Writing Feedback / The Lack of local people visitors to museum [2]

TASK 2.
Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists rather than local people.
Why is this?
What can be done to encourage local people to visit museums and historical site?

Historical places and museums are sites which cannot be separated from society. Yet, the number of local people is less than tourists to visit those destinations. I personally think that there is a main factor which influences this phenomenon and the authority of the historical buildings should overcome this problem by applying attractive advertising.

The main reason why historical sites are not attractive for people living around these places is since those often find the artificial equipment which is provided by museums. For example, traditional weapon and conventional dress, local people still utilize them at the moment. Therefore, they are not interested to visit museums or historical places. All in all, the number of visitors coming from surroundings is less than tourists from abroad.

However, there is an effective method which can be applied by museum authorities in order to tempt flock living around these places to visit. Those can give discount in cost entrance for local society. This is because people will think twice when the fee to enter historical sites is expensive, even near from their accommodations. Taking council of museum in Greece as an example, by 2009, they had reduced the price of entering museum roughly 50% for Greek. As a result, the number of local tourists increased significantly at a quarter in that year. Hence, reducing the price of museums' ticket will fascinate tourists, particularly local people.

To sum up, it evident that, museums are not favorite place to visit for local dwellers. Yet, I firmly argue that the official of those buildings can provide affordable price to them in order to raise the level of tourists from local. I suggest to them to apply this highly recommended program.

Writing Feedback / The level of viewers for Channel One News over a 12-month period [2]

TASK 1
The graph below shows the average daily figures for Channel One News over a 12-month period

A breakdown of information about the number of viewers on channel one news during January to December based on displaying time is revealed in the line chart. It is measured in the millions. Overall, it can be seen that, despite some fluctuations, the level of people watching this program at 6 pm is the highest of other schedules.

There are up and down trends in the figure for viewers of this channel at 6 pm and 11 pm. In January, the number of audiences at 6 pm begins at approximately 5 million people, as the highest, whereas the level of inhabitants views this station at 11 pm at roughly 1.2 million. In the end of the period, December witnesses a slightly increase in the figure for viewer at 11 pm to 1.3 million, while there is a significant decline in the number of spectator on morning to 3.2 million people.

Turning to the number of viewers at 9:30 pm and 1 pm, the number of people watching at 9:30 pm start at 3.2 million people, the news program in this channel at 11 pm is already introduced on May. Augustus experiences a large gap in both schedules. While the level of audiences at 11 pm inclines sharply at 4 million, the figure for its opposite decreases dramatically to 1 million people. However, in December, the level of viewers hits a trough off under 1 million inhabitants.

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Writing Feedback / Resources of Electricity Production in Germany [3]

TASK 1.
Electricity generation by source in Germany

A breakdown of information about electricity production based on its resources in Germany between 1980 and 2010 is revealed in the pie chart. It is measured in units. Overall, it can be seen that, exception petroleum, the usage of other four sources was fairly similar in 1980, while nuclear dominated energy in another period.

There were two resources which had highly changes. By 1980, nuclear energy had 20 units power plant, while there had been a significant increase in the number of electricity production in this power in 2010 at 155 units. In contrast to this, the figure for natural gas, in 1980, stood 28 units, whereas 2010 saw a dramatic decrease in the level of this resource at 2 units.

Turning to coal, petroleum and hydro, these powers were fairly similar trends in both periods. In 1980, natural gas and coal had equal level at 28 units. Then, while the proportion of natural gas declined sharply to 2 units, 2010 witnessed same proportion in the figure for coal. Besides, the number of hydro dropped to 2 units. Astonishingly, the figure for total of these energies inclined twofold from 107 units to 214 units.

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Writing Feedback / Living lonely between advantage and disadvantage [3]

TASK 2
In recent times, many people are making the decision to live alone.
What are the causes of this?
Does it have positive or negatives effects on society?

In this modern era, while ordinary people live together with their relatives or partners, fractional of them have a tendency to live alone. Business in the workplace and bad experience in the past become main reason why people prefer to live lonely. However, I personally argue that this phenomenon has two sides both positive and negative.

