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devabe2005   
Dec 25, 2012
Writing Feedback / imagine how our ancestors would have survived without Computers, televisions,internet [4]

IELTS Essay question:
Computers, televisions, internet, these are the must have assets in our contemporary world. It seems that world without media sources would come to halt instantaneously. However, if this is the case I imagine how our ancestors would have survived all those years without these information sources?

Answer:
Computers, television, internet are buttress of our society. Without these media sources, it is impossible to live. Our ancestors lived without these media sources but handle in different ways.

Computers help to complete task effectively without much manpower. It solves more complicated problems within a few seconds of time. Television helps to entertain us with various program and telecasting live events. It provides updated news daily. Internet is used to communicate effectively with in a fraction of second. Through online services, we can pay credit card bills, telephone bills and online movie banking. Thus computer, television and internet are very useful to today's world.

On the other hand, our ancestors sent birds for passing message to distant relatives as they don't have any facilities. Moreover they sent messenger to the distant relative to communicate the information. But these messages are not reliable while on the way of a bird messenger is hunt by the people. So the message will not reach the destination. The messenger will do his own work and will not communicate properly. The end user will not get the actual information.

In a nutshell, though our ancestors used some techniques like bird, person messenger to communicate. But there are some inconsistencies and information will not deliver properly. Nowadays, computer, television and internet help our society enormously and without these media sources our life is difficult to live.
devabe2005   
Dec 28, 2012
Writing Feedback / IELTS ESSAY, couples decide to have children later in their life. [2]

IELTS ESSAY
TASK 2:
Question:
These days couples decide to have children later in their life. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? How is it affecting the family life and society?

Answer:
It is great debatable about couples decision of having children later in life. I strongly disagree apropos with statement that couples decision to have children later in their life. There are more disadvantages than advantage of having children in later age.

Some of the advantages of couples having children in later age are financial strong and well matured to support their children. They are financially strong to cope up needs of their children. Moreover, they can give better education to their children. Parents are well matured to handle problems of their children.

On the other hand, after age 30 both men and women face many health problems like infertility, diabetes and heart diseases. In addition, they become older and not able to look after their children. We know the proverb, "Make a hay while the sun shines" states that while on certain age itself couple should have their children. So that it prevents many problems in their future.

To conclude, as I said previously couples having children in latter age results in more disadvantage than advantage. As they face more problems in latter age, it is advisable to have their children in young age itself.
devabe2005   
Dec 29, 2012
Graduate / Express self with words; SOP for Speech Pathology Grad School [3]

Overall good essay!

There are so many "I" you used in 6 paragraph

I can see the progress I have made in my volunteer work and in my undergraduate classes as a professional. I want to expand my knowledge and experience base through applied experience in the field. As I set out on an advanced level of education in a graduate program, I ponder about the kind of student I am and the experiences I have had that will allow to me succeed at The University of Southern Mississippi's graduate school. I am focused, and I have always challenged myself. In high school, I took 21 college credit classes and in college I continue to take classes to challenge me. I will be completing my Bachelor's degree in three years.

Below is the corrected one
Due to my aspiration in the field, I want to continue my education by attending graduate school. I can see the progress in my volunteer work and undergraduate classes as a professional. Expanded my knowledge and experience base through applied experience in the field. As it set out on an advanced level of education in a graduate program, I ponder about the kind of student and the experiences that will allow to me succeed at The University of Southern Mississippi's graduate school. Always focused and challenged myself. In high school, I took 21 college credit classes and continued college classes to challenge me. I will be completing my Bachelor's degree in three years.
devabe2005   
Dec 29, 2012
Student Talk / Took the IELTS Today and didn't go as I expected :( [35]

Four times applied IELTS still i am not scored 7 band

four times applied still i am not scored 7. i am still practising to score 7 band.

Very much depressed and please suggest me best IELTS coaching class in chennai or any other ways to get 7 band in IELTS.

