Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1 main source of energy in US in 1980 and 1990 [2]

Task:
The two graphs show the main sources of energy in the USA in the 1980s and the 1990s.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the changes which occurred.

The graphs illustrate the percentage of five different sources of energy in the USA in 1980 and 1990. As can be seen, major changes have been in oil consuming and using nuclear power.

According to the pie charts, the most important source of energy has been oil so that 42% and 33% of total sources allocated to oil in 1980 and 1990 respectively.

Although using coal comprise 22% of total source usage in 1980, this proportion increased in these years and reached to 27% in 1990.
As regards natural gas, there was a slight decline in the usage of this green source of energy, from 26% in to 25% in 1990.
When it comes to nuclear power, there was a increase in the usage of this new type of energy, from only 5% in 1980 to 10% in 1990.
However, the percentage of using hydro electronic power has remained stable at 5% over this period.
This conclusion can be drawn that new sources of energy are going to be replaced by the old one.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1 division of houeshold tasks by gender [2]

Task:
The chart shows the division of household tasks by gender in Great Britain.
Write a report for a university lecture describing the information shown below.
You should write at least 150 words.

The chart shows the amount of time which men and women spend on six different household tasks per person during a day in Great Britain. In general, most of these works has been done by women.

According to the chart, women spend 74 minutes in a day for cooking, baking and washing up while men spend only a half of this time, 30 minutes.

As regards cleaning house and tidying, men spend 13 minutes, but numbers for woman is so higher which stands at 58 minutes per day.
Women also spend more time in care of children and play with them, washing, ironing and sewing the clothes which are at 45 and 25 minutes in a day, compare to men who are at 20 and 2 respectively.

In contrast, some outdoor activity such as gardening and pet care usually have been done by men. They do this tasks for 49.5 minutes whereas women do for 21 minutes per person per day. About maintenance odd jobs men spend 26 minutes while women spend only 9.5 minutes.

This conclusion can be drawn that, most household tasks are in the woman's duty in Britain and man who are busy with their work have less time in the evening to help in such works.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2 University education should be limitted for the best students [3]

Task:
Universities education should be restricted to the very best academic students, rather than being available to a large proportion of young people.

These days, universities play an important role in the construction of the young's character as many students spend a crucial time of their lives there. So, universities' policy could affect the pupils and promote them to be better in the society. The case in point is whether universities should accept all young people or only the best students. In this piece of writing, I would like express my personal views regarding these two ways of accepting students.

Base on evidence and documents, a few proportion of students (the best ones) are successful in universities. Then, some people think that it is better for universities to accept only these intelligent students. Because, this policy could be less time and cost consuming, not only for universities, but also for other slow students. In addition, universities which apply this policy could increase the functionality of education system and get better yields. Moreover, the number of students attending in universities s going to be increase every year. Consequently, lack of low level workers has been a major problem for many countries. Decreasing the number of students with selecting the best one, will solve this problem too.

On the other hand, people believe that study in universities is the right for all young people. At first, they argue that universities provide educational facilities and like other organization, they should be accessible for all students. In addition, there are many examples of high school students who couldn't be a top student. But they try more and have been an excellent student when they go to university. Besides, new modern world need the experts in any major as technology has brought us many new complicate machines. So, more students should be accepted bu universities to provide the requirements of our society.

Personally I think that although universities should provide more facilities for clever students, they shouldn't confine other students get higher education, because our society needs more skilled workers.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2 coeducational VS single [3]

Task:
Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both views.

These days, schools play an important role in our society as children spend a lot of time there. So, this fact that how schools are managed has a direct effect on the quality of student's education. The case in point is whether co-educational system could give us more benefit than single sex schools. In this piece of writing, I would like to express my personal views regarding the comparison of these two educational systems.

As single sex schools used to be in many countries from many years ago, some people think that they are the best schools for children. They believe that students have more concentration on their studies in single sex schools. Therefore, better results could be achieved in these schools when we compare them with co educational schools. Moreover, people are less worried about the relationships between girls and boys. As reported in Today newspaper in 1 July 2011, students who studied in co educational schools usually had many problems with the opposite sex.

On the other hand, base on scientific researches, students who study in mixed schools often could be more reliable and have a better communication with variety type of people in society. Because scientists believe that attending in schools should provide not only pure scientific educations but also social developments for pupils. Besides, new evidences show mental problems which is related to co educational system could happen in single sex schools too.

