Writing Feedback / In Philippines, many nurses usually choose to look for a job overseas, than stay in their country [3]

IELTS Writing Task 1 Nurse Migration

There are different conditions between number of nurses in develop countries and developing countries. The condition caused by movement of nurses. In the develop country, for example in Philippines, many nurses more choose to find a job in overses than stay in their country. High salaries and better quality of life can be a major reason of their choosing. The disadvantages is the position in the native country unfilled. In the other sides, in the developing countries, amount of nurse can make much health care services available. But, in the United States, the aspects create condition which is reducing of large amount of qualified applicants every year because shortages of nursing faculty. Finally, the condition indicated to us how important of nurses function.

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Writing Feedback / Hawaii islands are one of interesting places to visit because of their original culture [3]

EILTS Writing Taks 1 Hula Dancing in Hawaiian Culture

Hawaii islands are one of interesting places to visit in the world because they have original culture and beautiful landscape to see. However, their local dance, which is people well-known as Hula, is an entertainment that usually we watch in the television. Actually, there are contrastive origin form of classic and modern Hula that we can see today. Myth of Hawaii said originally Hula performed in front of an altar by Men and created to honor their god or goddess. The changing form occured in the eighteenth century as result of the interaction with European culture. Because of that, Hawaiian organized a cultural festival, which is consisted of hula competition, in the 1960s. The festival called the Merrie Monarch Festival that has become annual cultural event to attract more tourists again and seek to maintain their cultural heritage.

Writing Feedback / EILTS Writing Taks 1 Origin of Writing in some Place [7]

Ancient tribe believe that origin writing was started from a thausand years ago. Such as Egyptians who believe that their god Thoth was the person who was the first maker of writing and speech. In other side, ancient Maya also believe that skills from their god. That's way Mayan, people who lives around Mexico and Central America, are so famous with the temple walls and other religious buildings. In the myth of Chinese, the result of the writing was used in contact with their god. The oldest feature of Chinese writing was found approxmately 1500 B.C. The feature is called oracle bone script because its from animal bones and shells. It is indicated how writing skills is very important for all people, since from a thousand years ago until now.

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Writing Feedback / Summary TED: Saving Indonesia's Forests One Village at A Time [5]

Identity is something which can describe person or group to compareit with another. It can also be habitat or environment where they live. Muara Tae, for exampe, believe that their forest not just be source for livelihood or just place for finding wood or branches but it had been house for the original tribe. Since then, Dayak as a local ethnicity in Muara Tae worried about loging companies activity which is operating their huge vehicles that can obliterate the forest about 15 hectares a day. We can imagine, how condition of the forest in the future when the groundwork keep operating. The local goverment has authorize to make some regulations to inhibit deforestation in there and to safe the identity of Muara Tae people.

Writing Feedback / EILTS Writing Taks 1 Summary Ted The New Direction of Indonesia's Creative Culture [4]

Indonesian people are high creative art person that had been famous in other countries. So many evidence from culture that can explain the skills which are full of art technique such as Borobudur temple, Wayang, Gamelan, Batik also. But, how about Indonesian product? Actually array of adolescent in Indonesia have a lot original products which can established into global market, and at the time the world was ready to embrace Indonesian product.

Recently, the goverment of China made one huge exhibition in Shanghai which can cover 750.000 mini square of spaces. That means the authority really doing something to support their economic creative especially young generation local brands. So how about Indonesia? What the goverment do? We can say "Nothing". So that's way Indonesian creator cannot wait and hope with the goverment. And should create an independent Indonesian departement store which can accredit local brands and sell it in there.

Writing Feedback / Some three cities with modern public transportation which have different function and structure [5]

EILTS Writing Taks 1 Major Subways of Europe

There are three cities that have modern public transportation which have different function and stucture each other. Three of the laggest and most active underground rail system are in London, Paris, and Moscow. For the first, subways in London which can carry 30,000 passengers, was started in 1863. It was built in below ground in order to provide free ways for horses and people who walk in centre of city. Second, Paris developed rail service that became rival London's subways at that time. Paris's Metro is smaller than subways, but it famous for its beautyful architecture. And the last, The Motro Moscow, which was found in 1935, was built on surface of earth. Like in the Paris Metro, it was chock-a-block with art, culture and engineering. All of the rail means are keep enlarge to serve their society. It is an aspect to defend our environment from some pollutions and greenhouse effect.

Writing Feedback / The Older forms of Entertainment - the circus have been famous a thousand years ago already [2]

Circus, the one form of entertainments, have been famous a thousand years ago. At the golden era of the circus, coliseums and stadiums were performed place. The old variety of entertainment was developed in Rome approximately at sixth century B.C. Circus has a lot kind of events likely chariot rases, spectator sport and animals trainer. But the society entertainment disappered when the Dark Ages comes.

At the end of 1700s, there was an native of Englang who establised circus again with less different appereance. Philip Astley became prominent person in London. He made a huge perform in Paris include clowns, acrobats, and parades of trained animals that was required by Louis XV.

Writing Feedback / To winning a match, race or competition, an athlete uses not only his muscles but also extreme focus [4]

EILTS Writing Task 3 Athlete: not just about muscles

There is a true statement that say to be great hand and winning a match, an athlete not only uses muscles but also needs focus. Focus ,in one word is colaborate between eyes and brain, used by athlete for have an eye for the object and the rival on the field. For example, football player, fast movement of ball, large and egde of court, rapidity and other players position to be centre focus. Focus can scan the object when athlete often sharpen the ability in training and practicing. The area also give athlete focus ability such as colour and brightness of field, jersey colour composite, and all of that can divert the player's attention.

Writing Feedback / Populus euphratica, Tamarix ramosissima, and Alhagi sparsifolia - these plants grow on desert [3]

Essay Writing Task 2 - Plant Life in the Taklimakan Desert

Taklimakan is the second larger desert in the world subsequent Sahara desert in Africa. Taklimakan covered by sand dunes, and has a extreme climate which ordinary plants scald in the summer season and frezee in winter season. Fortunately there are three plants that can survive with the extreme environment in the Taklimakan. The plants are Populus euphratica, Tamarix ramosissima, and Alhagi sparsifolia.

All of the plants have different ways to defend and still life. For the first variety, Populus euphratica has long tree that can attract the water from below ground. Tamarix ramosissima has up level patience for salty condition because they use the leaves pass out onto the surface and make it more saline. So that's way they can still life. On the contrary Alhagi sparsifolia has a less wispy roots in the surface soil, it use elevate the water from underground.

Writing Feedback / EILTS Writing Taks 1 : Summeries' Environment Impacts of Loging [3]

Loging industries is one of the promblems for our environment today. The disanvantage of loging is habitats loss, pollution, and climate change. Not only that but also nutrients and water which are needed for plants and microorganism threaten to live in both terrestrials and aquatic forms.

In terrestrials life form, the trees in the rainforest can be canopy which avoid rain water drip down onto porous earth. So thats way, the healthy of the soil development cannot growth as well. And from aquatic life form, the plants around rivers and streams cannot find oxygen in the water as well as before.

Trees provide a natural protection against air polluttion. Eventually, we have to make the forest, especially rainforest such as Amazon essential habitats for biodiversity, is responsible to ensure and protect for our good healhty.