Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 1 - plan to build new supermarket in the city of Garlsdon. [7]

Question:
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
You should write at least 150 words.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
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Answer:
The map below shows town of Garlsdon where has population 65,000. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town.

In general, site plan establishing supermarket (S2) more possible than choice site shop store (S1).

The first possible area for the supermarket (S1) is riveting where it has several cities consist of 25 km to Cransdon has population as big as 29,000 people, and 16 km to Brandsdon consist of population 15,000 persons. Therefore, if many persons in around build of supermarket, I think they will come many benefits for it because many people need some food, dress or others for their family. With the result, they will visit supermarket for buying it. Then, they will choose place which is nearer because some people in around there work in the office industry and they just have a little time. Furtheremore, they have not opportunity to go place far distance. However, S1 has fewer society in around that it is consist of 10,000 society of 12 km to Hindon.

Overall, Carlsdon has opportunity for building supermarket in the town centre. It is place strategy place for many people in around.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS 1;comparisons where relevant to bulid new mall in the city of Brandfield . [3]

Question:
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The map shows a drawing of the city of Brandfield. The goverments of this city have planned to build a new shopping mall for two possible sites. These are in the north and the south east of the town.

In general, both of two areas are crossed by river, road and railway.

The first possible location is in the suburb. This location is nearer with housing estate in secondary by river, railway, and road. This place for shoping mall 1 (S1) where far distance from industry. With the result, air polution from many industries are not disturb people that come to S1.

However, the second possible site is totally different than the first one. It is located S2 near city center. Although, this place near railway, but it is one strip compared by S1 in a place over the railway which many people should through railway and this is very dangerous for each persons especially for children. So, place plan S2 is not dangerous because society should not over the railway.

In short, the second possible is more perfectly because its place more safe than one location.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 1; region and by gender for the year 2000. [9]

Question:
The chart below shows estimated world literacy rates by region and by gender for the year 2000.
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Answer:
There are the chart shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and gender in the year 2000 between female and male. In general, illiteracy rates in the region South Asia higher than other regions.

Firstly,There are male illiteracy for the 6 areas shown. In the chart, the lowest illiteracy rates were Developed Countries, Latin America/Caribbean, East Asia/Oceania which have percentage each regions as big as 1 %, 10 %, and 8 %. Furthermore, the rates for region Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab States, South Asia have percentage consist of 31 %, 29 %, and 34 %. These three areas were higher than other regions. Secondly, the lowest for female illiteracy rates were again Developed Countries, Latin America/Caribbean, East Asia/Oceania with rates approximately 2 %, 12 %, and 20 %. Then, Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab States, South Asia have percentage namely 48 %, 52 %, and 56 %.

Interestingly there was Developed Countries consists of male and female have illiteracy rates fewest than other regions.

In conclusion, female illiteracy was higher relatively in each areas and male undergo increase slightly in each regions.

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Writing Feedback / Number of visits to two new music sites on the web - 180,000 / 80,000 [4]

Question:
The graph below compares the number of visits to two new music sites on the web.
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Answer:
The figures illustrate how visits to two new music sites on the web in the period. The line graph shows people using new music places on the internet in fifteen days period of time consist of music choice and pop parade.

In general, it can be seen from the graph that many people are doing to go to new places for hearing new music during fifteen day.

In the first day, music choice websites; 40,000 people went on this new site. On the contrary to this pop parade were visited by 120,000 people. However, people go to both it which decrease slightly and lines on internet dropped slowly reaching fall of 40,000 on 7th day. Furthermore, after 7th day undergo rose steadily nevertheless it still fluctuation.

Interestingly, there was a significant increase. Then, on 14th day undergo different between both music where music choice visited by 120,000 people. However, after 14th day declined steadily. On the contrary, pop parade visited by 162,000 people and on 15th day reach 165,000 people.

Overall, it can be concluded that the period pop sites were visited by maximum viewers of 180,000 whereas sites located to music choice were not explored by more than 80,000 explorers on the last day of the report.

