Writing Feedback / IELTS essay - Teenage or Adult life - which brings more happiness in life? [7]

Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest of our lives, while others believe that adult life brings more happiness. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Happiness is a stage where you relish yourself forgetting all your worries. This may occur during any part of one's life. Some people say it happens during teenages and few argue that it is the adult life which brings happiness. I would say that teenage holds the best moments in which one 'lives life to the fullest' with enthusiasm than the adult life which gets you into the 'cloak of responsibility'.

Adolscence is the fantastic time period to delight every activity or occassion. From thirteen to nineteen is the golden period of life which you cannot get back to. Concentrating to learn new things, having adventures, taking risks and building up new relationships. For instance, you learn new things and have a pleasant time with the maximum friends around and rejoice the whole tenure.

On the other hand, some people argue that adult life is the happiest stage of life. One gets a chance to decide on their own, spend their own money etc., Whenever you are stuck amidst of problems, your spouse is along to help you around. For example, if there is a guy who lost money in his business, his wife can always step in to solve the financial hurdles by taking up a new job where the guy's life is secured.

Having discussed about both the sides, I would say that adult life always means responsible life. When you get into being more responsible, sometimes the level of happiness comes down. Hence, teenage years are the most happiest times of our lives.

Writing Feedback / IELTS essay-Modern children are suffering from the diseases like obesity. Causes&solutions [8]

Modern children are suffering from the diseases that were once considered to be meant for adults only. Obesity is a major disease prevalent among children. What are its causes and what solutions can be offered?

As the proverb says, "Health is wealth", one who has good health is said to have the wealth for his/her lifetime. Nowadays, even children are suffering from pervasive diseases like obesity at their early stages of life. There are many causes for it and it is high-time that we work on the preventive measures to avoid them.

Food habits and lack of physical activities are the notable reasons for obesity. In this modern era, children are fond of junk foods than having nutritious diet. Hanging out in the fast food restaurants with friends is considered to be a fashion. Nowadays, schools only focus on studies and some schools do not have playgrounds. For example, a 12 year old boy in my neighborhood does not gets a chance to play as his school starts at 9am and gets over by 5pm. Even in the evening, parents force him to read and to concentrate on home works and never allows him to play.

Serious measures have to be taken to avoid this situation. Parents should spend quality time with their kids to check on the favorite dishes and take efforts in preparing it for them. For instance, instead of buying Pizza/ Burgers, emphasize the importance of eating fresh fruits and juices, which makes their health more strong. Teaching them to cook will turn out to be a good hobby in the future for the kids. Also, motivate the young ones to regularly exercise and participate in any of the games, which they wish to.

To conclude, it is important that children are taught to have a healthy balanced diet and to do regular physical exercise which is lacking in the current generation kids.

Writing Feedback / IELTS essay - Work at home - benefits workers and NOT employers - agree/disagree ? [3]

Question - Many employees work at home using modern technology today. Some people think only workers and not employers benefit from it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

today's technology provides the new working methods

As per the famous quote from Bill gates, "We are changing the world with technology", technological changes in the 21st century has brought a greater impact among the people. Some believe that the concept of working from home is advantageous only to employees and not for the management. I would state that it is beneficial to both the parties.

From the member of staff perspective, it is definitely a boon. One gets their own flexible timings to finish up the work where a work-life balance can been maintained. For example, if someone is traveling from long distance to work daily, he/she can take the job from home. Thereby avoiding tensions like road traffic while traveling, to reach on-time to office etc., More than everything with the flexibility provided, workers tend to be loyal and their bond with the company grows for years.

Providing work from home opportunities is not only helping the workers, but it is giving an upper hand to the management as well. During this fast communicative world, we use computers, laptops and mobile phones to attend to the work-related issues even without attending office. For instance, during an emergency situation at office, where it is already late night, manager can just ring up the worker to look into the issue from home. Instead of driving to office, the same time can be utilized to work on the problem where you get a chance to please the customer by solving the issue at the earliest.

Having discussed about the benefits on both the sides, I would say that work at home can be encouraged which brings happiness and satisfaction to both employees and employers.

