Graduate / Michigan State Uni - SOP for PhD in Marketing [3]

I am applying for admission to the Ph.D. program in Marketing at the School of Business Administration, Wayne State University, because I want a career in the research and teaching of marketing strategies.

I believe that the Ph.D. program in Business Administration (with concentration in Marketing) would be invaluable in helping me to achieve these objectives in the long term.

... I would like to apply for a faculty position at a leading university; and carry on investigate ---This doesn't sound right. --- issues concerned with technology as it affects marketing strategy and systems.

In addition, marketing is a fast-growing discipline, encircling a wide area of activities within the community, such as working with private and nonprofit organizations for research.

After completing my Bachelor's degree in Engineering, I enrolled myself for a Post Graduate Diploma in Business Management at Indian Institute of Planning and Management, New Delhi due to my keen interest in marketing. I quickly developed great interest in the field of marketing.

As a result, I sought work as an intern at Mermet International Ltd., a French-based---'French based sounds funny...should it be 'France based'?

While the study of, and research in marketing is my prime objective today, my interests in music, reading, travel and nature help me maintain a sense of perspective in life.

After completion of the doctoral program, I plan to invest more time on research and academic teaching,while applying my skills toward expanding business ideas.

This is one of the best essays I've read, and I've read almost 3,000 of them. It shows your intelligence, dedication and passion for your studies. They'll be lucky to have you as a student. Good luck in school and have fun!

:)

Graduate / 'why I want to pursue a life in theatre' - SoP for MFA in Acting [3]

In this essay I will discuss why I want to pursue a life in theatre, and why I believe xxxx is the best place for me to continue toward a lifetime of acting. In support of these points I make and will explicate the following declarations: ---I feel bad to say this, but your essay will sound much better if you leave all this out. They already know why you're writing this essay!

Theater makes me a better person.

In months of rehearsals, I struggled to determine my personal stance on sexuality, Christianity (my personal faith), Biblical fallibility, and artistic expression.

Retrospectively, I take encouragement and strength from all these experiences because each moments of struggle became a moments of growth.

I want this trend of theatrical participation leading to personal growth to continue in my life, especially at a place like xxxxx, and perhaps more importantly, I believe it is worth continuance.

I am prepared and excited for the rigorous course schedule, having acted/directed two plays my senior year, one a full-scale production I also...

xxx's rigorous work schedule, high expectations, and its long tradition of producing contemporary scripts, helps artists to analyze and form an opinion on contemporary issues and perspectives.

Great essay and great ending! Good luck with school and have fun!

:)

Undergraduate / Why are you a good fit? Union and American Questions [3]

The atmosphere of the campus makes me feel safe, and gives me a sense of belonging.

If I am accepted to Union, I look forward to taking full advantage of undergraduate research opportunities .

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I am interested in becoming part of the diverse student body of American.

What I mean is that American is the size school that I desire.

I do not want to go to a school so big that I am lost in a sea of names and faces. I yearn to be part of American student in Washington D.C., where I could easily manage the city lifestyle and still accomplish my academic goals.

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Undergraduate / "You're childish" - Essay about nature of natural sciences [4]

Like puppets on strings, all aspects of my nature are controlled by this playful nature, m ost profoundly my intellectual behavior.---Don't forget to always leave a space after each punctuation mark!

That's why l loved physics.

Every time l learned a new physics theory or principle, I was building the manual, thus, coming closer to fulfilling my desire to play with the enigmatic toy car.

For example, if I knew the principles of magnetism, I could use it to play with the workings of nature like an engineer, to invent a transformer!

Great essay! I really like the way you used the toy car analogy to illustrate your point! Good luck with school and have fun!

:)

Essays / "Our desire to conform is greater than our respect for objective facts." - AP exam [5]

I think this is starting out perfectly, and I can already tell you're an excellent writer. Good luck with it!

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Undergraduate / 'Sarajevo, Jakarta, Thailand, Nepal' - Skidmore College Diversity Answer [3]

This is one of the best answers to the 'diversity question' that I've seen. It's thoughtful and beautifully written. They'll be lucky to have you as a student. Good luck with school and have fun!

:)

Graduate / 'glimpse of the energy crisis' - SOP for MS in petroleum engineering [3]

At the age of eleven, I had my first glimpse of the energy crisis facing the world, when there was a petroleum shortage in our country.

It was just the beginning of a lifelong interest in energy and the ways to solve it.---This needs to be reworded to say something like, 'ways to solve the problems caused by a shortage of energy'.

