforce a woman to do abortion is the right way to control the population, but the actual national condition need government's urgent attention. Take another example, in those tropical areas, diseases spread around rapidly, under this circumstance, if the new born babies will catch the disease too quickly soon after their birth, why just control the birth rates?

This question, in my opinion, I prefer to assess the targeted country's real situation. In Australia, how many babies you are having is not a top issue, the top issue is not many people prefer to have more than 2 children home. They claim that heavier family financial burden.

- Should abortion be legal, or should it be prohibited by law?

It really depends, in my opinion, sometimes harsh legislation really prevents future disaster tragedy.

"shot it be prohibited by law" what that mean? you mean whether it is legally to do abortion?

- Should certain types of abortion be banned?

Yes, this is definite answer. Some medication abortion destroy life not only the babies but also the mothers. Abortion operations should be done by recognised doctors.

- Should abortion be permitted at certain times during pregnancy? Are there any special circumstances that justify an abortion?

There is always the discussion about this question. First part, yes, because if the baby already identified as malformation, I don't think the birth make sense.

The justifiable circumstance should ask doctors, in their field, a detail list can be provided in what circumstances, pregnancy should terminated permanently.

- What are the effects of abortion on our society?

Disadv: 1. ageing population getting big

Adv: 1. control the population growing too fast.

In today's world, i think nothing has only the bad or good side, always too side, just depend what angel you are viewing those issues, there is no right answer nether.

Good luck
xyx0905   
Apr 21, 2012
Writing Feedback / IELTS Topic: advanced fertilisers and machine for farmers, good or bad? [4]

Hi all,

I found this question was bit odd. I am not sure whether I hit the right points and prepare it in an appropriate structure, appreciated all your comments. cheers

Food can be produced cheaper if we use improved fertilisers and better machinery. However some of methods may be dangerous for human health, and have negative effects for local communities. What is your opinion?

In recent years, the discussion about the agriculture development has become a controversy. While some appear to believe that advanced plant foods incorporate with newly developed devices significantly reduce the cost of producing farm products, others argue that this collaboration exerts a series of negative effects to people's health condition and the society.

Admittedly, applying the advanced fertilisers in combine with the automatic reaping resources increase farmers' economic profit. This is because artificial fertilisers catalyse the capacity of each inch of farmland in order to churn out the crops, and automatic machinery enhances the work efficiency of the harvest. Consequently, the production and labour cost of each kilogram of the agriculture products dramatically decreased.

However, high-tech fertilisers pose a potential threat to individuals' health well-being. Unlike the organic plant foods, industrialised fertilisers are made of unusual chemicals, which are not only varying the gene of crops into those unknown substances but also remaining inside of plants permanently. In this case, consumers who intake those fertilised products on a regular base tend to suffer a series of disease in the future.

Moreover, excessively relying on the electronic equipment for harvest causes several impacts to the society. One is that it worsens the air pollution by releasing the excessive exhaust emission. In contrast, manual harvest prevents severe environmental damages. For another, mechanical reaper causes the rise of the unemployment rate in the farming industry, possibly because high-end reaping plants replace a large number of workers in the fields.

In conclusion, even though newly developed plant foods and machinery make significant financial success for the farmers, it is convincing that the demerits of applying these new developments in the agriculture industry cannot be overlooked.
xyx0905   
Apr 21, 2012
Writing Feedback / IELTS topic. Violence shown on TV and in the cinema [2]

Hi

A matter of considerable controversy at present is the issue of whether young people's actions are influenced by the amount of violence which appears on TV and in the cinema or not.

In recent years, the discussion about whether a series of violent contents from TV programs and movies influence the juvenile's conduct has become a controversial issue.

I believe that violence in our today society has increased due to TVs and cinema.

"due to TVs and cinema" TVs and Cinema themselves cannot lead to a course of action. Therefore, this sentence should be altered, "I believe that violence in our today's society had increased due to the popularity of multimedia.

"today society" => today's society, here today is adjective, not adverb

Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
What can be done to reduce violence in our society today?

