|Laughter is the best med UC transfer Promp #2
Undergraduatescrewyou709screwyou709 - Nov 29, 2008
|The fundamental ideas of economics are rooted in the everyday decisions of the common people
7 - Thanks. Do you think I should end my intro paragraph stating how I turned my life around, then continue...
Undergraduateiceboariceboar - Nov 29, 2008
|I promised my mother that I will get a college degree that she had always wanted me to have
NEW - Please review and advise. Thank you! Prompt #2 Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or...
|"my interest in the medical and biotechnological world-UC transfer prompt 1
2 - Your writing is technically sound, so I will try to help improve the opening: I'll divide the first...
Undergraduatescrewyou709EF_Kevin - Nov 29, 2008
|Essay about "what I would do with some land"
2 - we should not decide their destinies for... capability to take care of them or of whether or not...
Writing Feedbackmaryna_lmEF_Kevin - Nov 29, 2008
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4 - With the enormous population in Beijing it has various ethnic groups, races and tribes. I am currently taking...
Writing FeedbackcutepandagirlEF_Kevin - Nov 29, 2008
|"the experience of mastering Tae Kwon Do" - UC Prompt: Essay 2
UndergraduateBatouEF_Kevin - Nov 29, 2008
|Mohammed Ibn Abdullah has made an impact on my life
Undergraduateaz2845EF_Kevin - Nov 29, 2008
|Statement of Purpose --- Physics
NEW - Because I am not a native English speaker, it seems a bit obscure to read. Thank you for any...
|"VCU scholarship essay" - Compose Page 87 of your autobiography
Scholarshipskaterkaneskaterkane - Nov 29, 2008
|'Ready, OK!' - Cheer UC admissions Essay
2 - Lets put these words in quotation marks: "Ready, Ok!" These are the words... Also, I corrected this...
UndergraduatejessicagomezEF_Kevin - Nov 29, 2008
|Inspiring Book that Changed My Life (holocausts)
2 - I recommend Man's Search for Meaning by Frankl!! About this essay, I think you could add one final...
Undergraduateop2607EF_Kevin - Nov 29, 2008
|UC(#2) "Pushed Over the Edge"
Undergraduatealexteelealexteele - Nov 29, 2008
|"No pneumonia" - Common App #6---There are worse things
3 - I like this essay. It's a very great essay. And in the last sentence you wrote "Perhaps I celebrated...
Undergraduatebhangra369fabxx - Nov 29, 2008
|UC Prompt #1 - "Abacus, Plastic Coins"
2 - Hello, nice job! I would like to have you add one sentence to the first paragraph: Right here,...
UndergraduateannaywannayEF_Kevin - Nov 29, 2008
|'early stages of my life were transient' - UC Prompt #1; Mechanical Engineering
NEW - Alright, here's a draft of my Prompt #1 essay and its late I know. But due to compulsory military...
|Earthwatch experience.... Personal Statement number 2!
2 - Hello, I took out some unnecessary words, but you can trim it down much further. Take out the...
UndergraduateNickleEF_Kevin - Nov 29, 2008
|"The things I've said" - a poem about writing
2 - Thanks for posting this! I like it. I hesitate to offer suggestions for change. Some punctuation would be nice,...
PoetryTheFlameProofEF_Kevin - Nov 29, 2008
|"Lung Collapsed" Personal accomplishment UC #2 (THANKS GUYS)
2 - Great essay. You might want to remove the contractions and write the two words ("wasn't," "wouldn't"). Also, use...
UndergraduateGautamaEF_Kevin - Nov 29, 2008
|AP Literature; THESIS STATEMENT & Introduction
4 - What's this, you need to explain why you want to major in literature? Literature is human thought codified in...
EssaysWonderfulloserEF_Kevin - Nov 29, 2008
|UC Prompt 2 "Living life with no regrets"
Undergraduatedanielk87danielk87 - Nov 29, 2008
|"a world filled with materialistic propaganda" - UC Prompt 1
NEW - I'd really appreciate any feedback! Thanks a lot! I'll post the prompt in bold, as well as my essay...
|Best Architectural programs in the nation;Carneige Mellon- Major/Department/Program
Undergraduatesatyr5satyr5 - Nov 29, 2008
|Members of a group can learn from each other, and it will help compensate one's weaknesses.
3 - well, the essay I am practicing is time-impromptu writing, which means I am not allowed to reserch something on...
Writing Feedbackje2ks2je2ks2 - Nov 29, 2008
|"I grew". I always needed to take a deep breathe to enter my school's entrance
3 - Thank you very mcuh for your time and comments. Other than the content, is there any other grammar mistakes...
Undergraduatehahahahahaha - Nov 28, 2008
|"a pen that he could borrow" - UC promt#2
Undergraduateksj430ksj430 - Nov 28, 2008
|UC Prompt #2 - "I was a loaded spring"
11 - Um, as long as you don't take anything from my essay word-for-word. That would be plagiarism. =\...
UndergraduatekMzkMz - Nov 28, 2008
|After the lunch bell, I quickly stepped outside of Calculus, anxious to head to the Tomb.
3 - Sorry again, but what do you mean by an introductory paragraph? Like a paragraph about the "world" I grew...
Undergraduatepsypsypsypsy - Nov 28, 2008
|Misreading the topic? - UC prompt 1
Undergraduatewongxywongxy - Nov 28, 2008
|work habits and time management - Common Application Extra Curricular
2 - I took out the opening sentence, because, although it captures a scene from your experience, it does not really...
Undergraduatewongtongsoup22EF_Kevin - Nov 28, 2008