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Name: Jhonies Saysi
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niesaysi   
Feb 8, 2011
Research Papers / LIFE AND CULTURE DURING THE PRE-SPANISH ERA [3]

Clothes for male were divided into two parts: upper and lower. The upper part was a jacket whis was consisted of colors. The red jacket was merely wore by the chief and black or blue jacket was wore by of people that below to the chief. "Bahag" was the term known to the lower part of a male clothing. It was composed of a cloth wound about the waist and passing down between the thighs.

Female clothing was also had a division: its upper and lower parts. The upper part was called "baro" or camisa while the lower part was called "saya" or skirt. In Bisayans, "patadyong" was what they were called to the lower part. The piece of white or red cloth usually wrapped about he waist was called "tapis".

In terms of ornaments, ancient Filipinos were used gold and precious stones. Kalumbiga, pendants, gold rings, earrings, leglets, and bracelets. Whether men or women wore such ornaments. In order to adorn their teeth, fillings were made. Not only the teeth but also the body and faces were adorned. Mostly in men, body ornaments were not only gold but they tattooed themselves. Tattooing, for them, had another meaning. It was a man's war record. If a man had more tattooed the more hen was admired by the people for his bravery in the battle. The most tattooed people in the Philippines were the Bisayans, that was, according to the first Spanish missionaries who wrote about the ancient Filipinos. A painted or tattooed people of Bisayans were called "pintados" by the Spanish missionaries.

Pre-spanish houses were typically made in bamboos, wood, and nipa palm. It was above the ground enclose with stakes called "haligi". These stakes were made also in bamboo where house was set on. Fowls were placed inside the enclosure. There was a ladder one had to ascend in order to go up the house. "Batalan" was a sort of gallery where household work was done. "Silid" was near the "sala" where mats, pillows, and baskets of rice were kept. Kalingas in Northern Luzon, Mandayans and Bgobos in Mindanao were places in the Philippines who made tree houses. Sea houses were built by Badjaos or sea gypsies of Sulu. Badjaos were a sea loving people.

The ancient Filipinos were divided into three social classes. That were the nobles, the freemen. and the dependents. Nobles were the highest among of the social classes composed of a chiefs, their families and relatives. They were the major class and highly respected in their community. In the Tagalog region, nobles were carried the title "Gat" or "Lakan". These words today were in some surnames, such as Lakandula, Lakanilaw, Gatmaitan, Gatchalian, Gatbonton. The middle class in a community was belonged to freemen. And dependents were the lower class. "Alipin" was called to the people who in the lower class. They were became that if by captivity in the battle, failing to pay debts, by inheritance, by purchase, being pronounced guilty of a crime. "Alipin" was classified into two: "aliping namamahay" at "aliping sagigilid". Namamahay had his own house and family. Planting and harvesting crops, rowing a boat, and helping in the comnstruction of house were what an that "alipin" served for his master. The sagigilid, in contrast, had no house of his own, just lived with his master and could not marry without a latter's consent. The two classification of "alipin" in Bisayans were: "tumataban", who worked for his master when told to do so, "tumarampuk" who worked one day a week for his master, and "ayuey" who worked three days a week for his master.
niesaysi   
Feb 20, 2011
Undergraduate / "My grandmother's lung cancer" - UF Admissions [5]

The concept is imparted well.As I read it, there little bit of error I just found out like unable using of commas. However, it doesn't matter because the details urged me to be emotional. I think that's the important technique to be applied in writing an essay- to entertain the readers...
niesaysi   
Feb 20, 2011
Writing Feedback / Tuition's hike shouldn't be implemented in some state universities. [3]

Low of tuition! That is what some of the students appeal on the CHED or Commission on Higher Education. In place of Manila, or other cities, many students conducted rallies in order to shout their feelings upon hiking of the tuition in some state universities. They believe it is a big factor that affect their studies. If it gonna be implemented, probably, students will continue to appeal, do illegal action, and the most worse is, the stop of studying. It is sought that our country suffers from poverty.In that case, students choose the state universities for it is affordable enough to acquire higher education. And also giving them an opportunities to reach their dreams and to move on from being poor. But how they will attain if the government contradict the chances of obtaining it? Education is ought for the students willing to take it on. So, government officials must lessen increasing of tuition because they just depriving them a prerogative to educate themselves. Funds should give to the schools with adequate amount in aimed to fulfill the necessary needs of an institutions. If that is could be, no need to hike tuition fees. Better than that, students will continue striving and they will offer endeavors not only with their families but, of course,to the government who subsidize them. But graft and corruption still cannot be evaded. Government schools will definitely affect much. We all know that our country is one of the most corrupt nation. Corruption is one of the reason why some state universities experience high amount of tuition fees. The government will give the school inadequate funds to be used for educational materials. Because of it, the administrators of the school might insist to increase tuition. Union of the students happen when it is officially decided to implement. We can able to see their determination, perseverance, and sacrifice just only to get good education. If the government will not appreciate all their hardships, that maybe shows of obstructing the desires of every students. Proper education may not count how an institution implements high tuition but how to impart ideas and wisdom to the students.

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Next time you will be suspended for providing useless comments (now removed) in other students' threads.