This is a "mix" IELTS topic, in your first main paragraph you have to present your position whether you agree or disagree. Here you have to provide 2 ideas to support if you agree and 1 idea for counter argument or vice versa.

Your writing doesn't support why you think violence movies and TV series influence the younger generation's conducts, your writing was talking about they have lots of chances to view TV program because ever since every household has TV. Here the ideas which could support why you think violent movies are bad for children is those movies lead to juvenile misconduct, the reason is they are mentally immature and incapable of distinguishing what are the right and wrong things from TV.

One way to combat the problem of violence in our society today would be for the government to censor the movies and TV shows. Even if they are not allowed to watch horror and thriller movies, teenagers under 18 still get the change to do it. By introducing censorship and cutting the violence scenes, I believe young people would not be encouraged to behave violently and disruptively. It would, therefore, be impossible for them to follow this example of being aggressive.

At least two recommendations in your solution paragraph.

1. introduce the regulation to assess all types of TV program and movies in order to avoid unexpected damages to the young's mental development

2. parents supervision

Cheers
xyx0905   
Apr 21, 2012
Writing Feedback / IELTS Topic: Will letter writing replaced by technology completely? [2]

More and more people using the mobile phones and computer to instead of letters. People think letter will disappear completely? Agree or disagree? How important of letter writing you think are?

With the advent of personal phones and computer in recent decades, some people appear to believe that the traditional form of letter writing will vanish permanently. Personally speaking, this is not the case as the paper correspondences still play a valuable role in today's society.

Admittedly, modern technologies have brought a number of merits to people's daily life. For communication, they shorten the distance among people who living in different countries. Smart phones, for example, parents could make a video call more easily and quickly to reach their children who study overseas. For education, the Internet offers a vast deal of convenience for students who residing in those remote locations. Unlike the past, nowadays, they could complete study on computers with access to a wide range of facilities such as library database and discussion board.

However, traditional hand writing as a way of correspondence is still dominantly used in many occasions. Graduation ceremony, for example, it represents the formality of events to their guests. In contrast, sending the invitations by emails or even an electronic message are unable to deliver the respect and courtesy to the attendants. Secondly, communicating with the receivers through the letter writing also demonstrates the importance of the information. Unlike the phone message or e-mails, retaining the important notices from taxation office or immigration department in paper for future reference or review are relatively convenient and secure. In this case, e-version correspondences may pose a potential threat to the confidentiality of personal information.

In conclusion, it is convincing that advanced communication devices such as cell phones and emails have some merits. However, in regarding of formality and confidentiality, the letter writing is always a preferable and trustable means of contacting the recipients, and this communication method will continuously exist in the future.
xyx0905   
Apr 20, 2012
Writing Feedback / IELTS Topic: In the past, study only for the young, nowadays is changed [3]

Hi Joann,

Thank you for your comment.

I think those that have completed their education and have many degrees to back it up, maybe are busy with family life...however some of them find time to take courses at work and various self-improvement classes.

You hit a good point, but this idea is bit difficult to extend and support. In an IELTS essay writing, doesn't matter what are your ideas, but you should write at least one extend and one support, otherwise, those ideas are not persuasive.

Cheers
xyx0905   
Apr 20, 2012
Writing Feedback / IELTS: Advantages and disadvantages of staying away from families. [15]

Hi ali,

Yes, this structure looks much better than your original version. By the way, I sent a reading practice to your mail box (10 tests), but I receive a mail said your email box is only capable of receiving an email with 10MB attachment. That reading practice was 35.6MB, I am trying to cut it in to half and send to you. But it may take few days. Cheers
xyx0905   
Apr 19, 2012
Writing Feedback / IELTS Topic: Female Juvenile delinquency [3]

Hi Susan,

I am so glad to receive your comments. Thank you so much. I will keep my hard efforts until I achieve my dream score in the test.

Cheers
xyx0905   
Apr 19, 2012
Writing Feedback / IELTS Topic: In the past, study only for the young, nowadays is changed [3]

In the past people thought that education was only for young people. Now it is believed that education is for a person's whole life. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

In recent years, there has been a growing tendency that individuals tend to conduct post-qualification studies continuously. Therefore, many appear to believe that education is no longer the young's privilege. Personally speaking, this is true in today's society.

