Writing Feedback / Writing Task 1: The graph line shows which three sectors global water consumed during a century [2]

The graph line shows which is three sectors global water consumed during a century. And table shows two countries which using water in 2000. Over all, global consuming water trend has majority to agriculture unlike household sector leveled to minority. On the other hand, Brazil is watered large people and land while Congo in Africa which is water consumed a few proportion.

In worldwide water, farming sector had been increased dramatically three times since in year 1900 at around 500 to 3000 cubic. Industrial sector had responsible by using water at international scale that increased gradually at approximately one 15000 cubic. However, consuming water in public sector not significantly to 5 percent of total global consumption.

Whereas water consumption around year 2000 in two countries that the first, Brazil they had huge of number people that needed around 26,500 km watering of land and provided 359 cubic water per person. While Congo's republic, one percent total people of Brazil should be provided about 5 million people, square 100 km. interestingly, it was water consuming less than Brazil in year 2000

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Writing Feedback / The Taklimakan Desert which is a part of Africa's Sahara [3]

The Taklimakan Desert is a part of Africa's Sahara which is about 337,600 square kilometers. Eighty-five percent of the Taklimakan consist of shifting sand dunes, some up to 250 meters tall, and large free vegetation. Yet, open desert and oasis on the desert support plant are scorching summer and frigid winter, drought and high-salt condition. There are three Taklimakan plants be adapted-Populus euphratica, Tamarix ramossina, and Alhagi sparsifolia. They have unique mechanism to survive.

The Populus euphratica, Eupharates poplar, tall tree in Taklimakan has an extensive root that allows to absorb water far from the standing tree. Tamarix ramossima, a small three called tamarisk or salt chedar takes amount of water via a far-reaching root system many times the size of the plant above ground. Then, a spiny shrub, Alhagi sparsifolia uses large amount of water especially during the summer months. Most it roots reach down deep where they take up water around sixteen meters below ground.

However, desert plants able to adapt for their own survival, they also help protect their ecosystem

Writing Feedback / Writing Task 1; Comparison of five are mining sector categories in France during year 1995 and 2005 [2]

The pie charts compare of five mining sector categories in France during year 1995 and 2005. Over all, it can be seen along in one decade Coal and Gas industry have big proportion then following Gasoline. Whereas, Nuclear and other product has increased along ten years. In summary, fuel production has increased in early year and fell down over 1995. Although, Coal has flat but reverse Nuclear and Other production increase a decade.

In time the comparison product mining and gas industry shows variety in number and trend. The pie graph shows coal mining increased gradually in production to around one percent at 1995 to 2005. Yet, Liquid energy only increase at number as much as Coal production is around on in twenty. Interestingly, petrol along ten decade decreased dramatically down twice time amount at 29 to 19 percent. On the other hand, nuclear energy gradually increase in number about one in fifty. While other production increase significantly of number approximately five percent.

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Writing Feedback / The incredible trips of Bird Migration [4]

According to passage, migration is commonly movement of animal from breeding ground during of the year. Like other animals Bird--for example--migration has typically unique at the centuries. Birds do migration has responded to the biological imperative of species to survive. The most of birds migration take place between the lower and higher latitudes of the Northern Hemisphere during of the year. Then, Birds breeding area in higher elevations, near or the peak mountains or other nearby low country. In summary, during migration, most birds fly for a limited period each day. Approximately amount six to eighth hours, typically flying distance of a hundred miles. At the start of its trip, around a half percent of its body-weight made up of the fat necessary to fuel this incredible travel.

Writing Feedback / The Information shows of two membership in fitness a five-year period, from year 1970 to 2000 [3]

The bar shows two membership in fitness a five-year period, from year 1970 to 2000. In summary, the first graph illustrates before year 1990 (1970-1990) and the second year shows over 1995 (1995-2000).

The first year 1970 stood at 1000 a women and 2000 male member. Then increased gradually in year 1975 that women enrolment rose amount a thousand member while male increased dramatically twice as much as number of women. However, in year period from 1980 to 1990 has fluctuated in number average 1000-1500 member both boys and girls.

In other hand, in early millennium transition from 1995 to 2000 slow but sure female who enter in sport center has leveled in year 1985 a number of more 2000 on year 1995, in contrary shown male fitness membership that peaked at around 5000 people at the same year. Honestly, in over year 2000 both member male and female has plugged to account of 1000 and 2000 membership.

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Writing Feedback / Is damaged tropical rainforest caused by Logging industry? [5]

Now days, logging industry had supplied several impact to environment damage. Some areas felt habitat loss, pollution and climate change along countries in Central Africa, Southeast Asia, and South America to northern forest of Canada and Scandinavia. And also Logging activity had caused damage both terrestrial and aquatic habitat in the forest. It can be seen, deforestation contributed pollution in the world. All habitat in forest will be getting bad impact too such us algae growth, removing oxygen that finally will be killing fish and other wildlife. Forest especially the tropical rainfall forest will be contribute to natural resource and biodiversity exist. Responsible logging activity will be guaranty in our nature and habitat still a life.

Writing Feedback / The difference three foods in China people consumes in year 1985-2010 [2]

These graphs show the differences between three foods in China which is consumes each gram/person/week in period 1985 to 2010.

To sum up, the graphs show amount household consuming trend instability. Meat was gradual increased in the number by 10 percent in five year along periods from 1985 to 2010. Otherwise, Salt consuming jumped steeply from 500 at 1985 to around 200 grams/percent a week in 2010. Opposite, Fish is fluctuated in proportion consuming year by year.

In period 1985 to 1995, Meat consuming slow increased to number 150 gram. However, Salt dramatic decreased in the number 500 to 200 just over to 80 percent. In contrary has shown of Fish graph in the number fluctuated that was slowly increased from 600 gram slightly down in year 1995. Then dramatical increased in number from year 2005 to 2010. These line shown the differences between household consuming Meat, Salt and Fish in China along several years.

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Writing Feedback / A wonderfull place of Inca's custom in Peru [3]

I would like to tell you about Inca's custom. Machu Piccu has drawed of prehistorical Incan civilization in the past. An Archeologist Hiram Bingham that has founded in 1911. Overtime, Machu Picchu were famous of travelers. It all buildings of site which was built from hard stone precisely. In site Machu Pichu nearby city of Cuzco around 30 kilometers. The traveler would reached it by transportation mode. The Inca trails of ruins still stand in Machu Piccu mount offer wonderful views; some of flowers and birds. The Inca trails were been tracking since late century when the Peruvian official institution pleased to tourist. To conserve Inca's culture, the local government has published official rule to put a half thousand every one day to guide in the trail. The conclusion, Inca's custom offered a luxury trip and memorable.