EF
niesaysi   
Feb 21, 2011
Writing Feedback / The Effect of Global Warming, is it changing our life? [6]

I think you've just summarize the essay...
As far as i know, it's necessary to broad your ideas about a topic by making more examples, suggestions, and information.
However, you have pointed out the effect of global warming. You will probably add more supporting details to make the readers more often about your topic.
niesaysi   
Feb 21, 2011
Writing Feedback / 'Important from medical point of view' - Pets should be treated like family members [3]

hello...
You have misspelled this word:
susequent(subsequent)
And please evade confusing to use appropriate punctuation marks. There are lines in some sentence with no commas.It is vital to use comma because a reader will suppose to go directly into another sentence or they will be able to confuse where would rest...that's make them misunderstand your essay...
niesaysi   
Feb 25, 2011
Writing Feedback / Ghost: Is it real? [7]

A lot of people are saying like this, " a ghost is real and they back for justice, love ones and deferred desires. Others conclude them just to haunt people. Whatever inferences have spread out about the ghost, only one thing I want to happen- to see actually a ghost.

Even my family, neighbors, and friends are sharing their ideas about souls that are still in these land. I am just solemnly listening to them, realizing and thinking how those ideas are real enough . They've shared story from what and how it is happened. The way the telling it, I want to believe because it's entertaining. But I am not the person who just believing to a certain thing without any proof. So, if ghost is true,well, I want to see. I am stick with the motto, to see is to believe.

When I was in high school, there was an incident truly unforgettable. As a matter of fact, I was always wondering of it until now. It was about my classmate where soul entered to her body. That was our teachers, classmates, and principal being explained. I was shocked of her acts. She seemed out of herself. Her behavior was not normal. She was so strong and had an uncontrolled moves. I couldn't described her face whether she was crying or angry. The voice was not sounded properly. It had another sound mingled together her voice. To tell frankly, I was shivering because of fears. My heart has beaten faster. I didn't explained what was my feeling that time. But in the end, I was still confused. I didn't know why. I knew my classmate. She was one of my freind. And that time, she was depressed because her grandmother died. I couldn't avoid to assume it just an deliberate acts. My classmate was a great actress and she was capable of it. What I saw probablt was not enough to urge me believing with ghost."Depression can do everything even to end a life."

Ghost, for me, is just an imagination of a man. It is being created because man opens their mind and believe easily with explaination not already prioven. I need proof not the others would experience but myself. I just believe if ghost will appears in my front and will say," I am real." In that case, I will not hesitate to believe completely with ghost... I am waiting. You? Do you already see a ghost?
niesaysi   
Feb 25, 2011
Writing Feedback / Ghost: Is it real? [7]

I'm sorry for that...
Anyway, thank you for checking it out...
Nice criticism...
niesaysi   
Feb 25, 2011
Undergraduate / UT Essay - My life and drugs [3]

I use used to look at him with sparkles in my eyes...
Just have right shift of tenses..
I read your essay quite interesting...
niesaysi   
Feb 25, 2011
Scholarship / Failure is a proof that desire was not strong enough [5]

Hello!
I'm just editing your essay...

Success is not coming on roses, there are with many obstacles on the way, desire and determination are the best leader help you to overcome.

Desire is the perfect motivation to make focus with all your energy, your time and your strength on the aim.
To Smokers who want to quit smoking, the only thing they need to do is strong desires.
For example when I was at the high school,

This sentence can be able to brief like this..
With enormous effort for learning and doing a huge amount of excises, it was possible that I could get a good results...

I might suggest that you can make a brief sentence by which your point is directly expressed.
However, you've made the essay meaningful and interesting...
niesaysi   
Feb 25, 2011
Scholarship / "In 10 years, what do you plan on doing with your experiences..."-Essay help. [3]

Ubisoft has always made games that matched my art style, genre and I have also enjoyed playing their games...
Be careful in putting commas...
I liked to work on Toronto branch ,since it's closer to my home then in the Montreal branch in addition their Toronto branch is smaller ,which gives me the chance to share my ideas and to get to know everyone their there.

To tell frankly, I am confused reading your essay..
But you can make it more better. I can see your potential...

niesaysi   
Feb 27, 2011
Undergraduate / "my goal is to become an Esthetician" - Educational and Career Goals Essay [4]

As a matter of fact, you're essay is nice. I have a little correction maybe you unchecked it, right?

I am very committed to fulfillingfulfill my dreams and as so, I will push myself in all the ways to succeed and graduate, so that I may fulfill my educational and career goals and be a proud part of the beauty industry.
niesaysi   
Feb 28, 2011
Writing Feedback / It's better to have peace than prevailing war [3]

Every corner of the world, there are trouble, misunderstanding, and war. There are nuclear bombs explode and kill a thousands of innocent people. Those people wish to live with peace and solidarity because, in that way, man can obtain the aim to live and start a new life. War between two and more countries is not the essential way to maintain the understanding of everyone, it is preparing of destroying creations of God, not only man but other living and nonliving things are pathetically killed and ended life without knowing what are happening. Some countries in Asian part, therein, war is usually occurred because of sovereignty, and extension of territory. In addition, land power and illegal way of capturing a territory are constantly serve as prior to their goal in targeting one country which is infirm and has no capability to fight against. They colonize it making as a state, that is a form of colonization. War is still a war. It starts with small and comes big when it is over, resulting into worldwide war. World war is the most fearful things to be happened because it is a joint of all the countries dividing the power according to group they want to affiliate. Sky wars, sea wars, and land wars are formed if it is absolutely happened. Like the war movies we have watched out, people tend to hide, run, beg and cry- emotionally mixed. As the bombs fall down, and explode people horribly, millions are lying in the lands, bloody, trying to move up, pushing hands up, and creeping through someone also full of blood compressing the red hands just insist to hold each other before eyes will close and left a message of goodbye. War ends many life- a life God is given to us.

Let yourself notice the blue sky. How good to see the reflection of peace mingle with fresh air to breathe, right of being free. Sunlight gives the world bright to actual see beautiful things it have. The cleanliness of water and flow to its destination. That is life. Nature reflects our life including the word of peace.
niesaysi   
Mar 2, 2011
Scholarship / "trust God and be optimistic"- lesson I've obtained During My Scholarship Examination [3]

Hi! please check out if there are incorrect grammars...I am not good in English.