Writing Feedback / IELTS essay - Is the re introduction of criminals in societies is justified? [3]

Most criminals are set free once they finish their jail terms. Is the re introduction of criminals in societies is justified? Place your views in no less than 250 words.

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As the saying goes, 'To err is human to forgive is divine', every human should be given a second chance to accept his/her mistakes and realize it. Some argue that the criminals can mingle with the normal people after the tenure in lock-up and few deny stating that they should not be set free. I certainly agree with the fact of re-introducing them after their tenure in the prison to the community.

Apart few exceptions, every person in this world do accept their oversights and wishes to live with their family and relatives. In spite of realizing their mistakes and sufferings in the jail for about 10 or 15 years with mental agony, people are not been accepted by the external society.

Nowadays, the average lifetime of a human is even reduced to 50 years. For instance, if a criminal is been sentenced for about 15 years of confinement, more than a quarter of his lifetime is gone in repenting. Considering the facts, why do not we give them another chance to live in harmony with his family and relatives where time has the magical effect of healing.

We are not definitely worried about the culprits who do not repent for their destruction to the world. Few wait till they are set out and take revenge by creating communal clashes or through bomb blast. These kind of criminals should be under surveillance even in the prison for their day-to-day activities and should not be released.

Having said all these, when we forgive and add the person who is ready to be a Good Samaritan to the society then we will definitely have a good citizen to the nation.

Writing Feedback / Is there anyone in this world who does not want to be rich? Reasons for making money [8]

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Is there anyone in this world who does not want to be rich? Money plays a vital role in one's life and most of the people work for money. There are few who claim that money is not everything and it is not the prime reason for working. But, I strongly feel that being in a materialistic world, many are working only to become rich and richer.

The world is already in a race where each one is competing with the other in terms of status and lifestyle in living. Both husband and wife are working to satisfy their financial needs and for their children's future. Without money no one can survive in this world.

For example, if someone keeps thinking about the job satisfaction and loyality with the company without switching jobs definitely he/she will be receiving less pay compared to the ones who changes the company.

On the contrary, there are people who live with their principles and ideologies. Self-respect, being faithful with the company, to earn goodwill are the principles of those kind of people. Setting up their dreams, acheving their goals are significant activities rather than money. Receiving appreciations and promotions from the higher management make them feel happy than getting cash or incentive bonus.

Having said these, without satisfying the basic human needs which can be bought only with the help of money no one will be able to state that money is NOT the foremost thing in life.

Also, only a person who is running a settled life can live upholding his principles than money.

Writing Feedback / Government support for the elderly. Agree or disagree ? [8]

Governments should not have to provide care or financial support for elderly people because it is the responsibility of each person to prepare for retirement and support him or herself.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Many people have different views on caring and providing aid for the senior citizens. Though it is very important for a person to save for his future and the children to care for their aged parents, I strongly feel that government should also be extending hands for the welfare of the elderly people.

According to the traditional approach, all the savings of the parents are being spent for the education, wedding and for setting up a better lifestyle for their kids. Parents miss to think or prepare themselves for their retirement. Some are very careless and act as spendthrifts who enjoy the present and do not save for the future.

There are other factors which insist the support from government. In this economical world, everyone are in need of money. Not all children are in a position to bear the financial needs of their parents. Since in a due course of time, they get into a family cycle and get stuck amidst of various problems. There are also chances for rise of misunderstanding between parents and children which becomes a barrier for interaction.Also because of the generation gap, attitudes differ between them.

Government should be setting some arrangements for the elderly like Old-age homes, medical centers/campaigns, Special care units for the elderly who suffers from non-curable diseases, etc., For the elderly who have lost their children or living apart from their children can be provided with financial benefits. Special assistance came be provided for the people aged above 80 & for the differently abled for transport, medical insurance etc.,

In a nutshell, apart from insisting oneself to plan for their retirement, it is also the responsibility of the government to care for the senior members of the nation.