Personally I think that co educational schools could benefit our society in many ways and although there are a few problems in these schools, their pros far outweigh the cons of them.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS - Task 1 : rental charges and salaries in three areas of London [4]

Task1:
The table below provide information on rental charges and salaries in three areas of London.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

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Area Weekly rents per property (£/w)
1 bed 2 bed 3 bed
Notting Hill 375 485 738
Regent's Park 325 450 650
Fulham 215 390 600
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Area Salaries needed (£/year)
1 bed 2 bed 3 bed
Notting Hill 98,500 127,500 194,000
Regent's Park 85,500 118,000 170,500
Fulham 56,500 102,500 157,500
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The table illustrates and compares weekly rents and salaries needed annually for three different kinds of houses in London. As can be seen the largest numbers are for Notting Hill area and houses with 3 beds.

According to the table, in Notting Hill area figures are £375, £485 and £738 for 1 bed, 2 bed and 3 bed respectively. These numbers show that part of London area one of the expensive areas and people who want to live there should earn at least £98500 in a year.

As regards Regent's Park area, the prices are slightly lower that Notting Hill, which stand at £325, £450 and £650 for 1 bed, 2 bed and 3 bed houses. Although the minimum salaries to rent a house in this area is £85599 for 1 bed, but for 3 bed is not very low (£170500), compare to other figures in table.

When it comes to Fulham area, numbers are dramatically lower that two previous areas. The figure for 1 bed is only £215 in a week which is about a half of 1 bed house rent in Notting Hill. It is interesting that number reported for 3 bed in this area is not very less than the other areas.

This conclusion can be drawn that the the most expensive area that maybe one of the best area in London, is Notting Hill while the lowest prices is related to Fulham area. Moreover, renting a 3 bed house in three areas have relatively similar prices and people who like to live in these houses should earn higher incomes.

Writing Feedback / IELTS - Should parent teach children or schools? [3]

Task:
Some people think parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others however believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss.

Parents are always are worried about the way their children brought up. So, some people think that parents should teach their children. Others but believe that schools are the main responsible of children education. In this piece of writing, I would like to present my personal views about that who are the best persons who could teach children in the best way, school teachers or parents.

Some scientists believe that parents are the only person who can teach their children to become a good member for community. They offer several reasons for this suggestion. Firstly, parents are emotionally ready to learn the significant values for their kids. Because nobody like a father or mother wants to the best things for the children. As reported in Tehran Times, 60% of children accept the education of their parents better than with their teachers. Secondly, children spend more times with their families, then they will visit many places with them. These situations can be educational.

On the other hand, good teachers are a source of experiments. They found how children can learn educational materials and moral values better. Meanwhile, many parents usually request from children's teachers to help them to solve many mental and physical problems related to their children. I myself remember one of my teachers who was more closer to me than my parents and helped me a lot in many personal problems.

Personally I think that the role of both parents and school teachers in preparing children to go to society, in the best way, is very important.

Writing Feedback / IELTS- 'qualifications, not sexes' - the number of female and male pupils [2]

IELTS Task2:
Universities should accept equal number of female and male students in every subject.
To what extend do you agree or disagree?

These days, due to the large number of students attendance in universities, these educational places plays an important role in our community. Therefore, if we organize the universities, we would be able to have a better society. In this piece of writing, I would like to express my personal views about whether it is necessary to accept equal number of boys and girls in university majors.

There are many reasons which prove that equal number of men and women in universities have some benefits. Firstly, this equally could ensure that our future society will have male and female experts in any major. For example, in my country Kenya University accepted equal number of boys and girls for teaching purpose in 1999. These students graduated after 4 years and all single sex schools could take a number of male and female teachers. It is clear that without that policy, some schools couldn't provide their required teachers.

On the other hand, some people, specially university professionals, argue that this issue leads to many problem that couldn't be ignored. The most important reason is that universities educational levels would decrease after applying this policy. Because universities always get admission to the better students with no attention to their sexes. Moreover, there are some university majors that almost only boys (or girls) are interested in. So, equality of male and female pupils is irrational. For example, in my country, Power Electronic is a university major which boys comprise about 90% of the total students.