There are two principal factors which affect people to stay without life companion. The first reason is that they want to attain high position in the career. Those believe that living without family makes them to focus on their target. Besides, another cause why people take into account to survive lonely is that they experienced unpleasant moment when they lived with partners. Hence, they decide to spend their rest of live alone.

With regards to the effect of this condition both positive and negative sides the benefit is that those mobilise all of their time and resources to reach their dream. They do not have any responsible to feed the member of family. Therefore, they can accomplish their aim effectively. Yet, this situation also has detrimental impact. If numerous people live lonely without wife, the population of human will decrease significantly. As a result, it will lead to economic crisis due to lack of demand toward goods and services.

To sum up, it is evident that there are several causes of living without companion amidst some citizens, while it has also between advantage and disadvantage. In my point of view, people can determine which one the best choice for them, whatever lonely or establishing a family. However, I suggest to people to spend the rest of their life with someone he love.

Writing Feedback / A breakdown of information about holiday maker percentage visiting England in Brighton; 1980 to 2010 [3]

A breakdown of information about holiday maker percentage visiting England in Brighton from 1980 to 2010 as projected year is illustrated in the line graph. Overall, it can be seen that, despite some fluctuation, over the period as a whole the levels of tourists rose in Pavilion, Pier, Festival, exception being Art Gallery.

In 1980, the percentage of festival visitors stood at 30%, which the highest of three others attractions, while Pier as a lowest by one in ten. When there were gradual rise in level of visitors in Art Gallery, Pavilion, and Pier, but tourist festival decreased slightly. However, 1995 saw a striking different among all of attractions, the proportion of pavilion visitors increased dramatically whereas others remained stable. Yet, by 2000, once three attractions had had moderate changes, there had been a significant fall in the percentage of pavilion.

Less change was seen in remaining of four attractions between 2000 and 2010. Pavilion has the highest proportion and the lowest was art gallery, while pier and festival existed between both of them.

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Writing Feedback / The cause of lack of information for children at school ( TASK 2) [3]

Nowadays, fully concentration in attending the class is extremely arduous for many students. There are two possible factors both inside and outside which give rise to this problem. I personally argue that school institution and parents should address this issue.

Two reasons bringing about children who are not able to pay attention in the learning room are inside factor and outside factor. Firstly, inside factor is which comes from those children selves. This is because they are lack of nutrition. This condition will lead to less concentration in the class. Secondly, outside factor is consideration caused by others. For example, some students do not play sophisticated item at the class when their educator is explaining the lesson. This phenomenon is occurred in various schools.

With regards to the solution of this matter, in my point of view, there are two parties who have to be involved to overcome it. Initially, parents should provide nutritious meal for their children at home since it will determine their concentration in the class or, at least, offer breakfast. Ultimately, education institution should take into account about this problem by formulating rule which ban student to bring mobile phone into the school. Aftermath, they will be more concentrated to listen the subject.

Therefore, it is clear that the problem caused by inside and outside reasons. However, parents and schools should share collective responsibility to deal with it. I firmly believe that if the solutions which are sated in this article will tackle this issue effectively.

Writing Feedback / The statistics data about cinema visitors based on different age groups in the United Kingdom [2]

A breakdown of information about visitors in cinema based on age groups in the United Kingdom per five years from 1990 to 2010 as a projected year is illustrated in the line chart. The data is shown in per cent. Overall, it can be seen that despite some fluctuations, over the period as a whole the levels of viewers rose in four age groups.

Aged 44-45 and 34-44 was the two highest percentages. Over the end of period they showed at fairly similar level. By 1990, they had nearly proportion between 37% and 35% respectively. There were slight decline in 2000 for both categories. However, form 2005 and 2010, the percentage of two age group increased significantly in order to end up at more than half for aged 44-54 and 33% for aged 34-44.

