Writing Feedback / [TOEFL] is following the customs of the new country better? [2]

TOPIC : When people move to another country, some of them decide to follow the
customs of the new country. Others prefer to keep their own customs.
Compare these two choices. Which one do you prefer? Support your
answer with specific details.

People who move to a new country will experience many things that are different from their own country. The original custom is important because it shows who you are. In the same way, atmosphere at a new place is also significant because it is a place that will became a part of your life. In my point of view, it is important to adapt themselves to be able to suitable in the new environment. This is because people have to communicate with each other and have to understand how to act to others in the new country.

First of all, first thing that people who live in the new country will face and it is not similar from their own custom is language. You can still talk by using your native language with your family. However, you have to learn new language in order to talk to others and to gain knowledge in the new environment. For example, my friend from Japan. He stays in the U.S. He learns English language. Consequently, he can speak to people in English and be able to go to study in college. Adaptation by using new language is important to communicate with other people and study in a new country.

Furthermore, knowing how to act to other people in the new counter is important. In a work field, it is matter to know that which behavior could do and which behavior cannot do when we work at new culture. For instance, when you do a business with your client in the U.S., it is important to shake hand and make eyes contact to your client when you greet your client. If you want to buy presents to give to your colleagues in the U.S., it is inappropriate to buy expensive gifts. Thus, following the new country custom is important to prevent misunderstand that could lead to problems.

In conclusion, I personally prefer that people should alter themselves when they move to the new country in order to suitable with new environment because to communicate with people in the new country. Moreover, to understand people in the new country and know how to interact in appropriate ways. People are able to survive in a new place if they know how to adapt themselves.

Writing Feedback / [TOEFL] learning about life by other experience or your own experience? [3]

TOPIC : Some people believe that the best way of learning about life is by
listening to the advice of family and friends. Other people believe
that the best way of learning about life is through personal
experience. Compare the advantages of these two different ways of
learning about life. Which do you think is preferable? Use specific
examples to support your preference

People, since their were born through the end of life, have different ways to learn about life. While there are advantages to both learning about life by receiving knowledge from other people that they are relate with and from their own experience. In my point of view, learning from personal experience is more beneficial. This is because some problems can be fixed by our own experience and no one can tell you that who you are or what you want to be.

First of all, many people say that it is important that learning from the others experience helps you to overcome the problems. You can use the same methods that you were told to solve the problems. In contrary, the same difficulty may not be fixed by the same solution. For example, your aunt may told you that if you want be a smart person, you have to read a lot. Your aunt may be a smart person by reading, but reading might not a good way to be genius. You can try different ways to find the best way that you can be a smart person. Practicing frequently and learning from actual situation might be the best way that you can be professional. To overcome something may be use different methods to achieve. You have to find your own way by using your experience

Moreover, it is good to get advice from people you relate with but you could not be told to be something by others suggestion. For instance, You may interesting in art, you love to draw, but your teacher tell you that you should be a scientist because you have high score at science. This advice is good, but it cannot define what you want to be. You can do variety activities to find something you like and use these experiences to decide that what you want to be by using your own.

In conclusion, it is a lot benefits that you get suggestion from people you love, but I personally think that the best way to learn about life is by learning from personal experience because you have to have your own experience to decide which one is the best solution for you or what you want to be. I always consider something by using my own experience first.

Writing Feedback / [TOEFL] higher education should be available only to good students or not [2]

TOPIC : Some people believe that a college or university education should be
available to all students. Others believe that higher education should be
available only to good students. Discuss these views. Which view do you
agree with? Explain why.

No one can disagree that knowledge is the most important for everyone. College and university are playing in an important role to provide academic skills to people in order to pursue their goal. There are an issue that some people agree that this opportunity should be preserved for good students however there are others people who think that everyone should have this chance to gain these advance skills from college or university. This issue will be discussed.