Admittedly, in the past, some given circumstances make people rarely carry out future learnings after the graduation. One possible circumstance is that there is relatively slower growth in both knowledge and technology fields half century ago. In this case, the academic skills which the younger job seekers have acquired from text is sufficiently and satisfactorily for them to achieve the general practices in the workplace. Secondly, in the past, the labor force was crucial for families who have suffered the economic hardship in many poverty regions. As a result, minors have to bear the household burdens such as making money for their families to acquire food, shelter and medicine soon after they have completed their studies at school.

However, in the modern society, conducting a series further studies after university is always a necessity. Firstly, it enhances juniors' survival ability in today's competitive labour market. This is because the new information and knowledge are frequently updated and released nowadays. In order to obtain a sense of security of their career perspectives, the academic knowledge bases should be checked and renewed regularly by an ongoing study. Moreover, undertaking a series of post-qualification learning and training develops the employees' confidence in their area of expertise. In other words, these types of learning progression strengthen their professional competence within their industry and makes their career prospect brighter in the future.

In conclusion, it is convincing that learning knowledge and skills continuously is often valuable and useful for individuals to retain their employment opportunities and firm their speciality in a long run.
xyx0905   
Apr 19, 2012
Essays / Local Food Versus Imported Food. argument essay. How to start? [6]

Hi Erica,

Is this an IELTS topic? If so, then Introduction + 3 supporting paragraph + 1 counter argument paragraph + conclusion may be two much. You only have 40 minutes in your exam to prepare your writing. If not, then ignore my comment.

cheers
xyx0905   
Apr 19, 2012
Writing Feedback / Government should control some of exhibitions (admisssion in cinemas, theatres) [3]

Hi Veru,

One cannot deny that painters have the right freedom for paint in any way that they wanted>

There is no denying that innovative artists have the rights to express their ideas and thoughts in the ways they prefer.

This statement could be true.

Your clear position should avoid modal verb, otherwise your position may be subjective to the reader

I have my own attempt posted to the forum a while ago. I think my ideas are more persuasive.

I support that creative artists should entitled the freedom to express their ideas and thoughts in the ways they prefer.

Admittedly, freeing those unconventional art works brings some negative to the society. 1. violent and erotic paintings destructs minors' mental development in their early age. 2. creative films make the general public misunderstanding the truth. this is because those film producers wish to achieve their expected fame and reputation.

However, give innovative artists freedom has several merits. 1. supporting them will retain a nation's identity and culture heritage. very beneficial for international exchange. 2. satisfy the citizens spiritual enjoyable. for example, a stylish sculpture can be used as the decoration, to create a comfortable and relaxing office and home environment.

Cheers
xyx0905   
Apr 19, 2012
Writing Feedback / IELTS: Advantages and disadvantages of staying away from families. [15]

Hi Ali,

Probably you didn't pay attention to the question. It was asking you to discuss both adv and disadv for both situations. Therefore, in your answer, you are not only give the advs of each situations but also give at least 1 disadv to both situations, otherwise your answer will be determined over-developed one side of question but underdeveloped the other side.

Cheers
xyx0905   
Apr 19, 2012
Writing Feedback / IELTS topic. There will be soon no role for teachers in classrooms. [7]

Hi Luca Emma,

That's why I am here for. I have serious grammatical errors couple of months ago. Now I try to improve by comprehensive practice. I can't avoid all of them by one attempt, but try to remember some common mistakes and make sure not doing them again.

Cheers
xyx0905   
Apr 19, 2012
Writing Feedback / IELTS topic: Your view of "Pen and Paper" Examination [7]

Hi Luca emma,

but... they ask for your opinion(!!), you don't need the 3rd paragraph because they don't ask for solutions.

my opinion + solution is acceptable. so i will keep my third paragraph

the 2nd paragraph is not ok either, because this is not a discussion.

this paragraph is fine.

Thanks

I prefer you should review IELTS writing task 2 marking description (public version) first, then come back here to provide your future comments to other members in this forum.