Despite wasting great effort and perseverance applying for a scholarship, I learned a lesson from the experience. Indeed, I wasted not just a few hours of sacrificing but long hours of ventured. Being one of the applicants I saw the others determination, confidence, and forbearance. They were not phased and decided to never give up. After a long wait with other appliers to get the application forms, at last, I would be the one to fill it up. There was no certain expectation that, after this, I capable to pass the next process- the scholarship examination. It was the next step in applying for a scholarship program. I said to myself, "Don't let this chance go by, take advantage of this because it will help you achieve your goal". That is to study in a prolific state university in the Philippines, the PUP. For me time management was never a problem. I was always made time to review lessons for my exams, to review, and to ponder the information and ideas. To be chosen for the scholarship, I studied to be as ready. My parents always told me, "Its better go into a battle with a gun than to go without anything to use".

I carefully filled out the form and reviewed the lessons, the day I waited for had finally come, the time to apply my knowledge. It was my scholarship examination. If I could pass, I could use it to be a scholar to my dream institution. The examination was held in a cozy room where approximately a thousand test takers were competing for the scholarship. Outside the windows for the cool room it was so hot. I felt like I was outsides because I was sweating. None-the-less, it didn't affect me while answering the test questions. Instead I was visualizing the things to come if I passed this examination. In case it happened, that would be a joyous time in my life because one of my desires were granted. Trust God and self-confidence, both were what I've retained to my mind. I completely agree that God is the one who renders knowledge and we, the people, are who apply the wisdom. In philosophy, knowledge is the information we have obtained and wisdom is referred to the information we applied. Both helped me with my scholarship examination. I never forgot that time prayed with God because not only intellectual is important but of course also spiritual lessons.

Two weeks later I have been waiting for the results probably not yet processed. Although automated, it still took three weeks to get the results. Upon thousands of applicant who took the examination, only half would be considered as scholars. The basis was dependent upon the scores we've got. I expected the worse but remained optimistic still. That was the best I could do. If you expected high, frustration happened just like as you expecting negatively.

I was not finished thinking of the result since I left the house, and yet, standing to a building where it was being posted inside. It really not a joke about my hardship I spent just mere to grab this opportunity. First I fell in line beneath the very hot sun till my long time of preparation for my examination, I thought that it enough to taste the fruit of my hardship. Nervous is what I felt while walking upstairs. I couldn't escape the feeling. I answered the test questions well and read directions carefully. How really strong I was that time.

Finally, I reached the last floor. The place was so messy. Many were jumping, shouting, and saying, "Yes! I did it". Very lucky persons, I just thought. Only one word I've always spoken, that was the name of God. In the end, I touched sort of papers where many names were listed. I tried to seek my surname Just a second....my God! This was unexpected! I passed the scholarship examination. My reactions surely no one could describe. I was very happy, as a matter of fact, tears readily fell down- the tears of joy. God truly never abandoned me since before. The knowledge and stability were a great gift He gave for my birthday. Exactly, that time was my birthday. I absolutely believed to the motto that "nothing is impossible to God". My triumph verified that this saying is true.

Whatever you dream trust in God and be an optimistic person. That is the lesson I learned during my journey of applying for a scholarship.
niesaysi   
Mar 7, 2011
Writing Feedback / Describe the "TRAITS OF A LEADER" . Which of those fits you best ? [4]

hello!I've just made some corrections...
Rarely is one born with the ability to lead
I think you better write this way...One is rarely born with the ability to lead
A leader with an adamant set of morals and values gives give...
In order to lead and set direction a leader needs to appear show confident...

As my opinion, you have to choose best word for your sentence to point out the idea what you want to inform..just develop your vocab

True authority is born from respect for the good character and trustworthiness of the person who leads. Of these characteristics confidence exemplifies exemplify my personality the best.

nice:)
niesaysi   
Mar 7, 2011
Writing Feedback / Admired characteristic to understand ourselves [6]

hello!
he or she can also achieve achieve from life experiences...

I really love your essay although I have little correction..

KathyLala
..just not only admire those characteristics but acquire as possible... ^^
niesaysi   
Mar 8, 2011
Writing Feedback / Admired characteristic to understand ourselves [6]

Don't say that you're a bad writer. We are committed to have mistakes. Later...or right now, you will become not just a nice but a great writer, okay? So, pls. don't worry. Just practice and make writing as a habit.
niesaysi   
Mar 13, 2011
Writing Feedback / Being Perfect not only in school [5]

I'm kind of a perfectionists ...
I think the situations is much worse when I get to work..

Time out and I endedit up having not yet finished..
I keepkept yawning in class the next days and teachers noticed it. Such perfectionism didn't do me any good..
I believed that my perfectionism willwould get me going to do my best...

Your essay is lack with supporting details for your topic. I think you will make it more better if you concluded explicitly what is the pros and cons of perfectionism...However, i see a little bit of it but I, as the reader, wanted more...

And the most important is the right shift of tenses...that a writer commonly get mistakes.


---Nobody is perfect. Butpracticemakes perfect --
niesaysi   
Mar 15, 2011
Undergraduate / "Why I want to teach English abroad" -Essay for Teaching Assistantship in Spain [2]

After graduating from University I knew I wanted to work abroad, to gain an understanding of international travel ,andto see the world from my own eyes, and tomove beyond college textbooks and stories from professors.

For me, it is good to apply parallelism for that sentence...

Teaching English abroad would , of course be the opportunity of a lifetime, but more than thatwould give me the opportunity to see the world from another perspective, and broaden my view of the situations I come across and the people I meet. While in college, I had the chance to meet people from all over the world..