First of all, many people think that college and university should consider students to study with them only if they are good students. The reason is that studying in advance education take a huge of money. College and university do not want people who not qualify for to waste their money in these expensive courses and waste their time. They believe that only good students have potentials to success programs more that those who are not considered as good students. Consequently, mediocre students are not have a chance to gain these advance knowledge from college and university.

On the other hand, there are some people think that all students should have equal opportunity to study in higher education. Of course, higher education take a lot of money and a lot of time however moderate students should have a chance to try. Everyone that has strongly ambition could pursue and success their goal even they are not classified as a good student because people can change. With a good environment in college or university is encouraging students to study harder for a good future. Thus, mediocre students should have opportunity to be trained in college and university.

In conclusion, I personally agree with that college and university should be available for all students who want to pursue their goal. Students can have opportunity to learn, to practice, to gain more knowledge for their career and for their future. Studying in college and university is a great opportunity that all students should have.

Writing Feedback / [TOEFL]which types of transportation will you choose if traveling from your home to a.. [3]

I still could not finish writing essay in 30 minutes. Can you give me some advice to improve this issue?

TOPIC : You need to travel from your home to a place 40 miles (64
kilometers) away. Compare the different kinds of transportation you
could use. Tell which method of travel you would choose. Give
specific reasons for your choice.

A place where I live is capital city. Thus, it is convenient for me to go to places in 40 miles from my home because there are many choices to choose in order to reach my destination such as bus, taxi, and motorcycle. These types of transportation have advantages and disadvantages. I will give reasons to support my opinion.

To begin with, one of my choices to go around is bus. Bus is a popular transportation that can bring me to a place that I want to go. the advantage of traveling by bus is that cost of commuting by bus is very cheap. I could save money to spend more shopping, doing more activities, and etc. But, too many people commute by using bus that make bus crowd with people. This reason , sometimes, obligate me to wait for another bus because there is no space for commuters to take that bus. Consequently, this waste my time to wait for another bus.

Secondly, another choise of transportation to go to my destination is taxi. I could feel more comfortable because I am the only one that sit in taxi. I do not have to crowd with other commuters. Beside, I could reach my destination in short time because taxi could avoid routes which have traffic jam. In contrary, price of traveling by taxi is hier that other types of transportation. Thus, I have to spend more money to go around.

Lastly, my last choise of trasportation is motorcycle. Using mortorcycle service is another option that I could go to my destination in short time because, even in heavy traffic routes, motorcycle could go through a space between cars on the road. This could take less time to go to my goal. On the other hand, taking motorcycle to travel is less safer than other types of transportation because , sometims, it is hard for me to balance myself when I sit on back seat while having too many belonging on my hand. As a consequence, I could face an accident such as fall from motorcycle.

In my conclusion, there are many options that I could go to a place I want to go such as bus, taxi, and motorcycle. There is one choice for me that I prefer to use is taxi because I could reach my destination in short time. Beside, I do not have to crowd with people. Moreover, it is save for me to go around while having my belongings. Thus, in 40 miles from my home I will choose traveling by taking taxi.

Writing Feedback / [TOEFL] university dormitories or apartments in the community? [5]

TOPIC : Students at universities often have a choice of places to live. They may
choose to live in university dormitories, or they may choose to live in
apartments in the community. Compare the advantages of living in
university housing with the advantages of living in an apartment in the
community. Where would you prefer to live? Give reasons for your
preference.

Universities are important for students who want to gain their knowledge in order to pursue their goal. When all students get acceptance from universities, then they have to choose where to live between dormitories at universities or apartments in the community. Both choices offer advantages and disadvantages.

To begin with, living in apartments in the community has many advantages. First, there are not have so much rules to live in apartment if comparing with living in dormitory. Students could back their place any time they want to. Second, students are also have more privacy because they do not have to share room with other students who sometimes might have trouble with each other. Third, mostly, price to live apartments in the community is cheaper than price to live in dormitory. Thus, students could save more money. In contrast, frist, living in apartments is less secure than dormitories because there are no security systems. Second, apartment in the community may far from university. Consequently, it is difficult for students to go to university because it take time to go to university.