Cheers
xyx0905   
Apr 19, 2012
Writing Feedback / IELTS Topic: Air travel should be restricted or not? [3]

Hi Farruh

But:
In fact, this is not the case in many real life experience. (Not clear, what you want to say by that) better to give a clear overview

Usually I will use this sentence or a similar to present my position, which means I disagree what I have write earlier in my introduction. My tutor told me that's fine.

Thank you
xyx0905   
Apr 19, 2012
Writing Feedback / IELTS Topic: Pay a fee when drivers enter to city centre [3]

Hi Luca Emma,

I strongly recommend you to read my writing carefully and question carefully!

Actually, it is convincing that the advantages of having this scheme outweigh the disadvantages.

This is my opinion, my clear position in my introduction.

introduction
1st para: support + give your opinion
2nd para: oppose + give your opinion
conclusion - summarise what you said + opinion. your conclusion is poor, rewrite it

I am sorry this is not the structure in IELTS writing. I disagree you that my conclusion actually is a poor one.

By the way, this writing already received a decent score. Anyway, thank you for your comment. If you know how IELTS writing should be like, then, you will know, some of your comment doesn't really make sense!

Cheers
xyx0905   
Apr 18, 2012
Writing Feedback / IELTS Topic: Air travel should be restricted or not? [3]

Some people believe that air travel should restricted because it cause serious pollution and uses up the world's fuel resources. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

With the popularity of the air travel in recent decades, some environmentalists start to believe that air traffic should be limited as its rise cause a series of environmental problems. In fact, this is not the case in many real life experience.

Admittedly, having a heavy air traffic load exerts some negative influences. One is that it produces a vast amount of excessive exhaust emissions which cause severe air pollution. For example, in those underdeveloped and developing regions, due to the backwardness of their aviation technologies and skills, the aircrafts which used for commercial and non-profit purpose are often incapable of conforming the international minimum emission standard. Secondly, massive air traffic deteriorates the fuel shortage globally. Research have proved that the energy of an aeroplane consumed is far more than a vehicle, in regard of travelling the same distance and carrying the same amount of passengers.

However, retaining the air travel for the general public is a necessity. From the commercial perspective, it facilitates the international tourism industry among different nations. It is undeniable that many countries make a considerable revenue from receiving a massive amount of foreign travellers each year. Under this circumstance, not only the tourism field has developed but also promoting many other related businesses such as hotels and restaurants. Moreover, from the individual aspect, air transportation is essential for parents and families who plan to visit their children and relatives overseas, possibly because there is no access to train and time consuming for ferry. Thus, restricting the air flights brings the inconvenience and delay for those journeys.

In conclusion, even though air traffic bring some negative influences, it is convincing that its benefits such as stimulate the tourism interactions and the family reunions were overtakes its demerits.
xyx0905   
Apr 18, 2012
Writing Feedback / IETLS GT 2: should there be free health services? [9]

Hi Peterchu,

Are you preparing the GT module? I am doing Academic Module. This topic was altered in A module, "whether is government's responsibility to provide free health facility for its citizens. Sometimes, GT topics are easy to understand but bit open to write. Logical ideas are important.

cheers
xyx0905   
Apr 18, 2012
Writing Feedback / IELTS Topic: Pay a fee when drivers enter to city centre [3]

In some large cities, people have to pay a fee when they drive their cars into the city centre, in a policy to reduce the number of cars in the city. Give reasons in support of and opposing this policy, and give your own opinion.

