|For UR, what makes you a good fit? Give suggetions for my work.
4 - I suggest that you definitely include the publication information (at least one source) and remove any "filler" from the...
Undergraduatejunma314EF_Team5 - Oct 11, 2008
|"Circle of Love" - Univ of Florida admission essay review on a meaningful event, experience ...
2 - Good evening. I only have one comment: "...enjoyed the day's festivities; for a brief moment, I was..."...
UndergraduatenayrEF_Team5 - Oct 11, 2008
|Writing an essay on a persuisive argument - where do I begin?!!
2 - Good afternoon. I suggest you begin with an outline. Write down all of the points you want to...
Essayscee89EF_Team5 - Oct 11, 2008
|"I've been a musician for eight years.." - FSU admission essay
6 - i decided to just delete the last part. "along with the help of my role models: my band director,...
Undergraduateliljay9083liljay9083 - Oct 11, 2008
|UCF: "How has family/culture influenced who you are?
NEW - Work in progress, just wrote this from scratch. I'm having some trouble with word choice though, and on how...
|"...this power exists" - FSU essay on three famous Latin words
2 - Great response to the prompt; a few mechanical errors, but overall a strong essay. Nice opening and conclusion; the...
UndergraduatefloridagirlEF_Team5 - Oct 11, 2008
|"many different points of view" - UR promt 2
NEW - Rochester students represent many different points of view. Each student constructs an independent study and research plan. Describe what...
|The Jungle Sinclair - paper based on the book
4 - Ok thanks!...
Book Reportsjeseniainscjeseniainsc - Oct 10, 2008
|Starting an essay, define key features of mental health
2 - Good evening. Because this essay deals with specific material that you and your classmates have exclusive access to...
EssaysminabEF_Team5 - Oct 10, 2008
|Upenn short question - "explain why"?
2 - In regards to the prompt, it seems like they want you to name a specific professor that you want...
UndergraduatewongxyEF_Team5 - Oct 10, 2008
|An experience through which you have gained respect for you differencies.
2 - Good afternoon. The middle paragraph seems a bit too stiff for my liking; how about softening it? Something...
UndergraduateelthanoEF_Team5 - Oct 10, 2008
|What led you to choose the area of academic interest you chose?
2 - Your content provides a good reply to the prompt, but your mechanics need some work. I suggest a refresher...
UndergraduateelthanoEF_Team5 - Oct 10, 2008
|"Life can be full of many obstacle and surprises" - Admission essay
UndergraduateSammySammy - Oct 10, 2008
|Live a life that is pleasing to my Lord and Savior, Jesus Christ, FSU essay
Undergraduatebeccaboo3290pilla2008 - Oct 10, 2008
|Praising others - necessary part of life? Sat Essay
2 - Good morning. This is a great essay; your example of the experiment with the kids highlights your stance...
Writing FeedbackgodsendEEF_Team5 - Oct 10, 2008
|FSU essay: "Vires", has been forefront in my life
2 - Just a general comment: perhaps refreshing yourself with the rules of comma usage could benefit you; you seem to...
UndergraduatebaileyEF_Team5 - Oct 9, 2008
|personal history - FSU to get accepted in college
UndergraduatelecokrEF_Team5 - Oct 9, 2008
|Describe a setback that you have faced (brother) - essay
7 - beccaboo3290's tips are excellent! Good job guys! The main thing about formality in academic writing is to stay...
UndergraduateelthanoEF_Team5 - Oct 9, 2008
|Luncheon to honor the winners of the Boca Delray Music Society - UF
NEW - Any feedback is appreciated. I have a concern with my middle section. I'd like to make the middle...
|"Wings of Wax" - Emerson College Admissions Essay
NEW - We understand that the college application process often feels stressful, when it should be an opportunity for self-reflection. Stop...
|"... becoming Superman" - FSU Essay..last one I promise
NEW - And last but not least the FSU essay. Like before, all help most appreciated. Thank you! As a...
|passion for a particular subject or a cause Univerity of Delaware APP essay
NEW - Have you discovered your passion for a particular subject or a cause? I walked into the exhibit early,...
|"An for an eye will make the whole world blind" - Method of punishing criminals
NEW - Topic: By punishing murderers with the death penalty, society is also guilt of committing murder. Therefore, life in prison...
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|"million thoughts to pressure me" - FSU essay intro comments/suggestions
2 - That's cool you're a Christian too! I'm applying to FSU as well. It's my top choice. :) That's so...
Undergraduatepilla2008beccaboo3290 - Oct 9, 2008
|"...constant fighting of my parents" - UCF essay number two
NEW - This is my second UCF essay on How my family history, culture or environment influenced me. As before, please...
|Your activities - common app personal statement - 3 to choose from
NEW - In the space provided below, please elaborate on one of your activities (extracurricular, personal activities, or work experience)(150 words...
|which airplane flies the farthest- science report
NEW - This is my science report I just need to make sure the grammar and writing make sense. Thank you....
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|"My mother's diagnosis" - admission essay --Vires
NEW - The Florida State University motto "Vires, Artes, Mores" focuses on strength, the arts, and tradition. Each of these values...
|Compare two poems: Love Poems from Spain vs Raven, Annabel Lee
Poetryirishcol25irishcol25 - Oct 9, 2008
|Argumentative essay - Rich and poor children - school work
4 - Good morning. You're welcome; good luck! I think it's a great idea for international students to study...
Writing FeedbackThuyChiEF_Team5 - Oct 9, 2008