Writing Feedback / IELTS - the selected communication competency needed in a working area from 1997 to 2006 [3]

IELTS TASK 1 - The Tables of essential communication skills in your job

The table describes the selected communication competency were needed in working area from 1997 to 2006 and measured in percentage. Overall, had dealt with people was the highest necessity for both communication skills. In any case, it is clearly seen that all internal communication skills rose slightly over a 9-year period.

As per the data, the percentages of dealing skill were considerable higher among all required competencies. This accounted increase to 65% , while the reserve presented the decrease of selling a product or service from 24% in 1997 to 21% in 2006. Although, knowledge of particular products or services witnessed an increase by 6% between 1997 and 2006, advising or caring for customers dropped to 36% during the time frame.

Apart from external communication skills, listening carefully to colleagues was the essential matter that an employee need in internal competency, it went up a lot by 9%. It was stark in contrast with planning the activities of others which is increased to 15% or only dispute by 1% in 2006. Then, it is followed by Instructing or training people around 30% for the second highest, while, making speeches or presentations seems the lowest percentages in internal competencies hover 11%. The rest, ability persuading or influencing the others and analyzing problems together with others rose to 21 percent and 26 percent respectively.

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Writing Feedback / The correlation between family talks and a different number of the vocabulary used by children [3]

IELTS TASK 1 - The Line Graph of Children total vocabulary size

The first line graph illustrates the spoken verbal words to children and second chart shows the quantity of vocabulary size for toddlers; it divided by three types of talking families. Overall, higher-talking families give the highest border in both line graphs. It is also noticeable when the parents have more speech, the children vocabulary also raises in the same period.

According to the data before toddlers reach age 24 months, their word characters tend to be same about 300 words in their age. On the other hand, between higher-talking families and lower talking families has seen an alteration in the amount of vocabulary spoken to the baby. This accounted for 20 million words and 12 million words respectively, whilst, the lowest-talking families give less than 10 million word characters when the baby is 2 years old.

It is stark in contrast with infants aged 2 years or more. There are rocketed to 1100 numbers of words in the sum of children vocabulary size, however, lowest-talking families just around 450 characters in the same age. The correlation is clearly seen that, if parents give more word characters, then the children can absorb more vocabulary since their brains are mature.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2 - In the modern world very difficult to have a healthy lifestyle [3]

Topic :
Some people say that in the modern world it is very difficult for people to have a healthy lifestyle. Others,however, say that it is easy for people to be healthy and fit if they want to be.

Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience

An unhealthy lifestyle means more illness and more expense to treat those illnesses. This type of lives has undergone by modern human generation this day. While several people think it will be hard for changes the habit, others perceive healthy lifestyle is easy to reach. In my own opinion, due to many inventions have been brought by researches nowadays and work hour takes most of our time, it leads inhabitants to have a poor health ; I would argue that good habits depend on the person willingness and in this modern era, it is very easy to find any information about live in healthy life.

There is no doubt that recent innovation contributing citizens to the degeneration of health. The truth evidences are transportation and junk food. Like what happen in huge capital city of USA, every citizen prefers to use their own car for traveling rather than walking in pedestrian Street. There is also witnessed Junk food as one of the significant factor for this issue, it is already proven by research in rural town around the world when fast food restaurant like KFC and McDonald thrive in the city, most of residence will have an obesity and cholesterol problem. In addition, working hour also take a part on this severe habits.

Apart from above statements, in fact we can tackle this problem easily, it depends on each person willingness which is want to keep fit or expense more money to threat illness. For instance, doing exercise in leisure time, walking or cycling when traveling to office, and cooking your own nutritious food. However that activities fetch a little of your time, the benefits are invaluable for yourself. Furthermore, thanks to discovery of Internet, it really helps us to find any information or suggestion about an ardor to walk on your life with fairly good habit.

The aforementioned evidence honestly reveals that, it is easy to collate the healthy habit in this modern era , even though, some people feel difficult to have it. Where possible arrange your timetable to doing exercise in a week and review your day-to-day activity, changes it if necessary, before hospital take a step for your illness body.

Writing Feedback / Parents should cook healthy food for their kids and constantly monitor their behavior. [4]

Topic :
Many children these days have an unhealthy lifestyle. Both school and parents are responsible for solving this problem.
To what extent do you agree with this statement ?

In this contemporary era, several people believe children unhealthy habit is a part of parents and schools responsibility. In my point of view, even though government regulation also take a proportion for this problem, I would argue that school and parents influence fetch the most significant matter in children lifestyle.

Those children severe customs is not only school and parental responsibility, but government also take a part of this problem. For instance, pollution which is caused by smokers in the public area intense to disturbs children inhalation. That passive smokers are even more dangerous than the smoker itself, they can obtain a wide range of disease like lung cancer and heart attack. To sum up, the governments have to create clear regulation about this, in order to protect the children.