On the other hand, there are advantages of living dormitories. First, dormitory provides best emvironment for students to study, have activities in university, make friends. Second, students do not have to waste their time to commute between their place to university. Student could use these time to student, to do activities, and so on. Third, living in dormitory is more secure because there have security system. In contrary, dormitories have strick roles that every student has to follow such as limit time to access. Moreover, living in dormitory, students have to share their room with other sutdents which this is less privacy. Furthermore, price for living in dormitory is higher than price living in apartment in community.

In my conclusion, living in apartment in the community and dormitory in university has both advantages and disadvantages. In my opinon, I would prefer to live in apartments in community rather than live in dormitory because I can have private space which is encoraged me to focus on my study. Beside, rental for apartments is cheaper. Thus, I could use these money to buy more materials for study. Moreover, I could feel more free in apartments without too many strict roles. These are reasons that I choose to live in apartment in the community.

Writing Feedback / [TOEFL] contribution of scientists have value more than contribution of artists [2]

TOPIC : It is generally agreed that society benefits from the work of its
members. Compare the contributions of artists to society with the
contributions of scientists to society. Which type of contribution do
you think is valued more by your society? Give specific reasons to
support your answer.

Nowadays, both art and science play in an important role to provide great benefits to world societies. However, there are differences of contribution between art and science to societies which, in my point of view, contribution of scientists could provide more benefits to our nations. I will give reasons to support my opinion.

To begin with, arts and sciences are created by people who specialise in their work in order to provide satisfaction to people. Beside, there is one thing that both art and science have in common. Both art and science they are created for entertain people. People could enjoy aesthetic appreciation of art by watching paintings, sculptures, dancing, and so on. And so does scient, people are also enjoy invention of scientists by watching movies through television, listening to musics through radio and so on. Thus, art and science could provide entertain to people.

On the other hand, there are many differences of art and scient that scient could provide more benefits to people in societies. For example, air conditioner that are built in order to make people have more comfortable in their places by providing cool air in summer or warm air in winter. These air conditioner are not square box machine that are set in a room, but, nowaday, these the AC could be an artistic object that are set in our places. We could order the AC in shape of fireplace or sculpture form. Therefore, we could have the AC as a master piece of art in our places while these invention are also providing air that make people are more comfortable. In a contrast, sculptures that we buy from sculpture shop are just set in our places and give nothing but aesthetic appriciation. Thus, contribution of scientists could provide more benefits to society.

In conclusion, I personally believe that contribution of scientists have value more than contribution of artists because most inventions could do both entertain and give our live better. Consequently, contribution of scientists have value more than contribution of artists.

Writing Feedback / [TOEFL] the most important characteristic to be successful is intelligence [2]

TOPIC : In your opinion, what is the most important characteristic (for example,
honesty, intelligence, a sense of humor) that a person can have to be
successful in life? Use specific reasons and examples from your
experience to explain your answer. When you write your answer, you are
not limited to the examples listed in the question.

People in the world are different. people that success their goal have their own prominent characteristics such as honesty, diligence, and so on. In my point of view, there is one important characteristic which is play in the most important role to achieve the goal in my life. That characteristic is intelligence. I will give reasons to support my opinion.

To begin with, in term of knowledge, intelligence is the one character that make people, who have it, comprehend subjects easily and also could improve that knowledges to create new invention that could change the way we live. Most inventors in the the world history have this characteristic. For example, Albert Einstein, no one can oppose that this person is very intelligent, his successful is that he could understand physic profoundly and improve his knowledge to invent prominent theories such as E = MC squre formula, and relative theory. This invention changed the way we produce electricity for instance. Thus, intelligence is the most important role to be successful in life.

Additionally, in term of emotion, if person that have emotional intelligence, that person are able to read people's signals, what is motivate them and react appropriate to them. These people tend to success in their career and their life. Nowaday, this characteristic is important in business because economy become to global. How this ability useful for business is that when companies want to get deals with counterpart companies, they have to negotiate with companies that they want to get that deal. Consequently, if people who in negotiation have this characteristic, successful tend to be on their side. Thus, this characteristic is the most important to be successful in life.

