Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 1; Cinema attendance in the UK [9]

The chart illustrates british attendance in cinema. persentation of age group in five yaers. the line graph shows percentageof each age of british in every year who attend the cinema.

In general, it can b seen to the graph taht the number of british who attend the cinema increased slowly from 1990 to 2010.

in 1990 to 2000, aged 14 to 54 the graph relative fluctuated. instead aged 14 to 54 decline sharply. in 1995 to 2000, probably this is caused by decreasing of production film as long as this years. since year 2000 to 2010 the graph rose sharply, speciallly in aged 44 to 54. though aged 24 to 34 the graph remained reasonably steady but it is not give big affect to the aged other graph.

overall, cinema attendance in the UK rose shaprhly in all the time of years from 1990 to 2010.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 1; Hawaiian island chain in the center of Pacific Ocean [7]

The map shows Hawaiian island chain in the center of Pacific Ocean. There are eight major islands and it is active volcano.
The Hawaiian chain is the oldest volcano dates back 80 million years ago. The youngest volcano develops build by numerous eruptions this happens because pacific tectonic plate moves from north to west by direction of shift of the pacific tectonic plate (7-9 cm per year).

Each island was started eruption process in originating 2883 km down. Hotspot spume remains static to form kitchen magma. There is vein as line magma to out to surface.

Overall, Hawaiian island is an active volcano it is caused by moved the pacific plate.

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Writing Feedback / Apple canning process; 'sterilizing from bacteria' [8]

The diagram shows a process of making an apple canning. Apple canning is one of many fruits canning in the world. The following is the process of making canned apple.

Canned apple manufacture is divided into long process. It is start from process hand picking in the plantation by farmer until dispatch to various sellers.

The first process is done in the plantation apple. Farmer is doing selection of apple witch good quality and they are taking by hand picking. Then, truck carrier apple comes to transporting apples for Carrie to the factory. The next stage, all of apples undergo is washing process and then is selecting process one by one for quality. After that, cold storing process and then enter to weighing. After weighing all of apples is peeled and then is sliced. Apples id Slicing with the same shape size pieces. The next process is canning.

All of apple canning is sealed and then is cooked for sterilizing from bacteria. After that, is labeling. In each can of apple is labelled by printing machine special for canning food. After that, all of the can is entered into storage. And the end of all process is dispatching.

In conclude, all of the long process of canning apple is assured the quality of apples and assure of the taste of apples.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS; 'six processes' - Cycle life of frog [4]

Life cycle of animals is very interesting to know. One of them is frog. Frog has an interesting cycle life to study.

Cycle life of frog, almost same as other animals in the world. From eggs has to be an adult frog.

Frog to lay an egg is in the swamp and then the eggs change to be embryo. After that, that's embryo change to be tadpole. In this tadpole divided into three processes in order to be tadpole adult. After that, the tadpole has had front legs break through. This process took a long time and then start to have a pulmonary breathing. In all of this process frog has had complete part of the body but still have a tail from tadpole.

After has pulmonary breathing frog still continued their cycle life into two stages. The next process is tadpole frog. Tadpole frog has had complete part of the body. In this process we can say complete process for frog to be adult frog.

Overall, cycle life of frog pass by six processes in their life. This cycle life of frog gives us a lesson of life.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 1 : Bricks process [2]

Bricks always are used for build house or other building. To get a good quality of bricks it is undergo a long process.

Bricks undergo eight process to become as usually we look. That process, start from mining of clay in some land until packaging. Bricks are produced many, it is molded with same size.

First process is mining the clay by using excavator and then is brought to manufacturer for role the clay and enters to metal grid for part the clay which is good quality of clay. After that, that clay is mixed with water. This mixing process takes a long time. Then, clay is molded into the same a casting mold size. Then, bricks are cutting one by one using wire.

After cutting process enter to drying process. For drying bricks it is need time about from 24 to 48 hours. all of bricks enter to kiln it is temperature start from moderate temperature. it is about from 200 C to 980 C, and then enter to high temperature it is from 870 C to 1300 C. The next, is cooling chamber. All of bricks have been dry it must be cooling into a chamber and take from 48 to 72 hours. After that, bricks are packed for delivered to seller.

