Writing Feedback / TOEFL- Personal lives of people are affected by media [NEW]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television, newspaper, magazine and other media pay too much attention to the personal lives of famous people such as public figures and celebrities.

Nowadays a large number of media such as Television, newspaper and magazine have demonstrated our life. As much as they have got some advantages, they have some adverse affect on our life. Sometimes media pay more attention to something such as personal lives of famous people. This action causes problems not only for famous people but also for ordinary people.

First and for most, when media penetrate on personals' life it cause some disorders on their life. They feel uncomfortable, also they feel millions of eyes always follow them.

Moreover, when media pay attention too much to something they forgot there are something more important that people need. Unfortunately we hardly ever see educating programs and documentaries because subject of most media is personal lives of famous people.

Last but not least, this occasion causes distraction of many young people. They attract this subjects, so they distance from their education. There are some young people that like to imitate famous people's life, so they face with some disorders.

To conclude, although media have some benefits such as occupying our leisure time, sometimes they are harmful. When they pay more attention to something such as personal lives of famous people it causes problems both for famous people and the others.

Writing Feedback / TOEFL-course grades are based solely on exams while in other classes on participation [3]

In some classes, course grades are based solely on exams, while in other classes, grades are based more on class participation than on exams. Which type of grading do you prefer?

There are several ways for professors to assess their students. They either can give an exam at the end of the course or can assess their students during the course. I completely agree with the grade that based on class participation. There are several reason why I agree with grade that based on class participation. One is that a problem might come up for a student at the exam date, an other is that assessment might not be fair at the final exam.

To begin with, at the exam date might a problem appear for test taker like an illness. For example, when I was in college in one of my final exam I caught a flu, and I was enable to get up from my bed. I lost that exam and my professor did not pay attention to my class participation,so I failed. I had to take that course again and it was completely unfair.

What is more, there are some topics that are bear, and a few students might do not understand them during the course. It might happen at the final exam that these kind of topics do not be asked, and the professor do not understand students' problem. However, students' assessment during course and giving exam after each chapter by professor can be more effective.

To sum up, when grades are based on class participation is fair, and professor can realize the student's problem during the course not at the end of the course. It can be really helpful.

Writing Feedback / employees for entire live? I completely disagree; people get old during time [3]

Businesses should hire employees for their entire lives. Do you agree or disagree?

Each company, business and enterprise uses their own method and strategy to make progress. One of the most important factors that helps enterprises to become succeed is employees. In from my point of view employees play important role in thriving of businesses, and I completely disagree businesses should hire employees for their entire lives. I have several reasons for my disagreement.

To begin with, people get old during time, and they lose their abilities. If people will be hired for entire of their lives, over time they become tired, so they will not do their task perfectly. Companies, businesses and enterprises will be suffer with these kind of employee.

What is more, science is developing day by day, and new technology is being taught in colleges and universities. So young people that graduate each year from universities should be replaced with old employees. The new employees have not only a huge amount of energy but also new ideal, that can be really helpful for businesses that want to be succeed.

To sum up, young workforce plays an important role in making progress for a business. They both are more creative and have much more energy rather than old employees.

Writing Feedback / TOEFL_Do you agree or disagree that progress is always good; human's tendency [NEW]

Do you agree or disagree that progress is always good?
There is no doubt that every one like progression, and it is because of human's tendency. It is a bit hard to say progression is completely good or bad, because in my view progression can have both advantages and disadvantages.

To begin with, let me say about positive points of progression. Progression is one of the best way that appraoch people to their dreams, goals and desire. With progression people are able to experience many things that they have never tried before.

What is more, as I mentioned, progression may have got negative points, too. Unfortunately, some people when make a progress and achieve something such as promotion, huge amount of salerey and fame, they start to looking down on the other people that are lower than them. Over time, they become arrogant, and lose their succeed, therefore, sometimes progress causes failure.

To sum up, progression can be good or bad, and it completely depends on the person who are making the progress.

Writing Feedback / It is not right to say we can not learn from the past [2]

Learning about the past has no value for those of us living in the present. Do you agree or disagree?

Many events have took part throughout history. Although some of them were positive events and some of them were negative events, we can learn a large number of things from these events. Many battles and quarrels have happened, many methods were discovered in medicine science and many cultures appears.