Below are the my IELTS Scores.

Dec 2012 jan2012 April2012 May 2012
Listening 7.5 7.0 7.5 6.5
Reading 6.0 6.0 6.5 5.5
Writing 5.5 6.0 6.0 6.0
Speaking 6.5 6.0 6.0 6.5
Overall Band 6.5 6.5 6.5 6.0
devabe2005   
Jan 1, 2013
Writing Feedback / 'Human nature' - IELTS; possible to prevent children growing up to be criminals? [3]

IELTS ESSAY TASK2:
Question:
Some scientists believe that by studying the behavior of three-year-old children we can understand whether they will grow up to be criminals. To what extent is crime a product of human nature? Is it possible to prevent children growing up to be criminals?

Answer:
Human nature does not have a character of crime, but situation force them to do crime. In my point of view there are chances of children can be avoid to become criminals in the future. It is true that scientists acceptance of learning characters of three-year old children to become criminals.

Circumstances force children to become future criminal. For example, due to poverty many force to do crime like kidnapping, murder, snatching jewelries, pickpocket etc. If we eliminate poverty from the world crime rate will be reduced.

Moreover, another reason for crime is unemployment which is the biggest issue in this competitive world. To exemplify, unemployed graduates who want to satisfy their necessities they choose crime to fulfill their ambition.

In addition, there are more chance of grow up children in honest way of life. By guiding and teaching values of life, responsibility, relationship, ambition, confidence, obedience, etc. Furthermore, children should be encouraged to aware about severity of crime and it effects to the society. So that they will become responsible and ambition-oriented individual.

In a nutshell, crime is not a character of human nature; it is the situation makes them criminal. By teaching valuable qualities of life to children and crime brutality to society helps children to be a responsible, honest, compassionate, sophisticated individual in the future.
devabe2005   
Jan 2, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS ESSAY; neighbours and the sense of community is lost. What is causing this? [2]

Question:
With the increasing number of people in cities, most do not know their neighbours and the sense of community is lost. What is causing this? How can we turn it around?

Answer
Many people are moving to city in order enjoy all the facility. They are not able to know their neighbour. There are various causes like scarcity of time, shyness, afraid to make relationship etc. These can be overcome by allocating some time with neighbours.

One of the main causes of people not able to know their neighbor is shortage of time. People are working for long hours which prevent them to spend more time in home. In the weekend, they are taking rest at home. Another main reason, people are shy to speak with neighbours. Expecting neighbour should first to speak. In addition, people are afraid to have relationship as it will create problem in the future.

To conquer people should allocate sometime in the weekend with their neighbour. They are encouraged to come forward to speak with their neighbor and socialize with them. Through awareness about community and neighbourship people will not afraid to make acquaintance with their neighbours.

In a nutshell, people should be encouraged to be socialize and community. They should schedule some time with their neighbours so that it will result in harmony. Neighbour in turn will be helpful in difficult situation. So that people will live affable and amiable way of life.
devabe2005   
Jan 5, 2013
Writing Feedback / ( IELTS essay) Gene or environment more influential in character [6]

HI,

Overall super essay. good work. Surely you will get good score.

still need strong in your opinion in the following sentence.
In my opinion, the environment and experiences, not merely genes mold the character of an individual.
There is confusion whether your are agreeing or disagreeing. Concentrate on introduction.

you can write like this
In my opinion, the environment and experiences mold the character of an individual rather than genes.

All the best.
devabe2005   
Jan 8, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS ESSAY, International law will not reduce crime rate in different countries [5]

IELTS TASK2 ESSAY
Crime is nearly always related to the environment in which it occurs. For this reason, international laws and international law courts are unrealistic and will not succeed in reducing crime levels in different countries. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Answer:
It is highly debatable that international law and courts are ineffective to diminish offence rate around the nations. Both laws are necessary to tackle the felony and slash its growth.

