Writing Feedback / IELTS: Happiness - factors and importance; "small gap between birth and death" [12]

Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness?

Answer:

My grandmother used to say: the life is a small gap between birth and death, so be happy in it. Admittedly, happiness has always been very pivotal in our lives but there is no strict definition of it. As a result, everyone can tell various factors of achieving felicity. In my perspective, there is a vast number of factors of achieving happiness and I will enlist vital ones.

To begin with, happy environment can be considered as a key factor in achieving happy state. In other words, living among happy family, friends and relatives can help you forget your woes and see to life with a optimistic view again. For example, when I have some misery, my friends always make some jokes and they make me smile. In this way, they are always very helpful in making me happier.

Further and even more vitally, not caring about what other people think of you is sometimes very important for being happy. As Winston Churchill said: we shall never reach our destination if we stop and throw a stone at every dog that barks. For example, when person cares about what other people say and think of him, that person can never feel real happiness. I think, we can feel happier when we become and do what we want to be, not what others want to see.

Having considered all the arguments above, we can finally draw a conclusion that happy environment and being ourselves without being ashamed of it are very important factors and essential parts of achieving happiness.

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 1: USA marathon records by age and gender in hours. [6]

The line graph below illustrates the USA marathon records by age and gender in hours.

Overall, it can be seen that the indications of male gender had perceptible priority over females no matter at what age they were. In addition, records belong to people aged from 10 to 60.

A more detailed look at the graph shows that at the age of 10 both male and female genders almost had the same indications(3 hours). However, the age of 20 was marked by a significant change, because 2.1 hours record belonged to male, whereas female gender enjoyed 2.3 hours respectively. By the age of 30 imperceivable change was observed(male-2.05 hours, female-2.25 hours). Gradually, indications started to fall dramatically and by the age 60 the indications of women remained 3.15 hours, while men's records were higher(2.45 hours).

To sum up all, the graph rose gradually till the age of 40 and fell dramatically till 60. Apogee was observed among people aged 30.

Writing Feedback / Ielts: most popular sports - the pie chart [9]

The pie chart below provides us with the information about most popular sports among people aged 5-14 years old. The indexes are given in percentages.

Overall, it can be said that the highest percentage of popularness belongs to soccer(26%), whilst karate(8%) and other sports(4%) apart from swimming, baseball, basketball and volleyball have the lowest indications.

In more details, the most popularized type of sport among the people of these ages next to soccer is swimming activities(22% respectively). It is interesting to note that sports such as: volleyball and basketball own the same percentages(11%). In addition, baseball has 7% more than basketball and volleyball(18%) and as a result ranks the third place.

Writing Feedback / Ielts task 2: In some countries the average weight of people is increasing. [5]

Topic:
In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels health and fitness is decreasing.
What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?
Answer:

In the course of the last hundred years, the average weight of people in some countries has increased perceptibly. Simultaneously, the levels of health and fitness of those people have worsened significantly. In this essay, I am going to discuss the primary reasons of this issue and give some solutions to them.

To begin with, one of the principal reasons of increasing the weight of some people is sedentary lifestyle, which is mainly caused by the development of technology. For example, in earlier times, the sources of amusement were not in large numbers and all of them required physical presence. Therefore, people at that time were more active, energetic and as a result they achieved healthier state too.

Nowadays, there are a vast numbers of entertainments such as the Web surfing, television, computer games, which don't necessitate physical activities. From my point of view, one of the salient solutions to this problem is to advertize widely the negative effects of sedentary lifestyle and prosecute explanatory works.

Further and even more importantly, fast foods also have an immense impact on fatness. One must admit that we have benefited from them greatly, because of its compactness and time efficiency. But at the same time, fast foods are making us overweight day by day; as such foods are incredibly high in fat. For example, in the USA, many people suffer from fatness, which causes some serious ailments. Because they consume fast foods to excess in order to save time. In my opinion, restrictions are irrelevant in this case; therefore it would be better if every individual decides whether to consume them or not.

The aforementioned evidences examine that the accurate advertisements of drawbacks of sedentary lifestyle and avoiding detrimental foods are the best solutions and the sources of progress.

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Writing Feedback / Some sportsmen earn more money than other professionals; 'specialist of sphere' [10]

Successful sports professionals earn a great deal more money than people in other more important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think that it is unfair.

Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Nowadays, sports have become very good source of earning money. As a result, some professional sportsmen can earn much more than people who work in other important professionals like doctors and teachers. However, there are many concerns whether it is justified or not. Personally, I think it is fair that sportsmen earn more money and I have some reasons for it.

To begin with, it is irrefutable fact that sport is business and most of the profits of sportsmen are from non-governmental organizations and advertisement. Moreover, the governmental salaries of people, who work in the spheres of sports and entertainment don't differ from the salaries of doctors and teachers largely. For example, most of the renowned football players get a lot of money from advertisements of some products.

Further and even more importantly, not every football player, runner or other sportsmen can earn decorous amount of money, because there are millions of sportsmen who get almost the same salary with simple doctors and teachers. In this sense, only talented and hard working professionals can become rich and achieve fame. For example, there are a lot of football players in our region who are not well-known and have lower salaries than doctors and specialists of other spheres.

However, one must note that the top ten list of wealthiest people of the world doesn't have any sportsmen. In this sense, these successful sportsmen are not as rich as they seem.

The aforementioned evidences examine that the specialists of any sphere, including sports, can achieve fame and have high income if they are gifted, hard-working and determined.