Turning to other categories, also, aged 14-24 and 24-34 had almost same trend. The proportion of people watching movie in the first categories stood at 15 as the lowest percentage, while another was up one in ten. During 1995 to 2005 witnessed a similar fluctuation. Finally, they remained stable until the end of the period at 3more than a third and a fifth successively.

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Writing Feedback / To solve the fear of crime problem. What official has done is not sufficient to restrict it. [2]

TASK 2.
Many people are too scared to leave their home because of a fear of crime.
Some people think that more should be done to prevent crime, whereas others feel that nothing can be done.
What are your views?

In some metropolises, dwellers fear to consume a lot of time outside their accommodation due to apprehension of crime. Some people argue that what official has done is sufficient to restrict it. However, others have different perspective, it is useless. I think that there two additional policies which can be conducted by government to overcome this issue.

With regards to inhabitants think that the even though authority carry out many mechanisms to solve to this problem, they are pointless. This is because virtually mafias work together with some individuals of police. Based on what Misha Glenny showed on Ted Talks, underground criminal organisations can distribute illegal drugs without restriction since some people in authorities back up their business. Aftermath, the number of crime increases significantly. Hence, whatever roles government will formulate, they cannot reduce this detrimental activities.

On the other hand, others still believe that council can deal with this phenomenon. There two possible policies which can be done by council to tackle. Firstly, they should cut off the supply chain of the connection between mafias and violated civil servants. If this method can be conducted well, it can push the figure for crime dramatically. Furthermore, government have to incline the quality of education since the main factor of criminal action is educational deficiency, despite this policy has indirect impact.

To sum up, it evident that obviously, we can handle this condition by providing some solution. I say that two potential methods which are offered are able to overcome it. I recommend to authority to apply them in order to give safe feeling to public.

Writing Feedback / How to make public places free from the cigarette smoke? [2]

Smoking not only harms the smoker, but also those who are nearby. Therefore, smoking should be banned in public places.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Recently, scientific studies show that consuming cigarette has detrimental effect not only for smoker, but also threaten for surroundings. Hence, some people argue that they should be forbidden to smoke in front of public. However, I firmly argue that this harmful activity has to be banned to conduct in common area.

With regard to people believing that we cannot ask the active smoker to go out from building or keep away from public spot. This is because they also have right to carry out what they want to do. Sometimes some people smoking said, they cannot do their job well without consuming cigarette. For instance, a course in East Java, some teachers smoke when they are teaching since some senior educators assert that they are not able to explain the lesson fully concentrate without smoking. Consequently, the stakeholder allows them to smoke. Therefore, consumers of cigarette are entitled for doing their habit.

On the other hand, whatever smoker or not have to admit that the content of fog from cigarette is hostile for passive smokers. The reason is when they breathe the smoke, it will disturb their healthy. Taking pregnant woman as an example, it will endanger her fetus, when they live in smoking circumstance. Henceforth, the risk of abortion is high or disability baby when born. All in all, to keep the health of other people, consuming cigarette in public area have to be banned.

To sum up, it is evident that despite it is controversial issue, I strongly agree that forbidding smoking in front of public location is a must. Finally, I suggest to government to make a rule for overcome this problem in order to safeguard health of majority inhabitants.

Writing Feedback / Overall, it can be seen that there are two main raw materials to make fish pie. IELTS [2]

A process of production fish pie generation in a food factory is revealed in the pictures. Overall, it can be seen that there are two main raw materials to make fish pie.

The first prime ingredient is potatoes. This carbohydrate diet is delivered by truck for more than one month. The earliest stage is that potatoes are cleaned to peel. After that, the litters are wasted to disposal. Then, next step is slice in order to boil them in good condition. The potatoes are added by chili to give the sense. All in all, the last process is storing.

Turning to another main raw material, it is fresh salmon delivered by truck for 12 hours or less. Different with potatoes, this step of this ingredient is added lemon juice and salt. Then, it is steamed in oven. Surprisingly, this factory still employ human to remove and skin bones and of them as an inspector. The last two steps are preparing peas and sauce. Finally, the potatoes and fresh salmon are combined and packaged to be stored in freezer and the pies are ready to be marketed.

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