Writing Feedback / ( IELTS essay) Gene or environment more influential in character [6]

Peoples' character is influenced by environment rather than genetics. Do you agree or disagree?

Personal traits and heredity are two important factors, which determine the character of people. It became a hot topic of debate since long time that, which one over weighs the other, nature or nurture. In my opinion, the environment and experiences, not merely genes mold the character of an individual.

Undeniably, different factors determine and shape the sense of understanding and the behavior of a person. Heredity and physical environment are the two things for the character development of a person, like a good breed seed and a fertile soil respectively. Even if the seed is not among the good breed we can modify it by budding and other suitable scientific procedures. Same way, the child of immoral parents can be transformed into a sensible citizen by proper care. If a good bread seed is planted in a totally infertile extreme hot place, how can it grow well? On the contrary, a bad breed seed can be fruitful, if planted in a fertile land after modifications. Thus, the environment is most sensitive than genes.

Furthermore, it is scientifically proven that, though the characters are transmitted through genes, most of the traits are acquired during their life. It is evident that, the twin who is brought up in a city became open minded, temperamental and is adapted with the city life. At the same time, the other one in the countryside was introverted, hard working and disciplined. These changes are explained by the influence of the environment. Undoubtedly, value based societies, moral education, proper guidance, affection, attention and so on, plays a pivotal role in the formation of the character of a person. People are closely connected with parents, co-workers, friends, teachers and media. Criminologists affirm that, criminals are often formed as a result of bad partnering and nurturing.

To conclude, though genes are one of the important factors of deciding the character of a person, it can be modified through proper care and attention. Since, environment has more impact on peoples' character creation, let's work hard to bring up the children with good discipline and hard work, and create a safe society.

Writing Feedback / (IELTS graph) underground railway system; London: 775 million people per year [2]

In the given bar chart shows the information about six major city underground railway systems with regard to it's size, age of the station and travelers in million per year.

It is clear from the chart that, the oldest three railway stations are the biggest in size of stations and handling the highest travelers per year. Though Paris is the second oldest station and only the two third of the route size of London station, it carries more people, 1191 million people per year, than London system. At the same time Tokyo, being the least among the three oldest stations, in terms of age and size of route, it serves the highest number of people compared with London and Paris. In other words, Tokyo railway system carries 1927 million people per year where as it is 1190 million people per year by Paris system and 775 million people per year by London system.

When comparing the newest three stations, which are Los Angeles, Kyoto and Washington DC respectively, the oldest among the three Washington DC commute more people per year that is 144 million. It is nearly double of the passengers in comparison with Kyoto, which is handling only 45 million people per year.

In short, Kyoto is the smallest of routes and handled people per year, which are 11 kilometers and 45 million people respectively. On the contrary, the station Tokyo, is serving the highest number of people per year.

Writing Feedback / Formal education start at early ages? Let children play and enjoy childhood (IELTS) [4]

Some people think that children should begin their formal education at a very early age should spend most of their time on school studies. Others believe that young children should spend most of their time playing. Compare these two views. Which view do you agree? Why?

Children are innocent, impulsive and creative. People learn so many things through their entire life. Some people argue that children should spend most of their early childhood in home, while others hold the opinion that they should start their formal education as early as possible. However, I believe that, it is healthier to allow small children to play more as it is favorable for their future success.

There are some advantages in starting education in the early age. Firstly, children will get more opportunities to succeed in their future life. Early studies help them to expertise in their knowledge and help them to make better professionals. Secondly, as their brain is in the developmental stage, it is easy for them to grasp more knowledge easily. These knowledge and experiences enrich their life and broader their wisdom and outlook which are priceless. Lastly, overcoming stress of studies in the early stages itself will be a blessing for their future studies.

However, childhood is the golden period of our life. It should be a period of freedom, enjoyment and absence of responsibilities. As 'Experience is the best teacher' children can be skilled at so many things through their experiences and interactions with others and friends. Undoubtedly, the childhood experience has a great impact on their future life. Moreover, the basic qualities like sharing, caring, kindness, self-confidence and so on are imparted through playing. These traits cannot be gained from books. Therefore, children are encouraged to play more with their friends and family members. Imagine that a child is exhausted and tired with his home works and studies instead of playing with his friends at an age of four years. Besides, the child may lose the interest to study and it will be heavy for his bright future. Another point is that, children needs proper exercise for the proper development of brain and body.