In recent years, the excessive traffic load is becoming a common phenomenon in many countries, some urban planers believe that a charge on the road could be a feasible solution to tackle this problem, while others claim that it triggers some demerits. Actually, it is convincing that the advantages of having this scheme outweigh the disadvantages. 56

It is accepted that implementing congestion pricing system for drivers who travel into the CBD exerts some negative influences. Firstly, local residents are encouraged to visit shops, restaurants and entertainment facilities out of town and gradually lead to a downturn of the inner cities. Secondly, this policy is also triggers potential crimes relating to ticket evasion. For example, if a surcharge is enforced both when entering and leaving the city, drivers may risk forging car plates or even registration to avoid this extra cost. 84

However, it is widely recognised that imposing the congestion charge has a plenty of merits. From environmental aspect, it could alleviate excessive exhaust emission of vehicles and air pollution. This is because the implementation of charge encourages a less amount of cars on the road, which further weakens the road density and makes downtown more fresh and clean. From the financial perspective, the congestion toll enables local government to invest and develop a more sound public transportation system. It is also an ideal way to help companies who tend to reduce the usage of cars to save their carbon tax expenditure. 101

In conclusion, it is undeniable that congestion charge has some drawbacks. However, the merits of having such system overtake it demerits. 21 / 262
xyx0905   
Apr 18, 2012
Writing Feedback / IELTS topic. There will be soon no role for teachers in classrooms. [7]

Hi Luca,

here is my attempt to this topic. 15A. The typical teaching situation of a teacher and students will no exist in 2050, to what extent do you agree or disagree?

With the development of technology in recent decades, there has been a growing trend that distance-learning is getting more popular ever than before. Therefore, many start to believe that the face-to-face classroom teaching style will disappear in another 50 years. In fact, this is not the case in many real life situations.

Admittedly, the web-based learning modus has some benefits. One is that it saves students a vast deal of time and avoids daily travel to and from school. Under this circumstance, they could obtain sufficient time to study their course materials and complete the assignment through the Internet without delay. Secondly, the online study offers the flexible schedule for people who have a full-time job. Unlike the younger students, daily commuters are unable to attend classes due to a regular working schedule. Instead, they could achieve their studies through the online facilities such as library database and discussion forum at any time which is more convenient for them.

However, the in-class teaching form brings several merits to children which are irreplaceable. Firstly, it provides the cooperative learning opportunities among students. For instance, a group activity encourages all team members to share their ideas and learn from others in order to achieve a common goal. Besides, from a direct group interaction, young children are able to obtain the problem-solving and negotiation skills which play a crucial role in their future career life. Moreover, teachers are capable of obtaining more opportunities to provide a wide range of supports to the learners in a class setting. In this case, children could receive immediate feedback of their questions and correct their mistakes promptly.

In conclusion, it is convincing the online study has some advantages. However, the live teaching form is indispensable for younger ones to develop valuable social and communicational skills as well as receive the supports during their studies.
xyx0905   
Apr 14, 2012
Writing Feedback / IELTS Topic: Female Juvenile delinquency [3]

Some reports have discovered the crimes committed by young women is increasing. Give possible reasons and recommendations to the situation.

In recent years, there has been a growing tendency that female juvenile delinquency is becoming a common social phenomenon in many countries. Therefore, it is necessary to identify the forces behind this trend and provide the feasible solutions to alleviate its rise. 42

To begin with, the first reason is that the younger women are usually sensitive to the trifles and sentimental to the loves. In this case, the sensitivity could lead to the formation of extreme ideas and the willingness of conducting the wrongdoings. Besides, the female minors' natural frangibility makes them intend to commit themselves to a series of aggressive behaviour when they have established well founded fears. Second possible force is that the gender inequity in the competitive labour market where women are often confronted with a number of severe competitions. As a result, an illegal conduct may seem as an approach which enables them to make their livings. 109

However, there are several workable solutions to tackle this regretful situation. From government perspective, relevant authorities should provide low-cost and no fee programs for young female individuals. Counselling service, for example, should be available for those who suffer emotional destructions. This facility helps them to dispel negative feelings and have a positive attitude towards future life. Occupational training as another example, helps young women to enhances their employability in today's labour market. Moreover, from personal level, the female juniors are supposed to accelerate their adaptability to the actual social atmosphere. It is suggested that they should be proactively involved in diversified social activities and interaction with others to gain a clear view of reality. 114

In conclusion, it is convincing that both the government and women themselves ought to cooperate to curb the ever-increasing the female juvenile delinquency in a long run. 23 / 292
xyx0905   
Apr 14, 2012
Writing Feedback / IELTS topic: Your view of "Pen and Paper" Examination [7]

Many people believe that formal "pen and paper" examinations are not the best method of assessing educational achievement. What is your view of examinations?