Apart from government intervention, I extremely agree that parents take the most significant portion of that problem. It is no doubt that parent driven their child willingness including their food, exercise, and study. Especially in these days, video game technologies make them lazy which is lead to less physical activity. Beside that, Schools are the second biggest factor which affects children habit. For example, Japan school authorities make a curriculum that every student has an obligation to do physical exercise in the morning. That rule helps children to keep healthy and concentrate on the study.

The aforementioned evidence reveals that, children way of life most affected by their parents and school than another matter. Where possible parents cooking healthy food for their kids and monitoring her behavior.

Writing Feedback / The Chart of Bulgaria people who wants to go abroad - IELTS TASK 1 [2]

The chart shows, the comparison of Bulgarian dwellers which wants to go overseas in 2002, 2006 and 2008 and divided by the education background. Overall it can be seen that, secondary education degree dominating the percentages in all following years.

To begin with , there was a gradual increase in the number of individuals who had elementary or lower education background at solely 32% in the end of the year. It was solely decreased by 14% from the beginning of the period. On the other hand, although people with secondary education program experienced the highest percentage, it seems decreased gently to 59% in 2008.

Moreover, scholars of higher education remain in the lowest number with fluctuated percentage in 2002,2006 and 2008, it was 17%, two in ten and 9% respectively. In contrast, the chart present a considerable higher in the number of people with secondary education background at 65%, 61% and 59% respectively for each year.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 1 - The Chart of Emigration Intentions in Bulgaria [2]

The chart illustrates comparison of people of Bulgaria above 15 and below 60 years old aiming to Emigration with different purposes between 2001 and 2006. Overall it can be seen that, inhabitants who do not have any planning to go abroad is the highest percentage among all.

According to the data, 2001 experienced a considerable higher in the number of Bulgarians which is prefer to staying in their country around 70%. It was stark in contrast to dweller who want to live abroad for a short time, its only took 5% from all of the percentage. The rest eagerness such as travelling as tourist, live abroad for a short time, work abroad then return, and permanent resident in abroad give a small percentage at 10%,5%, 7%, and 8% respectively.

Furthermore, there was an alteration in the emigration intentions from 2001 to 2006 except live abroad permanently which is remain stable at 8%. In 2006, the percentage of people who have no willingness to travel abroad still dominating the chart solely at seven in ten. On the other hand, dwellers who wants to work outside the country and then return to Bulgaria the lowest percentage solely at 4 percent in 2006. The rest intentions for holiday as tourist took 10% and live abroad for a short time approximately one in twenty in 2006.

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Writing Feedback / Inhabitants live in several different places - second task for IELTS [3]

Topic :
In the past, people usually stayed in one place throughout their life. These days, people often move around. They often live in several different places in their lifetime. What are the advantages and disadvantages of both?

Before the millennium era, the inhabitants almost lived in settle place for their entire life. However, that conditions had antipode yet, the dweller often has moved from one place to another spot. In my point of views, both of choices have different merit and demerit such as, learning may culture and consuming differences food as the benefits for people who live in different places but live peacefully and had better education are the marked advantages of villager who stay in one place.

These day living in difference places has becoming new life style with several benefits. For instance, the urban dwellers who recently change their staying area has learned excessively diverse culture in the world including landmark and clothes. It is also noticeable that urban residents consuming differ food for each country. In the other hand that moving people will live alone since they does not acquainted with the neighborhood, this condition probably is the dire consequence.

Apart from the inhabitants who live in many places for their lifetime, staying in one place like the elderly people do has marked more advantages. They will live peacefully owing to be familiar with the others villagers living surround him. That community will helpful to each others since they meet for the entire life. Besides that, children obtain good education and many friends. Thanks to staying in one places, that children does not need to changes his school, so he can concentrates to obtain higher score. Despite, they always eat same food every day as a negative effect settle at an equal places, the dwellers enjoy their life.

The aforementioned evidence reveals that the benefits staying in one place has more greater than always changing the places. Where possible, from my experience moving from one place to another place have an immense effect for the children, you must ask him before move away.

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2 - Living in high-rise apartment less community spirit [2]

Some people say that people living in high-rise apartments are lonely and unhappy, while others say that it's advantageous to stay in high-rise apartments. Discuss advantages and disadvantages. Give your opinion.

Answer :

Several citizens who are live in tall flat believe have better experience in social life whereas the others say staying in apartment has isolate your social life. In my opinion , although modern flat has an advantage for the community like living in same building, that negative effects outweighs the positive effect including the inhabitants are busy with their own business and do not know the neighborhoods.

There is a benefit for people living in flat located in enormous city. Since the citizens stay in an equal building, they can easily meet. The doors which divide one another are only in a few feet distance, and that condition leads the residents easier to communicate. To sum up, dwelling in flat give better community experience and it is also noticeable that urban dwellers staying in apartment have an equal occupation.

