Writing Feedback / TOEFL Essay " Watching television is a waste of time" [NEW]

Do you agree with the following statement?
Watching television is a waste of time.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

:- I do not agree with this statement that watching television is a waste of time. Television is one of the important modes of getting information about current news. Television makes us aware about lots of important things which can save us from many dangers by providing safety information. We can get news from all over the world through television.

There are various channels like discovery, national geographic, entertainment, cartoon, sports and most important is news channels which can give (provides) us lots of information about everything. Through discovery channel we can get knowledge about various new things which are discovered or invented by experts or inventors; Through national geographic channel we can get information about various places and importance of that place; Entertainment channels entertain us or make us feel relax; My favorites channel is sports channel through which I can watch all live matches by sitting at home and other important channel is news channel which gives us all kinds of important information like about politics, elections, new inventions, sports, about celebrities and weather. There are various channels which are designed according to the age group like for children, for youngsters, for middle age people and for old people. So everyone can get some information from television. There are many educational programs or personality development programs which are good for children or youngster. There are some cooking programs. My mother tries various new recipes after watching that program. So I think everyone can get some good and important information from television.

There are some programs which are not good for children which can be shown late night. We can decide what is good for us and what is bad so we can chose what to watch. So I don't think that watching television is waste of time if we know what to watch.

Writing Feedback / TOEFL Essay "Learning new things should always be fun" [4]

Hi All,
I just started my TOEFL preparation. Please help me by checking this essay. I cannot judge myself.

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement.
Learning new things should always be fun.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

I think everyone should always ready to learn new things whether it is fun or not. We all like to learn new things with fun but not all new things are always with fun which we have to learn. I believe that, learning new things increases your knowledge about new things and if it is with fun then it will also increase your interest to learn that thing.

Nowadays, we can see everyone try to introduce their new product or their method of work with the way which increases the person's interest. We can imagine all things around us for example, when kids first time go to play school, teacher introduces many things to kids with the help of toys and entertain him or her with funny stories. This helps kids to learn quickly. We can see the teachers in schools always searching new methods to teach which increases student's interest. I remember when I was in eighth standard one of my friend forced me to attend one personality development seminar. I did not want to attend that seminar but, when I went there I thought I might have missed many important things in my life if I did not attend that seminar. I learned lots of things there. I like the way he started seminar. He started with some games, magic and entertainment and we really didn't recognize how we spent our whole day there. So I think learning new things with fun is interesting.

We can see nowadays work places are also designed according to the employee's comfort like playing areas and gym facility. This increases employee's interest to work. So if learning new things will be with fun then it will increase individual's interest and he or she will learn quickly.

Thanks.
Ana.

Writing Feedback / "Many people visit museums when they travel to new places"; HISTORY [5]

Hi all,

Please help me with some ideas. It is very short essay, it should be in between 300-350 words. I tried to complete that in time limit.

Many people visit museums when they travel to new places. Why do you think people visit museums? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Museum helps us to know more about that place and about the history of that place. In museum, many famous and historic things can be taken care by government. Generally, museums are located in central area of the city near other places like main market, theaters and restaurants, so that visitors can visit most of the places in city, and also, spend some time in museum.

Government takes care of all these things in museums like they keep these precious historic things alive from year to year. Museum keeps various famous paintings, utensils, cloths, and many other art and crafts things which were used in ancient time. I love to visit museums whenever I go to visit new place I definitely visit museums. Recently, when I went to Wisconsin dells, I visited Harley Davison museum. There were many motor cycles from the year when first motor cycle was built. They also mentioned how the technology gets improved and used to build motor cycles. They arranged all motor cycles in order of their make. This helps visitors to understand how the things changed from time to time. So I think many people visit museums first when they visit a new place, because after that they can decide their remaining plan to visit the other places.

Museum explains the tradition of the place, how people used to live in ancient time, their eating habits, cloths, ornaments, utensils, instruments and currency. Museums are the property of government and we all should learn to respect and take care of these things.

Please help with corrections and ideas.

Thanks,

Ana.

Writing Feedback / TOEFL;MONEY matters a lot,So I agree it is the most important aspect of a job! [3]

Hi All,
Can you please help me with correction and new ideas in my essay?

Do you agree or disagree with the following sentence?
The most important aspect of the job is the money person earns.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

:- I do agree with this statement that, "The most important aspect of the job is the money person earns". Money is a crucial part in our life without it life is very difficult. We cannot do anything without money.

In ancient period, there was no money. People used to trade with the help of barter system. In this method, goods or services were exchanged with other goods or services. At that time, no any medium of exchange was available like money as if today. Nowadays, we cannot trade without money. Money is the vital medium of exchange. Imagine our daily activities like kid's schooling, grocery, shopping, travelling etc. all need money and to earn that money we all need to work. In today's world no one works for free and not even a single thing will get free. Everyone has to work to fulfill their basic needs. When we will work then only will get the money. To live a happy life money is important.