Examinations are one of the most common methods of measuring learning in education systems throughout the world. At virtually every stage of the learning process, exams are used to verify that the learner is ready to move on to the next stage. However, many believe that the role of examinations should be reconsidered. 53

There are clearly advantages to exams. They help to ensure fairness by imposing the same conditions on all exam candidates. They are also relatively versatile; different types of exam questions, for example, multiple-choice questions and essay tasks, can test different sorts of reasoning ability. However, exams also have some drawbacks. Test-wise candidates can often perform well on exams without having good underlying knowledge or skills. In contrast, some test-takers perform cannot achieve a satisfying result because of anxiety. In this case, teachers and learners focus only on theses aspects of the curriculum that are likely to be tested, thus narrowing the educational experience for all. 105

A number of measures should be taken to address these concerns. Wherever possible, exams should match the content and activities of the learning environment. Exam task should be varied to give fair opportunities to candidates with different types of skills. Other types of assessment should also be considered, assignment writing, for example, to assess independent learning and research skills, or group projects, to measure teamwork ability. 66

In conclusion, it is convincing that exams have a role to play in ensuring proper and objective assessment of achievement. However, exams need to be carefully designed and supplemented with other forms of evaluation if they are to be a truly useful component of the education system. 47 / 271
xyx0905   
Apr 14, 2012
Writing Feedback / Petrol price increase and its impact on traffic & pollution levels [5]

Hi Scarlet_bouquet,

I give you my attempt (a while ago)

This is no doubt that traffic and pollution from vehicles have become huge problems, both in cities and on motorways everywhere. Solving these problems is likely to need more than a simple rise in the price of petrol. 38

While it is undeniable that private car use is one of the main causes of the increase in traffic and pollution, higher fuel costs are unlikely to limit the number of drivers for long. As this policy would also affect the cost of public transport, it would be very unpopular with everyone who needs to travel on the roads. But there are vapours other measures that could be implemented that would have a hug effect on these problem. 78

I think to tackle the problem of pollution; cleaner fuels need to be developed. The technology is already available to produce electric cars that would be both quieter and cleaner to use. Persuading manufacturers and travellers to adopt this new technology would be a more effective strategy for improving air quality, especially in cities. 53

However, traffic congestion will not be solved by changing the type of private vehicle people can use. To do this, we need to improve the choice of public transport services available to the end-users. For example, if sufficient sky trains and underground rail system were built and effectively maintained in our major cities, then traffic on the roads would be dramatically reduced. Long-distance train and coach services should be made attractive and affordable alternatives to driving your own car for long journeys. 81

In conclusion, I think that long-term traffic and pollution reductions would depend on educating people to use public transport more, and on governments using its funds to construct and run efficient systems. 33 / 283
xyx0905   
Apr 14, 2012
Writing Feedback / IELTS task 1 - bar and pie charts (the results of a survey of adult education) [5]

Hi Leeminh,

writing a mix charts, you have check out any relationship between them, if not, a simple one could add on to your introduction. And your second paragraph will mainly talk about the complicate one. it is suggested that you have to write a simple conclusion.

Cheers
xyx0905   
Apr 14, 2012
Writing Feedback / IELTS Topic:Environmental issues"international Cooperation vs National participation" [7]

Hi Alirulez,

I just post my message on another member's IELTS topic about how I think what I should do in order to achieve a decent score and I recommend go for IELTS TRAINER. I found it was very useful and the questions were bit difficult to answer. I think CAM 1-4 were bit outdated. That's why I recommend IELTS TRAINER, this book represents the future IELTS exam's trend. I have a plenty of practice materials but they are all e-version (PDF) which I have download when I was in my home country. Some of them contains chinese explanation but questions were all in english. If you are interest, I can email you some of then, I have lots of reading practices and writing topics.

Cheers
xyx0905   
Apr 13, 2012
Writing Feedback / IELTS Topic: Same job for a same company VS change job frequently [4]

Hi basawang,

Well... As a reader. I really want to know your reason after I finished reading your introduction. I am eager to know why you think job-hopping is better. But you just stopped.