Writing Feedback / IELTS "a subject that you haven't opportunity to study" study religion more deep [6]

Question:
If you could study a subject that you have never had the opportunity to study, what would you choose? Explain your choice, using specific reasons and details.

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Subject is area of knowledge studied in schools or boarders. If I would have opportunity to study a subject, I do not know yet. I think that I would choose to study religion more deep. I am very like about religion. I ever studied about it until bajuri book. However, I am interested to study more high again.

I think it is very interesting to know knowledge about religion from bajuri, jannah, and om. It is book that give many knowledges about Islam law until root it. For example, it explains about married law. I think that every persons interested about it because each persons has wanted for getting married. However, some people have not many knowledges about responsibility establishing household.

Another important for studying religion can know about cause of several matters that forbidden by Islam law such why we forbidden to eat pig and dog. I think that all forbidden there is because of it. That is all explained in om book. Hence, I am very curious about many becauses from forbidden. I want to know about it.

In conclusion, I think that if time gave me self realization, it makes me to get more opportunities for reaching what I want. However, time never wait us. It always rotates on its axis. It makes us to forward because the world increasingly sophisticated. Therefore, we should study many skills that can compete with abroad.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: 'satisfaction'; People are never satisfied with what they have [8]

Question:

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People are never satisfied with what they have; they always want something more or something different. Use specific reasons to support your answer.

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Answer:

Some people always feel shortage with what they have. They always want something more or something different. In this essay I will explain my reasons with this statement.

On the one side, I think that some persons want to reach something that they want. They will not stop before they get satisfaction. For instance, if common society chooses to buy a motorcycle today and they want to buy car in the next month because television makes advertisement about new car with modern style. With the result, some people want to have it. Whereas, they have had car at their house, but they have not satisfaction with they have. Therefore, I think some persons never feel thanks God with they get it because they always want more than they have.

However, on the other side, I think that some people feel satisfaction with they get. For example, my teacher in boarder, located Aceh. He always thanks express what he got from his job. Governments have ever tried to give money for him. However, he did not accept it because he had satisfied with he has. He did not want more about something. Therefore, I believe that some persons thanks full what they have something.

In my opinion, we should thank God with what we get. However, we should change our life with new something because the world with each passing day forward. Technology makes the world increasingly sophisticated. In the future, if we do not know about technology. I think other persons will take advantage from us with method lie us.

In conclusion, I believe that some people should try for getting what they want, but all that there is limit it. We should not be greedy.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: What gift would you give to a child develop? 'It is computer' [5]

Question:
A gift (such as a camera, a soccer ball, or an animal) can contribute to a child's development. What gift would you give to help a child develop? Why? Use reasons and specific examples to support your choice.

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Answer:

Many parents in the world always are thinking about future their children. Habitually, they gift prize for them especially for improving children develop. It is computer. I will give reason with this statement.

First of all, computer has many benefits for children. They operate computer for playing many games which can help children for improving develop logically. Obviously, they can have patient, and persistent. For instance, my young brother often plays game. He always undergoes defeating. However, he always tries for winning. He is very persistent of face challenge. This example is clearly that computer can form good personality and it can drill brain becoming better. Therefore, computer is prize most important for growing brain children.

Secondly, The children can get many knowledges because computers help children to learn more about anything by using internet. For example, nowadays, some children in Indonesia have facebook and they have twitter. It is very good for their. They can find new friend from other country and they can share about education. Then, the children can learn about skill in internet through computer such as reading, writing, listening and speaking because many webs in internet prepare English program. When looking at this example, there is no doubt that computer gives many useful for people.

Finally, computer can help children for finding a job because many campanies show advertisement job vacancy. For instance, chemistry's student from the corner country find job in a company in Jakarta, Indonesia. He sends his proposal to there company. With the result, he can get job in there. This example clearly show computer can give information important for getting job. Accordingly, I think that computer is electronic very well for improving quality forward toward a future career.

In summary, I think that children should be able to use operating computer because this knowledge that it will help them for increasing their skill forward the future.