Being that Spain is the mother tongue of the Spanish language, I want the opportunity to learn Spanish from which it began.
..and I havehad all of them to thank for my growing interest...
share it with the world and have an open mind with those I've come across..
...a rewarding experience in helping someone achieves their goals

Not only I am passionate about teaching, but also I am passionate about traveling and experiencing as much as I can--i like this sentence! you've made the third paragraph ,for me, absolutely great....
niesaysi   
Mar 16, 2011
Writing Feedback / TOEFL-"forest is disappearing but needs to be saved." [8]

hello...

I hope you will provide your opinions about my eaasyessay which helps me a lot!

These distinguishing aspects can be implemented into our lives..

you know, there is paragraph emphasis. I like your paragraph writing. Your central idea is written consistently...great!
niesaysi   
Mar 25, 2011
Writing Feedback / Research about Philippines: FILIPINOS ARE A NATURE LOVERS [3]

Philippine country is one of my inspiration why I am continue to take care and enrich natures. I have seen how beautiful and abundant the country when it comes to the world of nature. I could say that Filipinos are a nature lovers. They acquire good qualities on how to keep nature rich. They become a good steward and do the best what God is wanted for it; God stated in the bible that man should take care of all His creations, and one of them is nature.

With 7,100 islands and islets in the Philippines, some are currently no names and probably contain 99% of various kind of undiscovered animals, trees, flowers, and plants. However, the country still let these islands or islets to live away from people to secure welfare. Additionally, these certain places said too far and in the middle of the seas find really find hard to go. Philippines is contented of the nature it has; the same as the people who serve as the motivator and responsible in implementing security laws for it.

But yet, I am much challenged. I noticed how nature is gradually destroyed. How green turns into silver. What I mean is the decreasing of trees in aiming to build buildings and other infrastructures. That's Philippines now. While years up, there are big changes happened in the economy and whole society. Many things are existed because of science and it affects nature.Filipinos become quite observant with the reality and they have found that Philippines is late in the level of modernization. It is the reason why the government abruptly conducted possible ways to come up with discovering and inventing through the important uses of nature. That, perhaps, the mistake they have decided. Consequently, they used it in wrong way and as a result, many are lost-their lives and their jobs.

Philippines suffered from flood, landslide, earthquakes, and other natural disaster. Although the country is rich in natural resources, it also rich in producing a catastrophe. The country, even it has a modern living, still incapable on how to prevent wrath of the nature. Nature is a great source of man's necessities. But man becomes abusive resulting into having of nature crisis.

I know that Philippines has enough time to preserve nature. I will not stop protecting it and promoting program to regain what is gone. The way of preserving nature is formerly Filipinos goal in life. But now, it also gradually disregarded and they are much focused with their forthcoming future. In short, they become a practical thinkers. Maybe they changed because of economic factors.

The country, although laws in nature are implemented, doesn't avoid to use it improperly. Meaning, some people still can evaded government upon opposing a particular law. They must know how nature is powerful. The disasters it may provide can affect a thousands of people. In case it will happens, it might be a remarkable moment because many will expected to lose like their families and assets. Nature's vengeance signifies that people should stop doing things against it. Deforestation is usually people do. They cut trees for building infrastructures illegally, meaning, it is not permitted by the government. Kaingin, a Tagalog term, or burning of trees before to do planting such as vegetables and fruits,is also great in the Philippines. It is a form of agriculture which, on the other hand, provides negative effect to the environment like global warming. However, the government increase securities concerning to trees, wild plants and animals by designating educated people who will serve to guide and protect it from illegal loggers and hunters.In that way, the government will preserve nature and maintain its abundance. Many concerned Filipinos donated either material or immaterial things ,which used in promoting environmental programs like planting trees for the beautification of the streets, and implementing reforestation to make trees still beneficial to people. Moreover, with the valuable use of modern technologies, Philippine government become easier for them to protect nature. It is also a big factor that helps natural resources more progressive and become an infinite source of needs.

Philippines has rich natural resources which ought to be preserved. And that is my aim. I will not let it gone. As a matter of fact, I am much challenged of what is happening- a sort of challenge that measures myself as a certified Filipino nature lover.
niesaysi   
Mar 30, 2011
Writing Feedback / Research about Philippines: FILIPINOS ARE A NATURE LOVERS [3]

thank you.
I am really flattered from all your comments sir Kevin!
You know, your CORRECTIONS serve as my inspiration in writing an essay. I really bear it to my mind while I'm writing....
I hope someday I can write a perfect essay. And I believe that this website is a best tool towards it..
niesaysi   
Mar 31, 2011
Writing Feedback / What motivates people to change?Any change is accompanied by drawbacks and discomfots [4]

.People change because of pain , want to be better person , bad conditions ofin life , bad habits , want to start again their life , people change to coexist with their future.You may write it shortly like this...People change because they want to start a new life, to ease pain, and to coexist with their future.

Like the Egyptian revolution ofon 25th ofJanuary--what year?... , it motivatedto change the whole people motivates them to work , to build their country , to become the best people in the whole world. Many people after this revolution changedabout 360 degree. However, even it doesn't reached the bottom degree, there is at least 10 % change in the way they think, live, and dream for tomorrow to have the best life ever ..

I think you have a lot of practice...
there are lot of grammatical errors...just practice,my dear.
niesaysi   
Aug 18, 2011
Grammar, Usage / Adverbs are the worst - too many adverbs spoil the soup [9]

ADVERBS:CAN BE PLACED BETWEEN LINKING AND MAIN VERB?

PLEASE help me to understand if an adverb can be in a position between a linking verb and a main verb. It is quite confusing for me in times I will construct a sentence.