To conclude, it is better to allow small children to engage more in their play, as it is essential for the total development of the mind and body. This will enables them to attain the ability to make decisions, analyze things, make conclusions and so on, which are pivotal in their future success.

Writing Feedback / PERCENTAGES OF HOUSEHOLD ITEMES; ( IELTS) table graph [6]

The given bar chart shows the percentages of household items which are used 11 years from 1972 to 1983.

It is clear from the chart that, the percentage of all the given items in the chart are increased without any drop in the period of 11 yrs. Telephone, central heating and vacuum cleaner hold the first three positions in the list of highest rise in consumption between 1972 to 1983 and are 35%, 25% respectively. The differences between the first two positions are only 10%, but two and three positions are just nearly half of the first two. After a decade, the use of vacuum cleaners ascended by 8%. The comparison of video is not possible as it is introduced in 1983 and the statistics of vacuum cleaner use was not available in that period. There is a difference of 8% over a decade in the use of vacuum cleaners. At the same time in 1972 the top three position is use were occupied by television, vacuum cleaner and refrigerator respectively. Though television maintained its first position, vacuum cleaners status is not mentioned, refrigerator and washing machines were in two and three positions in the year 1983.

In short, the increased popularity of central heating systems and telephones are increasingly significant after years pass by. All these electrical items are gaining ground with time. It shows that people are becoming more aware and depend on the electric goods as it provides more comfort and convenience.

Writing Feedback / ( IELTS ) Gap year: Good or bad? Careful decision of an individual [5]

In some countries, young people are encouraged to work of travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages

Taking a year gap between high school and university has become a popular option among many young people. Both rich and poor students are following this trend. It has both merits and demerits and in this essay, I will explain both in detail.

The time off provides a break after many years of formal education. The benefits of taking a year off are plentiful. On the personal level, students who travel away from home develop their independence and self-confidence. This opportunity, provide them a chance to do something hands-on and refreshing. It helps them to study more about themselves and the world around them. On a cultural level, they learn more about different viewpoints, traditions, and perspectives, which are different from their own. Professionally, students get a taste of diverse workplaces, which might inspire a possible carrier interest, and financial security. Poor student can earn money for their further studies. Intellectually, they examine their benefits and ideas in relation with others in a new environment. All these advantages combine to make a strong support for taking the one-year gap.

Nevertheless, there are also dangers involved in taking such a long break at that important age. Academically, the main drawback is that students can get side tracked from their studies. Basic knowledge came into possession of a pupil at school should be preserved for further development at university. Human brain forgets facts rapidly which are not in use. As a result, the student may loss the good study habits and sense of discipline they had when they were in a formal academic structure. Moreover, if they gain from working they may also be deluded into thinking that they are making a lot of money. Pupil could drop the benefit of college or university education and there by a chance to enjoy a higher income in their future. In this age, children are mature enough to take proper decisions, and may run after luxurious life style. For making easy sweat less money, they may involve in anti- social activities and spoil their total life.

In short, whether to take a long year long gap or not is an individual decision. Young pupils should consider their motivations carefully before taking a decision. Time is precious for all ages. It is essential to use it wisely.

Writing Feedback / IELTS;There is no success without studying our past, so studying History is important [7]

Is it important to study History?

History is the systemic study of the past. Some people hold the opinion that learning about the past is useless. However, I believe that it is important to know about the past mainly because it binds today and tomorrow.

History is a great store of information. People want to know much clearer about their society's establishment and development process is natural. History includes the wisdom and the valuable experience, which helps people today. Consequently, it enables people to avoid repeating mistakes of the past. For instance, when people learn more about the factors, which leads to a riot in the past, make today's, people more vigilant to avoid it in the future. In other words, history is an experience, which you do not need to practice it and it, helps the people to compare between good and bad.