Writing Feedback / IELTS- Many people prefer to rent a house rather than buying one- advantages/disadvantages [4]

In the recent days, everyone wishes to pay rent, enjoying the present life rather taking up the burden of paying Equated Monthly Installment (EMI). While there are many advantages influencing people to reside in rented accommodation, there are also drawbacks which are worth considering.

To state upon on the advantages of renting, firstly, people can live very closer to work, schools, hospitals etc., For instance, if there is a transfer of job location, it is very easy to look for another rented house nearer to office. Secondly, you get a chance to live in big apartments and posh houses for short timing and enjoy all the amenities provided without having to think much on investing in buying them. Finally the financial risk is low.

On the contrary, living in a rented house you cannot claim ownership.All the earnings are spent in paying rent leaving a person totally skint when the person is retired. i.e Consider an example of a family staying in a house paying 20k rent whereas they could have invested in buying a flat and pay 20k as monthly EMI. Apart, not all house owners are nice people. Some landlords have stringent rules for the houses rented and collect huge maintenance fees. Moreover, each time while relocating there will be extra cost involved for mail redirection, shifting etc.,

Finally, discussing upon on the ideas of renting, there are equal number of pros and cons on this issue. It depends upon one's own needs and financial circumstances to choose whether to live in a rented house or own house.

Writing Feedback / IELTS; Subjects taught in schools are to be decided by central authorities or teachers? [4]

The subjects that children are taught in schools are decided by central authorities. Some people say that teachers, not politicians, should be responsible for this task. To what extent you agree or disagree with this opinion?

School education plays a significant role in nurturing one's life. The conflict on who decides of the curriculum of study, whether it is teachers or politicians, is a never ending story. In my perspective, I would say, it should be teachers.

Being in the teaching profession for years, teachers would be able to clearly picturise the ideas and topics which needs to be highlighted in the education programme. Teachers clearly know "what and what not" can be inculcated to a child's mind. For example, if the biology text book needs revision, teachers are the ones who can articulate the updates to be made in the biology book than a politician.

Politicians try to get popular and stay in students minds by publishing their life history in text books. They also, print comic pictures of the other politicians to make fun, which are no way related to studies. Moreover, most of the politicians are uneducated , illiterates and how can they be pronouncing the proper school syllabus?

On the contrary, many argue that only politicians know the happenings around the world and they can be helpful in upgrading the syllabus. Also, since teachers are always obsessed in dealing with the same books for years together, they cannot be a better critique to comment on the syllabus. Apart, education programmes reflects the standards amongst various nations and only central authorities can be deciding on the subjects comparing with international students.

To conclude, it is the teachers, who can better understand the capabilities of the children and the student's world. They are the responsible person for making the best syllabus for the school-going children.

Writing Feedback / IELTS essay - role of news editors in broadcasting the news [2]

News editors decide what to broadcast on television and what to print in newspapers. What factors do you think influence these decisions? Do we become used to bad news? Would it be better if more good news was reported?

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NEWS is the information received from all the four directions - North , East, West & South and it is the media that, rules the minds of the people around the world by playing with it. There are several factors that determine the selection of news by the news editors and reporters and it so prominent that it invades the decisions of the citizens of the nation. In my honest opinion, care should be taken in the way it is broadcasted.

The reporters of various media take an upper hand in publishing the type of news to the world. Most of them are dirty politics, love affairs of celebrities, accidents and corruption cases which are described in detail in the main columns in the newspapers. Nowadays news editors only concentrate on the rating received and the selling of the newspapers. For example, there was a gal in our town who was raped while traveling in the bus and later hospitalized when found injured. She was all over the media for about 1 month daily. Everyone was talking about her and more than her suffering it was the media who tortured her with questions.

On the contrary, the news editors should try to be conscientious on providing the messages better to the audience. Young children, students and teenagers are the most affected amongst the crowd. We understood the same when Indian students protested against the Srilankan- Tamil eelam issue. Media has the significant power to drive the nation by delivering good and trusted facts in order to strengthen the democracy.

To conclude, as we all are keen in knowing the happenings around the world and to keep ourselves updated round the clock, it would be greatly appreciated if the editors pay attention in the type of news published and broadcasted.