EF_Susan
Jun 7, 2012
Writing Feedback / [TOEFL] - living on campus in a dormitory is the best choice to live the campus life. [4]
As I tell many of the students whose work I examine, BE MINDFUL OF REPETITION. It is important to determine which point are valuable enough, (if any to be repeated). There is a slight stray from structure here, so see if you can further or re-organize your thoughts in a more clarified way. Following the three key principles which are : Strong opening statement, an appropriate length of information to support this introduction, and a consciously conclusive and finalizing closer.
As I tell many of the students whose work I examine, BE MINDFUL OF REPETITION. It is important to determine which point are valuable enough, (if any to be repeated). There is a slight stray from structure here, so see if you can further or re-organize your thoughts in a more clarified way. Following the three key principles which are : Strong opening statement, an appropriate length of information to support this introduction, and a consciously conclusive and finalizing closer.