Writing Feedback / IELTS - children learning foreign language in young age; brain under development [2]

Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school
Do the advantages of this out weigh the disadvantages?

Today, children start to learn a foreign language at primary school, which was being taught at secondary school. I agree that the benefits of learning a foreign language earlier are more than the disadvantages.

It is obviously that children are easier to learn a language in their early ages. A child in a family with members speak more than one language can speak multiple languages naturally. Because the brain is under development for language learning in our early ages, children can learn the new languages without any effort if the environment is provided. Besides, the subjects in primary school are more base and easy to learn, children have more time to practice the new learn language with classmates in a well-designed class which provided a suitable language environment with enough guidance. As a result, they can use the foreign language as their mother tongue.

On the other hand, there are some drawbacks to learn a foreign language in primary school. First, not all the primary schools can provide the foreign language course. In that case, when the children who have no chance to learn the language, grow up and attend the secondary school, will find the variance and a big gap in language learning. Thus it may make them lost the interest or refuse to continue the study. Second, the young children may lack of self-control. They may spend lots of time on playing and ignore the language learning. However, I think if we can standardized the policy of language learning and make it mandatory in primary school, as well as design more attractive content to make sure children can learn with interest, we can prevent the disadvantages.

In conclusion, children can get more benefit if they start to learn a foreign language in primary school, they can learn fast and use it as their mother tongue. However we still need to provide the suitable environment for their language learning, motivate them on time and give them enough guidance.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Essay - Teenage years are the Happiest time of life? [2]

Some people think that teenage years are the happiest times of most people's lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people think that the days attending school are the happiest time of most people's life while the others think that the adults are happier excluding the greater responsibilities. In my opinion, I prefer the former idea as I think younger means you still have a lot of time for dream.

On one hand, teenagers have the happiest time. Firstly, they don't need to worry about money which their parents have prepared for them. Almost all the parents would try their best to fulfill their children's wishes. Secondly, they can spend all the time in learning the new knowledge and do excise to build a healthy, strong body, which is a day-dream for many adults in work who have to sit in front of the computer all the day and no time to do exercise. Finally, they have time to have a dream of their future. However, some students/parents would complain the heavy homework and the endless exams which occupied all their free time for hobbies. But I think that is affordable and students still have long holidays between the school terms to relax and their hobbies and dream.

On the other hand, some people think adults' life is happier in spite of greater responsibilities. They can earn the money to buy what they want to have, because they are using their own money. As they had finished the school and gained the required certifications for the job, they no need to worry about the exams any more. In that case, adults can have more time to cultivate their own hobbies. But unfortunately, in current fast pace world, many people cannot enjoy the life outside work and being occupied in work for a whole day, until mid-night, in order to keep their job and earn the money to support their daily life.

In conclusion, I think young generations have the happiest time because they no need to worry about the daily life and have time for dreaming.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Essay:Being a celebrity,the benifits are out weigh the problem? [3]

Being a celebrity - such as a famous film star or sports personality - brings problems as well as benefits.
Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?

There are advantages and disadvantages of being a famous person, although it brings problems together with benefits, in my opinion, the benefits are out weight the problems.

Being a celebrity has several benefits. Firstly, it is well known that the super starts earn a lot of money, which leads to a better quality of life. Secondly, it is amazing that your work can entertain millions of people. Take the film stars as example, they can experience different types of life during acting which we may not able to try in our daily life. And later on, the movie can bring a lot of fun to our life. Finally, it represents of successful of one's life. Only the most talented among them will reach the top and gain their followers.

On the other hand, it is obviously that being a famous person means losing the personal life at the same time. People are always interest in the latest news about their idols which leads to more and more press corps following and reporting everything around them, no matter how small piece it was. In this case, the celebrities need to control their behavior and be a role model all the time. Besides, the career may be short. For example, a sports career may only last for 10 years and it its easy to end up by injure, and the pain on the body may remain for the whole life. However, I think their contribution can be reminisce by people for a long time

In conclusion, I believe that being a celebrity can gain more money, life experiences than the ordinary people and lead a successful life, which are out weight its limited freedom and the shorter term career, because the wonderful moments can be remembered by other people for a hundred years.

Writing Feedback / [IELTS] Learning foreign languages is common now. Good or Not? Can prevent drawbacks [8]

Foreign languages are taught in all levels of schools and other educational institutions. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? What can we do to prevent the loss of our mother tongue?

Nowadays, we can learn foreign languages in all levels of schools and some educational institutions. Personally, I agree with the idea that it is a positive development thought it may impact our mother tongue, and I believe that various we can do to prevent the drawbacks.

Learning foreign languages can benefit people a lot in modern world. To begin with, every language brings its own culture and it is an asset of human beings, learning other languages can help us to enrich our horizons and develop our intelligence, imagination and creativity. People who speak more than one language can have a better career development. They have more chances to get a job in the international companies or work in different locations around the world, which also motivate them to be success in their career. As a result, it is a positive development that foreign languages education is spread among the people.