There was someone told me that placing adverb in that manner might be evaded.
To be more explicit, there are some examples below.

1.I was usually tried to oppose him.
2.Shewas early became an orphan.
3.My motherwasfrequentlyscolding me.

Is it one of the standard rule in sentence pattern?
niesaysi   
Oct 8, 2011
Undergraduate / 'Media influencing people in negative way' issue of personal, local, national [2]

Even though media like magazines, television, or internet is to broad our mind and gain new information for our advantage, but the present media has gone too far. This sentence must be consisted of affirmative and negative sides.If the first clause is introduced with a conjunction even though, it must be answered by an opposing idea.Therefore, it should be:

Even though media like magazines, television, or internet is to broad our mind and gain new information for our advantage, but the present media has gone too far. It must be deleted and changed such the present media has brought disadvantages to us.

Media, which suppose to communicate people with influence, havehas controlled our mind in negative ways that affect people's life majorly.
Oneself can stop the impact of media has to their life, but the society seemsto forceforcing them to act.
By one's transformation in tointo what others think as attractive, he or she may continue to be more influenced.

Good!!
niesaysi   
Mar 1, 2012
Writing Feedback / ACCOMPLISHMENT REPORT: ENCOUNTERS UPON OUR OUTREACH PROGRAM WE CONDUCTED [2]

Please help me! I profoundly welcome whoever would post ...

To eradicate illiteracy and promote functional literacy for the out of school children; this is our main goal which the Alternative Learning System (ALS), as part of the school curriculum, has given us a privilege to somehow fulfill one of the country's worst predicaments- high illiteracy rate. Those children, age ranging 5 to 16, who have also been never gone to school or dropped out of school, have made our program undoubtedly purposeful because not only them the specific learners are but also ourselves who have significantly learned. They helped us to equip our self's development and sense of community as well as our critical thinking and problem solving- these two are belonged on the five learning strands of Alternative Learning System curriculum.

December 3, 2011, when we started to conduct the program entitled I Love Sabado ( Saturday) in a certain barangay in our city. First, we divided our class into six groups and assigned to do teaching every Saturday around 2:00 pm to 4:pm. Then, every group selected three teams to teach reading, writing, and arithmetic. These are the teaching categories that each group has to teach. From these categories, I was assigned to teach reading. Being in this sort of teaching, our general objective is to teach the students how to read correctly and properly. Learning to read was not easy for them most especially if they had no background idea about how to read. However, we taught them in a simpler way for them to be able to relate well.

To take this activity more successfully, I have observed that it is imperative to exercise good intrapersonal and interpersonal relationship to evade social conflicts which absolutely the primary hindrances toward achievements. Self-discipline is one important value that I have learned also to communicate better with my co-Als workers and students,and with the barangay staff as well. My fellow Als workers have taught me how to be patient. In addition, I learned, too, the significance of teamwork towards a common goal. Despite of the students' mischief, I could still receive from them a reward and that was an unmeasurable happiness every time they could understand what I was trying them to teach. But all of these would not be contingently happened without the noble barangay staff, particularly the barangay captain and the president of the village, who fully extended their cooperation by providing us with a convinient place for the betterment of our program.

Despite such positive accomplishments, problems did not truly let us free doing every thing without a corresponding conflicts. As instance, when we began seeking for our learners. There, we got a problem like the group who would lift the task to gather qualified learners (mapping). Though there were some who had volunteered, they had more complains rather than the number of the learners they had gathered. Unity was missing at our first action. That was also the time I started to be reactive which only contributed a worst output. We likewise met problem upon our venue that the barangay captain was initially recommended on us wherein is actually an open wall one. This type of place structure might only contribute problems to be brought by other children and other forces which may be devastating to execute teaching through the students. Due this encouter, we did quick action by sending another letter to the barangay captain requesting to shift to a covered place. Somehow, it was swiftly granted, therefore a place protected even from the natural forces was rendered finally. On the other side, some problems were brought commonly by our students like inevitable mischief. They also spoke harsh words and doing things their own which they hated whoever would try them to disturb. Nevertheless, we kept them to understand and maintained our strong patience. Generally, the main reason why all of these dilemmas happened is because of our being reactive that merely blocked our mind off what the best to do.

I could say that the result of our conducted program is successful. It is because we were able to immediately fix problems although blaming each other is unavoidable from us. Group stability is also a great factor that helped us get out over problems. This activity is really worthy because it catered challenges accompanied with various lessons that have taught us morally and intellectually. However, it would just be more worthy if we became proactive most of the time as well as if we focused on the specific needs of the learners like teaching them the proper hygienes, moral aspects, and importance of numbers in daily lives, instead of just teaching what a certain topic is all about. In short, there is still indication of teaching reading, writing, and artihmetic but these must be integrated upon the needs of the learners.
niesaysi   
Jun 20, 2012
Writing Feedback / MY ANXIETY BEYOND THE QUEST (and Philippines) [2]

Facing up your fear is said to be the better way rather than escaping it. This ideology is something that influenced myself to conquer one of my anxieties- to speak and write using the English language.

In our country, Philippines, the utilization of English as a second language has come into point that every Filipino is yet fond patronizing much it knowing its benefits towards them are greatly encouraging and worth spending effort for. But learning it is quite hard especially when there is extremely no interest to merely urge ourselves to be diligent and patient upon attaining the highest level of learning-COMPREHENSION- as well as using the language pertinent to the grammar's rules. For me, it is still not enough that I've just mastered it in terms of writing without understanding during discourse. Speaking English is complex and it is my weak point. Sometimes there comes to a scenario while I was watching English movies,it really happened that some of its occurrences were confusing due the characters spoke the language differently as in so difficult to comprehend. I just thought what if one time I meet an American citizen and eventually we are having a conversation, does he/she could understand my way of speaking or could I able to get easily whatever he/she would put across?