Apart from these benefit, the person who dwell in large flat has detrimental effects. For instance, the dweller are busy with their own business since their working time exceeding 12 hours a day. This circumstances create the residents more selfish and ignore the surroundings. Furthermore, from the latest news in BBC there was murdering in an apartment in Jakarta, and unfortunately the occupant staying in same places did not acquainted the victim.

The aforementioned evidence reveals that the corrosive effect is greater than the positive effects related to social life. Where possible residents who life in house or high rise-apartment must respect to the others and immense charitable enthusiasm among all.

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2 - Children are engaged in some kind of paid work [2]

In many countries , children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong while others consider it as valuable work experience.

Discuss both opinions and give your opinion.

Please give the feedback

Almost in all of nations, children obtain money by working in some job contract. Although, several people belief that is not justified for any reasons, the others appreciates, working in the early lifespan will become a great experience. In my personal point of views it is noticeable that children will obtain positive effects as valuable work experience while the dire consequence they may less educated and vanish their playing time.

Working in early age has the advantage since they can understand how to respect money and it will be a wealth of experience for their life. For instance, a younger children who is working in the fast-food restaurant as a servant be able to fulfill their necessity. Beside that, they also can learn about the management in their job place. Thus, it means the children get a positive effect while start working at their age.

Being apart from the benefit, have a job while in the younger age bestow the detrimental effect. To exemplify, children about to spend their time in the working area, they get less educated since cannot attend to course in school. Therefore, kid does not has time to play such as hide and seek with the others friends. Both of school and playing times are very important activities to the children, it can increase their creativity and emotional intelligence which can lead them to obtain successful during their life.

The aforementioned reveals that even though working give the positive result to the children, it also extend the negative effect such as lost their playing time and obtain slightly education because spending time in that kind of job.

Writing Feedback / The comparison of world inhabitants divided by each continents between 1900 and 2000 [3]

IELTS TASK 1 - World Population by Region, 1900 and 2000

This pie chart illustrates the comparison of world inhabitants divided by each countinents between 1900 and 2000. Overall it can be seen that population increased sharply by 4.4 billion over the course of 100 years. It is also noticeable that Asia remain gave the highest percentage among all region.

According to the data, there was a decrease in the number of inhabitants where lived in Asia and Europe continents. Asia witnessed a slight decrease in the amount of population by 6%, this continent remain considerable higher than other region over than a half between 1900 and 2000. It was in stark contrast to Europe, it had only 14% in the 2000 or dropped solely by 11%. While, the rest area such as North America and others region remain stable at 5% and 3% respectively.

On the other hand, the figure of resident where life in Africa and Latin America shows increased over the 100 years. The differences are 6% for Africa region and 5% for Latin America countries. Furthermore, Middle East and North Africa emerge as a new regions which are ublished in 2000 survey, at exact 6% or 360 million people lived in that places.

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Writing Feedback / A remote village brings the kind people, inexpensive, healthy food can be consumed in a countryside [2]

IELTS Topic : In the past, most people lived in small villages where everyone knew everyone else. Nowadays, most people live in large cities where they only know a few people in their area.

What do you think were the advantages and disadvantages of living in a small community?

In bygone era, wide range of local inhabitants dwelling in the countryside in which the area is far away from the cosmopolitan city are known one another with their neighborhood. Conversely, the citizens who live in immense city are merely familiar with the people staying in their next doors in this modern era. In my personal point of views, although remaining to live in the rural area has dire consequences as scarcity facilities, the advantage including discovering friendly people and cheap living standard can be obtained.

Living in Countryside has detrimental effect since the scarcity of public services' matter emerge in the village such health accommodation. For instance, modern hospital which is required to accommodate inhabitants' sanitary is not available in the remote village. The government spends their budget only on urban planner and have no program for public services in countryside. Thanks to this circumstance, the inhabitants who have a serious incident shall obtain late respond for medicinal treatment since modern hospital is located in hundred kilometers away from the residence. As a consequence there is the drawback issue due to lack of facilities when villagers have a tendency to stay in small community.

Being apart from the dire consequence, living in the rural area bargains comfortable way of life. Firstly, the villagers dwelling in the countryside have a behavior which is very friendly inhabitants. To exemplify Mranggen villagers which is located in the countryside of south east java, are be familiar with one another in their residence and very helpful to the neighborhood or visitor which come to their village. Furthermore, owing to many fresh-vegetables being planted in the farmland and plenty of animal husbandry available in the countryside, there are cheap living standard since the healthy-food prices are inexpensive. As a result, the villagers intend to be happier staying remote area than live in the town because they can enjoy the life.

The aforementioned evidence reveals that event though living in remote village brings about certain drawbacks, this development also offers happiness to remain stay with the kind people, and the people obtain inexpensive healthy food for their day-to-day consumption in the countryside. Where possible, the government has in charge to construct novel public services in the remote area such as hospital and school in order to develop their living standard.