To begin with, we can learn from the past that doing some works have never benefits us such as battles between countries and nations or quarrel among some people. They leave us just ruin cities and other problems, therefore we can learn, if we have problem with each other the best way is to sit and talk to each other.

What is more, many method had used in the past to cure patient with simple substances, and nowadays many physician refer to these method and try to avoid using harmful substances such as chemical substances. They now realize that herbal remedy that had been used in the past might have more effects.

Finally, today's people have learnt from their ancestor that how to cooke row food, how to hunt, how built shelter and how heat it. Today many chief, hunters and architectures use ancient method.

To sum up, it is not right to say we can not learn from the past, in opposite in my view we have learnt a lot from them in many fields such as how to deal with the other people that live near us, medicine science and way of living.

Writing Feedback / TOEFL- The expression "Never,never give up" means keep trying and never stop working [2]

The expression "Never,never give up" means keep trying and never stop working for your goal. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Many individuals throughout their life face with at least one failure in different areas such as education, love and economy. Some believe when a person faces with a failure the best way is to forget that and releases that; however, I completely disagree with this idea. I always believe that a defeated person has to try and try until to achieve her or his goal.

First of all, when people face with a failure they can learn a large number of things from that failure, therefore in the next effort they try to avoid doing and repeating that mistakes. For instance, most of inventors in the first phases of their job face with some problems and defeats, but in the next stages they learn how to deal with problems.

Second of all, experience shows while people doing a job constantly, they become more experienced in that subject, so in the final effort they become successful with the high percentile. For example, scientists experiment a substance for a long time, after they gain lots of experience and knowledge about that subject they decide to make it final.

To sum up, I would maintain that people should not give up when they face with a failure. In opposite, they have to learn new points from that failure, and they become more experienced.

Writing Feedback / TOEFL_Some people think that human needs for farmland, housing and industry are more [2]

Some people think that human needs for farmland, housing and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals. Do you agree or disagree with this point of view?

Nowadays there are some issues which many countries and nations are concern about that. Two of the most important of them are rate of increasing population and endangered plants and animals. From my point of view although endangered animals are important, human needs should be considered more.

Firstly, day by day population is increasing, so human needs for food is increasing as well. We need farmland to grow crops such as wheat and corn, and there is no doubt that without food people cannot alive for more than some weeks. Therefore, farmlands are vital for human life.

Secondly, people need shelters to protect themselves from mother nature such as wind and flood and wild animals ,so they need land to build their houses on it. Dwelling is one of the most important human needs after food which is undeniable.

Finally, human need some crucial things to continue their life, and most of them are industrial such as medicine. Therefore, some lands should be assigned to industry. Todays life has some difficulty which become comfortable with the help of industry.

To conclude, the population of endangered animals are less than people's population, so they do not need so much land that people need. I would maintain that nowadays human needs for farmland, housing and industry because of increasing population are more important than saving land for endangered animals.

Writing Feedback / Communication save our time without spending a lot of time in long distances or in traffic jams [3]

Face-to-face communication is better than other types of communication such as letters, e-mail or telephone calls. Do you agree or disagree with this view?
As much as, some telecommunications such as e-mail and telephone calls save our time without spending a lot of time in long distances or in traffic jams for talking with someone else, sometimes in some special issues it is necessary to talk face-to- face.

First of all, while individuals talk they have some gestures in their face and hands during speaking. These gestures have meaning which are related to the topic of conversation, and they can be really helpful for listener to understand the meaning of speaker in the best way.

Second of all, there are some topics which are really important and have a large number of derails. Discussion about these kind of topics on the phone or writing all details on a piece of paper or via e-mail is too time consuming and also it can cause misinterpret.

All in all, there is no doubt that communication with letters, e-mail and telephone have benefits for us such as saving our time; however, in some situations face-to-face communication help listener to get the gist of issue with the help of gestures and it can prevent misinterpret which might happen on the phone or via e-mail.

Writing Feedback / TOEFL - People work to earn money to have welfare [3]

The most important aspect of a job is the money a person earns. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

There is no doubt that the main reasons of people for working is the money. They work to earn money to have welfare. From my point of view as much as money which a person earn from their job is important, there are the other aspects of work which are more important than salary.