Overall, to get a good quality of brick take long time of process and high temperature.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS: Visits abroad by UK residents by purpose of visit [7]

The tables show visit abroad by UK residents by purpose of visit. Many people visit UK with many purposes in fourth years. UK is one of many good countries to visit. UK was a good resident to visit. People in many countries visit for holiday. This number of visit increased in fourth years. The most destination of visit broad by UK residents was Western Europe.

The most purpose people visit UK was for holiday in fourth years increased about 10.000 people visits. This number was equal with the second table shows. There are increasing destinations of visits western Europe. People visited UK by purpose business 3155 people increasing in fourth years at 3957. Purpose for visits to friends and relatives at 2689 people rose sharply until 1998 at 3181.

In along from 1995 to 2005 people visit UK with other reasons only few but in 1997 were 1054 people visit for other reasons this ware higher than other years. Compare with second table destination of visit abroad in Western Europe ware at 23661.

Overall, Western Europe actually in UK many people visited for holiday.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS: Sector of the economy - employment by age [5]

The table shows the in which sector of the economic different age groups were employment. The employment sector includes agriculture, manufacturing, catering, local government, health, retail, law accountancy, education and others.

Between 18 and 25 age group employment sector accountancy get 3% of economic. This number is lowest than the other sectors employment, although in 25-40 age group and 40-65 age group. Retail sector get 23% of economic, especially from 18-25 age groups. Contrast with 25-40 age groups only 7% of economic and 40-64 age group decrease 6% of economic.

Manufacturing sector gave big contribute of economic in all of age group especially in 40-65 age group. Health sector did not gave big contribute of economic but it was in the middle rate of contribute for economic especially in every age groups. In every age group of law gave 4% of economic. And for local government, catering and education sector each of them in average gave about 15% of economic in all age group. Actually from others sector gave a sharply increase contribute of economic in all of age group.

To sum up, all of the employment sector helps increasing of economic especially from health sector, they gave 39% of economic from all of age group and government sector, they gave 38% of economic from all of age group.

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Writing Feedback / Unemployment rates in US and Japan from March 1993 to March 1999 [6]

The graph shows unemployment rates in US and Japan from March 1993 to March 1999. The data used percentage of work. Standard value from 2.5 to 7.0.
The graph shows two different lines. First line illustrates unemployment rates in US and second line shows unemployment rates in Japan.

Unemployment in both of these countries in along six years are contrast. In along six years unemployment rate in US decrease sharply from 7% work force to 5% work force. Although, unemployment rate in Japan from March 1993 to march 1999 increase sharply at 2.5% work force.

Employment rates in US from march 1993 to march 1996 shows fluctuated decrease step by step at 5.5% work force. From March 1996 to March 1999 fluctuated step by step at 5%. Unemployment rates in Japan from march 1993 to march 1995 increase about 1 %. From March 1995 to March 1997 increase just under 1%. From March 1997 to March 1999 rose about 0.5%.

To sum up, unemployment rates in US in six years decline sharply at 2%. Although, unemployment rates in Japan in each three years latest rose step by step just under 1%.

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Writing Feedback / Radio and television audience in UK [4]

The graph shows radio and television audience through the day in October to December 1992. Percentage of audience in UK population over four years old.

The graph shows two lines the first line shows percentage of TV audience in UK. The second line shows percentage of radio audience in UK over four years old.

Firstly, TV audience from 1.00 to 2.00 decreased slightly about 5% audience. From 2.00 to 7.00 leveling off 5% audiences. In four hours from 7.00 to 11.00 increase slightly about 1% audience but at 8.00 increased about 5% audience. From 11.00 to 21.00 rose sharply about 45% audience. Then, from 21.00 to 23.00 decline sharply about 15% audiences.

Secondly, radio audience from 1.00 to 6.00 leveling off under 5% audience. From 6.00 to 8.00 increased sharply 25% audience. From 8.00 to 23.00 decrease sharply about 5% audiences.

Overall, TV audience increase sharply from 11.00 to 21.00 before radio audience increase sharply from 6.00 to 8.00.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 1 : The winter heating cost costumers [4]

The graph shows the winter heating cost according to heating fuel type from 2003 to 2011. Many kind of fuel can use for heating. The heater fuels such as natural gas, fuel oil and electricity.

Many costumers use winter heating in winter seasons. To use the winter heater need more cost because it is needed fuel for operate the heater. This cost start from $400 to $2.500.