Genuinely, this is my fear. Nevertheless, I have to face it up courageously. Another reason why I am so awkward to speak English is that in our nation, grammar is vehemently prioritized than understanding, particularly when studying at school. So, either of the two macro skills, speaking and writing, use the language grammatically correct because if not someone will definitely notice it though there is fluency of language usage. I am afraid to be corrected(it feels like a sort of humiliation). I do not want to see anyone, mostly those who are educated, smiling, not known to me, I was already committed mistakes. This truly hinders me to be fluently an English speaker.

Getting my fear goes, I am now taking up a degree in education mastering English language. Even gradual, I can come up well just by continue striving to gain more improvements. Of all types of quest, this is the one which has taught me to bear in mind and make as one of my educational philosophy this line, "Nothing is complicated when you are determined to do your will." My will is plain but I initially took it not. It is positive but I made it not, too. Just grateful when I sternly fronted it, made me realized the error I've done. Fearing it is totally my wrong. This is my anxiety beyond my quest!!
niesaysi   
Jun 22, 2012
Writing Feedback / PROSTITUTION: WHAT CAN BRING IF IT IS BEING LEGALIZED? [5]

The outburst of prostitution here in our country is obviously unstoppable and it is the matter that I am truly concerned. For the government, this is something they must be taken seriously at this moment. Its vast effects toward the people and the entire nation are so so breakneck, but it's so disappointing to know that the issue about it doesn't still become prudent. Rather, it turns more controversial.

Prostitution is known as the oldest profession in the world. But in our country, Filipinos remain unrecognized it. In short, prostitution is an unconstitutional act. However, it has already legalized is some corners of the world believing this is the very best pace to reduce crimes like rape, battery, robbery as well as to prevent the swift widespread of sexually transmitted disease (STD). Likewise, it even becomes beneficial economically knowing prostitutes have been one of the big burdens in our country.

Today, most crimes reported were commonly with prostitution involvement. It would be of great ease if this will be eradicated readily. However, although the government has enforced laws punishing off prostitutes, it is sad to say that prostitution still ongoing and unobstructed. Many people, yet, have STD which is really so risky because the cure for it has not been found until now. There were also reported prostitutes killed due of rape and battery,even clients become victims. Different crimes that prostitution can bring in our country. It is certainly a big burden. Furthermore, the practice of this is quite detrimental beyond preserving morality, especially in this case of most children. No parents like to hear their children saying, " I dream to be a prostitute!". Just for morality preservation, parents look down prostitution. Christians consider it a sin for monogamy; the act of sex is ought to be done only when a man and a woman are in love and married.

Prostitution is now rampant mostly in some urban places so that is so interesting for lots of Filipinos debating such thing. I actually see its cons in our society like what most means of communication broadcasted and posted. The fast growing number of prostitutes is continuous and this something alarming because the country is already full with much serious predicaments.

I'm wondering if the government tends thinking effective tactics to impede crimes prostitution has brought. In an article I've read, it depicts that legalizing the decriminalization of prostitution can be a more peaceful and less effort way to impel problems like STD, crimes, and as an economic burden. This could provide health security for STD's avoidance. Applicants may then be requiring by the government to undergo screening process before they can able to penetrate the world of prostitution and also they will be compelling to utilize sexual protection on their daily basis sexual contacts. In this way, sexually transmitted disease rate can be reduced. Legal prostitution can assure safe working environment for the prostitutes. By government intervention, both the client and the prostitute will be on safe, thus crime can be avoided. Additionally, abusive pimps can be eliminated, More than that, legalized prostitution can be economically beneficial. Once this is being legalized , it will become taxable. Thereby, the country can benefit it. Prostitutes, like other workers, are taxpayers.

Moreover, Philippines is a Christian-centered country and Filipinos value much morals, values, and ethics. So, the legalization of prostitution may be probably so difficult to impose for a certain reason- people will definitely oppose it. More Filipinos see it as a picture of lewdness, sinfully influenced their views upon moral and ethical aspect of life. If in case that the government will ratify prostitution, I do not know what it accompanies to influence children's insights. When they grow up, I can't even imagine the contingency to happen over them in a sense this is acceptable.

To sum up all, every man knows what is right and wrong. It is over people's decision to engage themselves to prostitution. Whatever may happen, this is unavoidable because it is natural when tackling human's pleasure. But still, there is nothing more important than taking the path of righteousness and goodness. Prostitution violates the principle of monogamy. In Philippines, it is highly unaccepted and therefore punishable. What is good to do is that remain it unconstitutional for the welfare of everyone's morale. Socrates connoted that to do wrong is an act of ignorance. So why dares to promote prostitution?
niesaysi   
Jun 28, 2012
Writing Feedback / 'selecting a city as my favorite place' - TOEFL:Where to Visit [2]

Hi! I just edited some of your errors.

Others are more courageous andtowards undertaking the risk of traveling to new and unforeseen places and cities. I belong to the second group whom dreams were always travelling to a far beautiful city which is located in another continent. If I would have a chance to visit every city in the world, i would like to go to New York. It's based on the reasons explained below.

First factor influencing my decision to choose a city is the beauty of the citythat of its beauty-- you have to eliminate the use of the word 'city' to evade redundancy.You can use pronoun to replace it.