With this in mind, I joined the prestigious Indian Institute of Science Education and Research, and chose to major in Earth Sciences, without hesitation.

This, coupled with courses like Introduction to Computing...

It has given me the opportunity to collaborate with researchers from disparate backgrounds and work cultures, where common interest transcended language and cultural barriers.

I believe my extensive knowledge in petroleum geosciences; outstanding capabilities of research, and superior mathematical ability and logical thinking, have paved a path for me towards research in petroleum exploration.

... in Petroleum Engineering at the Texas Tech University, which is among the best universities in the United States, to study Petroleum Engineering.

I believe that pursuing my Graduation with the Petroleum engineering group at the Texas Tech University is a logical step ahead for me and that it will help me realize my long term goals.

You're also an excellent writer, and they'll be lucky to have you as a student.

:)

Scholarship / 'when I listen to the Vietnamese-Americans in my city' APIASF Community's Needs [2]

All of my Vietnamese friends speak Vietnamese with an American accent, and joke about the bad quality of Vietnamese music (which I personally think is quite good at times).

As a family doctor, I would be able to help relieve the pains of people of all ages, whether they speak Vietnamese or AmericanEnglish .

While large cities such as Saigon may seem crowded by mopeds and other examples of modern technology, the country lacks the hygiene, medical technology , and money of other countries.

I've been lucky enough to have my parents' full support on my education, still have a foot attached to my heritage, and have an opportunity to pursue higher education, something which the majority of Vietnamese can only imagine.

Good luck with school!

:)

Undergraduate / My RBL group-- Umich essay: community [2]

The group research-based learning(RBL) group in my school can always get students who share the same interest together.

In my first year of high school, I set one up, and all the members of the group shared a same interest--creating and inventing things.

We designed and drew the sketches together, and finally made all these ideas come to fruition .

At first, we did all this because of our interests in designing and creating, but then we found that all our ideas could not only bring fun to us, but also bring convenience and improvement to other people's lives.

... lack of chairs or tables, and the idea of raising fish in toilet tanks simplified the water changes and made the use of the waste water by flushing the toilet.

...everyone in this group must be so proud to be an RBLer.

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Undergraduate / 'Children Medical Services' - Sophie Davis: meaningful volunteer experience [4]

Such an experience that I had was volunteering at a local pediatrics clinic that helped me personally grow, as well as further my interest in the medical field.

...organizing the patients' files according to alphabetical order, and making sure that the kids were not playing around in the clinic.

It wasn't these tasks that really helped further my interest, but they did make me feel like I was a person who can assume responsibility.

So I consider this volunteer experience to be helpful, because it taught me to assume some responsibility right and proved to be a great experience that will help me in the future.

This experience also gave me get a feeling of accomplishment by helping others.

Before having this volunteer experience, I was really stumped on whether to become a doctor or an engineer.

He was playful with the kids and he would socialize with the parents. in the way.

It was Thanks to this volunteer experience,that I was really able to make that hard decision between medicine and engineering.

This experience also made me bent on pursuing medicine with its interesting concepts, chance to communicate with others, and helping others solve their problems.

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Undergraduate / What is your favorite ride at the amusement park? Reflect on approach to life? [3]

The ride controller led us the way to our seats, but this took several minutes, due to the hordes of excited amusement park-goers in the way.

During that time, I was thinking about how the other rides I've been on in my life, such as Medusa, The Roar, and Boomerang.

However, Behnam had told me the Double Shot was different, as one would not know what would happen.

I was afraid, b ut I did it anyway.

After experiencing my stomach rising and falling seven times or so, I discovered that the Double Shot was my favorite ride at an amusement park, as its randomness of whether one is going to go up or down, taught me that life is unpredictable as well.

While I would like to believe everything will be how I planit to be, sometimes it won't.

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Undergraduate / 'red-hot traditions, intramural sports...' - Why Stony Brook University? [2]

For engineering majors like me, research and hands-on experience are crucially important, and Stony Brook University matches both of these expectations perfectly.

With first-rate faculties for research and the nearby Brookhaven National Laboratory, plus a strong research-centered...

More than 300 clubs, red-hot traditions, intramural sports, and many athletic programs that are available, not only drive students to be more creative, energetic and develop their leadership and communicative skills, but also make the campus life more enjoyable.

As an international student from Vietnam, I believe that my leadership, dedication, optimism, and curiosity would add to the diversity of Stony Brook.

Good luck in school and have fun!