Probably what you thought is right in other kinds of essay writings. But I don't think this is the way I should follow in an IELTS essay writing. Many thanks.

Your are half right. This is the example sentence I found from dictionary: I would advise people to think very carefully about committing themselves to working Sundays...

"to" should stay, you are right. :-)

I see. No wonder why. Thank you.

"Who" should not be deleted, otherwise you need to replace "transfer" with "transferring".

I see, let me work out it by checking my grammar book. Anyway many thanks.

cheers
xyx0905   
Apr 13, 2012
Writing Feedback / IELTS Topic:Environmental issues"international Cooperation vs National participation" [7]

Hi allrulez,

Thank you for your message. The way I practice my essay writing is three step: 1. draft a first writing within 40mins actually, stop at the end of time ends, see what I can writing in 40mins. 2. leave 1st draft for about 1hr during this hour I will practice a reading test, when I come back I will writing my 2nd draft according to my 1st draft. 3. on the second day, I will read my writing loudly and feel if I am the read, am I able to understand what the writer was delivering. After 2nd reading of my own essay, I will finalise my 3rd draft which is the one I post in this forum. I have prepared about 55 topics covers 8 general areas. Hopefully I can pass my IELTS test soon.

Cheers
xyx0905   
Apr 13, 2012
Writing Feedback / IELTS Topic: Urban Sprawl: (causes and prediction) [3]

Some findings have revealed that cities around the world are growing large. Could you outline the possible causes and predict consequences?

In recent years, there has been a growing tendency that the urban sprawl is a common phenomenon in many countries. Therefore, it is essential to evaluate the forces behind this trend and its consequences. 34

To begin with, population growth is widely accepted as the primary reason. Nowadays the space in the city centre is unlikely to provide sufficient housing availability to accommodate an ever-growing population. Besides, in order to offer lower-density living environment to local city residents, an ongoing land development towards surrounding suburbs is deemed as an preferential solution. Moreover, another problem that has intensified in the inner city is infrastructure shortage and poor conditions of buildings. Lack of amenities such as water supply and waste disposal have left no choice to urban dwellers but to resettle in the suburbs, where they have easier access to new facilities. 104

However, the sustained expansion of cities will make a marked impact on the society in several dimensions. Firstly, a high traffic volume between outer city and downtown causes severe air pollution and reduce the lands suitable for farming. Also, the enlargement of cities requires massive developments which make some areas to lose its unique qualities and traditional characteristics. Secondly, from the economic perspective, the relocation of a large population towards suburbs will pose adverse fiscal impact on the local government's infrastructure overhead. Furthermore, from the individual aspect, for those who are usually reside in suburbs, the inflow of new inhabitants will damage the community sport and make relations between neighbours fragile. 109

In conclusion, urban sprawl is a trend which exerts several negative effects. Therefore, the government should organise detail planning and sustainable development to minimise its demerits. 26 / 273
xyx0905   
Apr 13, 2012
Writing Feedback / IETLS GT writing task 2: Should children follow strict rules of behaviour? [5]

Hi Chu,

I am not sure if this is a original GT question. However, in Academic Module, we have a same question. Here is the original question: Some people think children should obey rules and listen to their parents and teachers, while others think less controlling and will help children deal with the adult's life. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

By the way, in all argumentation essay (A module), personally speaking, we should provide our clear position in the introduction, even though the question ask you to discuss the both view.

1. In this paragraph, you have to deliver your ideas why you think less controlling is beneficial. 1. enhances their creativity (your idea) + supporting sentence: the encouragement develops children's confidence to express their own ideas and thoughts. 2. cultivate their independence ability + supporting sentence: in contrast, massive regulations make children's over reliance on the guidance, which further weakens their survival ability in their future adult's life.

2. Using Steve Jobs as an example may be not appropriate in this essay writing. Personally speaking, you have no supporting evidence to explain Steve Jobs has receive less controlling but not really obeying the rules to achieve his reputation today.

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