In a beautiful city i can not ( what you might mean is that you "can") enjoy the view of streets and buildings ,i also will be able to have a good time and calm my mind.--This is a sort of faulty sentence 'cause it lacks with certain conjunction to connect the two clauses..You may revise it as this : I can enjoy the view of streets and buildings in a beautiful city and also it will provide me good time to calm my mind/ I can enjoy the view of streets and buildings in a beautiful city because it can provide good time for me to calm my mind. .
niesaysi   
Jul 6, 2012
Research Papers / Looking for research titles in line with the field of teaching [6]

It could be general education or much better if about English(e.g grammar,literature..)

Actually, I have passed already a topic to my professor entitled "EFFECTIVE APPROACHES TO BOREDOM OF STUDENTS IN LEARNING THE ENGLISH GRAMMAR"..
however, I need more to assure the approval of my title.

thanks..i'll highly appreciate any topic related ...

please help me
niesaysi   
Jul 7, 2012
Research Papers / Looking for research titles in line with the field of teaching [6]

yes.I just thought there are lot of approaches that can be effective enough upon learning it...

Hi deepakbaniya! If you wouldn't mind, can you give me idea regarding this matter?Our final submission "will" be this coming tuesday, july 10. I am afraid with the title i've passed. What if my professor would be disapproved it?.. I need alternatives. And that is also why I'm collecting more topics to assure the approval..

Hope there are helpful people will be posting different topics. ANY topics..

Thanks a lot!!! I love you all...
niesaysi   
Aug 1, 2012
Writing Feedback / 'family, school, and state' - CAUSES OF DROUPOUTS [3]

Actually, this is the introduction for my undergraduate thesis. Please do comment. I'll highly appreciate it!!

The study focuses on causes of dropouts within the university. Variables such as socio-economic status, environment, chosen discipline, unexpected occurrence, performance of the students as well as performance of the school can link this research study to ascertain the remedy of the problem.

Dropout carries different negative notions to us. This occurrence has distinct effects that may connote deprivation of choice and of right to study, feeling rejection or disqualification, and failure by which are caused by various factors.

Data as cited by Mario B. Casayuran of Manila Bulletin issued on last June 4, 2011, according to the Commission on Higher Education (CHED), it shows that the dropout rate is at alarming 83.7 percent, meaning the country is producing 2.13-million college dropouts annually. However, causes of it appear unclear resulting to existence of several researches to verify the standard factors evident among dropout college students.

Poverty is the common root of the infinity of educational problems. Even how much lower the tuition fee is, students cannot evade disregarding the value of education because of the incapacity to finance other basic needs in life aside from educational expenses. In that sense, socio-economic status is undoubtedly affected them vastly. Parents cannot support them. They disengage themselves from the school to prioritize self-working in order to survive.

There are likewise students tend to drop out due on disliking the chosen discipline. This may be preceded through parents' choice and substandard grades to take the course interested. Although they accept it, it is bitter for them that, as they are taking it, they choose to drop out in the latter. A situation like this impels to develop sense of enthusiasm beyond learning, instead inclines on the growing lists of dropout students.

In teaching-learning process, motivation is very vital, along other positive environmental factors affecting the students' willingness and the completion of their studies. Of all variables, environment is really a big thing. Students are needed to be highly motivated by the environment, either be influenced intrinsically or extrinsically. Intrinsic as well as extrinsic factors affect widely the students' performance. Certain results such as poor grades, untoward behaviors, boredom, and consistent absences are impacts that may be brought by inappropriate offering of classroom environment. Facilities, methods and strategies of teaching, classroom management and setups provide important effects for students be motivated and discouraged the causes of dropouts to take place over themselves.

Students' performance upon getting unqualified grades to move on through the next level may be of cause by the result achieved during the assessment or by untoward behavior. In this case, possibility of dropout may be the effect. There is somehow prerogative to retake the subject if ever got failed, but most cases they let them be dragged by feeling of being exhausted and just accept the occurrence.

Classroom environment is a place where the teachers must have a high teaching devotion in motivating their students. Boredom begins because there is lack of motivation usage. As a result, students rather spend most of their time mingling with friends and colleagues. This is also makes them fond of doing trifling things that ignore substantially valuing education.

Services that the school can fully give is somewhat that the students' reason of dropping out. Practicality exists upon them just to benefit good and high quality of education, coziness, and assurance to have a fulfilling job ahead.

As an addition, factors that are "unexpected", for instance, pregnancy among women, penetration of married world, transfer of place farther enough from the institution, and severe injury, may end to an abrupt defer of studying or rather may leave the school.

To conclude, with all these causes, mere finding them out is not enough to impede students be disengaged from school. In fact, there is no accurate solution that is tested already. But the family, the school, and the state can end up this predicament. They have significant roles to secure the welfare and future of the students. However, all these recommendations would be useless if there is no expected adequate budget. As an alternative way, parents must acquire determination and in spite of poverty, students need their invigorations and encouragement, their moral guidance toward taking the right path. Moreover, teachers, having different roles, can influence the missions and visions of the students. They must be inspiring, considered the negative effects of boredom, and built a strong relationship to them. Most of all make effective motivations by giving to them reasons to strive and to succeed.
niesaysi   
Aug 2, 2012
Writing Feedback / 'family, school, and state' - CAUSES OF DROUPOUTS [3]

I am happy that you have corrected my mistakes. I really like your revisions!! Thank you a lot, for the effort, concern,and clean edits. I will immediately rectify the introductory part by considering your points..
niesaysi   
Aug 12, 2012
Writing Feedback / (teacher salaries / being unique for success?) - TOEFL Essays [4]

Since there are inadequate experiment facilities, few students can participate in science lab classes.

It is obvious that facility investments would provide students with practical and hands-on experiences during a wide range of classes, and eventually would bring advantage to sustain good education quality .