In some cases international law is necessary people who are illegally exporting rare animal species and skins to other countries. Moreover, children are kidnapped and sold them as slave or for prostitution from across the continent. In addition, drug smuggling from all over globe in which most people mind and body are affected result in death. Terrorist attacks across the world which affects global economy and wealth. cyber crime like hacking, phishing, Pornography, threatening email, assuming someone's identity, defamation, SPAM, etc. global court should take harsh action against these convicts through international laws.

On the other hand, crime mostly related to particular location. For example, robbery, rape, child labour and molestation in particular place should be taken care by the local government. Nowadays, baby stealing from hospital is increased. Furthermore, sexual harassment against women and children should be handled by local law.

To conclude, by anlaysing both the views, depends on the crime, its environment and its links to other part of the world either domestic strict law or international severe law should act on the offenders. Let's hope for the crime free world in the future.

Comments:
It is very difficult to brainstorm ideas to write essay. Please provide tips to overcome this.
devabe2005   
Jan 9, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS ESSAY; Students find it hard to university studies compared to school studies [6]

IELTS TASK2 ESSAY:
Question:
Nowadays, students find it hard to study at universities compared to school studies. Why this is happening. What is the solution to this problem?

Answer:
University studies now becoming hectic due to technological revolution. There are various reasons influence college curriculum harder. In this essay, I will explain detailed causes and solutions to overcome it.

University studies are not similar as school studies, profound in particular field. To cope up with technology advancement, universities are forced to start new courses and adding additional subjects in their existing curriculum. Though it will be useful in student's career but they face significant burden on time management of study-life balance. Moreover, there is extreme difference between school and college life, college students are more independent to take decision in their study pattern. For example, in my college most of the students set aside their studies in starting of their semester and begin preparation one month before the examination. Due to less preparation time, students are affected by anxiety and stress in their examination period which results in poor result.

Some of the solutions to overcome tough university studies are university should research student capability before adding new course or extra subject. They have to increase the period of study if they adding extra subjects in their curriculum. Another solution is university staff should encourage and motivate students to start their preparation on beginning of their semester. So that they can well prepare and get good results in their university examination which leads to better placement.

To conclude, both university and student should take proper steps to make their studies easier. So that students can complete their studies with full enjoyment and university will get reputed results in their academic.
devabe2005   
Jan 9, 2013
Writing Feedback / [IELTS ESSAY] Successful athletes can earn a great deal more money than others [2]

spelling mistake demined i think it is determined
demined by their popularity to the public instead of their contributions to the society.

corrected will be as follows
determined by their popularity to the public instead of their contributions to the society.

overall good essay.
devabe2005   
Jan 9, 2013
Writing Feedback / ( IELTS essay) Brain drain: wealthy nations should compensate poor countries? [5]

overall good essay. keep it up.

comma should not come after who in the folllowing sentence
There are others who, invest a portion of their income in their own countries.

correct line as follows
There are others who invest a portion of their income in their own countries.

Regards,
Devaraj
devabe2005   
Jan 10, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS ESSAY, Private companies spending more than government in scientific research [5]

Private companies that support and carry out scientific research are spending more than governments in these days. Do the advantage of this development outweigh Its disadvantage..? Explain and give your reasons.

Answer:
Private companies provide significant contribution in scientific research. Government are insufficient to provide resource to all scientific research because it has to allocate budgets for the entire field. IN this essay, I will explore both advantages and disadvantages about private company contribution in scientific research.

Private companies contributes larger amount to discover medicines for new diseases. For example, medicines for AIDS, polio, chicken box vaccinations, etc., are very useful to mankind. Moreover, scientific research in test tube baby by private organization is a great revolution in medical field. It helps parents who are infertile enables to get baby from their genes.