However, if one language is dominant, the other languages may disappear, we should protect our own languages though we are encouraged to learn foreign languages. The government should develop some polices to ensure mother language is used in schools and the mainstream media. Besides, we should preserve our own culture and strengthen the ethnic cohesion through education. For instance, school can hold some activities, like visiting the historical museum, to let students to learn more about the history. The last thing we can do is to make our country stronger and improve the economic strength.

In conclusion, it is a good trend that foreign languages learning are spread among the people. To prevent the drawbacks of the foreign languages, we should protect our own languages as well as the cultures through government policies, education and the economic strengthen.

Writing Feedback / [IELTS Essay] Serveral langages die out every year, Is it not important? AD [5]

Several languages die out every year, that is not important because life will become easier if there are fewer languages in the world. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

There are some languages disappear every year. Some people think that is not important because life will become easier and efficiency if people no need to spend their limited time to learn and understanding other languages. However, I don't agree this opinion and I think we should protect all the languages exist in the world.

The main reason that we should protect the languages which is dying out every year is the language brings its own culture. It can preserve the culture and strengthen the ethnic cohesion. For example, in my hometown, there are lots of old songs in Cantonese about the traditional events which can bring people think of our culture once hear the songs. Besides, we would like to speak Cantonese with our special assent which can make us feel more close to the others. Moreover, maintain the language diversity could help to promote international peace and understanding. We also can learn different languages and cultures to enrich our mind.

On the other hand, it is true that the communications would become easier if all of us use one language in the world. We don't need to spend time to learn a new language and we can understand the others more easily. As a result, we can have more energy to keep pace to the new technology in the modern world. However, I cannot image how the world would become if only one language remain in the future. The cultures may be damaged. For example, nowadays, not all the people can recognize the ancient symbols carved on the stone thousand years ago. So we cannot fully understand the culture in the past.

In conclusion, we should protect the languages which are dying out to preserve its cultures and strengthen the ethnic cohesion. Moreover, we can learn one common language to improve our communications with others in all over the world and make the life easier.

Writing Feedback / Intentional tourism can promotes people to understand and respect other cultures [13]

Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, people would like to travel to other countries for medication, education, entertainment or participating in work related matters etc. So the international tourism becomes the biggest industry in the world. I do not agree that international tourism creates problems between cultures. In fact it promotes people to understand and respect other cultures.

On one hand, local people may easily misunderstand others from foreign countries. For example, cheek kissing is the most common greetings in Europe. But in China, it is a gesture using between for lovers. If people are unaware of certain culture differences, it may make others feel uncomfortable or misunderstand the intention behind it. However, people can learn to understand the other cultures from books and internet. Firstly, people can find books about the cultures all over the world, like the travelling stories and guide books, thus they can learn more about foreign cultures by just staying at home. Secondly, with the internet, people can find the information more efficiently throughout the powerful searching engines.

On the other hand, tourism promotes people to understand and respect other cultures. Tourists spend money, thus it creates employment in services like commendations, transport and entertainment and helps to improve the standard of living. Foods from other places of the world have been imported and the different kinds of restaurants have been built in big cities. Moreover, tourism can bring more cultural exchange and deepen their insight into another culture. For example, people in China also celebrate the Christmas like the west countries in recent years.

In conclusion, it is true that different culture may cause some misunderstanding between peoples, but I believe that the intentional tourism can promotes people to understand and respect other cultures, thus culture assimilation would become the trend in the world.

Writing Feedback / IELTS ESSAY: Air transport is increasingly used to export agricultural products. [4]

Air transport is increasingly used to export agricultural products to countries where they are not grown or are out of season. Some people think this is a good thing while others think this is unjustified. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, we can easy to find American Grapes, Thailand rice, mango etc. which are not grown here or out of season in the supermarket. That's because the air transport is widely used to export or import agricultural products between countries. Is it a positive development? Personally, I feel that whether it is good or bad depends on the individual's attitude.

Firstly, importing the agriculture products can give people more choice on the food selection. For example, vegetables are hard to grow in some desert area, but people still can enjoy the fresh vegetable every day benefits from the air transport. Moreover, different kind of vegetables or fruits contains different ingredient. If we can buy the other country's product, it can help us to have the choice to maintain a more balance diet.

Furthermore, exporting goods to other countries can help the exporter country to expand its superiority of agricultural and bring more profit to the economy. It also provides more job opportunities for some industries, like the agricultural, transportation and trade etc.

On the other hand, selling the imported products may have negative impact on the local agricultural that's why some people think it is unjustified. It is easy to image that if the imported goods with a better quality are in the similar price as the local product, people properly would choose the imported product. That result the local products are dull of sale. Besides, it is not eco-friendly because air transport use massive amount of fuel and greatly add to global warming and pollution

In sum, using air transport to export or import agriculture products is good to both countries and their citizens. But it would be better if government can make some rules to protect the local industries. At the mean time, individuals should buy the local organic food and support the environment friendly brands.