Llamapoop123
Sep 12, 2009
Undergraduate / Common App Main Essay, On Love [4]
Your grammer makes it difficult to understand this piece sometimes.
^Although this is a little...off, you fought that bully at a young age so the negative aspects of it aren't as profound. Now if your still beating up your enemies at the age of seventeen...this would be a problem.
^You mean rollerblading? Cause I can't imagine ice skating up a slope.
Your grammer makes it difficult to understand this piece sometimes.
Do you think it's not good for a mother to sugget her child fight the bully?
^Although this is a little...off, you fought that bully at a young age so the negative aspects of it aren't as profound. Now if your still beating up your enemies at the age of seventeen...this would be a problem.
When I skated up a slope in my new skating shoes, I fell and both of my knees were bleeding.
^You mean rollerblading? Cause I can't imagine ice skating up a slope.