In conclusion, I personally believe that the most important characteristic to be successful is intelligent because this ability could have people who have this characteristic understand in academic subjects profoundly, and they are also possible to invent new things that useful for humankind. Moreover, this characteristic is also help people to interact with people appropriately. Therefore, intelligent is the most important characteristic to be successful in life in my opinion.

Writing Feedback / [TOEFL] Getting opinions from many sources could augment people's performance. [4]

TOPIC : Schools should ask students to evaluate their teachers. Do you agree
or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your
answer.

Getting opinions from many sources could augment people's performance. Thereby, evaluating from students is one of the ways to improve quality of educational system. Not only teachers could amplify their performance but the whole education system are also improve performance from evaluation made by students. Therefore, I agree with this notion that students should be asked to evaluate their teachers.

To begin with, Evaluating teachers made by students could improve teachers' performance. For example, evaluation made by students is similar to feedback from customer that business owners need to know in order to improve their product. Students might complain about their teachers spoke too fast that students could not catch up on information. Consequently, teachers could improve themselves by speaking slower to make sure that students could get all information that they want to give. Therefore, evaluating from students could improve teachers' performance.

Additionally, this evaluation from students could improve schools' quality. Teachers could augment their quality. Consequently, When school gather teachers that have great performance, school are gaining higher quality. For instance, in many cooperation such as Microsoft that could produce many great products because they have employees whose performance are very high. Schools could produce intellectual students because school have teachers who are always improve their quality from evaluation made by students.

Finally, people who get the most advantage from evaluation is students. Students could study in class that have teachers who have experienced and greater performance. Because teachers are always adapt the way they teach in order to make students easy to understand their subjects, students could comprehend their subject easily. As a result, students, who study from great schools which have great performance teacher, graduate with great knowledge to survive in next steps of life.

In conclusion, I agree with this statement that school should ask students to evaluate their teachers because teachers could improve their performance. Moreover, schools are also improve their quality because they have high performance teachers. Furthermore, students are easy to understand their subjects. Thus, I believe that there are benefits to ask students to evaluate their teachers.

Writing Feedback / [TOEFL] learning a foreign language in my own country or anther country [4]

[i]TOPIC[/i ] : Many people have learned a foreign language in their own country, others have learned a foreigh language in the country in which it is spoken. Which is better? Give the advantages of each and support your viewpoint.

Knowing foreign language is became more and more important in this time. Many people pursue to study foreign language. There are two options to learn foreign language. First is stay in homeland to study foreign language. The second option is that go to study in another place that foreign language are spoken. Going to another place to learn language is better choice. I will give reasons to support my opinion.

To begin with, going to another country to learn language is a good environment to stimulate people to learn language. For example, everyone around me speaks foreign language, and then I have to improve myself to communicate with people. If I could not communicate with other people, I could not even buy food to sacrifice my hunger. This environment makes me want to develop myself to be able to communicate with people that speak foreign language.

Secondly, having friend that speaks another language is help people to professional in that language faster. For instance, English school in outside my home country, there are many people that come from different places and from different languages. The only language that I could talk to make friends is English language. Thus, I could talk with my friend without worrying about speaking wrong. This reason makes me have a progress in foreign language faster.

In conclusion, I personally believe that learning language from foreign country is better than learning language in home country because I have to improve myself to communicate with other people. Besides, in foreign country I could have a chance to speak foreign language with my friends. Learning foreign language form another country is better choice for me to study language.

Writing Feedback / [TOEFL] experiences that have shaped your outlook and the way you live [5]

TOPIC : What are some of experiences that have shaped your outlook and the way you live now.

Many circumstances that I experienced change the way I think. There are many experiences that are improve my life in many way. For example, I could improve the way that I solve problems, improve how I take care of my health, and improve to plan my life for future. I will give reasons to support my opinion.

