Writing Feedback / TASK 2: Starting Own Business, Do The Merits Outweigh The Drawbacks? [2]

SOME PEOPLE DECIDE TO START THEIR OWN BUSINESS INSTEAD OF WORKING FOR A COMPANY OR ORGANISATION. DO THE ADVANTAGES FOR PEOPLE WORKING FOR THEIR OWN BUSINESS OUTWEIGH THE DISADVANTAGES?

Generally, people work to fulfill their nerds and pursuit their dream. As per some individuals, it is better for humans to build their own company rather than applying in particular company. While I believe that this notion has merits and drawbacks. I personally argue that this has more positive than negative effects.

The negative side of starting a business is that the work competition is very tight in the modern are so that a new company can face bankruptcy if it does not has any innovative idea to compete with others organization. As a result, the employers can fall into debt. In addition, there is no such guarantee about pension cost in such condition. While in some companies offer severance payment, this condition does not apply if people start their company.

However, the advantages of starting a new company are that a person can give orders to their workers and create standards of their employees. Despite the fact that having a high position in a party ensure well payment, that person still an employee who can be issued any time. By establishing a business, the individuals can manage the working time in their workplace so they tend to have more leisure time as time goes by. Furthermore, they can follow their own passion and creating vocation for wider range of citizens. It is thus clear that laying a company brings immense benefits not only to the persons themselves but also other people.

The aforementioned evidence reveals that even though starting an organization needs hard work to be successful, this option benefits greatly for many more people. Therefore, I strongly believe that beginning a business is a better choice. Where possible, people should bring more innovative ideas before starting particular party.

Writing Feedback / TASK 1: International Trade of Southland in Three Areas between 2000, 2016, and 2025 as the projecte [3]

A breakdown of export sales of Southland in three different areas measured in £ billion between 2000, 2016, and 2025 as projected year, is illustrated in the bar chart. It is immediately apparent that the trend of three productions is different. In any case, dairy products have the greatest sales despite of fluctuation although international tourism is expected to break the record.

Moving to a more detailed analysis, the upward and downward trend can be seen on international tourism and meat products respectively. Meanwhile dairy products showed fluctuation sales. In 2000, the products of farm stood at just below £7 billion before it jumped and set a sales record in the following sixteen year. However, the abroad trades of farm products were forecasted to fall slightly in 2025. On the other hand, tourism was the greatest export in 2000 and the sales climbed considerably and were projected to reach a high of approximately £10 billion in 2025.

Turning to meat products, it was the least popular choice in the time frame. Initially, the highest international purchase of meat was at £ 6 billion and these sales decreased significantly in 2016 and will hit a low of £5 billion in 2025. A closer look to the chart reveals that the selling record was dairy products in 2016 before global tourism is projected to come to a head of the popular consuming in 2025.

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Writing Feedback / TASK 2: Do Working in Particular Work Beneficial for Children? [2]

In many countries, children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong while others consider it as valuable work experience. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

These days and ages, children involved in any kind of paid work are prohibited in some countries, while others would argue that it is beneficial for them. Although working in particular job can influence teenagers' result of study, I believe it is better to give them opportunity to build their social understanding.

It is generally assumed that adolescents who devote themselves in some particular occupations are wrong since they should focus on their studies. This is mainly because psychologically, the best time to learn for people is adolescence. In fact, a recent study by Institute for Social and Economic Research found that students' part-time jobs can influence their educational results in which it can develop their personal characteristics, including responsibility, work organization and time management, which could in return enhance school achievements.

The importance of working for people under the age of 18 can strengthen children's social skills. Since working as a part of a team will help them establish communication skills and improve confidence. For example, an observation by Aistear, the early childhood curriculum framework, showed that children learn by being with others to build relationship and to create an environment in which children feel secure and confident enough to take risks, explore, and take part in challenging experiences. I believe this is the best scenario for children to develop their personality.

In conclusion, although being an employee has an impact in the grade, this is not the crucial issue since children can gain priceless experience while they work. Where possible, children should apply their social abilities gained from work to develop their learning.

Writing Feedback / TASK 2: What is the Best Method to Hire Employees? [3]

Most employers interview candidates before hiring them. Do you think this is the best way to do it? In your opinion, what is the best method for choosing employees?

Interview is generally used by many companies to recruit employees. However, I believe that this is not the best way to hire people since it does not cover all the capability of applicants in which the assessment should be made to measure a whole ability of people such as aptitude test.

Conducting interview is not a very effective recruitment method because the interview does not give the interviewee a chance to show how good they really are. The skills tested in interview, such as the ability to communicate in a friendly manner and being able to answer the question without any assistance are the opposite of those required by many jobs. For example, a skilled computer programmer or lab technician may be socially awkward and used to consulting the internet before answering a question and they would never be able to show how technically proficient they are.

Needles to say, the best way to screen potential ability and analyze the bad or good point of applicants is by aptitude test. When it comes to hiring, aptitude test allow company to make a more informed decision by comparing the result of candidates in term of choosing the right person. For example, statistics reveal that 70% of world's recruitment companies use aptitude test as a part of their recruitment procedure in which permit the potential companies to determine how individuals complete particular job and how they fit well within the work environment.