On the other hand of the coin, separate companies can sell copyrights and procedures of the medical scientific research like cloning, genetics, etc., to terrorist groups which would be a great disaster. Furthermore, private companies may involve in anti-human scientific research for great profit. For example, anthrax, highly infectious disease which Americans are feared to attack by bio-terrorist in last decades. In addition, private companies research and develop in different new types of nuclear weapons, chemical bombs which can be sold to terrorist.

For instance, a report claimed that Pakistan terrorist used chemical bombs in karkil war on Indian military which is illegally mad by the private research company sold to the terrorist.

By analysing both advantages and disadvantage about wealth contribution by private research organization was, helpful for both human and anti-human researches. Government should take necessary action to prevent anti-human scientific research by the private companies. So that future scientific research would be substantial assistance to human race.
devabe2005   
Jan 10, 2013
Writing Feedback / EILTS task 2 - causes and solutions for overweight [3]

Hi,

overall good essay.

Include more vocabulary.
better usage of words is required.
potatoes on the sofa ----> sedentary lifestyle

You can add additional issues like stress and anxiety, over-eating, working for long hours in office
solutions like proper food diet, yoga and meditation.
devabe2005   
Jan 10, 2013
Writing Feedback / First letter to my pen pal; IELTS TASK 1 [6]

Hi,

Overall good letter.

Some problem in this i think "To" should not come first
To let you know about me

correct,
Let you know about me
Let give detailed description about me

All the best!
devabe2005   
Jan 11, 2013
Writing Feedback / Who are more important? Older people or children (IELTS) [3]

Question:
In certain cultures old age is considered to be more important while in others it's the opposite, children are thought to be more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Answer:
Old age and children are both filled with happiness. Some people believe that older age is significant while others think that children are more crucial stage in a life period. In this essay, I will explain both the views in detail.

Undeniably, older people are experience, matured, intelligent, in all the aspects of life. They show path to youngsters. They play major role in family decision. For example, in India elders are imperious decision authority in a family, they are important factor in all the actions in the family. Moreover, they have imperative qualities such as good morals and ethics, truthfulness, sincerity and respect and inheriting such quality to the young people. They can tackle any problems with their profound knowledge and wisdom.

On the other side of the coin, children are energetic, smart, optimistic, enthusiastic, dedicative to their goals and future of our world. Their activities always are fun and grasp abstract concepts and apply logic in various scenarios. They need appreciation, availability and acceptance from others and extra-ordinary care from parents. Government supports free education for children as they are the prospect citizens. Youngsters are assertive, innovative, updated with technological skills. They are buttress to the society.

To conclude, by analyzing both the view, in my opinion older and younger age are valuable to the society. They contribute most of the happiness, love, affection, compassion to the society. It is difficult to differentiate old and young age both play vital role in the community.
devabe2005   
Jan 12, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS ESSAY; animal species become extinct because of natural processes [5]

IELTS TASK2 ESSAY:
Question:

Some animal species such as dinosaurs and dodos become extinct because of natural processes. So, it is not necessary to try and prevent this from happening. Do you agree or disagree?

Answer:
We know the proverb, "Nature is the art of God", natural disaster like earthquake, tsunami, flood, tornadoes, volcanic eruptions, droughts, hailstorms, heat waves, avalanches, blizzards, cyclonic storms, wildfires etc., are volatile cannot prevent from the world. In this essay, I completely agree that we cannot forbid animal species destruction from the globe due to natural disaster.

Nowadays, development in technology advancement, scientist can predict earth quake occur in particular area or forecast bad weather for future months. Scientist deployed tsunami alert system connected from sea to satellite through which they can monitor and alert tsunami occurrence in all over the earth. This can help enormously only to the human kind not for wild animals living in the forest.

Although, zoo and zoological parks across the world, protects different variety of rare animals. It breeds to prohibit its extinction. Currently, occurrence of global warming, sea water level rising deeply and submerge most of the land area all over the world. It will result in great disaster to living beings in the earth. Scientist are started their research on living condition in moon or on other planets in order to live to protect from natural calamity. Due to cannibalism, scarce species are obliterating around the continent.