To begin with, I have always believed that individuals have to enjoy doing whatever, such as education and work. In my opinion it is never worth that people make a huge amount of salary; however, do a job which they do not like it. Some scientists say doing such a job without enjoying it after a while causes some problems for people such as mental disorders, nervousness and depression.

What is more, job satisfaction is the other aspect of a work . It is important for me that, in addition of an enjoyable job, the company or the office which I am working for provide benefits. For instance, meal voucher, parking voucher, promotion and if I ask for taking a day off my employee accepts my request which are rare in most of works nowadays.

All in all, although money is one of the aspects of careers, it is not the main aspects. There are some other factors which play important role in a good job such as enjoying doing that job and job satisfaction.

Writing Feedback / TOEFL: Best way to judge about people is to be familiar with their personality - not with their look [3]

One should never judge a person by external appearance. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Individuals have two features, one of them is appearance and the other one is personality. From my point of view although appearance is important, personality is the most important. We can never judge about a person with his or her appearance. Some people believes, individuals who have black skin or are frown are not good person and in opposite individuals who have pale or white skin or always have smile on their face are good person. I completely disagree with these kind of judgement which someone makes.

First of all, there are people who play a role and cheat the other individuals with their playing, therefore we have to be aware to never judge with their appearance. For example, some people cheat their fiance before marriage by showing a cheerful face and well spoken; however, after getting marriage they show their real personality.

Second of all, there are some people who are black skin, fat and frown, nonetheless they might be a great person for leaving and colleague. For instance, I have a neighbor who are old, black skin and frown and I had always panicked of her. One day in a cold winter while I was getting back to home from school I realized that I lost my keys, so I could not do anything before my parents getting back home. She asked me to stay with her till my parents come, also she was great in hospitality and her behavior was unforgettable. After that I understood, I had to never judge with people's appearance.

All in all, the best way to judge about individuals' is to be familiar with their personality not with their appearance. Unfortunately, many people play role to cheat the others, and they try to hide their real personality with their appearance.

Writing Feedback / 'avoid repeating fault'; A person should never make an important decision alone. [4]

A person should never make an important decision alone. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Individuals have made a large number of decision in different area throughout their life such as education, career and financial. If you ask me, I completely agree that people should never make an important decision alone. I myself most of the time ask someone else to help me for making a decision or at least I ask them to tell me their opinion about my decision which I am going to make.

To begin with, it is a good idea to always consult with the people who are knowledgeable in the field which we are going to make a decision. For instance, in university whenever I want to sign up for a course I have always refer to an advisor or asked the students who had this course in the past. I ask them to explain to me what are the material of that course, is this a helpful course for my major? and who is the best professor in this field.

What is more, experience show, if we ask other's opinion and if we get familiar with their experiences we are more successful in are decision. Also, we can avoid repeating their fault in our decision which are really helpful and sometimes might help us to save our time and money.

All in all, If a decision-maker want to be successful and face with at least of problems and failures the best way is to consult with experienced people and getting familiar with their opinion, and ask them what they are going to do if they were us?

Writing Feedback / TOEFL; Businesses should be only concerned about making profits. [NEW]

Businesses should do anything they can to make a profit. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

There is no doubt that companies, factories and businesses establish to provide products which are people's need and make a profit for their managers. However, I completely disagree with the idea that businesses should be allowed to do anything they want to make a profit. With this permission they are allowed to hit and damage everything for just making a profit.

Firstly, if there is not any control on the businesses and they are permitted to do everything they want, they will threaten the beings' life such as human, animals and plants. As every day we read and hear in televisions and newspapers that some factories hit the environment by their toxic substances.

Moreover, if we let them do anything they can to just make a profit, they will produce products with low qualities and high prices, therefore they might hit consumer's life. For instance, a few months ago it was broadcast from TV that a company which produced baby milk, sold milk which did not have quality and it caused a few babies die.

In conclusion, all companies, factories and businesses should be monitored by governments and executive, and they do not have to let do anything they want just due to making profit. They can hit both the environment and human's life easily.