Personally I think that universities should select their prospective students base on their qualifications, not their sexes and also, accepting equal boys and girls couldn't help universities to reach to their educational targets.

Writing Feedback / IELTS population growth (let the governments decide if you can have children or not) [5]

Task 2 IELTS:
Countries such as China and India have unsustainable population growths. In fact, many experts are of the opinion that the population explosion which is a very worrying concern, is the most serious threat to life in this planet. Give some suggestions to address this problem.

In this modern world, population growth has been a major problem. In some countries, there isn't a proper plan to address this problem.
In this piece of writing, I would like to express my personal views about the measures which countries like China and India could design to control their population growth.

There are many ways which people and government could take into consideration that help nations to control their population growth rate. Firstly, the most important suggestion is to educate people in the control of birth rate. Because people who specially live in underdeveloped countries, are not aware of the negative effect of this issue. So, enlightening people have direct impact on birth rate and then the population. Secondly, government should introduced new rules to confine people to have the minimum number of babies. For example, in my country, states have limited the amount of subsides given to families which have more than three babies. After applying this policy, birth rate reduced by 1 percent.

Finally, media could have an important role in this issue. As people involved with newspapers, TV, advertisement and other kinds of program during the day, media could help people in this way. For example, a good film, created by a famous director about the population growth and its effects on our lives would attract and affect large number of people.

Personally I think that the most effective measure to deal with population growth is the role of governments, because they have a great responsibilities in this issue. Besides, experiments show that their rules could have the best results in reducing the birth rate.

Writing Feedback / 'long-time measure' - should wealthy nations help poorer nations ? [2]

Task:
Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the responsibility of the government of poorer nations to look after citizens themselves?

Nowadays, there are many poor countries which couldn't provide several main needs of their people. So, international institutes suggest that other countries support them until they reach to a better situation. In this piece of writing, I would like to present my personal views about whether developed and wealthy nations should help poor nation by supporting them with necessary needs or this task should be done by the governments of poor nations.

There are some reasons that modern nations should help other undeveloped and poor nations. Firstly, helpful works can improve moral values between countries. People from wealthy countries will trust their governments and also it may cause to promote a sense of purpose among nations. Secondly, helpful efforts contribute more communications between poorer and other modern countries which can help them to progress their industries.

On the other hand, there are many vivid reasons which show that the only way to survive poorer countries is that they work harder without the charity given by other countries. One of the important reasons is that the poor countries to become more dependent on their helps .Wealthy country buy their national products such as, oil and mineral products, and sell them their industrial products. Overall, it causes a kind of political and economical dependencies and will not help these countries to reach economic growth. Moreover, in this way, people in poorer countries couldn't rely on their government. They don't have a sense of national identity and will not try more to improve their countries development.

In conclusion, personally I think that although wealthy countries should help poorer nations, but this way couldn't be a long time measure and the best way to overcome this problem is that poorer countries try not to be more dependence on other nations and use their own capabilities to develop their countries under the supporting of their governments.

Writing Feedback / IELTS- encourage sense of competition or co-operative in children [2]

Please help me and give me any comments and suggestions

Task:
Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught

to co-operative rather than compete become more useful adults.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In the modern word, the way children build up their characters is very important. If they educate well then we will have a

good society and if not, many problems will be occurred. One of these educations for children is the sense of competition.

In this piece of writing, I would like to express my personal views about whether children should encourage to compete and

is it better that we encourage them to work together rather to compete with each other.
There are reasons which prove that competition is useful for children. Firstly, reaching to many things in our life needs

to compete with other people. Then, children should learn it and if they couldn't compete with others, they eill not be

succeed in their future. Secondly, without a real competition, we couldn't understand which children is better. This means

that we should see them in the same level. Thus, nobody could find that which children could be better in specific areas,

such as education. Finally, competition encourages children to work harder and try more for their future.
However, competition has some negative effects when it compare to co-operative works. The major reason is that competition

can have a negative effect on some children. It destroys their sprite and then departs them from community. Moreover, it

can affect children relationship with their peers. Team work, on the other hand, can give them a sense of sharing and

promote ethical values.

Personally I think that although competition has some negative effects, but it is necessary for living and people should

encourage their children to be the best in their positions. Besides, co-operative works help children to share their ideas

with their friends and it is also constructive and should be considered by parents.