:)

Undergraduate / 'krumkake, a traditional Norwegian cookie for Christmas' - Stanfort what matters [6]

To me, a successful life is not measured by how much money one makes, or how many promotions one receives.

This hardly ever happens, but I couldn't find anything to edit! It's beautiful, heart-warming and very well written. My daughter's a student at UMass Amherst, leaving for Costa Rica in a few weeks. Might this be the trip your sister's going on?

Good luck with school and have fun. And you might want to consider submitting this essay to Readers Digest or Chicken Soup for the Soul!

:)

Undergraduate / 'The Game' - JHU essay; Undecided [9]

However, the conversation eventually proceeded to what my cousins and I lovingly call, "The Game."

It has no rules, and the only purpose is to impress the people in front of you.

Unfortunately, our parents have been known to use us-their children-as their tools for mass impression. ---Ha ha!

In the last game, my aunt won.

However, it was during this game that I realized how little control I really had over my life.

My parents were living vicariously through me, and for years, they'd planned every step I'd take during and after high school.

For so long, I'd mastered being the perfect child, and it was through wearing that disguise that I'd lost valuable time-time to find myself and discover my true potential.

Of all the colleges that I've seen, Johns Hopkins is the most flexible and committed to helping students become whatever they were meant to be.

I think they'll be lucky to have you as a student! Good luck with school and have fun!

:)

Undergraduate / 'beautiful spring day at Washington Square' - Why NYU? Supplement [3]

I remember my first trip to New York City as a wee middle school student, and the daunting feeling I had while looking up at the skyscrapers in the heart of the city.---Are ye an Irish lad? :)

They all made a major impression on me, but it was a smaller, less imposing monument that had the greatest impact of all.

The grand image of the monument has stayed ever present in my mind throughout my high school career, and now that I am actually applying to NYU, it seems clearer than ever before.

Being a part of the dual degree program will give me even more opportunities...

I feel like this program is a challenge,and one which will provide me with the experience to help fully realize my potential as an aspiring engineer, not only because of the engineering courses I will take, but also because of the first three years at NYU's campus receiving my BS in mathematics.

Excited is an understatement; being a part of this program would be a giant step on my journey I set forth on, that beautiful spring day at Washington Square.

Good luck with school and have fun!

:)

Graduate / 'mathematics and its applications' - Essay For FE Masters Program [5]

My short-term goal is to get associated as a quantitative trader with a reputed desk.---I just didn't understand the 'reputed desk' part, as I'm unfamiliar with quantitative trading. Also, should 'associated' be 'experience'? Good luck, let us know how it went!

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Undergraduate / "Change is not merely necessary to life" PRINCETON UNI PROMPT 4 [3]

The pursuit of a greater challenge led me inside the bounds of Mastermind School.

As I first stepped inside the white gate of Mastermind School, I felt like Neil Armstrong, planting mankind's first footsteps in an alien world.---This is great writing!

Mastermind simply set the bar higher than I had ever faced, and my drive to adapt helped me rise up to the challenge.

From Alvin Toffler's words, we can gather what life is all about variation in circumstances.

They'll be lucky to have you as a student!

:)

Graduate / 'mathematics and its applications' - Essay For FE Masters Program [5]

My short-term goal is to get associated as a quantitative trader with a reputed desk .---This sentence needs to be revised for clarity.

As a kid, it was an enigma for me that how does prices of different securities change.

At teenageAs a teenager , I was naturally passionate about mathematics and its applications.

I also developed an algorithmic hedging strategy and analyzed daily p&l for the BBB trading desk.

In the past couple of years, I have improved my leadership skills , interpersonal skills and communication skills.

I am convinced that yours program is the best program to complement my experience and goals.

The four pillars of your curriculum aligns perfectly with my interests.

Excellent. They'll be lucky to have you as a student!

:)

Writing Feedback / 'UK school spending' - IELTS writing - pie charts [3]

The three charts provided compares the total expenditure including 5 various different amounts of a UK school in the years 1981, 1991, and 2001.

With 40% in 1981, 50% in 1991 and 45% in 2001, teachers' salaries constituted the highest proportion of total expenditure, whereas insurance accounted for the lowest percentage, ranging from a mere 2% to 8%.

Meanwhile, two other types of expenditures experienced different fluctuations.

After a noticeable increase of 5% in 1991, the percentage of spending for resources books dropped dramatically to just under a tenth, in 2001.