In conclusion, interview does not cover all skills of people since it just shows communication ability instead of work's capability and the best method would be aptitude test. It is recommended to the companies combine both method to get a better result.

Writing Feedback / It is generally believed that narcotic addicts should be locked up to drift away the crime rate. [3]

Should drug addicts be jailed or rehabilitated? Discuss both views and give your opinions.

It is generally believed that narcotic addicts should be locked up to drift away the crime rate. However, this is not the most appropriate way to tackle the issue. Therefore, I believe that it is better to give sufficient treatment for them.

Some people are of the opinion that drug users are criminals and deserve to be prisoner by the idea that they are in possession of drugs, which by law in some countries are declared illegal. Logically, anybody who uses or is in possession of narcotics is treated as a law offender. However, drugs addicts considered as a social illness in which in my country, Law No. 35/2009 on narcotics and other addictive drugs provides treatment and rehabilitation for drug addicts, but not for drug dialer. Therefore, I believe that locking up the drug users is not the best way to solve such problem since it does not heal mentality damage.

Needless to say, attitudes toward drug users have changed in which people assumed drug abuse is a serious problem that should be handled. Since addiction is a public health issue that need medical help and does not deserve punishment. To exemplify, if drug users are imprisoned and do not receive any treatment, their habit will not change even though they are release from the jail. A recent poll by Pew Research Center reported that sixty-seven percent of those surveyed believe the American's administration should emphasize treatment for people who use illegal drugs rather than punishment. I believe this method is more convenient because addiction is a disease, and it benefits both individual and society as a whole

The aforementioned evidence reveals although many people believe the most feasible method to cope drug addicts by throwing them in jail, I would argue that it is not the effective way since they deserve a treatment to heal them.

Writing Feedback / Should Children with Less Artistic Talent Concentrate More On Practical Subjects? [2]

It is pointless making children who lack artistic talent learn painting and drawing in Art classes at school. Instead, they should concentrate on other creative and practical subjects which they may have more aptitude. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some would argue that children with a slight artistic skill are not necessary to join art classes, while others would say that it is better to concentrate on other practical subjects according to their ability. However, I believe that focusing on particular subject can expand more of children's cognition in that area and also affect to the improvement of their grades.

Joining Art classes in formal education is generally assumed to be not essential in learning process of children who lack artistic skill. This is mainly because it is more important to sharpen their ability in particular subject rather than wasting time by learning a wide range of lesson. For example, the New York Times reported in March 2015 that by choosing to expand current skills, it allows individuals to immerse themselves so they can learn further knowledge.

Another effect of concentrating in other practical subjects is that will result in excellent grade of their study, since students are not put under pressure to learn in the class and they tend to feel more relax by learning the subjects that they love. A recent study from Melbourne University showed that students in primary and secondary school in Perth are easily mastered mathematics subject after they reject the art class.

The aforementioned evidence shows that it is better for students to study intensively in the area such as practical subjects to gain more proficiency and improve their school grade. It is recommended that more educators to follow this logic and bring in more beneficial initiatives.

Writing Feedback / What Motivate People to Stay Longer in Particular Company? [2]

Do you agree that money is the only motivation at work why people prefer working in the same company for many years?

In this modern era, it is true that salary is one of consideration when people seek for a job. However, this is not a case when individuals are already at work since there are some factors that influence worker's decision to stay longer at particular obligation. Therefore, I believe that other reasons such as partnership and interest affect personal preference.

Needless to say, solid teamwork of work field contributes a huge influence of employees to keep loyal in particular job rather than the earning. This is mainly because people who feel the sense of belonging at work will develop the performance of loyalty. A recent study by Manchester University showed that almost 78% of workers with tight partnership in the work environment do not have any intention moving out to another companies even though the salary of other enterprise is higher.

Apart from the previous discussion, another reason why people stay in the same company for years is to follow their passion, regardless of how much the wage. It is due to the reason that when people chase their dream, they are no longer regarding work as a force but as an experience that much more enjoyable. For example, the New York Times reported in June 2015 that the predominant reason why people tend to stay in their occupation is because of their career is significant with their passion.

The aforementioned evidence reveals that although money can be regarded as a criteria to choose a profession, tight relationship between the colleagues and fondness to particular area influence employees decision to remain for years in a company. It is suggested that more companies to take this logic into consideration and encourage more workers to stay loyal.

Writing Feedback / Entrust Children to Childcare Centers or Other Family Members? [2]

Some parents think that childcare centers provide the best services for children of pre-school age. Other working parents think that family members such as grandparents will be better cares for their kids. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Children are a priceless asset. As such, some people are of the opinion that children should be sent to daycare centers to get sufficient surveillance, while others say that it is better to be guarded by family members such as grandparents. Although the ideas are acceptable to some extent, I would argue that it is better to entrust with the members of family to take care of the younger one.