Thus, investing in (let's try to make this a little bit specific) investing for educational facilities rather than raising teachers' salaries would be more effective..

this is an argumentative essay. your topic is about the salaries of teachers as a factor to have a good quality of education. In my point of view, it would be more better if you defend your topic,which is teachers' salaries, highlighting that it has really an impact to the quality of education. To stick with your topic, you have to broaden and support it. In your essay, you've chosen to discuss facility investments and teachers' motivations that is why you fail to achieve relevancy .
niesaysi   
Oct 31, 2012
Writing Feedback / His life has been unusual; The Spectacular For Me [2]

The sentences italicized below are factual statements form a particular person who has made this essay feasible. I dedicate this to him. Feel free to comment as to grammar usage, paragraph development, transition of ideas etc.THANK YOU.

He is the spectacular individual I met- the spectacular person ...

Having an "ambiguous" sexuality makes him unwelcome in the society where he lives in. It really came to a point he did not mingle to anybody else most of the time; for he does not want to feel being discriminated especially if it is public. For him, it is a sort of humiliation which he actually the thing he feels afraid of.

His life has been unusual. It is very challenging for him to live according what his nature wants to be. " I takes more time before I could make certain adjustments that they may feel glad of me." I once heard this statement form him. The sorrow, solitude, regret and hopelessness he is usually experiencing have turned him numb. Every word that comes out his mouth seems only he who could hear. It is such residing in an island full of sadness, whispering at his self instead calling others to listen up.

The man I met is not talkative; he is quite shy- the way he talks, moves, and acts. I could see in his eyes the notion of perseverance to overcome "it" though he looks so down. The way he was telling his experiences sounds not lively. In fact, anyone would try to listen to him may make his tears fall down. Obviously, it is dimness that covers him. The gleaming sun that will give him with excessive light might have been behind that darkness waiting for his call of reinforcement. Emotionally, problem is difficult to remedy unless heart finds already the thing that will relieve its pain. Our feelings may get hurt if we also let our hearts in pain. Therein begins an emotionally extreme problem which engages us in distress.

There are people who cannot accept homosexuals. They are insisting that there are only two sexuality- male and female. How about the renown homosexuality, gay and lesbian? I remember when one says this: " Homosexuals are not creations of God. There is no such "term" as stated in the Bible, merely men and women." Although it is somewhat true biblically, the reality that they are here living with us cannot hide the truth. Whatever may happen even if we will invert the world, gay is still man, also lesbian a woman in terms of the physical aspect. But internally, they are "they" who like to be men and women. They are genuinely not sinful unless they commit things that are not pertinent to the laws imposed by human and laws created by God.

One time I just thought , "Is this man deliberately rendered by our almighty God with such sexuality or he who has chosen it?" We are all disgorged in this world with just rights in all of the things He has created. No one has more,likewise no one has less. Every thing is given with equal rights. However, what is supposed to occur becomes opposite of what is ought for us to have now.

Why do homosexuals, particularly gays, disrespect, by others? Respect is not complex to solicit from people; just respect them, too, will do. The experience of being disrespected typically happens depending on certain factors that others may be able to respond insultively either through verbal or non- verbal means. It could be gays are happened to be tactless and looked disrespectful. In effect, their impression is pessimistically established.

He added also. " I want to create a new image, a good image that will uplift the stage of recognizing gays to the peak of satisfaction. I know that there are organizations promoting the rights and welfare of the gays and it is really good!" Then, I asked him a follow-up question: " What is your message for those gays who are building a disrespectful impression, thus creating a bad image?" Unexpectedly, he did not answer what I thought he might do say. " I will not ask for their change. If they are happy with their doings, I think there is no reason for them to be compelled to change for the better. Let them realize what things are good and let be learned how to rectify the mistakes they have done. Like we believe, be true to ourselves and to other people. It is the only way to achieve happiness which is the ultimate satisfaction in life.
niesaysi   
Nov 20, 2012
Book Reports / What are Mary Mebane's implied points for Blacks in "Shades of Black"? [2]

There was a lot of Segregation between white-skinned and black-skinned men. However, Mebane's essay explains deeper about black-men's lives; social classes in college, unfair-accomplishments, segregation among black people, and old fate for black-black skinned women--let's omit this 'cause it is already understood as segregation of the black people . Mary Mebane explains all these topics clearly throughout his essay.

Lastly, Third class were students of working class(;)to who were just filling up the population.

Darker the students, the harder to they achieved fair judgementfor accomplishments . One of the reasonsAs instance,was thatthe faculty expected lighter-skinned students to being more intelligent than black students.

Segregation didn't stop with just ruining school-lives and working lives of black-skinned people, but also social lives. Since most of the people arewere favoring light skins, black-skinned people had started hating their own skins. And this resulted another segregation among black people: They did not accept black-black-skinned women. They considered black-black skins as ugly, and this caused black-black women to take refuge inwith makeup to hide their black skins.

All of these discrimination of black-back skins leadledto the result of black-black skinned women having only three gates to be accepted by the congregations. One was to attach herself to a light-skinned women expecting someone to look at her. Another was to make herself sexually available. Maybe this is why there are so many black holes in current periods. AnotherLikewise,(try to make use of other transitional device) was to resign herself to a more caste life-style; domestic work or churches. Black women participated in religiosity often were the ones who accepted their worthlessness. Like this, many black men, especially black-black skinned women had have to reject themselves and treat themselves as worthless.

When there was a great amount of numbers of black people giving up their worthiness, there were also the ones who didn't give up to achieve real human rights. Often, they didn't give up when there were protests of black people ; which helped them to realize that they have powers- powers to deny something, power to strike anyone who can't strike back, and power to ride someone down.

The topic you've chosen to criticize is undoubtedly interesting. I remembered my Afro-Asian Literature subject which we tackled about apartheid or a political practice of segregating black and white people.

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