Writing Feedback / Many teachers assign homework to students every day; 'not important in Physics' [3]

Question:
Many teachers assign homework to students every day. Do you think that daily homework is necessary for students? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

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Answer:

Some people think homework can help students to exercise comprehension toward lessons. Nevertheless, other people believe that homework cannot bring any benefits. In this essay I will explore the reason of this controversial. In my opinion, I think that this issue has several advantages and disadvantages.

From the one hand, homework carries many advantages. Why do I think like that? Because it can help students for understanding subject more thoughtful. Furthermore, it can make some learners to be arrange their time how can they divide toward many things in their school. For instance, my lecturer's child continues to Senior High School in Australia. He has many activities such as compete of mathematics, sciences project, etc. Moreover, he can do that all it and he can divide time to make many homeworks from different lesson. So, it can make pupil to become smarter.

From the second hand, daily homework can bring many disadvantages. For example, some persons have not important in Physics because they have interested in Politics, but they should spend their time for doing homework. With the result, they are not doing themselves, but they are cheating by their friend. Therefore, basically, I think that students doing daily homework shall not exercise them to be better.

Finally, students do homework for their habitually of exercise their knowledge toward subject. However, other students will do daily homework, if they are going to specialize lesson in the future.

Writing Feedback / Controversial: Teenagers are working while they are still students [4]

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Nice to meet you again.
Please, you read my essay!
You may give me several your opinions.

Question:
In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think this is a good idea? Support your opinion by using specific reasons and details.

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Answer:

Nowadays, Several people think that teenagers are needing to work while they are still students. However, other persons think that pupil should not work. These become a controversial between society. It has advantages and disadvantages. In this essay I will explain several points reasons.

On the one hand, I think that it will give their many benefits. First of all, they can arrange time when they should study and when they would work. So, they spend of time just for gaining useful for their living. For example, I have friend in Aceh. Her name is Yusnidar. A year ago, she had been studying in Syiah Kuala University. Otherwise, she worked too in a course in Lingke. It was A Plus. She could arrange of time between study and work. With the result that, she did not waste of time and she got salary with her hard work. Second of all, pupil can learn how to save money and they can keep their budget. Therefore, they can feel to become personal independently.

On the other hand, students can have not much time to make homework and they can have not much time to study hard. This option sometimes many persons fail on their examination. In my observation, several students should study hard and they should need much time for learning new subject and prepare themselves for examination. So, my point that someone should look themselves for deciding to combine work and study.

Finally, I believe that experience of working will give useful in the future. Then, it can help to shape personal independently.

Writing Feedback / 'Internet is helping humankind for getting information important from corner of the world' [15]

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Could you read my essay? I hope you read and you give me suggestion, please!
Thanks.

Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to so much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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There is no doubt the internet is one network that helping humankind's for getting information important from corner of the world. However, some of people think that the internet can be able to access to so much information creates problems. I think that the internet brings us to advantages as well as disadvantages.

Firstly, I hold that the internet gives us many benefits. Many persons can be able to access traveling, news, business, journal, lesson books, etc. Others benefit if we gain information about scholarship, we can search in the internet. So, we should not go to scholarship There is no doubt the internet is one network that helping humankind's for getting information important from corner of the world. However, some of people think that the internet can be able to access to so much information creates problems. I think that the internet brings us to advantages as well as disadvantages.

Firstly, I hold that the internet gives us many benefits. Many persons can be able to official for getting information. Otherwise, many students can communicate with supervisor in overseas, if they want to continue study in abroad. Therefore, the internet makes the world smaller for us, with the result that we easier to communicate with other countries.

From other side, the internet brings us problem because we access to so much information. For instance, a lawyer from Jakarta the name is Abbas. He was Maya's lawyer. He wrote status in social media or we often called twitter through network of internet. The status was purpose to Artist such Ahmad's child. Abbas wrote about attitude him because previous Ahmad's child undergo accident that he bump several persons in the street. I think that if he did not like Ahmad's child attitude, he should not make status to so much in the internet because it could make problem. Then, Abbas wrote of constant of status others in twitter. It was not good because I feel that did not gain. Therefore, many people could look his information and it could broke name someone.