By contrast, the proportion of total amount for furniture and equipments witnessed a sharp fall of 10% in the first ten years, then surged ---Should this be 'plunged'?---to under a quarter in 2001.

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Graduate / SOP FOR MASTER DEGREE IN PLANNING IN CANADA [4]

That's so kind of you! I'm so impressed by the beautiful architecture and mosques, which look like they're made of millions of tiny colorful tiles. Also, I have not seen one Iranian woman who was not strikingly beautiful...like my daughter! Do you know anyone from the Rezaiee family? :)

Undergraduate / COMMON APP EXTRACURRICULAR ESSAY; MY LOVE FOR BIOLOGY [2]

From a young age, biology has always intrigued me.

I had yet to meet someone who would become as excited over science processes.---Should it say, 'scientific' processes?

Minds like my own, meeting to learn skills, years before we would need them, was vindicating and unsettling at the same time.

This began my search, this insatiable thirst to find things that would satisfy my medical itch .---This sounds as if you have a serious rash!

:)

Undergraduate / Hobby & Department short essays (MIT admission) [5]

I have been around computers ever since I was littleall my life , and I have always been fascinated by their controversial nature: while they abide by a strict set of instructions, they still leave vast space for creativity.

As I grew older, I started learning programming, systems administration, and cybernetics, which only strengthened my attraction, and aspired me to work with such machinery.

If you can sum this up with one powerful ending sentence, it'll be great!

:)

Undergraduate / 'knowledge of human nature' - Johns Hopkins Supplement [3]

I am a firm believer in that the knowledge of human nature is the foundation for everything else.

She knew that she was sick, yet her fear and mistrust of doctors, coupled with a strong sense of denial, left her bedridden in her Moscow apartment.

Perhaps if we had understood that, we may have been able to help her.---How do you understand it now?

Although it is very cliche to say that AP Psychology changed my life, I think that anything less does not do my teacher enough justice.

For the latter part of his career as a social studies teacher, Mr. **** resided in the biggest classroom of the third floor.---This sounds funny, as of course he did not live there!

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Undergraduate / 'I attempted to start a conversation' - common app essay [4]

It was during a weekend when my mother told me.

We had just celebrated Christmas at my aunt's house, and memories of all the fun I had with my cousins lingered in my mind.

My body was in Virginia but my mind and soul were still in Peru.---This is great writing.

I was tired of remembering places, people, and moments that were absent from my new life.

As time passed, my love of writing emerged and grew stronger.

I grew to love my English classes, which gave me opportunities to present my writing before an audience.

Conversations sprang up, and suddenly I was no longer that girl who stood mute, frustrated and alone.

Have fun in school and good luck! Keep writing, you're a natural at it!

:)

Undergraduate / Common App Main Essay (Vanilla) [2]

I'm a politically correct, cliché speaking, assimilating, self assimilating, self-deprecating, Camry-driving, and-if I'm feeling frisky-semi-colon using individual.---I like this a lot, you are an excellent and unique writer!

Why? I blame my unconventional Asian family, PBS, and my complex desire? to remain inconspicuous.

"FIT IN!" "FIT IN!" was the inner monologue that made my seven-year-old-self drag my mom through the grocery store and into the lunch meat ---Two words.--- section to pick up a pack of Oscar Meyer Bologna.

My complex nature stems from watching children's television.

Yes, I'm fairly sure that most individuals were taught to not run amuck clothing-less and barking, but not social skills.---This sentence needs to be revised for clarity, but is very funny!

Yes, vanilla is cliché for bland and blah,---lol

I'd like to think I'm flavored by exotic spices and have bits of expensive candies embedded in me, but I'm vanilla, through and through.

This is well written and funny. They'll be lucky to have you as a student. Thank you for breaking up my day with an essay that is not run of the mill or boring, even if it is vanilla.

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Undergraduate / NYU Supplement- My experiences that have helped cultivate my interests, etc. [9]

For three years of high school, I was dead set on becoming a broadcast journalist---the perfect balance of my interest in performance, writing, interviewing, and travel.

I decided to take this internship because it would give me a taste of a totally different field from the one I had been studying for the last four years at my performing arts high school, and it has provided me with...

... have helped me make so many novel discoveries about myself career wise, that nowadays I think "maybe I'll be I Douala , or a midwife, or an obstetrician."

NYC has already provided me with the moving experience of birth, and the process of pregnancy and I don't want the end of this internship...

This is why I choose NYU because the bottom-line is, I am undecided about my career choice.