Electricity is the lowest cost for fuel heater. It is about $500. Fuel oil is higher cost for fuel heater. From 2003 to 2007 increased sharply at $1.505. This number continues rose sharply until the end of year 2010 $2.425. Natural gas shows from 2003 to 2007 leveling off average about $750. From 2007 to 2010 decline slightly $547.

To sum up, the cheapest heating cost of fuel in winter season is electricity.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 1 : The electricity consumption and cost per year [8]

The bar shows the relative electricity consumption and cost per year of various household divides.

In a year, electricity consumption increase depending kinds of electronic. The highest electronic cost per year is spa (pump and heater). The lowest electronic cost per year is electric blanket.

Electronic which is low cost $42 per year need 500 kwh per year. There are only 5 electronics where in this part. Home computer, aquarium, dishwasher electric cooking, freezer, water bed heater, clothes dryer and washing machine are includes electronic with high cost about $83 per year. They are need about 1000 kwh per year. The higher electronic costs are refrigerator and pool pump. They are need not less 1500 kwh per year and cost $125 per year.

To sum up, usage normally of electronic cost per year is under $83 per year with 1000 kwh per year. The luxury of electronic cost per year is up $166 per year with 2000 kwh per year.

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Writing Feedback / During this 25 year period, consumption of pizza and hamburgers by Australian teenagers increased [6]

The graph shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000.

During 25 years fast food consumed by Australian teenagers increase sharply specially for pizza and hamburger. But, for fish and chip decrease sharply.

Pizza line shows from 1975 to 1995 increased sharply until 82 people eaten per year. But, in 5 years latest consumed of this food leveling off about 82 people eaten per year. Hamburger line shows while 10 years raised sharply about 83 people eaten per year. From 1985 to 1995 increased steadily but in 5 years latest leveling off 100 people eaten per year.

Fish and chips line shows from 1975 to 1980 decreased steadily and then increased step by step in 5 years. Then, from 1995 to 2000 decreased sharply about 40 people eaten per year.

Overall, Australian teenagers interested to fast food such as pizza and hamburger in each year increased. Fish and chips are not interesting fast food today's.

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Writing Feedback / Germany and France electricity generation 2009 [7]

The pies show Germany and France electricity generation 2009. The power of electricity in German 560 billion kwh and the power of electricity in France 510 kwh.

Generally, Electricity in German and France divided into two parts. They are electricity all type and electricity renewable. Electricity all type involved conventional thermal, renewable and nuclear. Electricity renewable involve biomass, hydroelectric, solar, geothermal and wind.

Electricity of Frence is more using nuclear 76% then Germany 23%. Renewable is more usage in Germany biomass 39.3% than hydroelectric more usage in France 80.5%. Electricity in German depend on conventional thermal although in France depend on nuclear and hydroelectric.

Overall, France more economical then Germany because they use nuclear for electricity eventhought they only produce power 510 billion kwh.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS: Greenhouse gases trap energy from the sun [9]

The diagram illustrates how greenhouse gases trap energy from the sun. Greenhouse give affect to atmosphere and earth.

Generally, heating of the earth shows process heat trapped by greenhouse gases. This trapped reflect to atmosphere and partly radiated into space.

Extra CO2 from burning fossil fuel so that heating trapped by greenhouse gases affect heating earth. This.This heating can not absorbed by O2 because felling of trees. Effect of heating in the earth, heat energy radiated into space. This heating partly reflected off atmosphere

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Overall, the greenhouse gases big affect to earth. Atmosphere become thin and heating of earth.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS: Hydroelectric dam and turbine [5]

The diagram illustrates the process of hydroelectric dam. Hydroelectric dam was used for power electricity. Electricity is very important things for human life.

Hydroelectric dam was installed in the bottom of river. To take advantage of turbine in the river to produce the power for electricity. The power of turbine was saved in generator. Hydroelectric dam divided into three main compositions such as reservoir storing water, power house generating electricity and power lines transmitting power over long distances to where it can be used.

In the bottom of river was installed hydroelectric. In hydroelectric there is an intake. Function of intake for taken water from reservoir into penstock. Then, from penstock water flows to turbine. The power of turbine spins in high spin. While turbine spins in high spin the generator catch the power of turbine. And then, the generator saves the power into power house. The power house partly flowed to power lines in long distance.

To conclude, hydroelectric dam take advantage from turbine. The river give contribution for hydroelectric dam to get the electricity.

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