To sum up, I believe that the internet brings many advantages than disadvantages for developing future life.

Writing Feedback / IELTS; Learning with a teacher or learning alone - Which one do you prefer? [5]

Question:
Some people think that they can learn better by themselves than with a teacher. Others think that it is always better to have a teacher. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons to develop your essay.

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Some people do learning for developing themselves to become forward. While we still baby, our first parents were learning us to could walk, speak until we could run. I think teachers are same, they learn us from alphabet until we learn in University. There is no doubt that we need teachers to learn useful basic thing.

I think that the students are going to school or academy. They have many teachers who learn them for improving their knowledge. Habitually, the children study of basic until they get the point about lesson in college. The first, people do not know about their lesson such as physics, chemistry, mathematic, and others. Moreover, after their teachers teach them about that they can understand and they can practice. Admittedly, I believe that teachers are playing an essential role in our life and I think teachers can help us for reaching to success.

On the other hand, I hold that pupil has permitted and schoolchild has job. Some persons continue study to level master. If some people are studying a subject in the college, and they bored with their lecturer. I think that they can learn independent themselves in the library. Then, they can understand about this subject. Therefore, I believe that we learn better with ourself.

In conclusion, some teachers can accord us many knowledges that makes us to become success. However, some educationalists cannot give us money literacy.

Writing Feedback / small town vs big city - pros and cons [4]

Question:
Some people prefer to live in a small town. Others prefer to live in a big city. Which place would you prefer to live in? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

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Small town and big city have environment that it is very different. The big city has air pollution from many transportations. However, small town has condition neighbor that is very comfortable and fresh. Personally, I prefer to live in a small town than big city. Therefore, I will give reasons and details to support my opinion.

I feel that some people would rather to live in a small town than big city because small town has weather that is very fresh. There, it has many trees that is green color which has a lot of oxygen that out from leaves it. It is very useful for our health. Otherwise, it has environment that is natural without there is company. It has water of pure in the river. It makes us happy, if we swim in there. In the village has field of fruit and wet rice field. For distance, I am from Tangse. It is small town that is interesting. There, it has climate very cold because in around found many mountains that is very event of natural. Then in the one year, there is season of fruit such durian. Personally, I would rather to live in a small town because more comfy and far distance from noisy many transportations.

However, I think that if we reside in a big city make us disturb because many transportations that it is out voice louder which interrupt us and often bog down. For example, I ever live in Banda Aceh that is a big city in Aceh. There, I am not cosy with in around surroundings because intrude me of many voice transportation. Eventually, I am not like to inhabit in a big city.

To sum up, I believe that lives in a small town more snug than occupy in a big city.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS: The same money for sport activities or libraries? They assemble money from learner [7]

Question:
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Universities should give the same amount of money to their students' sports activities as they give to their university libraries. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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As we know, University is build and place that it gives benefit for many students because it gives knowledge about lessons for us. In here, Academy should give the same amount of money to their students sport activities as they confer to their University libraries. I totally disagree about this statement. However, if I look from other side, I agree about this. Therefore, I will accord several reasons about that.

I believe that University want to give better for their students. I think Academy often give money for libraries because it is very useful for many learner for improving knowledge no directly with read several books in the library. However, University give money too to their students sport activities, but different amount of money as they give to their College libraries. For instance, Syiah kuala University has library large and every year they always change some books in there. It needs much money because they order International books. These different with their students sport activities. They just support a little money for sporting because I think that they are not worries that. I sometimes look in my College as Science Faculty in there always stand alone. They assemble money from learner that follow it. Therefore, I think University should not give the same amount of money between sport activities and College libraries.

From other side, I agree about this statement because some of University give of money too to their students sport activities. They give the same amount of fund with College libraries, but it is form other. For example, Academy prepare Scholarship largest for their learner that active in sport activities and they have predicate very good in sport. Therefore, I think University give the same amount of money between sport activities and University libraries.

To sum up, I believe that University want to give the same amount of money, but they change money to form other that balance.

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