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Jul 25, 2012
Writing Feedback / Parents and educational places as schools are crucial, as they can influence on children's behaviour [4]
It's good to use a variety of expressions and vocab, but you have to make sure that you use them correctly. If you're not sure of the meaning of a word or a phrase, don't use it, just keep things simple.
Be careful with verb forms (with or without -ing).
Pay attention to the use of articles and prepositions. E.g: normally people just say "Parents influence children", the word "influence" goes with an "on" only when it acts as a noun.
young age => it should be YOUNG PEOPLE or THE YOUNG
places as schools => places SUCH as schools
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It's good to use a variety of expressions and vocab, but you have to make sure that you use them correctly. If you're not sure of the meaning of a word or a phrase, don't use it, just keep things simple.
Be careful with verb forms (with or without -ing).
Pay attention to the use of articles and prepositions. E.g: normally people just say "Parents influence children", the word "influence" goes with an "on" only when it acts as a noun.
young age => it should be YOUNG PEOPLE or THE YOUNG
places as schools => places SUCH as schools
Best