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Nov 23, 2015
Writing Feedback / A comparison of the trade in two kinds of phone product, namely mobile and residential [2]
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A comparison of the trade in two kinds of phone productS, namely mobile and residentialone in COVERING a nine-year period from 2001 to 2010 in the US and this is presented by the a line chart. Overall, it is noticeable ONE WILL NOTICE that the amount of money which spend for SPENT ON cell phones always increaseS every year, while another for THE landline phoneS experienced conversely THE REVERSE.
There were significant changesbetween IN THE SALE OF selling both commodities. In the beginning OF THE year, the price of cell phone stood at $200 and for home phone is COST more than threefold in AT $700. But then, tT he rate of hand-phone noticed HADS a dramatic increase to $300, while the value of house-phone showed a dramatic fall by $80. This condition lasted for a four-year later PERIOD.
Moving to a more detailed analysis, the line chart described the interesting trend OVER A five-year period. This is because the lines intersected in 2006, exactlyin AT $550, but the trend of residential telephone SALES described a worseNING trend since the rise number of users in cell phoneS. Then, over following the f Four years later, both lines showed the A slight movement until the expense of mobile phoneS reached a peak at $750 and the price of landlineS ring dropped to $400.
Hi Irfan, here are my suggestions for improving your report :-)
A comparison of the trade in two kinds of phone productS, namely mobile and residential
There were significant changes
Moving to a more detailed analysis, the line chart described the interesting trend OVER A five-year period. This is because the lines intersected in 2006, exactly