Writing Feedback / 'helpful exercise'; Games are as important for children as they are for adults. [4]

Games are as important for children as they are for adults. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some believes that playing a game is completely waste of time or at least it is fine for spending spare time. However, from my point of view, sometimes some games are really helpful for individuals. I will bring my reasons in two main areas.

To begin with, all scientists and experts say that all people from young to the old should exercise. It is acknowledged that because of busy life there are some people who do not have enough time or do not have mood to exercise. Therefore, some type of exciting games can encourage them to do exercise, and enjoy too.

Moreover, nowadays many individuals involve in different kind of problems, and sometimes these problems make them tired. Also, sometimes their mind is too busy and involved that they cannot find any path to solve their problems. Nonetheless, playing a game might put their mind at ease so they can forget their problems at least for moments. Interestingly, it happened to some people that during this time or after that a solution ignites in their mind.

All in all, I would maintain that in todays' world, games are as important for children as they are for adults and the old. With the help of some games, people can do exercise which is helpful for their health and with playing some games they might release their mind from problems for a few moments.

Writing Feedback / TOEFL-Parents or other adult relatives should make important decisions for their olde [2]

Parents or other adult relatives should make important decisions for their older (15 - 18 year old) teenaged children. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It might seem that teenaged children particularly in age of 15 - 18 are fully grown, so they do not need any help for making important decisions. However, in my opinion, teenagers need more attention and help in comparison with the higher ages. I will discuss my view in two main areas.

In the first place, there is no doubt that parents and other adult relatives are more experienced towards children, therefore they are the best advisor for their children. They have experienced a large numbers of stuffs during their life, so if children listen to their advices they can prevent happening worst things. Also, they can save value things in their life such as time and money, and enjoy they life with the best way.

Moreover, I have always believed that parents and adults relatives are the best friends and consular for the teenagers, because unfortunately nowadays there are some individuals who cheat the others for gaining more power and money. They cheat young ages because they believe they are immature and they can trap them easily.

To sum up, it makes no difference, people from young ages to old ages are free to make a decision, nonetheless sometimes to prevent some problems coming up for young individuals , it is a good idea to ask parents and adult relatives to give a piece of advice.

Writing Feedback / TOEFL-Most experiences in our lives that seemed difficult at the time become valuable [5]

Valuable Lessons from Experience

Most experiences in our lives that seemed difficult at the time become valuable lessons for the future. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

I completely agree with the idea that experiences in our live that seemed difficult at the present time become valuable lessons for the future. It is my opinion that, all stuffs which individuals try and experience during their life give a benefit to them in the future. It makes no difference these experiences might be sweet or bitter.

In the first place, I have always believed that when people experience a new thing by themselves the advantages and disadvantages of that experience record in their mind forever. So it is better and more valuable than using the other experiences.

Moreover, there are somethings which are not only stiff to learn from others but also hard to teach to others. Such as teaching a child to avoid playing with a sharp object. They do not understand our meaning unless at least for once they feel and experience the pain of that sharp object.

All in all, nowadays one of the best ways to learn new materials are experience. As much as, some experiences might be bitter, in the future they become definitely sweet and valuable lessons. With the help of experience we learn what job are good and should be repeated in future and what job we should avoid repeating them.

Writing Feedback / Child can learn from classmates different type of study; common language [4]

Classmates are a more important influence than parents on a child's success in school. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
There is no doubt that parents have the most effects on their children, however; during education years there are the other factors which have more impact on children's success in comparison with parents. One of the most important of them which I experienced, is classmates. It is my opinion that classmates have great influence on a child's success in education in two main areas.

In the first place, in one class there are some students who have different method for studying. When classmates study their lessons in a group, they get familiar with different type of study. Then if one of the students has a failing in her or his method of study, he or she can select method of other students and make a progress.

What is more, it happens a lot among students that sometimes a student might do not understand the issue which teacher was discussing. However; after the class the other students who understand the teacher's discussion can teach it with their languages or method in the simpler way to their classmate who did not understand the materials.

All in all, I would maintain that in some areas such as education the other factors apart from parents have more impact on succeed of children. Students with the help of their classmates can be familiar with the best methods of study. Also, they can help each other to understand materials of lessons in the best way.