To begin with, studying in university taught me to be more prudent person to solve problems. For example, in math class, the way that we learnt to find an answer by doing step by step. Start with find cause of problem and the way to do research to solve the problem. I could adapt this method to use my real life. When I want to go to somewhere, I try to find the way to reach to destination. Which ways are shortest and which ways are less consume my time. I could find a better way to solve problems.

Secondly, Some experiences could teach me the way to take care of myself. For instance, reading and listening the news about choosing a good diet are the way to keep myself are more healthy. Thus, I am always buy a quality food such as organic food. This food are not have chemical. So that, I can have a good health. This experience teach me to aware my health.

Lastly, experiences are also change to plan for my future life. For example, I read about saving money for my retire is a good plan for my life. Consequently, I start changing myself from spending many thing that I want to saving money for my entire life. This experience change me to concern about making plan for my future life.

In conclusion, experiences that shape my thinking and the way to live my life are teach me to be a better person. Because I could find a better way to solve problems. Besides, experiences could shape me to be more aware about my health. Moreover, these experiences could make me to make plan for my future life. These experiences taught me to change my life to be a better person.

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Writing Feedback / [TOEFL] Should replace normal classroom with online computer classes? [3]

TOPIC Distance learning and online computer classes should replace classroom learning.

There are many advantages of distance learning, but it should not replace classroom learning. Learning in classroom could provide more information to study. Besides, learning in classroom are not only learning academic skills but also learning social skills, and learning how to solve problem in real situation. Consequently, I completely disagree with this statement that we should replace normal course with online course. I will give reasons to support my opinion.

To begin with, learning in classroom could provide more information and make students more comprehend in subjects that they had learnt. Because in classroom have many equipment to demonstrate real example. For example, in biology class, learning anatomy by operating fog have many benefits. Learner could learn how to use tools and see actual organs of fog. Unlike classroom, online class just only study in textbook not learnin real situation.

Secondly, online class could not provide knowledge about social skills. For instance, In a classroom, teacher could give assignment to student to work as a group. This could help students to learn how to deal with people, how to collaborate with people in their group. This important skill cannot be gotten in online classes.

Lastly, learning in classroom, student could have healthier life because in school can provide exercise class which train student to move their body. Classroom have specialist trainer to teach students to it right way. If student do it by themselves, they might be hurt themselves. This make students have healthier life which online class cannot provide.

In conclusion, I personally disagree this this notion that we should replace classroom with online class. Because, classroom could provide real actual example to make students more understand in their subject. Besides, classroom courses are also provide students to learn social skill. Moreover, classroom could provide exercise class to set students to have a good health. Thus, having classroom could provide abundant skills to students.

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Writing Feedback / [TOEFL] marry someone who is similar to you, rather than someone who is different [5]

[TOPIC] It is better to marry someone who is similar to you, rather than someone who is different from you

Considering to choose someone to be a partner for entire my life is an important decision. This person should suitable for me. The meaning of suitable for me is not mean this person should similar to me. T prefer someone that different from me. Thus, from this statement, I disagree to choose someone that have the same personality to marry with is better than a person that different from me.

To begin with, marrying someone that have something that I do not have is more interesting. This difference make me have a lot questions, and this make me feel I have challenge to get to know any things about my partner. For me, person that similar to me could make me bore. In addition, I do not want to marriage with someone that have the same personality.

Secondly, it is great to marry someone that different from me because I could get an opinion that different from me. For example, when I have problems, that mean I could not figure out how to solve it in a right way, having a different ideas could turn bad situation to good opportunity. Thus, I prefer to marry someone that is not familiar to me.

In conclusion, I disagree with this notion that marry someone that similar to me is better than someone that different from me because this person make me feel interested. Besides, I could get different opinion that lead to the way to solve problems. Thus, someone that different from me is a person I want to marry with.

[This time, I tried to finish this essay in 30 minutes, but I could not finish it in time. :'( ]