It is generally assumed that daycare centers accommodate the best facilities in particular fully-trained staffs in which suitable with children's growth. This is because majority of childcare centers insist fully qualify staffs that is get involved in training center provided by particular organizations. In my local city, people who want to apply in childcare center should at least have a certificate in child development. However, I believe that this is not the best option since according to a recent poll by Indonesia Government found that 68% of children abuse cases within the establishments.

Apart from the previous discussion, parents in full-time employment entrust their children to grandparents when they go to work, since parents think that leaving the adolescents within the family is more trustworthy. The New York Times reported in July 2015 that almost 65% of working parents prefer to leave their younger one in their family member. Therefore, although grandparents are not highly-trained professional in nurturing children, their ability has proven to be a good parent.

In conclusion, while entering the childcare centers can give a great opportunity for children to get a certified staffs, closest families such as grandfather and grandmother are proven to be reliable. It is recommended that parents who send their children to childcare centers to pay more attention to the possibility of abuse.

Writing Feedback / Cigarette smoking brings dire effect not only to the smokers but also to all people around them [3]

In some countries it is now illegal to smoke in public places. It is only fair that people who wish to smoke should have to leave the building. Do you agree or disagree?

It is now illegal to smoke in public areas in many nations since it brings dire effect not only to the smokers but also all people around them. While this is true to some extent, I would also argue that this measurement can reduce the negative effect of smoke to the building and in the health of passive smokers.

Smoke has become a major issue in some countries in which it is generally assumed that smokers should go out of the building if they want to smoke. Since public places public places are not deserve to be polluted with the smoke of cigarette. The New York Times reported in May 2015 that lighting cigarette produce harmful chemicals such as nicotine, carbon dioxide, and methanol in which damage the timber part of the building.

Apart from the previous discussion, another crucial effect of smoking in public areas is on health of others around the smokers. This is mainly because humans have a high chance to become passive smokers by inhaling the air polluted by smoke which results in serious health problem. For example, a recent study by Queen's University found that people who do not smoke who suffer from long-term exposure and second-hand smokers have a 20 to 30% higher risk of developing lung cancer.

The aforementioned evidence shows that such a law to prohibit individuals smoke in public places should be made to minimize the harmful effect to the surrounding. Where possible, giving a consequence to people who offend the law should be taken into consideration.

Writing Feedback / Moving Industries and Businesses from Big Cities to some Rural Areas [2]

In some countries, governments are encouraging industries and businesses to move to regional areas outside the big cities. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

There are some factories in the town centers which are expected by the government to move in the suburbs. While this can be true to some extent, I would argue that such a way is just offer a quick and easy solution in which it does not cover the long-term effect in the big cities and also residents in the outskirts.

Industrial areas in metropolis can lead to traffic congestion and are often moved by the governments to the outskirts. This is mainly because there are a large number of workers who travel to the place and increase the number of public and private transportation there. For example, I live in the town center in which textile manufacturing leads to congestion especially in early morning and late afternoon and the effect of relocating the industry. However, this is not the right idea since a couple decades later the empty area can be used by the government to build new skyscraper in which results in the same problem in the future.

The need to relocate the factories to reduce factories' emission and its effect to the public is the major drawback of this notion. The fumes of manufactory contain harmful chemical released to the air and influence the physical health of anyone inhale the polluted air. A recent study of Queen University proved that those live near the industrial area within 10 kilometers have higher risk of getting cancer in particular the children. While the effect of factories can be minimized in the city, people in the regional area suffer from the exposure of polluted air.

In conclusion, although moving industries in regional areas might solve some problems in town, it will bring other effects to both rural and the city in the future. It is recommended that the governments take this into consideration to enact sufficient measurement.

Writing Feedback / Color is generally regarded as the predominant factor that attracts people to buy some products [2]

Colour is a powerful tool that is used to great effect by manufactures and retail companies when they try to sell us something. In fact, many of the purchasing decisions we make are partly or largely influenced by colour. How true is this statement? How much does colour influence us when we buy something?

Color is generally regarded by most companies as the predominant factor that attracts people buy some products. While some people are of the opinion that the color has a significant effect in the trend of buying, I would argue that there are other factors that affect costumers such as products price and quality.

It is argued that the color of products is one of significant issue in manufacturing in which it attracts customers to purchase particular brand. Majority of producers attempt to use outstanding color to encourage people to spend their money. In research from Winnipeg University of Canada called Impact of Color in Marketing found that up to 90% of swift judgment about products is based on color alone. In reverse, I believe that as a way to attract people interest, shops need to take into consideration about the price ant the quality of products.

The opposite argument is that is that there are other factors that influence consumers' decision on buying such as price and quality since personal preference affects purchase decision. For example, a recent study by Kumasi Polytechnic in Ghana focused on mobile phone sale showed that buyers consider both price and quality when purchasing phone and they tend to feel reluctant to buy low quality phone with high cost.

The aforementioned evidence reveals that although color such as bright or pale can be substantial criteria when purchasing stuffs, cost and attribute predispose individuals' selection. Where possible, manufactures or retail shops should take a closer analysis and consider every factor such as color, price, and quality of goods.