In nutshell, like the proverb "Time and tide wait for none", natural disaster can appear anytime in any place and we cannot proscribe or anticipate because it is by innate process. Beyond human intelligence natural disaster is something unpredictable, all living being cannot escape from it.
devabe2005   
Jan 13, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS ESSAY; job for lifetime or multiple career which is best. Give opinion [3]

Question:
Some say that people should continue to work in the same job for a lifetime; others say they should change the job at least once in their career. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your own opinion and support it with examples.

Answer:
Nowadays, Job market is very competitive requires more knowledge and skilled professionals to cope up with technology revolution. Some people believe that sticking with one job for permanent in their career is best while others think that changing alternative career is the great. In this essay, I will explain both views in detail.

Apparently, some people assume that continuing same career in lifetime acquires rigorous knowledge in their field. They gain more experience and specialist in tackle all the issues in their work. In addition, they have accurate decision making ability, management skills and strategies to handle their field work. If there is recession in their field they are laid off and cannot postulate in any other job result in stress and anxiety leads to suicide in some cases.

On the other hand, people knowing two careers help them in difficult situation. For example, if an employee has experience or knowledge in both Information technology and hotel management, in recession if he lay off in Information technology field, he can switch over to Hotel Management field. Though it as advantage but have some disadvantage. We know the proverb, "Jack in all but master in none"; according to the proverb they won't have exhaustive skill in their field. They are not a specialist to solve critical problem in their profession.

In a nutshell, by analyzing both the views, my opinion is though having multiple career has some disadvantage it is useful in than a lifetime career which is always risk in this rising machinery world. Moreover, life time career have more disadvantage then advantage.
devabe2005   
Jan 14, 2013
Writing Feedback / Why Many undergraduates and postgraduates face many difficulties? IELTS [5]

Finally the classroom where the student is studying is different such as at university different class with different student in different ages at the same years but at school same ages in the same class.

Hope following following line will be better
Finally, In school the same age students are studying but in college different age group of students are studying.
devabe2005   
Jan 14, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS ESSAY - people are forgetting national celebrations and enjoying on other days. [4]

IELTS TASK2 ESSAY:
QUESTION:

Nowadays people are forgetting national celebrations and enjoying themselves on other days that are important to them personally. Discuss and give your opinion.

ANSWER:
In this modern life, people are giving more preference to other day celebrations than the national celebrations. As they are enjoying other days as it give more happiness and socialism. There are various reasons people are disdain their national celebration. In this essay I will explain more detail about the various causes behind it.

Undeniably, other day celebrations like Valentine's day, Friendship day, Holy, Deepavali, Christmas etc., are celebrated imperative all over the world. The essence is they are sharing love, affection and gifts. Due to financial crisis, government education policy makes younger generation losing their national spirit. For example, in Britain most of the youth protest due to increase of tuition fees, unemployment and education funding cuts.

Moreover, due to increase in tax payment, higher competition in job, which force people to concentrate on their ambition rather than on their nation. School children are forced to study for long hours to get good marks instead of knowing values, culture of their country. Due to international trade policy, some countries burden on their people. For example, In India, people are fury on the government decision on hiking petrol and diesel prices steadily make people to focus on money instead of their nation.

In addition, due to corruption of the government servants who make people are against the nation. It results in financial crisis force people to migrate to other richer countries to enrich lifestyle. For example, In India, due to poverty and unemployment, people are migrating to wealthy nations like United States of America, United Kingdom, Australia, Canada, etc.

In a nutshell, patriotism in all over the world fading gradually due to various reasons and forces them to celebrate on other days instead of their national day celebrations. Children should be taught national values, integrity, brotherhood and discipline. Government employees are protector of the nation they should be honest in their work and well being of their nation which will result in prosperity and integrity in their nation.

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