niesaysi
Dec 24, 2013
Undergraduate / Post graduate essay for masters in Public policy: Competencies to be gained at the school [3]
The first one that advocates the economic benefits to the farmers in the form of right prices for theirproduceproduct and new employment opportunities and the other, which criticizes it for being anti to retail shopkeepers and vendor who would lose their source of income because of it. -- the italicized part is a dependent clause, thus, it can't stand alone. Meaning to say, it is an incomplete thought.
In the future, I intend to pursue..
Overall, your essay is good. But your intro still needs to be refined. It seems that it is longer than the body part. Try to shorten the length of your paragraph in a way that you have to concisely state the topic sentence. Additionally, someone else's idea is not a good one to be the topic sentence. It should be written on your own words/idea, not a quotation from a prominent man. That is one of the characteristics of a good topic sentence.
The first one that advocates the economic benefits to the farmers in the form of right prices for their
In the future, I intend to pursue..
Overall, your essay is good. But your intro still needs to be refined. It seems that it is longer than the body part. Try to shorten the length of your paragraph in a way that you have to concisely state the topic sentence. Additionally, someone else's idea is not a good one to be the topic sentence. It should be written on your own words/idea, not a quotation from a prominent man. That is one of the characteristics of a good topic sentence.