... but I will also be able to back that up with hands on experience, if not in the cultural hearth of NYC then in London, Paris, even Abu Dhabi.

But overall, as a student at New York University I won't be afraid to follow the wrong path because, lucky for me, at NYU there are no dead ends.

Nice ending! Have fun in school!

:)

Undergraduate / "hún xuč" - Contributional Perspective on Diversity (Rice University) [2]

...a little girl walking the busy streets of Taipei with those looks was not something you would see every day. ---Two words here.

For someone to say that I am only half Asian, "so that doesn't count" in whatever argument, it causes my palm to go to my head - but only for a split second;...---This is great! I like the way you write.

I see the importance of people understanding each other.

Imagine the state that our nation would be in if we had programs especially for studying the messages of the Quran and the traditions of the Afghani, Iraqi, and Iranian peoples?

I will promote an atmosphere of understanding and mutual consideration at Rice, and who knows what such positive relationships can build?

It is only when I tell someone that I am Taiwanese and they respond by saying "Oh, I love Thai food!" that I am not sure where to begin.---OH!! Too funny! Good luck with school, they'll be lucky to have you as a student!

:)

Undergraduate / 'Proud and inspiration' - Admissions Essay [5]

As a minority in this country, I value diversity very much, as well as meeting new people from different walks of life and learning from them.

I possess many skills and qualities, as a human being that are essential assets for the student culture at CU Boulder.---They assume you are human! :)

I joined my school's coed cheer-leading team my sophomore year, and consider it one of the best choices I've made in high school.

My passion for cheer- leading grew and my level of dedication and commitment towards it was so high, that...

During the winter of 2010, I had the opportunity to serve my community by volunteering, and what I received was greater than any Christmas gift I got that year.

These people were not worried about getting an iPod touch or designer purse, but whether they were going to have food on the table for Christmas Eve.

Being able to volunteer some hours out of my day to provide these families with a hot Christmas dinner was a great feeling that not even an iPod touch could replace.---Man, I don't know...I got one for Christmas and it's pretty sweet! lol

Good luck with school and have fun!

Undergraduate / My new hobby is to explore and photograph my city and surrounding areas - Pratt Architecture Essay [2]

Born and raised in Turkey until the age of six, I've always had a peculiar fascination for architecture.

Though recent, after a quick exposure to the ways of the architect and his work, I immediately knew that this was what I wanted to do.

I remember so vividly arriving at the construction zone of Varyap Meridian, the high-rise development ...

I found myself dazzled by curiosity almost immediately.

With my gained knowledge of the career I've chosen, I have set forth a path for myself which has captivatedingrained (?) itself in my daily life.

I am an artistic person by nature and seek out any opportunity I get to be creative, especially with buildings.

I have taught myself a lot through curiosity, but realize I have only just introduced myself in to the world of architecture.

Good luck with school and have fun!

:)

Undergraduate / 'Relaxing in dorm' - stanford - letter to your roommate [6]

On that note, I'm always up for a challenge, and if keeping my side of the room clean is what it takes to win you over, your wish is my command.

You can come to me with any problem and I hope I can do the same for you.

I like this! Good luck with school and have fun!

:)

Undergraduate / Why Northwestern? My first impression [6]

Aabhas, Daniel, the Boss...how many people are you? :)

Undergraduate / Letter to Roomate for my Stanford Essay [2]

My name is Aabhas Singh, which you have the chance to mangle and edit.---funny!

Nonetheless, I still retain a lot of the cultural values of India, so do not be surprised if you see an Indian song on my iPod.---But what have values to do with songs?

She knows that I just cannot escape my love of Indian food.

I also play chess for fun and in state competitions; if you ever want to play chess against me, it's on.

I play all sorts of card games and video games ---2 words --- too such as Euchre and Texas Hold 'em.

I would love to meet your friends and take part in your favorite activities as well.

Your essay is great! It shows your intelligence, sense of humor, and friendliness. Good luck in school and have fun!

:)

Undergraduate / Why Northwestern? My first impression [6]

I took a Center for Talent Development Calculus I class which required me to walk every day ---two words here--- from Elder Hall to Fisk Hall.

The school provides various activities for the students to participate in , as well as open grounds to explore.

During my three weeks there, I saw that the faculty at Northwestern is extremely benevolent towards its students and non-university members.

Since I was a child, I've tinkered with toys because I wanted to become an engineer.

I have been a long time advocate of wind power, and by attending Northwestern University, I can research on how to improve the technology and use it for clean power around the world.