There are many other aspects of the job like future prospect, satisfaction and salary but, I think these are secondary aspects of job. Sometimes people do not have other options in such situation they have to work on job which is available. For example, recently we all have gone through recession period in that period, many people lost their jobs and many people decided to work on the job which was available whether they have any future in that or not. They did not even think about their career because in such a situation everyone thought about money only. They were happy that at least they have a job.

So, I do not think that there is any other important and primary aspect of a job than money.

Thanks,
Ana.

Writing Feedback / TOEFL Essay "It's better to find information in a library than on internet" [3]

Hi All,

Can you please check my TOEFL essay and correct it? AND
I am confused about this type of essays and my confusion is when we get such questions like, "]Do you agree or disagree with the statement?" Is it compulsory that you have to agree OR disagree only? Because some subjects are like you cannot explain exactly such as below given subject. I cannot completely agree or disagree. Please help me and tel me Is this the proper way to answer such essay?

Do you agree or disagree with the statement? It's better to find information in a library than on internet. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

I cannot say that, I agree with this statement that, "It's better to find information in a library than on internet" because, I use both internet and library to find information. Nowadays, internet has become the most important media of obtaining information and fastest mode of communication. We can find any kind of information on internet and can also access our library transactions with the help of internet. We can read and download online books or any other information by sitting at home. On the other hand, some people are comfortable with finding information in library only.

To begin with reasons, library is a place where all books are set in a well-arranged manner so that you can easily find what you want exactly whereas, internet has lots of information available, but it's our responsibility that we have to find which information is appropriate and correct. There are many sites available on internet which have inappropriate and incorrect information available. There are many government organized sites available which always provide correct information.

In addition to that, if we are finding some information or searching for any book in a library and that is book is not available, then we have to wait till book is available. We have to go personally to pick up and return that book. However, internet has 24/7 access. We can find that information online also at any time by sitting at home. We just have to search correct information from all available information online. Internet takes some charges but that are considerable.

Finally, it's hard to say that it's better to find information on library than on internet because some people are more comfortable in finding information in library because of library's well-arranged structure and some people are comfortable with internet because of 24/7 access. Some people use both like me. Both have their advantages and disadvantages. Everyone try to search information according to their convenience. It differs from person to person.

Thanks,

ANA.

Writing Feedback / "There is nothing that young people can teach older people" [3]

Hi All,

Can you help me by suggesting some more ideas in my essay?

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
There is nothing that young people can teach older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

I do not agree with the statement that, "There is nothing that young people can teach older people". I think there new technologies such as internet, computer and iPhones and not all old people are not familiar with it. In early days, there were no phones, computers and internet so old people do not know how to use it. These are the things which I think young people can teach to older people.

Nowadays, we can see every young people have latest laptop and iPhone. He or she has to learn all new things to compete with today's competitive world. He or she has to keep him or herself up-to-date but old people never used these technologies in their life so all these are new things for them. I can take my own example my parents did not know how to handle the computer. Now I am in abroad and internet is the cheapest way of communication so my younger brother teaches them how to use the computer and now we can do a video chat. So I do not think that there is nothing that young people can teach older people.

In addition to that, life changes generation to generation and people have to accept that changes. Our grandparent's life was different from our parent's life and our parent's life is different from ours. When they were working in office most of their work was paper work and now we are working on computers. We can also see some old age people in our office those who are not familiar with computers. Company arranged computer training for such employees and many times such training was taken by young trainers who are experts in computers.

I do agree with this also that older people have lots of experience and they can teach us many things from their experience. We should listen to them and I think they should also ready to accept and learn new things. So, I believe that it is not true that young people cannot teach anything to old people.

Thanks,
Ana.

Writing Feedback / TOEFL Essay "Work by hand OR machine" [9]

Hi,

Some people like doing work by hand. Others prefer using machines. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Life is changing very fast day by day. People started using computers, machines and new technologies to complete their work which helps them to save their time. There are many people who do not accept these new technologies immediately. They need some time to understand that technologies so they prefer to work by hand and some people like to work by hand because this keeps them busy. On the other hand young generations like to use new technologies therefore they prefer to choose work by machines.

I would like to work by using machine. Now a day everyone wants everything instant and everyone wants to win the race of life. Technology has developed a lot for example earlier people used to send a mail by post that took too many days, but nowadays with help of internet you can send that mail in a minute without wasting a time. In early days, when there were no computers people used to do a paper work in office which was taking large storage but nowadays computer can save same or more data in a small chip. By this way, with the help of computers and internet you can save your most valuable time and energy.

I remember, when my mother used to cook in kitchen, she had to cut the vegetables and grind the spice by hand and she was spending her most of the time in kitchen only, but nowadays scenario has changed machines like grinder, food processor, microwave and oven makes all these work easy. These are not only save our time but also energy. I believe that, if machines can save our time and energy then why should we waste our time and energy by doing the same work by hand. We can use that time and energy in some other work.