Furthermore, people used tell that 'past is past' or 'history never repeats itself. Yet, there is much in history, which is relevant to our modern life. Studying other historical periods gives insights into different ways of life. As a result, they will be able to compare those societies with our own. Hence, they will be more aware of the advancements in the current society. I short, histories enlighten us to analyze how and why we have changed. People will be conscious about the contributions of their forefathers' and respect them more. Besides, it broadens our wisdom and outlook.

To sum up, there is no successful present without lessons from the past and no future without learning how to live with our past. Since history builds today, the study of history is much significant even in this advanced technological age. This doesn't mean that we are living in the past.

Writing Feedback / Eat at home or at restaurant? Home Food ( IELTS essay) [5]

Some people prefer to eat food stands or restaurants. Others prefer to prepare and eat food at home. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

People like enjoy difference in their life in everything they involved. Food and its preparation are one among them. Some people prefer to enjoy cooking and homemade foods while others opt food from outside. However, I prefer homely foods and in my essay, I will explain why I prefer it.

To begin with, cooking is a part of our great tradition. We can enjoy our traditional food preparations at the same time new generation also became familiar with their culture and tradition. One can modify the diet according the need and taste of individual preferences. For instance, if somebody want to make a hot soup for dinner instead of a routine meal, it is easy to prepare at home. Additionally, it gives a great chance of convenience, at any time they can purchase and store ingredients and prepare anything. Most importantly, we know the contents of each meal and can make healthy diets. For instance, one can avoid artificial taste makers, colors or even repeated use of cooking oil while cooking. As low fat, low sugar, low caloric foods are available in the market, the right choice for a person who is on dietary restrictions or health conscious is homemade food.

Furthermore, the cooking and it's preparation are the great occasions of family togetherness. Helping each other can boost up the strength of their relationship. Having food together is considered as the golden chances for spending time together. It further helps to relax and relieve tension. The physical activities, which used at the time of cooking such as, walking here and there, washing vassals and so on, are excellent exercises and it bring a change in the sedentary life. The appreciation one gets after preparing a tasty meal is the motivation to do more cooking. Besides, there is no need of waiting long time for ordered item and one can enjoy a favorite program in the television while cooking or eating. It is pocket friendly and can control the budget effectively.

In conclusion, I think that the food prepared at home has its own quality and personal preferences. One should think about it before choosing a restaurant food. However, occasionally we can select it I prefer homemade food after considering its importance.

Writing Feedback / We cannot reduce the increasing crime rate? Need proper measures to control (IELTS) [3]

Crime is a big problem in the world. Many believe that nothing can be done to prevent it. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your own opinion.

It is undeniably true that, the crime rates are increasing drastically all around the world. Though there are so many not easy to remove it completely from our society, I believe that with proper measures like straight laws, sufficient punishments, good moral education and so on, we can avoid it to an extent.

To begin with, there are so many reasons behind the increased crime rate. To tackle the ever-increasing crime rate, it is essential to identify the root cause and treat it. To reduce the surging crime rates, moral education is pivotal. Education through curriculum and media are encouraged. A society, which is based on values will respect the rights of others and help to reduce the crime rates. Children should me learned to live with contentment, without crazy for costly unwanted items from their early childhood itself. Undoubtedly, strict rules and regulations will decrease the anti-social activities and mafias. Police force should be increased, empowered and their continuous patrolling will help to trim down offences. Additionally, strict hard punishments oblige the offenders to think about the punishments before committing a crime.

Apparently, poverty and unemployment are other important causes of crimes. Proper practical education, vocational training centers and supports to initiate more industries will helps to originate more job opportunities and reduce unemployment. As peoples' living standard improves, they will move away from involving crimes. Apart from this, poor people who are living below poverty line should be given considerations by various governmental policies to uplift their lives. Furthermore, drug addiction is a cancer, which affects today's society. These people to be treated in de-addiction centers and family supports and psychiatric counseling should be ensured. Parents must know the friends of their children, how they are behaving outside home and must give affection and attention. They should guide their children and bring them up with good moral values. Parents should be good role models for their children, as 'deeds speak louder than words'.

To conclude, though crime rates are increasing, day by day, we can reduce it by strong rules, and moral education, parental guidance, and so on. We should use all possible measures to minimize the increasing crime rates.