The university can be my new home where I'll be able to fulfill my goal of becoming a knowledgeable and successful engineer.---I changed 'can' to 'I'll be able to' because the word 'can' was there twice in the sentence and I'm too picky.

Have fun in school!

:)

Undergraduate / 'to persevere and to excel' - NYU Supplement [5]

Apart from the task of selecting a college, I believe what I'm doing is more like a process of finding the home of next four years .

As I step through the gateway of a college, I become a young adult who will have her brand-new life awaiting .

And this brand-new life should be congested withpossibilities .

Even though I have my future planned, still, I want to try variety of different things in the university.

So I want to find a place, a place which can ensure no matter what I will love, what I will get involved in , I can be embraced and understood.

I admire the positive attitude of new ideas and personal interests that NYU shows, and I believe the liberal air which spreads all over on the campus of New York University will encourage me pursue the success I yearn for.

Drowned in the open atmosphere derived from the New York City, I know I can trust that New York University is the right place for me.

Nice ending! Good luck with school and have fun!

:)

Undergraduate / 'Judgment: without evidence it is prejudice.' - Judgement - speed essay practice [3]

...most of us actively try to prevent ourselves from doing it, however difficult it may be.

Although sometimes this intuitive behavior can protect and guide us away from unfortunate consequences.

I argue that we should consciously analyze our reasoning behind our judgments, by asking ourselves "what stimuli am I responding to in forming that opinion?"

Although the jury had no solid evidence to suggest that he had committed the crime, he was found guilty based on the jury's opinions towards African Americans.

After he had spent years in jail, evidence was released that acquitted the Reuben 'Hurricane' Carter .

To conclude, there is evidence for both sides of the argument.

This is an excellent essay! The use of the story of Hurricane Carter was great too. Good luck with school!

:)

Undergraduate / Why Lehigh? - "One of Lehigh's professors, programs and its great sense of community" [2]

When I researched on these programs, I felt very excited to find two videos about the research trip...

Yet, what makes me love Lehigh most, is its strong sense of community.

...at the Morning Star Center in Hanoi, I'm enthralled to continue to contribute and learn from Lehigh's community programs, such as helping children do their homework or buying Christmas presents for South Bethlehem families.

Although I haven't visited Lehigh yet, this inspiring sense of community there makes me strongly believe I can easily get involved with Lehigh's awesome students.

I hope Lehigh will recognize my potential and give me a chance to become a member.

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Undergraduate / The intention is a vital factor - Princeton Supplement [9]

I tried to achieve this by offering aid to anyone who needed it, since the purpose of a leader is to serve those he/she is leading.

During this event, I noticed something peculiar.

Many MSA students were too timid to speak the homeless and the only reply they ever gave was "Happy Holidays!", yet they were comfortable talking amongst themselves.

Even The MSA presidents of their local schools exhibited the same behavior.

He was the coordinator of humanitarian aid and when he spoke out loud, he didn't need a microphone to capture people's attention .

From my thoughts, I questioned myself on how the coordinator could easily achieve what I couldn't today: an effective display of leadership.

I only changed a few things-otherwise, it's pretty great.

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Undergraduate / MIT How has your Personality impacted your Life? [4]

For fun, I read Cantonese comic books that are written in Chinese and creatively mixed with English, to portray typical Hong Kong "Canglish."

I work with kids every week through StARTs**, and I've observed that they learn best when concepts are explained through shapes and images, rather than numbers.

It enables me express my eccentric personality before them, and though it feels ridiculous at first, I know the only way to teach well is to teach creatively.

So in school, I like difficult classes because I trust that my store of creativity can turn a drab curriculum into exciting new knowledge that can be interpreted from creative angles.

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Undergraduate / 'networks of neurons' / 'construction of edu' - What interests and Why Brown supplements [11]

I yearn to explore the realms of memory and emotion, to study mutations in the brain, and in the future, to integrate my studies into the medical field and utilize my knowledge to help others.

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The freedom to construct my education will allow me to embrace a variety of interests that satisfy my insatiable thirst for learning, on both intellectual and personal levels.

You're an excellent writer! They'll be lucky to have you as a student!

:)

Undergraduate / Inituitive- UPenn Essay Prompt Answer [6]

As I look around the classroom, I notice a girl nervously glancing around the room.

Her facial expression immediately lights up, once I start talking to her.

As I go through life in the upcoming future, I will make the best possible decisions to not only benefit myself, but others as well.

This is simple and to the point, good answer.

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