Some people like to do their work by hand. There are many reasons behind this like they believe that they can save some energy and doing work by hand relaxes their body. Many old age people like to do their work by hand which keeps them busy.

Thanks,
Ana

Writing Feedback / TOEFL Essay " Transportation vehicles: Automobiles, Bicycles OR Airplane" [3]

Hi All,

Can you please grade my essay as per TOEFL grading system?

Choose one of the following transportation vehicles and explain why you think it has changed people's lives.
1. Automobiles 2. Bicycles 3. Airplanes
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

In ancient time, people used to travel by walk everywhere. After some time, they started using animals like horse and camel to travel. As the time went on, man invented vehicles and started using vehicles like bicycle, then motor cycles and cars for travelling then trucks, buses, trains and airplane for travelling and transportation. I think, most important and fastest transportation vehicle is airplane which changes people's lives. Airplane is the fastest mode of transportation which created a big business of transportation in the world.

Airplane transportation or travelling saves our time. We can go anywhere in the world in a very less time by airplane. I think, airplane changes a people's lives in many ways. The most important is we can save our most valuable time by traveling in airplane. Traveling in airplane is costly as compared to other modes of transportation but if it saves our time then is worth it for many people. Time means a lot to the people those who are very busy with their work. For example, Prime Minister of United States lives in a capitol and he has an urgent meeting in Chicago in noon and then he has to finish some other urgent work in New York by evening, in such situation he will choose to travel by airplane so that he can have his breakfast at his place in capitol then can take a flight to attend his Chicago meeting and have his lunch in Chicago after that he can finish his New York work by taking a flight from Chicago to new York and finally, back to his place and have his dinner at his place with his family.

In addition, transportation by airplane helps in economic and social development. It provides access to global market. It connects people, countries and culture. It generates trades and creates jobs. It helps developing nations to link with developed nations which increases a standard of living and removes poverty. So, I think airplane is the best and fastest mode of transportation which changes people's lives.

Thanks,
Ana.

Writing Feedback / TOEFL Essay " Business Research Center OR Agriculture Center" [2]

Hi all,

Please check my short essay on agriculture and help me with some more ideas.

A university plans to develop a new research center in your country. Some people want a center for business research. Other people want a center for research in agriculture (farming). Which of these two kinds of research centers do you recommend for your country? Use specific reasons in your recommendation.

I would recommend a research center for agriculture (farming) in my country. I am from India and India is an agriculture country. About 70% of our population depends on agriculture. 1/3 of national income comes from agriculture. Economy of our country is based on agriculture. So, development of agriculture will help in economic development of country.

All industries need some raw material, many of them are agro based industries like textile, oil industries etc. Agriculture sector provides raw material to such agro based industries like cotton, sugar, oil seeds and many others. Agriculture not only provide raw material to agro based industries but also to other industries. So, agriculture directly or indirectly helps in the development of the business or industries. If research center will develop, then researchers will study current conditions of the country and can guide us accordingly. Researchers will educate the farmers about correct methods of farming; use of pesticides and insecticides; use of fertilizers; use of improved seeds and machineries by considering climate conditions, which will improve and increase agricultural production.

There are many agricultural universities and colleges where researchers can arrange seminars to introduce their new techniques or methods to students. Students can personally experience that and then can try to educate the farmers. There are many other modes of introducing these new methods to people like television advertisements and radio. Government is trying everything which is possible to improve and if research center will develop then no days are away to grow a gold.

Thanks,
Ana.

Writing Feedback / TOEFL: Is first impression enough to know about person's character..? [4]

Hi,

Some people trust their first impressions about a person's character because they believe these judgments are generally correct. Other people do not judge a person's character quickly because they believe first impressions are often wrong. Compare these two attitudes. Which attitude do you agree with? Support your choice with specific examples.

There are many types of people in this world. Some people are very straight with others and some are not. I don't think that we can judge any person's character in first meeting. When we meet someone first time, it is for sure that he or she will try to behave properly and finely. Not only he or she but we also try to behave properly with them when we meet them first time. Everyone try to behave properly when they meet someone first time. So, I don't think that first impression is enough to know about the person's character.

When I tried to judge someone's character on his first impression, I felt that I was wrong about that person. I believe that, we can judge any person's character only after knowing him or her. We cannot judge about any person's character and give opinion about him only on the basis of his first impression, chances of knowing wrong are more. Once we give our opinion about that person only on the basis of first impression, we lose the chances knowing more about that person. I can explain this with my own experience. I remember after my marriage, first time I met with my husband's friend and then after some days we all went together for our vacation this was our second meeting. There, we played a game in that we had to give our opinion about others. I gave my opinion about him without thinking only on the basis of his first impression but after some days, I felt that I was wrong about him. He is totally different guy and no one can judge about his character in first meeting.

On other hand, many people believe that, "First impression is the last impression" and on that basis they can judge that person's character. But, I cannot judge anyone's character only on his first impression.

Please check my short essay and suggest me some more ideas. I could not explain the other view with examples.

Thank you,
Ana.